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高考英语读后续写语篇练习救人故事——铁轨救婴儿题目分析读后续写题目再现范文呈现努力方向Part 1题目呈现续写原文It was 7 a.m. on 12 May 1998.Mohr had already scanned several packages listing dangerous materials aboard the train. The presence of gas would mean taking extra precaution when braking the 6,200-ton train. With explosive gas on board, it would be disastrous if the train came off the track. After a final inspection, Mohr jumped aboard. He was heading east, into a sun that promised a beautiful day for their 276-km run to Peru, Indiana.At around noon that day, Marshall prepared to tackle some yardwork. It was a beautiful day for it, she thought, gazing past the houses across the street. Some 45 meters away, railroad tracks shone in the sun.Marshall began working in a patch (地块）of soil. Sitting next to her, cheerfully running her hands through dirt, was her 19-month-old daughter, Emily. For a while, she kept turning to check on Emily, who played close at hand. Eventually, though, Marshall's absorption in her work became total.Mohr approached the town where Marshall lived at about 1:45 p.m. and slowed the train to the 40-kmph speed limit. He activated the flashing lights and warning bell. Mohr had been through the town hundreds of times, but he grew extra cautious rounding the first curve.续写原文As the train came out of the curve, Mohr noticed a small dot on the track about 200 meters ahead. He thought it might be a dog. Although it was against the rules to do so in the town, he began lightly tapping his horn. "Come on, puppy, move," he urged.The toots (嘟嘟响）of a train whistle startled (使受惊吓）Marshall from her yardwork. That's odd, she thought. They don't usually blow the whistle through town. She glanced over to check her daughter, and her heart skipped. Emily was nowhere in sight.Now, as the train approached within 100 meters of the object on the rail, Mohr narrowed his eyes, trying to make out what exactly was lying ahead. Then shock ran through him like electric current.段首句Paragraph 1："My God!" he yelled as a tiny face turned towards him. “It's a baby!"Paragraph 2：From that day on, I was determined to make my dream come true.Part 2题目分析点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。情节构建的重点续写思路分析本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了火车司机Mohr，在一次驾驶火车全速前进时，他注意到远处的铁轨上有个黑点，他以为是一条狗，后来证实这个黑点是一个婴儿。他要在保证火车安全的情况下，救下这个婴儿。续写思路分析Para 1："My God!" he yelled as a tiny face turned towards him. “It's a baby!“由第一段首句内容“我的上帝! ”当一张小脸转向他时，他大叫起来。“是个婴儿！”，可知，第一段可描写火车司机Mohr的心理感受及其采取的措施，同时可以描写婴儿妈妈Mashall的现场反应。续写思路分析Para 2：The child was now just 36 meters ahead.由第二段首句内容“这时火车距离婴儿只有36米了。”可知，第二段可描写火车司机Mohr努力减速火车直至火车停下，然后救婴儿，最终婴儿平安得救。续写思路分析续写线索看见婴儿——决定刹车——跳车救孩子——孩子得救续写素材可用词汇：行为类①.做决定：make a decision/make up his mind/keep in mind that②.刹车：pull the brake/stop the train with effort③.救孩子：save the child/ rescue the child/save the baby's life情绪类焦急：anxious/have one's heart in one's mouth续写素材可用句型：[高分句型1]. Mohr had an instant decision to make, applying full emergency brakes with half the train still wrapped around a curve.（applying...为现在分词作状语）[高分句型2]. Hard as he try, the train kept moving just as a cat saw a fish, whose enticing smell attracted the cat to approach the baby.（as引导的让步状语从句，whose之后为非限制性定语从句）Part 3范文呈现范文呈现"My God!" he yelled as a tiny face turned towards him. “It's a baby!" Mohr had an instant decision to make, applying full emergency brakes with half the train still wrapped around a curve. He had to risk an emergency stop. Hard as he try, the train kept moving just as a cat saw a fish, whose enticing smell attracted the cat to approach the baby.Meanwhile, Marshall rushed towards her daughter, nervous but desperate, fearing the train would run into her beloved.范文呈现The child was now just 36 meters ahead. Mohr pulled the brake with his whole efforts.The sound of wheels grinding against the rails rang through the sky. The situation was quite dangerous.As the train was almost stopped, he immediately opened the left door of the engine cab quickly and swiftly jumped from the moving train and ran back to the child. She lay crying by the tracks.A great relief sweeping over Mohr, he lifted her from the dirt hurriedly. It was only then that Mohr noticed the train had stopped and Marshall was just coming to her baby.With the baby in his arms,Mohr began to walk towards the mother.范文译文“我的上帝啊！”他像一张小脸转向他时大声喊道。“这是个婴儿！”莫尔立即做出了决定，实施了紧急刹车，一半的火车仍然绕在弯道上。他不得不冒着紧急停车的危险。在他的努力中，火车继续移动，就像一只猫看到了一条鱼，它诱人的气味吸引了猫接近婴儿。与此同时，马歇尔冲向紧张但绝望的女儿，担心火车会撞到她的爱人。范文译文这个孩子现在只有前面36米远。莫尔竭尽全力地拉下了刹车。车轮撞击铁轨的声音响彻天空。情况很危险。当火车快停下来时，他立即打开驾驶室的左门，迅速从行驶的火车上跳下来，跑回孩子身边。她躺在铁轨边哭泣。他使莫尔松了一口气，急忙把她从泥土里抬了起来。直到那时，莫尔才注意到火车已经停了下来，马歇尔正要来接她的孩子。莫尔抱着孩子，开始向母亲走去。Part 4努力方向高级结构名词性从句高级结构三连动虚拟语气形容词做状语无灵主语定语从句状语从句（包含倒装句）强调句副词做状语非谓语（包括独立主格）Thank you!

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