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阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I was angry about my father in the first year of college, because he didn t care about my feelings at all.
One day I had a serious quarrel with him. I was fed up with his direction and correction. How could he interfere with my life and my study plans How could he understand the importance of my university activities The only thing that he cared about was my academic performance! He didn t understand my world and I didn t understand his, either. (矛盾的根源)
I stormed out and sighedall the way to school. Suddenly I realized that I didn‘t have the assignment that was due: a thought card.(card贯穿整个故事) This class was taught by Dr. Sidney B. Simon. The thought card was the admission ticket to his class. He would return them to us with his comment.
My first thought card read, “All that glitters is not gold.” He commented, “What does this quote mean to you Is it significant ” Obviously, he was taking it seriously. I surely didn t want to reveal myself to him.
The week progressed. Dr. Simon s class was quite brilliant. He challenged us to think
and come up with our own responses. But I had no handling strategies to deal with it.(伏笔)
The second Tuesday came.I wrote on my card,“The most important thing in communication is to hear what isn t being said.” The next day the card came back:“You seem to need a listener. Is this important to your life ” I couldn t remember a teacher caring personally about me since primary school.
With all these memories filling my mind, I raced to class. Just outside the door, I took a card and wrote, “I have the most terrible Dad of the world!” Then I dashed in. Looking up at me, he reached out forthe card, and I took my seat. The moment I sat down, I felt terrible. I didn t mean to let that out. That night I had difficulty sleeping. What if he contacted my dad
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在以下位置作答。
　　On Wednesday morning I came to class with mixed feelings.
_____________________________________________________________________________ I held the card tightly, thinking about his words.______________________________________________________________________实例分析
读后续写满分技巧12　恰当神态描写　人物跃然纸上
　　神态描写指对面部五官展开描写,可以表现人物的喜怒哀惧,描写时要用表示表情、神态的词语,如哭丧着脸、专注的神情、脸上的微笑等。如①通过描写人物的脸庞表示喜悦,如His face beamed and his bright smile lit up the room;②通过描写脸颊表示愤怒;③通过描写眼睛表示激动、愤怒、悲哀和恐惧等,如His eyes were glittering with excitement;④通过描写脸色表示激动、恐惧、悲哀等。通过恰当的神态描写,续写中的人物会更生动形象。
主题链接
主题特点 在这个话题中会涉及①亲子之间紧张关系的处理、矛盾的化解、相互包容和帮助、家长或孩子个人的共同成长,当然也会包含家长或孩子对自我的反思。②亲子之间缺乏沟通与交流,原因可以是完全被电子产品吸引或者忙于生计等;③家长和孩子因为共同做出一些改变,有各自不同程度的成长。
三步法 第一步:家庭环境或氛围描写+不满、忧虑或排斥等情绪;第二步:冲突过程+动作和情感;第三步:冲突化解、亲子交流+高兴/如释重负+关系融洽(+升华)。
第一步　把握原文大意　明主旨和两线
原文大意 作者与父亲之间发生矛盾;课堂上写的卡片使老师了解到了作者当下所遇到的问题。
原文两情线 情节线:和父亲有矛盾→生气→回校→老师的任务→和老师之间的卡片交流→卡片吐露心声 情感线:生气→纠结→担心、害怕
叙事意图 父子矛盾是否化解 主题 理解
第二步　据两首句信息　确定续写方向
两段首句 定一框 ①由第一段首句“星期三早上,我怀着复杂的心情来上课。”可写作者在课堂上的心理活动,老师说了什么。②尾句:衔接第二段首句中的“the card”可写老师给了作者一张卡片,卡片上写了什么。
二框二首 正能量 ①由第二段首句“我紧紧握着卡片,想着他的话。”可写作者受到老师的启发后,与父亲交流→交流的过程→父亲的回应;②尾句:应以正能量结尾,侧面描写表现父子关系的拉近。
第三步　原续高度融洽　合理添加细节
◎高度融洽　续写部分情节线体现的是:担心会与父亲争吵→交换卡片→父亲在门口等待→父子交谈→与父亲和解;情感变化线应为: worried→frightened→confused→ surprised→delighted。
◎添加细节　情感细节:第一段可描写作者在教室复杂的心情;场景描写:第二段可描写和父亲步行回家的路上交谈的情节,利用周围的环境、落日和人物投下的影子烘托人物情感的拉近。
第四步　沿原语言特点　完美连贯表达
On Wednesday morning I came to class with mixed feelings.At first, Dr Sidney B. Simon did not return the card to me. I sat in my usual seat, opening the book with worry and fear. I thought that Dr. Sidney B. Simon must have told my father about this. What was waiting for me was another more severe argument. After class, as I was walking to the door of the classroom, it was Dr. Sidney B. Simon who was calling my name. Then he told me that he would be my listener and exchanged the card with the words “Good medicine is hard to taste, but good advice is hard to hear.”I held the card tightly, thinking about his words. was wondering whether I should tell my father what had happened these days.I found my father waiting for me at the school gate with the gift I had always wanted. That day,I walked home with my father. The setting sun shone onus, casting our shadows on the road. Cars of various colors passed by us, but they did not affect our conversation.We talked a lot that day, and it seemed that the journey from school to home had been also shortened.

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