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高考真题读后续写
路痴的自我救赎
Step 1 :真题原文解析
原文阅读
Eva spent the first week of high school trying to keep her head above water. One of the major headaches for her was finding her way in the huge school building. It was a six-story building. On each floor, hallways stretched in four directions, leading to classrooms, laboratories, and teachers’ offices. Somewhere in the building, there was also a library, a cafeteria, and a gym.
Having a poor sense of direction, Eva found it impossible to get around in such a huge building. All the different hallways and rooms were too much to think about, let alone commit to memory. She decided that she would memorize where her classes were and then pretend that the rest of the place didn’t exist.
who
when& where
what (conflict)
矛盾的升级
类型：problems(问题）-- causes（原因） --solutions_（解决方法）
占位符标题 04
Para. 1 &Para.2 :
背景设定：Eva在高中的第一周努力适应。她面临的一个主要难题是在一所庞大的学校建筑中找到自己的路。这座建筑有六层，每层都有四个方向的走廊。
主要矛盾：Eva个人对于挑战的恐惧和如何克服这一挑战—学校里认路的挑战）
主题：面对恐惧、适应新环境、自我成长和克服困难
原文阅读
In her fast P.E. class, Eva was shocked when Coach Pitt announced that everyone had to run one mile around the track outside. She searched the faces of her classmates for signs of panic. There was nothing she feared more than having to run a whole mile. To Eva, “a mile” was used to describe long distances. It was ten miles from her home to her grandfather’s, and that always seemed like a long way, even in a car!
When Coach Pitt blew his whistle (哨子), Eva figured she would be left in the dust. However, while some of her classmates edged ahead, others actually fell behind. “It’s just the beginning,” she thought. “I’ll come in last for sure.”
Para.3 & Para. 4 主要矛盾：Eva个人对于挑战的恐惧和如何克服这些挑战:体育课上的挑战.
矛盾继续升级：挑战2
自我否定 self-doubt
原文阅读
Soon Eva began to breathe hard, with her heart pounding and legs shaking. Feeling desperate, Eva started using a mind wick on herself. She stopped thinking about the word “mile.” Instead, she focused on reaching the shadow east on the track by an oak tree up ahead. Then she concentrated on jogging to the spot where the track curved (拐弯). After that, she tried to see if she could complete her first lap. One lap turned into two, then three, then four.
Para.5 : 注意按___________线细腻地描述了主人公内心情感的变化。
时间线
占位符标题 05
故事线
Beginning：Eva开始了她的高中生活，在这个新环境中她试图适应。最大的挑战之一是在巨大的学校建筑中找到自己的路。建筑物庞大，使她感到迷茫。
Build-up ：Eva在巨大的学校建筑中迷路的问题逐渐升级，她决定只记住自己上课的地方。此时，体育课上的一个新挑战出现了：教练要求每个人跑一英里。Eva对跑步感到极度恐惧，认为自己无法完成。
Climax：跑步的时候，Eva开始感到绝望。然而，她使用了一个心理技巧：不再想象整个一英里的距离，而是专注于逐渐到达的小目标。她的心情由恐惧转变为决心，一圈又一圈地跑下去
Resolution ：Eva最终成功地完成了跑步，并意外地获得了教练的表扬。她意识到，她所害怕的距离实际上更多是心理层面的挑战。她决定将这种分解任务的方上，逐步熟悉整个建筑法应用到学校的探索。
Ending ：Eva通过逐步攻克学校建筑的复杂性，成功地适应了新环境。故事以她的成长和自信的提升结束，她从一开始的迷茫和恐惧变得更加自信和适应。这个故事不仅是关于学习和适应的，还强调了面对挑战时心理策略的重要性。
故事山
Step 2 :续写情节预测分析
分析续写段
点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；
点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；
点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；
点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。
情节构建的重点
Paragraph 1: When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised.
分析续写段
要点：①Eva’s initial self-doubt -②her sucess in the PE class -
③reflction:trick
Paragraph 1: When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised.
Paragraph 2: Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building.
要点：①how to use the trick -②thematical meanings
Step 3 :续写范文赏析(非官方)
段落一
When Coach Pitt said "Nice work" to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised. Despite her initial doubts, she had not only completed the mile but had also kept pace with many of her classmates. Her heart still pounded from the exertion(n.费力；尽力）, and her legs felt like jelly（紧张得发软）, but a sense of accomplishment surged through her. Breaking the daunting distance into smaller, achievable targets had made the impossible possible. She realized that focusing on immediate, reachable goals, like the next bend in the track or the shadow of a tree, had distracted her from the overwhelming idea of the mile.
段落二
Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building. Instead of being daunted by its enormity, she broke it down into manageable sections. First, she focused on memorizing the route from the entrance to her first class. Gradually, she added other landmarks – the library, the cafeteria, the gym – to her mental map. Day by day, what was once a maze became a series of familiar pathways. Mirroring her triumph on the track, mastering the layout of the school marked yet another step in her journey towards self-assurance and adaptability.
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