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【试题回顾】阅读下面材料，根据其所给段落开头语段续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
To act with integrity was a habit with Susan who always follow the Golden Rule: “Do not do to others what you do not want others to do to you.” But when she thought over her past conduct, a blush of shame crept to her cheeks, as many little acts of selfishness and unkindness came back to her memory. She resolved that for the future, both in great things and small, she would remember and follow the Golden Rule.
It was not long after this that an opportunity occurred of trying Susan’s principles. One Saturday evening when she went, as usual, to Mr. Thompson’s inn, to receive the price of her mother’s washing for the boarders, which amounted to five dollars, she found Mr. Thompson apparently in a terrible rage with some horse dealers with whom he had been bargaining. He held in his hand an open pocketbook, full of bills and scarcely noticing the child as she made her request, except to swear at her, as usual, for troubling him when he was busy, he handed her a bank note.
Glad to escape so easily, Susan hurried out of the gate, and then, pausing to put the money safely in her purse, she discovered that he had given her two bills instead of one. She looked around; nobody was near to share her discovery; and her first impulse was joy at the unexpected prize.
“It is mine, all mine,” said she to herself; “I will buy mother a new coat with it, and she can give her old one to sister Mary, and then Mary can go to the Sunday school with me next winter. I wonder if it will not buy a pair of shoes for brother Tom, too.”
At that moment she remembered that he must have given it to her by mistake; and therefore she had no right to it. But again the voice of the tempter whispered, “He gave it, and how do you know that he did not intend to make you a present of it Keep it; he will never know it, even if it should be a mistake; for he had too many such bills in that great pocketbook to miss one.”
Para. 1. This conflict was going on in her mind between good and evil.
Para. 2. “Sir, you paid me two bills, instead of one,” she handed him the extra note.
文本解析：
一个周六的晚上，苏珊像往常样去汤普森农场旅店，收取妈妈给旅店客人洗衣服应得的报酬，共是 5美元，她在马圈里看到了汤普森。很显然，农场主正在对那些和他讨价还价的马贩子大发雷霆。他手上拿着一人钱包，里面有好多钱。当苏珊找他要钱的时候，他都几乎没注意到，只是像以往一样骂她几句，嫌她在忙的时候打搅他，然后随手递给她一张纸币。
苏珊很庆幸这么快就拿到了钱，快速跑出门;然后，她停下来，把钱放到折好的围巾里。这时，她发现农场主给了她两张钞票，而不是一张。苏珊环顾一下四周、发现没有人看到这一幕，她的第一反应就是对这个天上掉下的馅饼喜出望外。
“是我的，都是我的了,”她对自己说，“我要给妈妈买一件新斗篷，这样就能把那件旧斗篷送给妹妹玛丽，明年冬天玛丽就能和我起去主日学校了。不知道还够不够再给弟弟汤姆买双鞋。
苏珊当时心想，农场主一定是多给她钱了，因此她没有权利花这笔钱，妈妈总是告诉她黄金法则：属于你的永远是你的，永远不能把别人的据为己有。
不过诱惑的声音在她耳边轻诉道: “这是他给你的，你怎么知道这不是他送给你买礼物呢？他不会知道的;即使是他的失误，但是他的钱包里有那么多钱，丢一张也不会发现的。”在苏珊的脑子里，善与恶在不停地斗争，她用最快的速度向家跑。
【情节分析】
本语篇节选并改编自美国小学语文教材第四册The Golden Rule一文。文章笔触细腻，细节刻画生动。语言优美，遣词造句精炼。Susan天真活泼，秉性善良。Mr. Thompson脾气火爆，喜欢讨价还价。Susan看到Mr. Thompson大发脾气，但是只记得要取回妈妈洗衣的工资，可见小女孩还不深谙世事，并且，认定的目标或者安排的任务是一定会完成的，也为下文秉持并贯彻the Golden Rule的原则，成功通过试炼，抵制住了“不义之财”的诱惑（tempter）打下伏笔。反观Mr. Thompson，在和马贩子讨价还价过程中，迁怒于无辜的Susan，从另一个角度更加凸显出the Golden Rule的价值。在故事中Susan自我成长，Mr. Thompson或许在听了Susan的一番解释后也会有所感触。中国文化当中也有同样的表达：“己所不欲勿施于人”。因此，从学科育人的角度而言，该语篇无疑是上上之作！
【思路点拨】语篇中提及的the Golden Rule出自《圣经》。圣人之言，大智大慧，启迪（enlighten）众生。此外，故事发生在one Saturday evening，周围环境混沌，衬托出the Golden Rule似一盏明灯（light），光芒四射（glister/glitter）。续写所给的第一个段落首句提到good and evil，就好似光明和黑暗的交织。Thompson因发怒而黑着脸（darken），听到Susan的话后可能有所触动而面露喜色（light up）。因此，我们不妨围绕“光”的情境来描述，提升续写段落的画面感。
下水文：
This conflict was going on in her mind between good and evil. She hurried home and as she reached the crossing road, the glow of streetlights reflected on the pavement, creating interplay of light and darkness. It seemed as if the essence of her being was divided, one yearning to keep the extra bill, and the other steadily upholding the Golden Rule. 【用同位语补充详细说明，同时引出the Golden Rule】Each footstep echoed the conflict clouding her. Suddenly, a breeze gently blew away the cloud, settling her mind. 【cloud一语双关】 Noticing Susan coming back again, Mr. Thompson snapped, “What do you want this time ”
“Sir, you paid me two bills instead of one,” she handed him the extra note. After a bit of a bargain, the atmosphere was charged with tension and rage darkened Mr. Thompson’s face. Susan’s voice, however, like a shooting star, sliced through the darkness. Susan continued to explain what had happened. Mr. Thompson’s emotionless face cracked a smile and his gaze lingered on Susan in a mixture of astonishment and respect.【crack a smile是情绪表征的变化，respect则是内心的感触和转变】“Keep it! The other bill is for your act.” said Mr. Thompson. That said, their hearts both lightened. The Golden Rule not only glisters, but also enlightened a once selfish man.【两位人物都有成长，突出the Golden Rule的价值】
【参考范文】
This conflict was going on in her mind between good and evil. She repeatedly balanced the comforts the money would buy against the harm of wronging Mr.Thompson. Suddenly the Golden Rule“Do not do to others what you do not want others to do to you.”sounded in her ears like a trumpet. Turning round as if flying from some unseen danger, the child rushed along the road until she found herself once again in front of the inn.“What do you want now ”asked the gruff old man, doubtfully. He stared at the child as he saw the tears rolling down her cheeks.
“Sir, you paid me two bills instead of one,”she handed him the extra note.“Two bills Did I Let me see; well, so I did. You wanted to keep it, I suppose.” Susan blushed and hung her head. He seemed touched by her distress. Putting his hand in his pocket, he drew out a shilling(先令)and offered it to her. “No, sir, thank you,”sobbed she.“I do not want to be paid for doing right.”Susan returned to her humble home with a lightened heart, and through the course of a long and useful life she never forgot her first trying of the Golden Rule.
默写版：
This conflict was going on in her mind between good and evil. ___________________________她反复权衡金钱所能买到的安慰与冤枉汤普森先生的伤害. Suddenly the Golden Rule“Do not do to others what you do not want others to do to you.”_____________________在她耳边像吹喇叭一样回响. Turning round as if flying from some unseen danger, the child rushed along the road until she found herself once again in front of the inn.“What do you want now ”asked the gruff old man, doubtfully. He stared at the child____________________________________当他看到泪水顺着她的脸颊滚落时.
“Sir, you paid me two bills instead of one,”she handed him the extra note.“Two bills Did I Let me see; well, so I did. You wanted to keep it, I suppose.”___________________________苏珊红了脸，低着头. He seemed touched by her distress.___________________________________________ 他把手伸进口袋，掏出一先令(先令)并将其提供给她 。“No, sir, thank you,”sobbed she.“I do not want to be paid for doing right.”Susan returned to her humble home,_____________________________________心情轻松 and through the course of a long and useful life she never forgot her first trying of the Golden Rule.

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