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2025届高二作文写作训练之读后续写
题型概述
读后续写是一种新型的写作形式，结合阅读与写作。通常，读后续写题型会提供一段350词以内的语言材料，以记叙文为主。考生需依据该材料内容和所给段落开头语进行续写（150词左右），将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。
该题型总分为25分，按5个档次给分。
档次 描述
第五档 (21－25) 创造了丰富、合理的内容，富有逻辑性，续写完整，与原文情境融洽度高； 使用了多样并且恰当的词汇和语法结构，可能有个别小错，但完全不影响理解； 有效地使用了语句间衔接手段，全文结构清断，前后呼应，意义连贯。
第四档 (16－20) 创造了比较丰富、合理的内容，比较有逻辑性，续写比较完整，与原文情境融治度较高； 使用了比较多样并且怡当的词汇和语法结构，可能有些许错误，但不影响理解； 比较有效地使用了语句间衔接手段，全文结构比较清晰，意义比较连贯。
第三档 (11－15) 创造了基本合理的内容，有一定的逻辑性，续写基本完整，与原文情境相关； 使用了简单的词汇和语法结构，有一些错误或不恰当之处，但基本不影响理解； 基本有效地使用了语句间衔接手段，全文结构基本清晰，意义基本连贯。
第二档 (6－10) 内容或逻辑上有一些重大问题，续写不够完整，与原文情境有一定程度脱节； 所使用的词汇有限，语法结构单调，错误较多，影响理解； 未能有效地使用语句间衔接手段，全文结构不够清晰，意义不够连贯。
第一档 (1－5) 内容或逻辑上有较多重大问题，或有部分内容抄自原文，续写不完整，与原文情境基本脱节； 所使用的词汇非常有限，语法结构单调，错误很多，严重影响理解； 几乎没有使用语句间衔接手段，全文结构不清晰，意义不连贯。
0 所写内容太少或无法看清以致无法评判； 所写内容全部抄自原文或与题目要求完全不相关； 未作答。
解读与构思
读后续写题型的答题过程可以分为"读""思""写"三步，下面将以Camping Cousins为例逐一讲解。第一步梳理原文信息，把握续写框架脉络。第二步续写构思，从构思两段主要情节到构思所给段首句的衔接句和结尾句，最后结合"五所"补充两段具体情节。第三步情节优化，即初稿完成后如何对其进行润色，丰富人物形象，衔接前后内容，以及如何适当运用表现手法。
Camping Cousins
My cousin Allen was the coolest person in all of Minneapolis. By the age of 19, he was a star football player at the University of Minnesota. I wanted to be just like him. So when Allen asked me to join him on a spring fishing trip in northern Minnesota, I said yes!
After planning the trip, we gathered clothes and supplies and then set off on our adventure. We reached the Superior National Forest by early evening. On the way to our campsite, Allen pointed to a small house faraway in one of the mountains, saying that it was the ranger station (护林站) where the foresters worked.
Allen knew all the tricks of an experienced camper. After we gathered enough wood from the forest floor, he started the campfire using only stone and steel — no matches. After a day of travelling, we were very hungry. We ate beef and rice and some soup as well.
Exhausted, we crawled into our sleeping bags early. Allen was still talking about his past camping adventures when a sudden wind picked up from the north. The temperature dropped and it began to snow. Allen knew of a way to increase the temperature inside the tent. He dragged a log from the woods, wrapped aluminum foil (铝箔) around the log and then placed it near the campfire. The heat from the fire reflected into the tent. Soon the tent was warm again and thoughts of lake fish filled my dreams.
I was still dreaming when Allen woke me up in a panic. Our tent was on fire! The snow had stopped during the night, but the wind had fanned the flames of the fire towards our tent. Frightened by the flames, I ran out of the tent immediately. The tent collapsed with Allen inside. Without any hesitation, I reached into the burning tent, grabbed him, and dragged him to the icy lake. We checked each other to make sure neither of us was hurt.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答.
Later, as we stood by the burning tent to keep warm, we considered our situation.________
Suddenly, we heard a noise in the forest.___________________________________
（一）梳理原文信息
对原文进行分析时，应重点关注原文中的故事主题、环境、人物、情节等要素。
主题：读后续写故事的主题通常反映积极向上的人生观、价值观，对读者具有一定的启示和教育意义；同时需要注意，主题是贯彻和统领全文的概念。最好有相应的故事内容做支撑，避免天马行空或以偏概全。
环境：故事中的环境包括自然环境和人文环境。环境描写除了展现人物的心理状态外，有时也作为铺垫，为后文蓄势。明确原文中的故事环境，除了可以掌握续写的时空信息外，也可以对接下来的故事发展有所把握。
人物：在阅读故事时，明确出场人物及人物之间的关系，阅读过程中可以标记与人物相关的内容，分析人物的性格特征与情感态度，更好地把握人物特点。
情节：梳理出故事中的情节线和与之对应的主人公情感线索，也就基本把握了故事发展的脉络。在这个基础之上，可以按照"开端"→"发展"一"高潮"→"结局"模式对故事进行划分。
（二）构思三步走
Step 1 定主线-构思两段主要情节
结合"梳理原文信息"中对主题、环境、人物、情节这些要素的分析以及对续写第一段、第二段所给段首句的分析，可以构思续写第一段和第二段的主要情节。
在原文最后一段中，随着帐篷着火坍塌， Allen 和"我"惊险出逃，情节发展达到高潮。接下来人物需要尝试解决问题，获得营救。
续写第一段的主要情节为：We tried to attract the foresters’ attention.
续写第二段的主要情节为：The foresters noticed the distant glow of fire and came to our rescue.
Step 2 设"四点"-﹣构思所给段首句的衔接句和结尾句
根据原文信息和所给段首句推测段首句的衔接句和文章的结尾句，确保段落当中和段落之间情节连贯以及文章的主题和结局积极向上。
续写第一段的段首衔接句：在构思这一处衔接句时可以结合原文情节和所给段首句“Later , as we stood by the burning tent to keep warm, we considered our siuation .”分析，推断下一步的情节发展。
考虑以“I”的“所见”衔接段首句，例如I saw all supplies were destroyed by the fire.
考虑以“I”的“所思”衔接段首句，例如I thought about how we might be frozen before anyone came and felt worried.
续写第一段的段尾衔接句：在构思这一处衔接句时需要和第二个段首句做好衔接，第二个段首句中出现了环境描写和时间状语suddenly，所以在构思这一处时需要考虑noise出现之前Allen和"我"正在做什么或正处于怎样的状态，即以“we”的“所做”衔接段首句，例如We felt hopleless after waiting for a long time.
续写第二段的段首衔接句：在构思这一处衔接句时可以结合续写第一段的段尾句及续写第二段所给段首句" Suddenly , we heard a noise in the forest ."分析，推断下一步的情节发展。注意 noise 应该引起人物行为的变化。可以考虑以 Allen的“所做”衔接第二段段首句，例如Allen recognized the sound of a jeep.
结尾句：结尾时要考虑照应"野外遇险时自救"的故事主题。画面定格式结尾：Only then did we realize that we were safe.这一结尾形式将故事最后的画面定格在主人公获救后心有余悸的场景，故事结束得流畅自然。主题提炼式结尾：This camping experience taught me that we can make the best decisions when we stay calm.故事的主题是在野外遇险时保持冷静，积极采取求生措施，可以用“我”经历此次野营遇险后的感想作为结尾，达到升华主题的效果。
Step 3 填细节——结合“五所”问答，补充具体情节
上一个步骤中将续写两段的首句和末句构思完成，接下来需要补充具体情节。可以结合人物的所见、所闻、所说、所做、所思／感进行提问（What did the character see / hear / say / do / think )，通过回答问题的方式完成初稿。
Later, as we stood by the burning tent to keep warm, we considered our situation.________
How did we feel at that time
What idea did Allen think of
What did we do
Suddenly, we heard a noise in the forest.___________________________________
What did we see next
What did we do then
What did we do when we returned to safety
情节优化
Later, as we stood by the burning tent to keep warm, we considered our situation. Our campsite was deep in the forest, so with all of our supplies consumed by the fire, we were almost completely cut off from the outside world. Our bodies shivered as all we had on us was thin underwear. We yelled for help, but unsurprisingly, there was no response. “The ranger station!” Allen suddenly shouted with excitement, “If only we could catch the foresters’ attention!” We fed some wood into the dying fire, pinning all our hopes on someone noticing it. After waiting for what seemed like centuries, we were on the edge of mental collapse.
Suddenly, we heard a noise in the forest. With it becoming louder and closer, Allen recognized it as the sound of a jeep. Then the noise came to an abrupt end, and I saw a dark shadow moving towards us. It was a forester! He had spied the light and smoke and came to check. We quickly jumped into his warm vehicle as he put out the fire. On the way to the ranger station, we briefly explained what had happened and expressed our sincere gratitude for his timely help. At the station, we put on some warm clothes and called our parents. It was only when we hung up the phone that we finally realized we had managed to survive the accident.
实战演练
Breath of life
As 17-year-old Torriell Norwood drove through St. Petersburg, Florida, last February with her friends to pay a visit to the great park, she shared her dream of becoming a doctor. She had recently taken some first-aid courses. The other girls shared stories of their experiences and adventures. But the laughter and chatter from the four teenage girls in the car quickly gave way to screams. As they passed a road junction (交叉路口), a car crashed into the side of their vehicle, sending their black car sailing into the yard of a house nearby. It only stopped when it crashed into a tree. All of the girls were in a panic.
As smoke rose from the car, a bystander (旁观者) shouted, “It’s about to blow up. Get out.” The impact had bent the driver’s door, meaning it wouldn’t open. The bystander seized the door handle of the car, using all his strength to pull it open, but failed. Shaken, butotherwise OK, Norwood crawled out through the window. She had a cut on the right side of her face. Her lovely face became very pale. Along with two of her friends, who’d also managed to free themselves, she ran for her life.
But halfway down the street, she realized that her best friend, Simmons, was not with them. Norwood ran back to the car and found Simmons lying in the back seat. “She isn’t moving,” Norwood shouted, with her heart beating hard. She threw open the back door and pulled her friend out, avoiding the broken glass as best she could. She dragged Simmons a few feet to safety and laid her on the ground. She checked her pulse. Nothing. She put her head against Simmons’ chest. No sign of life. That’s when she started CPR (心肺复苏术).
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答.
If the accident had happened a few weeks earlier, she might not have known what to do.______
_____________________________________________________________________________
After a while, the CPR worked and Simmons regained her consciousness.__________________
_____________________________________________________________________________

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