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(共20张PPT)
Continuous writing
读后续写
How to read
How to design
The key elements of a story
A story always involves characters’ ongoing actions and feelings in different settings.
A story
1. Characters (who)
2. Actions (what)
3. Feelings (how + why)
4. Settings (when + where)
一、深度文本解析（How to read）
试题再现
I was in my room, unwilling to head to the community theatre with “my brother” Henry. He was just adopted by my parents recently. I was not in the mood for being onstage with him.
“Kristie, come here,” my mom called. Following her voice, I found her outside the bathroom, holding a wet book. She gave the book a shake. “Henry’s book was in the bathtub. Did you put it there ” She glared at me—something she never did before Henry came to our home. I didn’t wet his book on purpose. Tears of hurt clouded my eyes. Worse still, she promised to buy him a new copy. My heart ached. Henry was stealing my mother’s love. He was ruining my life.
Meanwhile, Henry was just nearby, absorbed in working on a complicated rope knot (绳结) as usual. Why did a boy like him do the girly work Far from manly!
Soon, it was time to have to set off for the community theatre. As Henry walked ahead of us to the car, my mom took me aside and said in a low voice, “It’s the first time for Henry to be onstage. Be kind to him, Honey.” I nodded but sighed. Being kind didn’t use to be hard. But after Henry moved in, everything felt different. The theatre used to be a special place for my parents and me. With Henry involved, it didn’t seem so special any more.
Finally, it was our stage time. My heart beat wildly. I forgot my annoyance at Henry for a while. As we kids lined up, ready to act out our short play, I realized how loosely I had tied the drawstring (束带) on my skirt. Sure enough, my skirt began to drop. Laughter from the audience could be heard, and even though I was wearing shorts under my skirt, I could feel my face burst into flames. However, my hands were full. If only someone could help me out!
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
Paragraph 1: Right then, Henry sensed my embarrassment._____________________________________________________
Paragraph 2: After the performance, I found Henry and tapped him on the arm gratefully. ____________________
1. Clarify the main elements
Where
Elements of
the story
Who
What
When
Why
I was unwilling
and
with .
tense
How
1. Clarify the main elements
Where
Elements of
the story
Who
What
When
Why
I (Kirstie),
“my brother” Henry
Home
Theatre
Stage
I was unwilling to accept and be onstage with my adopted brother Henry.
Before
during the performance
Stole my mother's love; ruined my life
The past tense
How
Unwilling and hurt;
Embarrassed and helpless
My parents had recently
a boy named Henry, as “ ” .
Beginning
Rising action
Climax
Resolution
(Unwilling )
( Hurt and confused )
(Embarrassed and helpless)
Ending
Plot line (Actions)
Emotion line (Feelings)
2 Clarify the story lines
During the performance, I realized how I had tied the drawstring on my skirt. My skirt began to .
I was by my mom, and I couldn’t understand
.
adopted
my new brother
misunderstood
why he always worked on the rope knot
loosely
drop
Tips for a good writing
1.“两情相悦”: 情节与情感双曲线相一致
3. Clarify the theme
Love
The family knot
Understanding and acceptance
Solving the conflicts
Conflict/
Problem
I VS. Mother
I VS. “My new brother”
“We are family.”
Tips for a good writing
2.“问题”与“解决”:美好结局、主题明确
二、精巧构思框架（How to plot）
Para.1 （两段首句定一框）
Right then, Henry sensed my embarrassment.
1.What did Henry do to help me （所做）
2.What did I think （所思）
3.How did I feel （所感）
4. How was the performance （transition)
Para.2 （二框二首正能量）
After the performance, I found Henry and tapped him on the arm gratefully
approach and assist me tie my drawstring firmly, whispering “…”.
recall and regret what I had done to him
shocked, felt ashamed of myself, grateful
successful and smooth,
thunderous applause
Useful Expressions
二、精巧构思框架（How to plot）
Para.1 （两段首句定一框）
Right then, Henry sensed my embarrassment.
1.What did Henry do to help me (所做)
2.What did I think (所思)
3.How did I feel (所感)
4. How was the performance (transition)
Para.2 （二框二首正能量）
After the performance, I found Henry and tapped him on the arm gratefully.
1. What did I do to show my gratitude (所说、所做)
2. What was Henry’s response (所说、所做)
3. How did we feel (所感)
4. ENDING (升华主题)
thanks for his help; hug him tightly
hug back, smile
warm, happy, moved,
The family knot wouldn’t be untied because of love.
试题再现
My New Brother was in my room, feeling unwilling to head to the community theatre with “my brother” Henry. He had recently been adopted by my parents and I was not in the mood for being onstage with him.
“Kirstie, come here” my mom called. Following her voice, I found her outside the bathroom, holding a wet book, She gave the book a shake. “Henry’s book was in the bathtub. Did you put it there ” She glared at me, something she had never done before Henry came to our home. I hadn’t wet his book on purpose. Raindrops fell from my eyes, To make matters worse, she promised to buy him a new copy. My heart ached. Henry was stealing my mother's love, He was ruining my life.
Meanwhile, Henry was nearby, absorbed in working on a complicated rope knot (绳结)something he liked to do. Why did a boy like him like doing girly work It seemed far from manly(男子汉气概).
Soon, it was time to set off to the community theatre. As Henry walked ahead of us to the car, my mom took me aside and said in a low voice, “It will be Henry’s first time on stage. Be kind to him, honey” I nodded but sighed. I hadn’t always found it this difficult to be kind, But since Henry had moved in, everything felt different. The theatre used to be a special place for my parents and me. With Henry involved, it didn’t seem so special anymore. Finally it was our stage time. My heart beat wildly. I forgot my annoyance at Henry for a while. As we kids lined up, ready to act out our short play, I realized how loosely I had tied the draw string on my skirt. Sure enough, my skirt began to drop. I could hear the audience laughing, Even though I was wearing shorts under my skirt, I could feel my face burst into flames. However, my hands were full, if only someone could help me out.
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
注意：1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
Paragraph 1: Right then, Henry sensed my embarrassment.______________________________________________________________
Paragraph 2: After the performance, I found Henry and tapped him on the arm gratefully. ____________________________
三、续写完美篇章 Handwriting also counts!
According to the following questions and the given expressions, draft your writing. (10mins)
1.与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理。
(reasonable and logical)
2.内容丰富，情节合理，有细节描写（动作、情感、环境、对话等）。
(Actions + Feelings + Settings)
3.所使用的语法结构和词汇丰富，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达。
(Good vocabulary & varied structure)
4.巧妙地利用了前文的伏笔，使所续写短文精巧。
(Using a brush-up)
第五档（21-25分）
第四档（16-20分）
第三档（ 11-15分）
……
Summary
Tips for a good writing
1.“两情相悦”: 情节与情感双曲线相一致；
2. “问题”与“解决”:美好结局、明确主题;
3.“两段首句定一框, 二框二首正能量” :逻辑衔接有条理；
4.“点睛之笔”：抓住伏笔，回扣前文。
故事也许是虚构的，但是故事的情感确实真实的。
Love: Our life is full of love. We should love our families!
Most importantly, learn to accept and love others no matter when he/she join us!
Homework
Polish your writing with the given expressions and share your stories with classmates next class.
Thanks
第二课时：评讲课
Right then, Henry sensed my embarrassment. Without a second thought, he approached me quickly, dropped to a crouch, and tied a beautiful firm bow knot. “Nailed it.” He whispered. Shocked by what he had done, l felt something deep in my mind began to change. It seemed as if his kind deeds had melted my heart. Thinking about what I had done to him, I felt ashamed of myself. While I was lost in thought, the music took me back to reality, We edged to the stage and started our performance. The moment the show was over, the audience cast approving glances at us, a storm of thunderous applause echoing around the hall.
Split actions
the transitional sentence
Possible Version
After the performance, I found Henry and tapped him on the arm gratefully. " Thank ... you, Henry." My voice trembled with my face burning. I had to admit that, but for his timely help, I wouldn't have plucked up my courage to stand on the stage. Without his wonderful knotting skills, the performance would have been quite different. Henry patted me gently on the shoulder, an enormous grin flashing across his face, "Not a problem, We are family, aren't we " Tears blurred my eyes, words failing to convey my warmth, so l gave him a heartfelt hug. lt was at this moment that I realized the string knot on the skirt would go untied, but the family knot wouldn't and never.
Using a brush-up
词汇激活：
动作行为类：
“说”
whisper v. 耳语，低语，小声说；
persuade v. 说服，劝服；
reply/ respond v. 回复
“笑”
wear a genuine/bright smile 面带真诚/灿烂的微笑
--wear a +adj. +smile 面带……的微笑
grin from ear to ear 咧嘴大笑
情绪情感类：
“开心”
delighted; joyful; merry; pleased…
tears of happiness flowing down 流下了幸福的泪水
be wild with joy 欣喜若狂
To one’s delight 令某人高兴的是
“感动”
moved; touched…
be moved to tears 感动流泪
Be moved beyond words 感动得说不出话来

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