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读后续写——2024深圳一模
CONTENTS
目录
01 阅读分析
02 写作技巧
03 写作流程
PART ONE
阅读分析
故事框架整理
故事大纲
Background Rising Action + Climax Falling Action Resolution
人物 人设 问题：矛盾/冲突 如何解决 故事结局 文章结尾
圈画过程：
1、关键信息
2、态度情感
3、关键情节
原文回顾
In our weekly staff meeting, our editor Ashley was not pleased with the quality of our reporting. “Our readership is way down. We need better stories for this Thursday’s school newspaper. Does anybody have any ideas ” she said.
原文回顾
I handed her my article about our basketball team beating Deerfield High School the previous night by one point. “Sports stories are fun,” she said, “but not good enough for the front page. We need something to really get people’s attention.”
原文回顾
After our meeting, we left the newsroom together and heard someone screaming, “Perry is missing!” Perry was a big red parrot and had been our school mascot (吉祥物) for ten years. He played an important role in students' lives, both in and out of class. He had also been a constant presence at school events, inspiring a sense of unity among students.
原文回顾
Everyone gathered around Perry's empty cage, heartbroken. Suddenly, a student from the crowd came over and showed me a photo. “You’re a reporter for the school paper, right I happened to take this yesterday,” he said. In the photo was a Deerfield High School basketball player with something large hidden under his shirt around the size of a parrot.
“He must have stolen Perry to get back at us for winning the game!” Ashley cried. We hurried back to the newsroom, agreeing to run the photo on the front page with the headline“Deerfield Stole Perry.” “This is just the story we need. Everyone will read it,” Ashley said confidently.
原文回顾
After she left, I took a closer look at the photo. The clock in the background read 4:15 pm, but our game against Deerfield hadn't started until 4:30 pm. Why would the boy have taken Perry before we even played An uneasy feeling came over me that we might have falsely accused someone.
原文回顾
I went to Perry's usual caretaker to ask if he knew Perry was missing. “He's not missing.He's retired. He’s ready for some quieter days,” he said. Learning the truth, I immediately told Ashley and suggested writing a story to say goodbye to Perry.
原文回顾
首要矛盾呈现：杂志阅读数下降，主编不满意，要求好故事
我的运动故事被否，主编要求封面故事要足够吸引人的注意
学校重要的吉祥物失踪
在大家难过的同时，一个学生给出了一张照片
A根据照片认为是运动员偷走了Perry，并决定写这个故事
我发现照片有问题
Perry的饲养员说Perry只是退休了，了解到真相，我建议换一个故事。
PART TWO
写作流程讲解
情节设计
【文末：】Learning the truth, I immediately told Ashley and suggested writing a story to say goodbye to Perry.
【Para1: 】To my surprise, Ashley insisted on reporting the “Deerfield Stole Perry” story..
【Para2:】On Thursday, the paper came out with the headline “Bye-Bye, Perry” on the front page.
insisted on reporting
Ashley’s explanation
the truth
“Bye-Bye, Perry”
my response
create the new story
the response of the article
the lesson we learnt from it
情节设计
P1: To my surprise, Ashley insisted on reporting the “Deerfield Stole Perry” story.
Ashley理由
P2: On Thursday, the paper came out with the headline “Bye-Bye, Perry” on the front page.
我的反应—动作、心理、对话
我的反应—动作、心理、对话
Ashley被说服
我开始创作故事
举个例子说一下
发布后的反响
大众反应
发布后的反响
Ashley 的反应
我的想法
文章的结尾——领悟
完成主干句子书写
先主干，后补充
结合原文
升级句式
1. Ashley 坚持报道 “Deerfield Stole Perry” story的理由
去文章中找支持Ashley观点的句子
关注度高
吸引阅读兴趣
提高阅读量
an eye-catching story
get people’s attention / attract readers’ interest
enhance our readership
完成主干句子书写
先主干，后补充
结合原文
升级句式
1. Ashley 坚持报道 “Deerfield Stole Perry” story的理由
去文章中找支持Ashley观点的句子
She argued that it was just an eye-catching story, which can attract readers’ interest and enhance our readership. It was just what we want. [24]
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2&3. 我的反应：动作、心理、对话
结合原文
升级句式
去文章中找我反驳Ashley的合理举证
这是一个谎言
诬告一个无辜的人
有潜在的危害
a lie
falsely accuse someone innocent
cause potential harm
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结合原文
升级句式
“Actually, it was a lie!” I defensed that if we wrote this article we might have falsely accused someone innocent. It would cause the potential harm to our readership. [29]
2&3. 我的反应：动作、心理、对话
去文章中找我反驳Ashley的合理举证
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2&3. 我的反应：动作、心理、对话
结合原文
升级句式
除了对话，想要反对Ashley并说服她更改，我还会有什么合理行为？
观察Ashley的神态变化
态度坚定
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4. Ashley的反应——被说服。
结合原文
升级句式
思考：被说服的人会有什么样的行为动作
犹豫、沉默
低头
表同意
hesitate、 lose in thought
lower one’s head
nod 、agree
完成主干句子书写
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结合原文
升级句式
“Actually, it was a lie!”
I defensed that if we wrote this article we might have falsely accused someone innocent.
It would cause the potential harm to our readership.
2&3&4. 我的反应：动作、心理、对话 【配合】Ashley在听我说话时的反应
I took a deep breathe and
Noticing her hesitant, I further explained that
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升级句式
4. Ashley的反应——被说服。
被说服的方式
主动认识到错误，被说服
劝说的一方态度强硬，无奈让步
Ashley lowered her head, and whispered, “As a reporter, truth is everything.” Then she nodded with a smile, agreeing my suggestion.
After some discussion, Ashley finally gave in, “OK. Let’s try with real stories.”
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结合原文
升级句式
5. 我开始创作故事。
写一个“告别”的故事，需要准备什么，会写什么？
During the following days, I was busying collecting all the necessary information to write an article about Perry and the precious memories that we shared over the years.[28]
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6. 文章发表后大众有什么反响？
结合原文
升级句式
提示一：我知道“激动”，我也知道“受欢迎”，但是能不能来点具体的表现呢？
提示二：我们的报纸一开始面临的问题是什么？
Much to our amazement, this issue of the newspaper turned out to be a big hit and sparked heated discussions. [20]
Although many were disappointed with Perry’s sudden retirement, they were comforted by the fact that he was in good care.[20]
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8. 看到这样的反响，Ashley 有什么反应？
结合原文
升级句式
我们两个之间互动的本质什么？
纠偏！把Ashley 从功利的角度拉回正途
感谢我的提醒
+
肯定我的做法
“Thanks to your insistence,”
“True stories touch people’s hearts.”
Ashley patted me on the back with a look of approval
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9. 经此一事，我的感受。
结合原文
升级句式
注意，这个地方还没有到领悟。
整件事情做下来，我会有什么样的心情呢？
Uncontrollably, enormous relief and achievement surrounded me.
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10. 我的领悟。
I realized we should insist the truth.
结合原文
升级句式
啊，话就在嘴边，但是就是写不出来，好难受 。
I realized truth is everything.
I realized to be honest is important.
No!
No!
No!
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10. 我的领悟。
结合原文
升级句式
Sth served as a reminder that + 感悟
“Bye-bye, Perry” served as a reminder that only honesty and sincerity could tell a good story.
谢谢～～

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