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读后续写：猎枪与相机
His father said, “All set, boy ” and Jeremy nodded, picking up his gun with awkward gloved hands. His father pushed open the door and they went out into the freezing dawn together. Ordinarily, Jeremy would take out his camera to record the scenery, but not this morning. This was the morning, particularly sacred, when 14-year-old Jeremy would go duck hunting for the first time.
However, he hated it, and had hated the whole idea since his father bought him a gun. But he was determined to go through with it. He loved his father, and wanted his approval more than anything in the world.
They came to a narrow and hidden place facing the bay. Jeremy sat down nervously and waited. To reduce fear, he took a picture of his father against the clean water. Then he put the camera hurriedly on the grass and picked up his gun.
Jeremy got his gun ready. “I’ll let you shoot first,” his father said, loading his own gun. “You know, I’ve been waiting for a long time for this day. Just the two of us...” He broke off, bending forward, eyes narrowed. “There’s a small flight heading this way now. Keep your head down. I’ll give you the word.”
The sun came out. Jeremy could see everything clearly: his father’s face, tense and eager; the white frost on the gun. His heart was beating wildly. He prayed, “Don’t let them come, please!”
But they kept coming. “Four black,” his father said. “One mallard（绿头鸭）.” High above, Jeremy heard the pulsing whistle of wings as the flight began to circle. The mallard was leading, his feet dropping down, reaching for the silver-colored water. Closer, closer... “Get set,” his father whispered.
“Now!” cried Jeremy’s father. “Take them!”
Jeremy felt his body obey. He stood up, holding the gun. In the same instant, the wild ducks saw the gunners and flew. “Shoot!” said something sharply in Jeremy’s brain. But up went the mallard higher still, until suddenly he caught the full force of the wind and flew away, out of range.
P1:His father asked in a controlled voice, “Why didn’t you shoot ”
P2:To Jeremy’s surprise, his father was handing the camera to him.
情节设计：
范文和笔记：
P1: His father asked in a controlled voice, “why didn’t you shoot ”
Staring at his father’s disappointed and cross expression, Jeremy murmured, “Because they were so alive”, with his head down. He sat on the grass and sobbed, his face buried in his hands and tears rolling along his fingers. All the hope of pleasing his father burst like a bubble. Jeremy 盯着父亲失望而生气的表情，低着头喃喃地说：“因为它们是鲜活的生命呀。”他坐在草地上，抽泣，脸埋在双手里，眼泪顺着手指滚落。所有让父亲高兴的希望像肥皂泡一样破了。
For a long moment everything was bathed in silence. Then Jeremy felt his father kneel down beside him and pat him on the shoulder gently, which undoubtedly loaded Jeremy with great courage to voice his inner feeling, “Dad, can you forgive me for quitting hunting ” 有很长一段时间，一切都沐浴在寂静之中。然后Jeremy 感到他的父亲跪在他身边，轻轻地拍着他的肩膀，这无疑让Jeremy 充满了极大的勇气来表达他内心的感受：“爸爸，我放弃打猎，你能原谅我吗？”
Suddenly, his father rose up, shouting, “Get ready!” Feeling cold metal touching his hand, Jeremy looked up, a sense of concern surging through his mind. 突然，他父亲站起来，喊道：“准备好！”Jeremy 感到冰冷的金属碰到了他的手，他抬起头来，心头涌起了一阵忧虑。
笔记：现在分词，with结构；无灵主语句；which非限制性定从；设计与第二段开头衔接的情节
P2: To Jeremy’s surprise, his father was handing the camera to him.
He took over the camera unbelievably. Just at that moment, a beautiful wild duck flew closer, its white breast shining in the sunshine. 他难以置信地接过了相机。正在这时一只美丽的野鸭飞近了，它白色的胸脯在阳光下闪闪发光。
Jeremy held up his camera immediately, “I got him”. A broad smile lit up his face and his father gave him a thumb-up. “It is okay. Just do whatever you love.” Jeremy立刻举起相机，“我拍到它了。”他的脸上露出了灿烂的笑容，父亲朝他竖起大拇指。“没关系。你喜欢做什么就做什么。”
That special morning witnessed Jeremy and his father going home with not a duck but a new understanding of each other and the love for nature.在那个特别的早晨，Jeremy和他的父亲回家时，带回的不是鸭子，而是对彼此一次新的理解和对大自然的爱。
笔记：副词表达感彩和动作节奏；无灵主语句“某时/某地witness某事件”；结尾点题
中文自测：
P1: His father asked in a controlled voice, “why didn’t you shoot ”
Jeremy 盯着父亲失望而生气的表情，低着头喃喃地说：“因为它们是鲜活的生命呀。”他坐在草地上，抽泣，脸埋在双手里，眼泪顺着手指滚落。所有让父亲高兴的希望像肥皂泡一样破了。
有很长一段时间，一切都沐浴在寂静之中。然后Jeremy 感到他的父亲跪在他身边，轻轻地拍着他的肩膀，这无疑让Jeremy 充满了极大的勇气来表达他内心的感受：“爸爸，我放弃打猎，你能原谅我吗？”
突然，他父亲站起来，喊道：“准备好！”Jeremy 感到冰冷的金属碰到了他的手，他抬起头来，心头涌起了一阵忧虑。
P2: To Jeremy’s surprise, his father was handing the camera to him.
他难以置信地接过了相机。正在这时一只美丽的野鸭飞近了，它白色的胸脯在阳光下闪闪发光。
Jeremy立刻举起相机，“我拍到它了。”他的脸上露出了灿烂的笑容，父亲朝他竖起大拇指。“没关系。你喜欢做什么就做什么。”
在那个特别的早晨，Jeremy和他的父亲回家时，带回的不是鸭子，而是对彼此一次新的理解和对大自然的爱。
语料默写：
盯着父亲失望而生气的表情__________________________________________
低着头喃喃地说_________________________________________
抽泣，脸埋在双手里，眼泪顺着手指滚落___________________________________
所有...的希望像肥皂泡一样破了_________________________________________
一切都沐浴在寂静之中_________________________________________
跪下________________________________________
轻轻地拍着他的肩膀_________________________________________
让某人充满了极大的勇气来表达他内心的感受_____________________________
原谅某人做了某事_________________________________________
站起来_________________________________________
心头涌起了一阵忧虑_________________________________________
接过某物_________________________________________
举起某物_________________________________________
他的脸上露出了灿烂的笑容______________________________________
朝某人竖起大拇指_________________________________________
某个时刻见证某事_________________________________________
对彼此一次新的理解_________________________________________
对大自然的爱_________________________________________

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