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大火中救老人
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The event that stands out in Tom’s memory happened one morning when Tom was only ten years old. He was at home with his elder sister Jane. Tom was doing his homework when he heard raised voices. At first he thought nothing of it since customers in the motorcycle shop directly below their flat often became loud, but he soon realized this time it was different.
“Quick! Quick! Remove the motorcycles from the shop.” someone yelled.
Then a thick burning smell filled the air. When Tom opened the front door of their flat to investigate, a thick cloud of smoke greeted him. The motorcycle shop had caught fire and people were running and crying.
Jane, who had been playing the violin in her room, hurried to the living room. They rushed out of the door and along the corridor(走廊) through the smoke.
They were heading towards the stairway at the far end of the corridor when Jane stopped in her track. She turned around and headed back the way they came. Tom had no idea what she was doing, but he followed her.
Jane had suddenly remembered the lady in her 70s who lived next door to them, who they called Makcik, Malay for auntie. Jane began banging on Makcik’s door, but got no answer. As the smoke thickened around them, Tom could see many of their neighbors—some still in their pyjamas(睡衣；宽长裤)—running for safety. The thought of fear crossed his mind.
“She might have run for safety like everyone else!” Tom cried. However, Jane refused to give up. “I know Makcik’s still inside.” She said she was familiar with Makcik’s daily routine and was certain she would still be sleeping. She pounded the door. “Go downstairs. Go now! Go!”
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Paragraph 1:Tom noticed the flame was reaching up
Paragraph 2:Luckily, some neighbors passing by stopped and offered help.
【解析】
汤姆家楼下汽车店发生了火灾，汤姆和姐姐Jane赶紧从家里从出来逃生。快到走廊尽头的时候，Jane突然停了下来，往回跑去。原来，她是要去救同住一楼的70多岁的Makcik。所给短文写到Jane坚持不懈的敲Makcik的门。要求学生续写这个故事。所给故事比较好理解，主要考查学生的基本理解能力和表达能力。 所给范文符合故事的情节发展，突出了“正能量”。范文中，不仅描述了人物的具体行动，还描述了人物的内心感受，内容充实，符合实际。
参考范文1
Paragraph 1: Tom noticed the flame was reaching up. Frozen with fear, he stood rooted to the spot. He comprehended the gravity of the situation and held Jane's hand tightly. Both of them were coughing and their eyes were stinging. Time seemed to stand still, though they were probably there for only two or three minutes. Tom begged Jane to run for safety as quickly as possible. Jane tried to shield her nose from the choking smoke and shook her head. She kept pounding against the door. Tom burst out crying.
Paragraph 2:Luckily, some neighbors passing by stopped and offered help. A sense of strength immediately replaced the mounting fear and anxiety in Jane's mind. She told them Ms. Makcik must be still in the room. They forced the door open with all their might. Sure enough, Makcik was lying in bed, unconscious. She was carried downstairs and then rushed to the hospital, where she finally came to herself. People in the neighborhood felt relieved and Jane and Tom were very happy.
参考范文2
【答案2】One possible version:
Tom noticed the flame was reaching up. Frozen with fear, he stood rooted to the spot. He comprehended the gravity of the situation and held Jane’s hand tightly. By then, both of them were coughing and their eyes were stinging. Time seemed to stand still, though they were probably there for only two or three minutes. Tom begged Jane to run for safety as quickly as possible. Jane tried to shield her nose from the choking smoke and shook her head. She kept pounding against the door. Tom burst out crying.
Luckily, some neighbors passing by stopped and offered help. A sense of strength immediately replaced the mounting fear and anxiety in Jane’s mind. She told them Ms. Makcik must be still in the room. They forced the door open with all their might. Sure enough, Makcik was lying in bed, unconscious. She was carried downstairs and then rushed to the hospital, where she finally came to herself. People in the neighborhood felt relieved and Jane and Tom’s joy was immense.
参考范文3
Paragraph 1: Tom noticed the flame was reaching up. It sounded like a wild animal was roaring at them. Within seconds the corridor was full of choking smoke. It stung their eyes and left them gasping for breath. At this point, Tom began to panic, for he could barely make out his sister through the smoke. Coughing and rubbing his eyes, he crouched down beside her, not knowing what to do. Totally overwhelmed by fear, he was close to tears. But Jane kept banging on the door and shouted, “Quick! Open the door! The flat is on fire...”
Paragraph 2: Luckily, some neighbors passing by stopped and offered help. Together they pounded at the door with their fists. After trying in vain to wake up the old lady, they managed to break it down. In an instant, Jane and Tom rushed in, followed by their neighbors, only to find Makcik lying unconscious in bed. In record time, they carried her out, headed towards the stairway, and then dashed downstairs. What a narrow escape! When the fire fighters come to their rescue, all of them breathed a sigh of relief. What made Tom proud was that a few days later, his elder sister was given an award for her bravery and quick action.
参考范文4
Paragraph 1:
Tom noticed the flame was reaching up. Sticking out the tongue, the fire seemed to devour everything and everyone in the building.(拟人) Frozen with fear, Tom stood rooted to the ground(呆住不动), not knowing what to do and just holding Jane’s hand tightly. So heavy was the smoke that they couldn’t help coughing and their eyes were stinging.（so倒装） There was a pause that seemed to last for ever before Tom begged his sister to run for safety as soon as possible. But anticipating that Makcik would die inside without their help,（原因状语） Jane shook her head in disapproval. Not only did Jane pound the door,(否定句首倒装) but she shouted hysterically, hoping to wake Makcik up. But both didn’t work. What made them more frightened was that there were shouts and cries echoing down the corridor.
Paragraph 2:
Luckily, some neighbors passing by stopped and offered help. After figuring out what was going on, one of the men thought that children's safety was a top priority(当务之急）. So he asked his wife to take all children out to a safe place. A couple of men stayed there, ready to rescue Makcik. They didn’t mess about, one man pounding the door, one finding an iron bar, another hurling himself against the door. （伴随）Suddenly, the door was opened when they were ready to force the door open. There at the door stood Makcik, who had been suffering from hearing loss for many years. In no time, she was carried downstairs before she could realize what had happened. Having seen Makcik was rescued and taken to the safe place,(having done做时间状语) Jane felt a sense of relief and delight surging through her. A gust of morning breeze blew to her, seeming to whisper:” You’re so great and brave.”（拟人） (317words)
参考范文5
Paragraph 1:
Tom noticed the flames was growing higher and higher. Unluckily, there was no sign of answering the door. With no time left, Jane took a deep breath, breaking into the house. Struggling to control his fear , Tom followed his sister directly into Makcik's bedroom, only to find that Makcik was coughing heavily, unable to move a single step. They had great trouble in supporting her to stand up and inching forward slowly. Finally, when they made it out of the flat, they pounded on the ground because they can't bear the weight any longer.
Paragraph 2:
Luckily, some neighbors passing by stopped and offered help. Thanks to Tom, Jane as well as all the passers-by, Makcik was rushed to hospital just in time to be operated on. It turned out that she recovered soon. Later that day, knowing that there was nothing serious with Makcik, Tom felt quite relieved and proud. When asked about her thought, Jane answered simply with a smile, "I thought nothing but saving her at that very moment." Both of them won lots of praise and set a good example to everyone.

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