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读后续写——2024浙江首考
CONTENTS
目录
01 阅读分析
02 写作技巧
03 写作流程
故事框架整理
故事大纲
Background Rising Action + Climax Falling Action Resolution
人物 人设 问题：矛盾/冲突 如何解决 故事结局 文章结尾
原文回顾
Eva spent the first week of high school trying to keep her head above water. One of the major headaches for her was finding her way in the huge school building. It was a six-story building. On each floor, hallways stretched in four directions, leading to classrooms, laboratories, and teachers’ offices. Somewhere in the building, there was also a library, a cafeteria, and a gym.
开篇给出一个问题
原文回顾
Having a poor sense of direction, Eva found it impossible to get around in such a huge building. All the different hallways and rooms were too much to think about, let alone commit to memory. She decided that she would memorize where her classes were and then pretend that the rest of the place didn’t exist.
对问题进行补充
面对困境，主人公的自我解决方案
原文回顾
In her fast P.E. class, Eva was shocked when Coach Pitt announced that everyone had to run one mile around the track outside. She searched the faces of her classmates for signs of panic. There was nothing she feared more than having to run a whole mile. To Eva, “a mile” was used to describe long distances. It was ten miles from her home to her grandfather’s, and that always seemed like a long way, even in a car!
事件发展的拐点
体育课上遇到了一件非常痛苦恐惧的事情
原文回顾
When Coach Pitt blew his whistle (哨子), Eva figured she would be left in the dust. However, while some of her classmates edged ahead, others actually fell behind. “It’s just the beginning,” she thought. “I’ll come in last for sure.”
心态上的障碍
原文回顾
Soon Eva began to breathe hard, with her heart pounding and legs shaking. Feeling desperate, Eva started using a mind trick on herself. She stopped thinking about the word “mile.” Instead, she focused on reaching the shadow east on the track by an oak tree up ahead. Then she concentrated on jogging to the spot where the track curved (拐弯). After that, she tried to see if she could complete her first lap. One lap turned into two, then three, then four.
破釜沉舟、自我拯救
循序渐进，化整为零
故事框架整理
故事大纲
Background Rising Action + Climax Falling Action Resolution
人物 人设 问题：矛盾/冲突 如何解决 故事结局 文章结尾
人物
Eva
人设
学生
没有方向感
害怕跑步
矛盾/冲突
人与自我
路痴+学校建筑大，找不到路
害怕跑步，觉得1英里很远
如何解决
？？？
原文回顾
Para1: When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised.
Para2: Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building.
Eva的惊讶是什么？
下一段的方法是什么？
Eva的方法实践——个人行为
Eva的问题解决——结果是什么？
原文回顾
Para1: When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised.
Eva的惊讶是什么？
她完成了跑步
而且不是最后一名
方法一：动作的递进
原本要被拉在后面吃灰
完成啦
方法二：前后对比
除了意外，Eva还有没有其他的心理活动呢？
高兴、骄傲
原文回顾
Para1: When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised.
方法一：动作的递进
Not only … but also …
基础版：Eva not only completed the mile, but also didn’t come in last.
升级版：Not only did Eva complete the mile, but she also didn’t come in last.
原文回顾
Para1: When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised.
方法二：前后对比
Instead of doing sth…, sb did sth …
基础版：Instead of being left in the dust, Eva managed to complete the mile.
升级版：Instead of being left in the dust, Eva managed to complete the mile which once seemed impossible.
原文回顾
Para1: When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised.
动作之后的心理
骄傲和激动
Tired as she was, she had a great sense of pride.
原文回顾
Para1: When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised.
下一段的方法是什么？
化整为零
Eva具体怎么操作
总分层次，从概括到具体
影响、好处
通过这件事，Eva意识到……。具体怎么操作。这样操作有什么好处？
This unexpected event made Eva realize the power of breaking a complex task into smaller parts. The mile, once a mountain in her mind, had become a series of small mountains, which can be overcome one step at a time.
原文回顾
Para1: When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised.
下一段的方法是什么？
化整为零
Eva具体怎么操作
总分层次，从概括到具体
影响、好处
通过这件事，Eva意识到……。具体怎么操作。这样操作有什么好处？
This unexpected event made Eva realize the power of breaking a complex task into smaller parts. Instead of seeing the whole mile as a long distance, she managed to make it one step at a time.
原文回顾
Para1: When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised.
下一段的方法是什么？
化整为零
Eva具体怎么操作
总分层次，从概括到具体
影响、好处
This approach was effective in transforming what seemed impossible into something achievable. She overcame her own fear and discovered a new strategy for facing daily challenge. It was like a beam of sunlight piercing through the clouds of her anxiety, illuminating the path forward.
遇到挫折，领悟到方法后，对于方法好处的描写。
最后一句：克服自我、逢凶化吉之后的套话。
原文回顾
Para2: Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building.
Eva的方法实践——个人行为
Eva的问题解决——结果是什么？
原文回顾
Para2: Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building.
Eva的方法实践——个人行为
解决教学楼
前文是否已经有相同的解决方法？
有！那就可以借鉴
原文回顾
Soon Eva began to breathe hard, with her heart pounding and legs shaking. Feeling desperate, Eva started using a mind trick on herself. She stopped thinking about the word “mile.” Instead, she focused on reaching the shadow east on the track by an oak tree up ahead. Then she concentrated on jogging to the spot where the track curved (拐弯). After that, she tried to see if she could complete her first lap. One lap turned into two, then three, then four.
她停止思考…。相反的是，开始关注…。然后聚焦于…。在那之后…
原文回顾
Para2: Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building.
Eva的方法实践——个人行为
解决教学楼
前文是否已经有相同的解决方法？
有！那就可以借鉴
她停止思考…。相反的是，开始关注…。然后聚焦于…。在那之后…
原文回顾
Para2: Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building.
Eva的方法实践——个人行为
解决教学楼
The next day, she stopped thinking the whole school building. Instead, she focused on every single floor. Then, she started with the ground floor, identifying its unique features and gradually familiar with those particular places. One floor turned into two, then three, then four.
原文回顾
Para2: Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building.
不再迷路了
Eva的问题解决——结果是什么？
After several weeks, she no longer felt lost.
After several weeks, she no longer felt panic.
After several weeks, she no longer felt her head under water.
写完这个结果，继续升华嘛？
如是，那“化整为零”算什么？
原文回顾
Para2: Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building.
不再迷路了
Eva的问题解决——结果是什么？
After several weeks, she no longer felt panic.
第二层面的结果，也可以做为文章的结尾。
意外之喜
这个方法让她有什么意外的收获呢？
原文回顾
Para2: Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building.
不再迷路了
Eva的问题解决——结果是什么？
After several weeks, she no longer felt panic.
第二层面的结果，也可以做为文章的结尾。
This new method even make her find some unexpected treasures in the school building. For example, now, Eva have already been able to enjoy a cup of coffee after a busy weekday.
谢谢～～

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