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如何构建故事情节
续写模式
5R解读故事
读
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三大原则
思
TPT模式
写
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5R解读故事
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5R解读故事
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Read for the background
Read for the emotional changes
Read for the theme
Read for the plot
Read for the characters
Read for the plot
Beginning
Ending
Resolution
Climax
Development
情节和矛盾的关系：情节发生、情节发展、情节高潮、情节的结局
矛盾的产生 矛盾的展开 矛盾的激化 矛盾的解决
Read for the theme
年份 内容概要 类型 主题
2016.10 野外游玩，女主迷路，独自野外求生 人与自然 包容理解
平安和谐
2017.6 朋友一起骑车，野外遇狼 2020.1 人和狗的故事 2020.7 人和熊的故事 2023.1 我与蜂乌的故事 2017.11 和父母起旅游 人与社会 和谐温情
友好共进
2018.6 和父亲乡下度假 2021.1 和家人做南瓜灯 2021.6 和父亲处理打工钱 2022.6 我和学霸的搭档和成长 2022.1 残疾男孩的奔跑和成长 人与自我 自我成长
2023.6 老师鼓励下移民学生的写作成长
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三大原则
角色的所言、所行、所感、所想（Action）会引起其它角色的一系列反应（Response）。
Action→Response原则
存在情节矛盾，就要提供情节矛盾的解决方法。
Conflict→Solution原则
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三大原则
写作中一定要体现情感的变化，无论前面是这样的变化，最终都是积极的。
Negative→Positive原则
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TPT模式
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TPT模式
Para 1 Para 2
Transition 第四句（衔接句） 第二句（衔接句）
Plot 核心动词选定 时间序列分解 核心动词选定
时间序列分解
Transition 第三句（衔接句） 第一句(升华句)
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TPT模式
Para 1 Para 2
Transition 第四句（衔接句） 第二句（衔接句）
Plot (约五句) 核心动词选定 时间序列分解 核心动词选定
时间序列分解
Transition 第三句（衔接句） 第一句(升华句)
9 points
1.5 points
9 points
1.5 points
1.5 points
2.5 points
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TPT模式
How should we allocate(分配) our time if we are allowed only 30mins to finish this task
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10mins: Reading for 5R (the background, the characters, emotional changes, the plot and the theme)
16mins: Write two passages
4 mins: Copy your notes
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TPT模式
Para 1 Para 2
Transition 第四句（衔接句） 第二句（衔接句）
Plot (约五句) 核心动词选定 时间序列分解 核心动词选定
时间序列分解
Transition 第三句（衔接句） 第一句(升华句)
5 mins
1 min
5 mins
1 min
2 mins
2 mins
16 mins
5R解读故事
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5R解读故事
My mom only had one eye. I hated her. She was such an embarrassment.
She ran a small shop at a flea market, and collected old clothes and some other things to sell for the money we needed. Once during elementary school, it was field day, and my mom came. I was so embarrassed and wondered how could she do this to me I threw her a hateful look and ignored her. The next day at school, my schoolmates asked me, "your mom only has one eye " and taunted me.
I was so angry with my mom and wished that she would just disappear from this world. So l said to my mom, "Why don' t you have the other eye ! If you' re only gonna make me a laughing stock!" My mom did not respond, I guess I felt a little bad, but at the same time, I felt so good to have had said what I wanted to say. Maybe it was because I was full of anger then and there, I didn' t think that I had hurt her feelings very badly.
For the words I had said to her earlier, there was something pinching at me in the corner of my heart. Even so, I hated my one-eyed mom and our desperate poverty. I told myself that I would become successful in the near future and get out of that house for good, so I studied very hard. Later I got accepted by the Seoul University, I left my mother and came to Seoul to study. Then I got married there.
I bought a house of my own. Then I had kids, too. Now I am living happily as a successful man. I enjoy the life in Seoul because it 's a place that doesn' t remind me of my mom past. This kind of happiness was getting bigger and bigger, until one day someone knocked at my door. It was my mom! And still with her one eye! It felt as if the whole sky was falling apart on me. My little girl ran away, scared of my mom' s eye.
Background
Characters
Theme
Emotion
Plot
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5R解读故事
My mom only had one eye. I hated her. She was such an embarrassment.
She ran a small shop at a flea market, and collected old clothes and some other things to sell for the money we needed. Once during elementary school, it was field day, and my mom came. I was so embarrassed and wondered how could she do this to me I threw her a hateful look and ignored her. The next day at school, my schoolmates asked me, "your mom only has one eye " and taunted me.
I was so angry with my mom and wished that she would just disappear from this world. So l said to my mom, "Why don' t you have the other eye ! If you' re only gonna make me a laughing stock!" My mom did not respond, I guess I felt a little bad, but at the same time, I felt so good to have had said what I wanted to say. Maybe it was because I was full of anger then and there, I didn' t think that I had hurt her feelings very badly.
For the words I had said to her earlier, there was something pinching at me in the corner of my heart. Even so, I hated my one-eyed mom and our desperate poverty. I told myself that I would become successful in the near future and get out of that house for good, so I studied very hard. Later I got accepted by the Seoul University, I left my mother and came to Seoul to study. Then I got married there.
I bought a house of my own. Then I had kids, too. Now I am living happily as a successful man. I enjoy the life in Seoul because it 's a place that doesn' t remind me of my mom past. This kind of happiness was getting bigger and bigger, until one day someone knocked at my door. It was my mom! And still with her one eye! It felt as if the whole sky was falling apart on me. My little girl ran away, scared of my mom' s eye.
Background
Characters
Emotion
Plot
Theme
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5R解读故事
My mom only had one eye. I hated her. She was such an embarrassment.
She ran a small shop at a flea market, and collected old clothes and some other things to sell for the money we needed. Once during elementary school, it was field day, and my mom came. I was so embarrassed and wondered how could she do this to me I threw her a hateful look and ignored her. The next day at school, my schoolmates asked me, "your mom only has one eye " and taunted me.
I was so angry with my mom and wished that she would just disappear from this world. So l said to my mom, "Why don' t you have the other eye ! If you' re only gonna make me a laughing stock!" My mom did not respond, I guess I felt a little bad, but at the same time, I felt so good to have had said what I wanted to say. Maybe it was because I was full of anger then and there, I didn' t think that I had hurt her feelings very badly.
For the words I had said to her earlier, there was something pinching at me in the corner of my heart. Even so, I hated my one-eyed mom and our desperate poverty. I told myself that I would become successful in the near future and get out of that house for good, so I studied very hard. Later I got accepted by the Seoul University, I left my mother and came to Seoul to study. Then I got married there.
I bought a house of my own. Then I had kids, too. Now I am living happily as a successful man. I enjoy the life in Seoul because it 's a place that doesn' t remind me of my mom past. This kind of happiness was getting bigger and bigger, until one day someone knocked at my door. It was my mom! And still with her one eye! It felt as if the whole sky was falling apart on me. My little girl ran away, scared of my mom' s eye.
Background
Characters
Theme
Emotion
Plot
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5R解读故事
My mom only had one eye. I hated her. She was such an embarrassment.
She ran a small shop at a flea market, and collected old clothes and some other things to sell for the money we needed. Once during elementary school, it was field day, and my mom came. I was so embarrassed and wondered how could she do this to me I threw her a hateful look and ignored her. The next day at school, my schoolmates asked me, "your mom only has one eye " and taunted me.
I was so angry with my mom and wished that she would just disappear from this world. So l said to my mom, "Why don' t you have the other eye ! If you' re only gonna make me a laughing stock!" My mom did not respond, I guess I felt a little bad, but at the same time, I felt so good to have had said what I wanted to say. Maybe it was because I was full of anger then and there, I didn' t think that I had hurt her feelings very badly.
For the words I had said to her earlier, there was something pinching at me in the corner of my heart. Even so, I hated my one-eyed mom and our desperate poverty. I told myself that I would become successful in the near future and get out of that house for good, so I studied very hard. Later I got accepted by the Seoul University, I left my mother and came to Seoul to study. Then I got married there.
I bought a house of my own. Then I had kids, too. Now I am living happily as a successful man. I enjoy the life in Seoul because it 's a place that doesn' t remind me of my mom past. This kind of happiness was getting bigger and bigger, until one day someone knocked at my door. It was my mom! And still with her one eye! It felt as if the whole sky was falling apart on me. My little girl ran away, scared of my mom' s eye.
Background
Characters
Theme
Emotion
Plot
Read for the plot
Beginning
Ending
Resolution
Climax
Development
My mom only had one eye
Hate; Embarrassement
Move to Seoul; Live happily
Knock on the door
Para1&2
Para 2+theme
Para 1: I screamed at her, “Who are you I don' t know you! ”
Para 2: After the funeral, the neighbor gave me a letter saying, “ My dearest son...
三大原则
Action→Response原则
Conflict
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Solution
原则
Conflict: I don’t want to have any relationship with my mother.
Solution: I forgive my mother.
Negative
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Positive
原则
Negative: I hate my mother because of her one eye.
Positive: I forgive my mother and realize my mother’s love.
Action→Response原则
Read for the plot
Analyze the given sentences in the continuation writing part
Para 1: I screamed at her, “Who are you I don' t know you! ”
The focus should be on:
The conversation between my mother and me, and my inner struggle
Para 2: After the funeral, the neighbor gave me a letter saying, “ My dearest son...
The focus should be on:
My mom told me why her had only one eye, and my guilty
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5R解读故事
My mom only had one eye. I hated her. She was such an embarrassment.
She ran a small shop at a flea market, and collected old clothes and some other things to sell for the money we needed. Once during elementary school, it was field day, and my mom came. I was so embarrassed and wondered how could she do this to me I threw her a hateful look and ignored her. The next day at school, my schoolmates asked me, "your mom only has one eye " and taunted me.
I was so angry with my mom and wished that she would just disappear from this world. So l said to my mom, "Why don' t you have the other eye ! If you' re only gonna make me a laughing stock!" My mom did not respond, I guess I felt a little bad, but at the same time, I felt so good to have had said what I wanted to say. Maybe it was because I was full of anger then and there, I didn' t think that I had hurt her feelings very badly.
For the words I had said to her earlier, there was something pinching at me in the corner of my heart. Even so, I hated my one-eyed mom and our desperate poverty. I told myself that I would become successful in the near future and get out of that house for good, so I studied very hard. Later I got accepted by the Seoul University, I left my mother and came to Seoul to study. Then I got married there.
I bought a house of my own. Then I had kids, too. Now I am living happily as a successful man. I enjoy the life in Seoul because it 's a place that doesn' t remind me of my mom past. This kind of happiness was getting bigger and bigger, until one day someone knocked at my door. It was my mom! And still with her one eye! It felt as if the whole sky was falling apart on me. My little girl ran away, scared of my mom' s eye.
Background
Characters
Theme
Emotion
Plot
Read for the theme
人与社会
母爱、奉献
What is the theme of this passage
三大原则+TPT模式
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TPT模式
Paragraph 1： I screamed at her, “Who are you I don' t know you! ” Paragraph 2: After the funeral, the neighbor gave me a letter saying, “ My dearest son...
Transition Step2(第4句)：____________________________________________________________________ Step2(第2句)：__________________________________________________________________
The Plot（Actions+ Emotions) Step3 Mini-plot1: __________________________________Mini-plot2: __________________________________Mini-plot3: __________________________________ Step3 Mini-plot1: _________________________________Mini-plot2: _________________________________Mini-plot3: _________________________________
Transition Step2(第3句)：______________________________________________________________________________________________________ Step1(第1句)：___________________________________________________________________________________________________
Ending(升华: theme)：
第1句(1-2句)
It was at that moment that I ultimately came to realize that mother’s unfailing love towards me will never fade.(第1：升华句）
Step1. Writing the sublime sentence 升华句——2 mins
Paragraph 1： I screamed at her, “Who are you I don' t know you! ” Paragraph 2: After the funeral, the neighbor gave me a letter saying, “ My dearest son...
Transition Step2(第4句)：____________________________________________________________________ Step2(第2句)：__________________________________________________________________
The Plot（Actions+ Emotions) Step3 Mini-plot1: __________________________________Mini-plot2: __________________________________Mini-plot3: __________________________________ Step3 Mini-plot1: _________________________________Mini-plot2: _________________________________Mini-plot3: _________________________________
Transition Step2(第3句)：______________________________________________________________________________________________________ Step1(第1句)：It was at that moment that I ultimately came to realize that mother’s unfailing love towards me will never fade.
I’m sorry that I delivered so much embarrassment to you when you were growing up.(第2：过渡句）
TPT模式
Step2. Writing the transitional sentences 过渡句——1 min
Paragraph 1： I screamed at her, “Who are you I don' t know you! ” Paragraph 2: After the funeral, the neighbor gave me a letter saying, “ My dearest son...
Transition Step2(第4句)：____________________________________________________________________ Step2(第2句)：I’m sorry that I delivered so much embarrassment to you when you were growing up.
The Plot（Actions+ Emotions) Step3 Mini-plot1: __________________________________Mini-plot2: __________________________________Mini-plot3: __________________________________ Step3 Mini-plot1: _________________________________Mini-plot2: _________________________________Mini-plot3: _________________________________
Transition Step2(第3句)：______________________________________________________________________________________________________ Step1(第1句)：It was at that moment that I ultimately came to realize that mother’s unfailing love towards me will never fade.
Days later, a call from my mother’s neighbor came to me, saying my mom had passed away and asked me to hold a funeral.(第3：过渡句）
TPT模式
Step3. Writing the transitional sentences 过渡句——2 mins
Paragraph 1： I screamed at her, “Who are you I don' t know you! ” Paragraph 2: After the funeral, the neighbor gave me a letter saying, “ My dearest son...
Transition Step2(第4句)：____________________________________________________________________ Step2(第2句)：I’m sorry that I delivered so much embarrassment to you when you were growing up.
The Plot（Actions+ Emotions) Step3 Mini-plot1: __________________________________Mini-plot2: __________________________________Mini-plot3: __________________________________ Step3 Mini-plot1: _________________________________Mini-plot2: _________________________________Mini-plot3: _________________________________
Transition Step2(第3句)：Days later, a call from my mother’s neighbor came to me, saying my mom had passed away and asked me to hold a funeral. Step1(第1句)：It was at that moment that I ultimately came to realize that mother’s unfailing love towards me will never fade.
My mother lowered her head and quietly answered, “l feel so sorry that I have come to the wrong place. I hope I didn’t bring you much trouble.”(第4：过渡句）
TPT模式
Step4. Writing the transitional sentences 过渡句——1 min
Paragraph 1： I screamed at her, “Who are you I don' t know you! ” Paragraph 2: After the funeral, the neighbor gave me a letter saying, “ My dearest son...
Transition Step2(第4句)：My mother lowered her head and quietly answered, “l feel so sorry that I have come to the wrong place. I hope I didn’t bring you much trouble.” Step2(第2句)：I’m sorry that I delivered so much embarrassment to you when you were growing up.
The Plot（Actions+ Emotions) Step3 Mini-plot1: __________________________________Mini-plot2: __________________________________Mini-plot3: __________________________________ Step3 Mini-plot1: _________________________________Mini-plot2: _________________________________Mini-plot3: _________________________________
Transition Step2(第3句)：Days later, a call from my mother’s neighbor came to me, saying my mom had passed away and asked me to hold a funeral. Step1(第1句)：It was at that moment that I ultimately came to realize that mother’s unfailing love towards me will never fade.
核心动词选定
时间序列分解
核心动词选定
时间序列分解
TPT模式
Step 5: Writing the general plot大概情节---10mins
Paragraph 1： I screamed at her, “Who are you I don' t know you! ”
Transition Step2(第4句)：My mother lowered her head and quietly answered, “l feel so sorry that I have come to the wrong place. I hope I didn’t bring you much trouble.”
The Plot（Actions+ Emotions) Step3 Mini-plot1: __________________________________Mini-plot2: __________________________________Mini-plot3: __________________________________
Transition Step2(第3句)：Days later, a call from my mother’s neighbor came to me, saying my mom had passed away and asked me to hold a funeral.
核心动词选定
时间序列分解
TPT模式
动作情感句：动作描写，步伐沉重
She turned around and walked down the stairs slowly.
动作情感句：心理描写，引发内疚
I realized that my anger hurt my mother again with a flush of guilt welling up in my heart.
动作情感句：心理描写，铺垫不安
The few seconds my mother took to disappear from the corner seemed to be a century to me.
Action→Response原则
Paragraph 2: After the funeral, the neighbor gave me a letter saying, “ My dearest son...
Transition Step2(第2句)：I’m sorry that I delivered so much embarrassment to you when you were growing up.
The Plot（Actions+ Emotions) Step3 Mini-plot1: _________________________________Mini-plot2: _________________________________Mini-plot3: _________________________________
Transition Step1(第1句)：It was at that moment that I ultimately came to realize that mother’s unfailing love towards me will never fade.
核心动词选定
时间序列分解
TPT模式
动作情感句：动作描写，讲出原因
When you were very little, you had an accident and lost your eye.
动作情感句：动作描写，突出母爱
As a mother, I made the choice to give you mine.
动作情感句：动作心理描写，升华母爱
I am so proud that you you could see a whole new world for me
Action→Response原则
Possible Version
I screamed at her, “Who are you I don' t know you! ” My mother lowered her head and quietly answered, “l feel so sorry that I have come to the wrong place. I hope I didn’t bring you much trouble.” Then she turned around and walked down the stairs slowly. I realized that my anger hurt my mother again with a flush of guilt welling up in my heart. The few seconds my mother took to disappear from the corner seemed to be a century to me. To my astonishment, days later, a call from my mother’s neighbor came to me, saying my mom had passed away and asked me to hold the funeral.
After the funeral, the neighbor gave me a letter saying, “ My dearest son, I’m sorry that I delivered so much embarrassment to you when you were growing up. In fact, when you were very little, you had an accident and lost your eye. Unable to bear seeing you grow up with one eye, as a mother, I made the choice to give you mine. So proud was I that you you could see a whole new world for me, in my place, with that eye.” It was at that moment that I ultimately came to realize that mother’s unfailing love towards me will never fade. (194 words)
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