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高考读后续写微技能
动作描写
Continuation Writing
Skills for the description of actions
Actions of body parts | Action chains | Sentence patterns
Learning aims
了解读后续写中动作描写的技巧。
学习动作分解方法并掌握动作链的几种句型。
运用所学技巧和句型，回归高考读后续写。
“两法六句”
Lead in
两种构思方法：
四到一行：
看、听、想、说、做
线索呼应：
找到线索，前后呼应
六种高分句型：
分词短语作状语
非限制性定语从句
强调句
with复合结构
副词开头
倒装句
The Revision of Verbs
最常见的6大动作：说、看、哭、笑、走、跑
“说”(say)
whisper
shout/scream
ask/enquire/inquire
answer/reply/respond
gasp
stammer
add/continue
小声说
大喊大叫
问
答
气喘吁吁地说
结结巴巴地说
继续说/补充道
eg. （11月期中联考续写范文）
"Where is Katy " he said. Tom seemed to have had no thought but of his own escape. He said, "Katy is in the house!"
answered
asked
Skills for the description of actions
动作描写技巧
eg. Olive went into the room, took his bag, and went out again.
grabbed
dashed
rushed
Skill 1. general verbs concrete verbs
通用词汇 具体词汇
Hearing the news, .
Hearing the news, .
his jaw dropped
Skill 2. abstract words specific words
抽象词汇 有明确意义的词
he was shocked
eg. （11月期中联考续写范文）
"Where is Katy " he asked. Tom seemed to have had no thought but of his own escape.
Skill 3. single verbs verbs with modifiers
单个动词 带修饰词的动词
anxiously/in/with anxiety
adv/prep短语
Appreciate more examples and analyse which skills they use.
Remembering that it was Friday, he woke up with a start, jumped out of bed, grabbed his schoolbag, and rushed out the door.
Mother's eyes widened at the sight of the inviting breakfast.
She took a bite of the breakfast, her eyes twinkling with pleasure.
"I'm also expecting my gift of Father's Day next month. " Father chimed in jokingly.
"Happy Mother's Day!" They yelled in a delighted tone.
Sentence Patterns
动作描写句型
The girl hugged the boy.
The girl dashed forward, jumped up and hugged the boy tightly.
Q: 如何拆解动作？
将结果性的动作，分解成更细致的连贯性的微动作，使动作结果过程化
动作链
动作描写-动作链
看着我
The Queen smiled, stepped towards Master tang and said, “……”
句型1:
A , B and C/ A and B
动作描写-动作面
Monkey Sun皱着眉，晃动着手臂，喊道：“烦死了”。
面部
肢体
语言
整体-局部
肢体-面部-语言(心理)
Monkey Sun frowned, shook arms and shouted,“just beat it”
动作描写-动作面
唐三藏闭着眼，双手合十，思考自己是否动了心。
面部
肢体
心理
Master tang closed his eyes, brought palms together and wondered whether he flipped or not.
1. 我推开弟弟，抓起那根棍子，拼命地像狼挥舞。
I pushed my brother away, grabbed the stick and desperately swung in at the wolf.
2. 两个月后，我通过了考试，考上了理想中的大学。
Two months later, I passed the exam and was admitted to my dream university.
Practice
动作描写-动作面
Master tang closed his eyes, brought palms together and wondered whether he flipped or not.
Monkey Sun frowned, shook arms and shouted,“just beat it”.
句型2:
v-ing/v-ed, 主句，(v-ing/v-ed). (2~3个动词同时发生，选
为谓语， 用v-ing/v-ed。)
Frowning, Monkey Sun shook arms, shouting,“just beat it”.
Closing his eyes, Master tang brought palms together, wondering whether he flipped or not.
主要动词
次要动词
Practice
幸运的是，救援人员前来帮助他，给他带来了很大希望。Fortunately，rescue workers came to her aid, bringing her great hope.
走近露营地，我们激动不已。
Approaching the campsite, we became overcome with excitement.
听着爆米花的爆裂声，他们心情舒畅，相信会有很多顾客爱上他们的爆米花。
Listening to the crackling of the corn, they were in a relaxed mood, believing that many customers would fall in love with their popcorn.
Application in the Tests
在高考中的运用
年份 主题 故事情节 思想品质
2023新高考Ⅰ卷 人与自我 在老师的鼓励和帮助之下参加了并不擅长的写作比赛 师生情；
勇于尝试
2022新高考Ⅰ卷 人与自我 越野比赛前，老师帮助David重拾信心 师生情；
永不放弃；
自强不息
2021新高考Ⅰ卷 人与自我 母亲节，双胞胎为母亲做早餐失败后爸爸帮忙 感恩；
亲情
高考实战篇 片段写作（2021年新高考Ⅰ卷）
A MOTHER' S DAY SURPRISE
珍娜和杰夫打算在母亲节那天为母亲做早餐，珍娜和杰夫打算做鸡肉粥和法式吐司 ，开始进行得还算顺利，可是后来两人手忙脚乱一杰夫烫伤了手 ，珍娜的面包也焦了……
Para 1: As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.
Para 2: The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.
Group Discussion
小组讨论
写作思路：
人称：_________ 时态：_________ 体裁：_________
写作要点：
第一段：__________________________________________________
可能用到的动词：__________________________________________
第二段：__________________________________________________
可能用到的动词：__________________________________________
第三人称
过去时
记叙文
父亲安慰并帮助双胞胎做好饭，然后悄悄溜进房间，假装什么都不知道。
双胞胎给母亲送早饭，母亲很感动并称赞孩子们，父亲假装不知道，表现出惊讶，一家人其乐融融吃早餐。
ask comfort praise encourage cook sneak pretend…
tiptoe wake shock moved bite…
Summary
We learnt some concrete verbs about “say”.
We learnt 3 skills to make verbs more vivid and exact.
We learnt 2 sentences patterns using verbs to describe different situations.
We analysed the writing exercise in 2021 Text paper.
Homework
Finish the continuation writing of A Mother’ s Day Surprise

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