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助人为乐姐妹花
①原文逐句疏通→②审题思考→③微情节设计→④连词成篇
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原文逐句疏通
"Go back, Mom! Go back!" shouted my six-year-old daughter, June. I quickly turned around to cast my doubtful eyes on the back seat, worried I had forgotten her younger sister. I was relieved to see the girls safe and sit in their car seats, but June's expression was one of pure anxiety. "Mom, we have to go back," she insisted. "Someone needs our help."
Para1
As I looked back from the driver's seat, I spotted a young man in rags playing his guitar. His skinny, poor-looking dog rested next to his feet near an old, worn cardboard sign that read, "Homeless, please help."
Para2
We'd come across homeless people before and had talked about their needs and struggles. I should seize the chance to set a good example for my daughter to give a helping hand. So I searched for some cash, only to find I had nothing but credit cards. "I'm sorry, sweetheart, but I don't have any cash,"I said. " I have some, mom!"June replied. She opened her little pink purse and pulled out a five-dollar bill.
Para3
"Oh, good. I'll pay you back when we get home," I responded with a sigh of relief. "No, Mom," she insisted, "I want to help him. I don't want you to pay me back. I want to give him my money."
Para3
As we drove down the crowded rows of the parking lot, I reassured her that we would get to him. When we got there, I called out, "Excuse me, sir!" He cautiously walked toward our car and answered, "Yes, ma'am " "Here you go, sir." June stretched out her entire body to hand him her five-dollar bill through window and explained, " I want you to have this." He smiled and hesitatingly asked, "This was your money " "Yes! I want you to have it," she proudly answered. "Thank you," he said, touched by her thoughtfulness.
Para4
We exchanged a smile, and as we drove away, my younger daughter Scarlet began to cry. I hadn't noticed that she had emptied her purse and was holding two quarters in her tiny hands.
Para5
Paragraph1: "Mom, I wanted to help, too," she sobbed.
Paragraph2: Now with tears in his eyes, he said in disbelief, “You want to help me ”
续写2段
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审题思考
（1）大小女儿钱数对比？→第一段段首句后“我”的反应？ （2）第二段段首句，男子为何热泪盈眶？ （3）第二段段首句，男子为何in disbelief？ （4）施与受，男子如何回报？
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微情节设计
Para1:
"Mom, I wanted to help, too," she sobbed.
Para2:
Now with tears in his eyes, he said in disbelief, “You want to help me ”
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连词成篇
"Mom, I wanted to help, too," she sobbed. (1) 看着这两枚二十五美分的硬币，我犹豫着要不要回去，因为他们买不到任何商品。____________________ the two quarters, I was __________ to go back, ____________________ their __________ to buy any __________.
(2) 然而，她泪流满面的脸融化了我的心，还有那闪闪发光的眼睛，里面充满了帮助一个需要帮助的人的坚定决心。__________, her ____________________ face __________ my heart, ____________________ the __________ eyes, which ____________________ ____________________ to help a guy in need.
(3) 我是如此的骄傲和感动，以至于我改变了方向，再次向停车场驶去。____________________________________________________________ I ______________________________, ____________________ the parking lot once again.
(4) 斯佳丽蹦蹦跳跳到那个年轻人面前，伸出手里攥着硬币的手，“先生！我也想帮助你。”____________________ the young man, Scarlet ______________________________ __________ coins, “Sir! I want to help you just like my sister.”
Now with tears in his eyes, he said in disbelief, "You want to help me " (1) 斯佳丽肯定地点了点头。Scarlet __________ with ____________________.
(2) 男人双手微微颤抖，泪水夺眶而出，接过硬币说：“我对你们的善举感激不尽。”With his hands ____________________ and tears ____________________, the man __________ the coins, “I _____________________________________ your ____________________.”
(3) 他那只瘦瘦的、看起来很可怜的狗欢快地摇着尾巴，好像也在向我们表示感谢。His __________, __________ dog __________ its tail __________, as if ____________________ to us __________.
(4) 那个男人用吉他弹了一首令人难忘的歌曲作为回报，我可爱的女孩们跟着音乐跳舞。The man played a __________ song __________ the guitar ____________________, with my __________ girls dancing ____________________.
(5) 沐浴在阳光下，我感到相当宽慰，因为我发现善良之花已经在孩子们的心中开放了。__________ in the sunshine, I was rather __________ to __________ that _________________________________.读后续写：助人为乐姐妹花（教师版）
一、题目
①"Go back, Mom! Go back!" shouted my six-year-old daughter, June. I quickly turned around to cast my doubtful eyes on the back seat, worried I had forgotten her younger sister. I was relieved to see the girls safe and sit in their car seats, but June's expression was one of pure anxiety. "Mom, we have to go back," she insisted. "Someone needs our help."
②As I looked back from the driver's seat, I spotted a young man in rags playing his guitar. His skinny, poor-looking dog rested next to his feet near an old, worn cardboard sign that read, "Homeless, please help."
③We'd come across homeless people before and had talked about their needs and struggles. I should seize the chance to set a good example for my daughter to give a helping hand. So I searched for some cash, only to find I had nothing but credit cards. "I'm sorry, sweetheart, but I don't have any cash,"I said. " I have some, mom!"June replied. She opened her little pink purse and pulled out a five-dollar bill. "Oh, good. I'll pay you back when we get home," I responded with a sigh of relief. "No, Mom," she insisted, "I want to help him. I don't want you to pay me back. I want to give him my money."
④As we drove down the crowded rows of the parking lot, I reassured her that we would get to him. When we got there, I called out, "Excuse me, sir!" He cautiously walked toward our car and answered, "Yes, ma'am " "Here you go, sir." June stretched out her entire body to hand him her five-dollar bill through window and explained, " I want you to have this." He smiled and hesitatingly asked, "This was your money " "Yes! I want you to have it," she proudly answered. "Thank you," he said, touched by her thoughtfulness.
⑤We exchanged a smile, and as we drove away, my younger daughter Scarlet began to cry. I hadn't noticed that she had emptied her purse and was holding two quarters in her tiny hands.
Paragraph1: "Mom, I wanted to help, too," she sobbed.
Paragraph2: Now with tears in his eyes, he said in disbelief, "You want to help me "
cast my doubtful eyes on sb/sth 向……投下怀疑的目光 11. the crowded rows of the parking lot 停车场里拥挤的一排排车
relieved adj.宽慰的，不再忧虑的 12. reassure sb 安抚；使……安心
insist v.坚决要求；坚持 13. get to sb 到达他那里
a young man in rags 一个衣衫褴褛的年轻人 14. cautiously adj.小心翼翼地，谨慎地
an old, worn cardboard sign that read, "Homeless, please help." 一块破旧的纸板牌子，上面写着：“无家可归，请帮帮我。” 15. stretched out her entire body through window 她把整个身体伸过窗户
come across 偶然遇见，碰上 16. hand him her five-dollar bill 把她的五美元钞票递给他
seize the chance to do sth 抓住机会做某事 17. hesitatingly 踌躇地
set a good example for sb 为某人树立好榜样 18. thoughtfulness 体贴
give a helping hand 施以援手 19. empty her purse 掏空钱包
I responded with a sigh of relief 我松了一口气。 20. hold two quarters 拿着两枚25分硬币
二、审题思考
（1）大小女儿钱数对比？→第一段段首句后“我”的反应？
大女儿June：5美元纸币（five-dollor bill）小女儿：2枚25美分的硬币
小女儿的钱太少了，所以我会犹豫是否要调头回去。
（2）第二段段首句，男子为何热泪盈眶？
因为前面一定有让他热泪盈眶的举动，才会紧接着问出“你想帮我？”
所以举动可以是动作，可以是语言
（3）第二段段首句，男子为何in disbelief？
因为这么小的孩子竟然会这么有爱心，愿意去帮助一个无家可归的人。
【隐藏问题：那为啥小孩会这样做呢？因为前文中有说，我一直给他们做示范。所以我的身体力行，我的教育是很成功的。】
（4）施与受，男子如何回报？
大部分都只写了语言和哭，但是最好的肯定是弹吉他给小女孩听。写上狗的反应就更棒了。
结尾：可以动作定格，也可以落在善良开花结果上。
三、微情节设计
Paragraph1: "Mom, I wanted to help, too," she sobbed. 【按时间顺序写】
①我的反应：犹豫，因为钱太少②决定回头：为啥？因为苦苦哀求/我被感动③小女儿给钱：在车上给/下车给
Paragraph2: Now with tears in his eyes, he said in disbelief, "You want to help me "【按角色写】
①小女儿的反应②男人的反应③狗的反应④弹琴跳舞⑤结尾
四、教师下水文短语
v.啜泣，抽噎 sob
看着…… gaze at （看一眼 catch a glimpse of，瞥见glimpse）
犹豫做某事 be hesitant to do sth
因为 on account of
某人不能做某事 one’s inability to do sth
商品 goods
然而however nevertheless
泪流满面的 tear-stained
v.融化 melt
和…… as well as, together with
亮闪闪的眼睛 sparkling eyes
（眼睛）充满…（感情） brim with sth
做某事的坚定决心 firm determination to do sth
调转车头 turned his car round
改变（颠倒，逆转）方向 reverse the direction
向……前进 head for + 地点
走到某人面前→蹦蹦跳跳到某人面前 go up to sb → scamper up to sb
伸出手 reach out one’s hand
紧握硬币 clutch coins
用……回应 respond with sth
肯定的点头 an affirmative nod
微微颤抖 shiver slightly
泪水夺眶而出 tears brimmed over
接过某物 take sth
对……感激 be appreciative of sth
善举 act of kindness
摇尾巴 wag the tail
欢快地 merrily
向某人表示感谢 extend gratitude to sb
也 as well
令人难忘的 memorable
作为回报 in return
可爱的，讨人喜欢的 adorable
跟着音乐跳舞 dance to the tunes
沐浴在阳光下 be bathed in the sunshine
感到宽慰的 relieved
v.绽放 blossom
五、连词成篇
"Mom, I wanted to help, too," she sobbed.
(1) 看着这两枚二十五美分的硬币，我犹豫着要不要回去，因为他们买不到任何商品。
Gazing at the two quarters, I was hesitant to go back, on account of their inability to buy any goods.
(2) 然而，她泪流满面的脸融化了我的心，还有那闪闪发光的眼睛，里面充满了帮助一个需要帮助的人的坚定决心。
Nevertheless, her tear-stained face melted my heart, as well as the sparkling eyes, which brimmed with firm determination to help a guy in need.
(3) 我是如此的骄傲和感动，以至于我改变了方向，再次向停车场驶去。
So proud and touched was I that I reversed my direction, heading for the parking lot once again.
(4) 斯佳丽蹦蹦跳跳到那个年轻人面前，伸出手里攥着硬币的手，“先生！我也想帮助你。”
Scampering up to the young man, Scarlet reached out her hand clutching coins, “Sir! I want to help you just like my sister.”
Now with tears in his eyes, he said in disbelief, "You want to help me "
(1) 斯佳丽肯定地点了点头。
Scarlet responded with an affirmative nod.
(2) 男人双手微微颤抖，泪水夺眶而出，接过硬币说：“我对你们的善举感激不尽。”
With his hands shivering slightly and tears brimming over, the man took the coins, “I couldn’t be more appreciative of your acts of kindness.”
(3) 他那只瘦瘦的、看起来很可怜的狗欢快地摇着尾巴，好像也在向我们表示感谢。
His skinny, poor-looking dog wagged its tail merrily, as if extending gratitude to us as well.
(4) 那个男人用吉他弹了一首令人难忘的歌曲作为回报，我可爱的女孩们跟着音乐跳舞。
The man played a memorable song on the guitar in return, with my adorable girls dancing to the tunes.
(5) 沐浴在阳光下，我感到相当宽慰，因为我发现善良之花已经在孩子们的心中开放了。
Bathed in the sunshine, I was rather relived to perceive that the flower of kindness had blossomed in my kids’ hearts.
六、最终自测
"Mom, I wanted to help, too," she sobbed. 看着这两枚二十五美分的硬币，我犹豫着要不要回去，因为他们买不到任何商品。然而，她泪流满面的脸融化了我的心，还有那闪闪发光的眼睛，里面充满了帮助一个需要帮助的人的坚定决心。我是如此的骄傲和感动，以至于我改变了方向，再次向停车场驶去。斯佳丽蹦蹦跳跳到那个年轻人面前，伸出手里攥着硬币的手，“先生！我也想帮助你。”
Now with tears in his eyes, he said in disbelief, "You want to help me " 斯佳丽肯定地点了点头。男人双手微微颤抖，泪水夺眶而出，接过硬币说：“我对你们的善举感激不尽。”他那只瘦瘦的、看起来很可怜的狗欢快地摇着尾巴，好像也在向我们表示感谢。那个男人用吉他弹了一首令人难忘的歌曲作为回报，我可爱的女孩们跟着音乐跳舞。沐浴在阳光下，我感到相当宽慰，因为我发现善良之花已经在孩子们的心中开放了。
教师范文：
"Mom, I wanted to help, too," she sobbed. Gazing at the two quarters, I was hesitant to go back, on account of their inability to buy any goods. Nevertheless, her tear-stained face melted my heart, as well as the sparkling eyes, which brimmed with firm determination to help a guy in need. So proud and touched was I that I reversed my direction, heading for the parking lot once again. Scamperint up to the young man, Scarlet reached out her hand clutching coins, “Excuse me, sir! I want to help you as well.”
Now with tears in his eyes, he said in disbelief, "You want to help me " Scarlet responded with an affirmative nod. With his hands shivering slightly and tears brimming over, the man took the coins, “I couldn’t be more appreciative of your acts of kindness.” His skinny, poor-looking dog wagged its tail merrily, as if extending gratitude to us as well. The man played a memorable song on the guitar in return, with my lively girls dancing to the tunes. Bathed in the sunshine, I was rather relived to perceive that the flower of kindness had blossomed in my kids’ hearts.
官方范文：
Paragraph 1:
“Mom, I wanted to help, too,” she sobbed. She felt like she had missed out. I didn’t know how to let her understand that two quarters was too little. But before I could make up a suitable explanation, she announced, “Mom, he needs help!” I sighed and turned around. Seeing us again, the gentleman looked confused. I awkwardly explained that my other daughter wanted to give him her money just as her elder sister had just done. He peered into the van window to see my pig-tailed four-year-old grinning from ear to ear. “I want to help you!” she declared proudly.
Paragraph 2:
Now with tears in his eyes, he said in disbelief,“You want to help me ” She nodded firmly and happily. Then June proudly handed him Scarlett’s coins. He tightly clutched them in his dirt-stained hand and showered us with sincere blessings. Two quarters wasn’t much, even to the man, but what mattered to him and us was the loving gesture my girls made. On our way back home, June put her hand on her heart, closed her eyes, and told her little sister, “It feels so good to help someone, doesn’t it, baby sister ” Scarlett agreed. With big smiles, they sank back into their seats.
续写练习：助人为乐姐妹花（学生版）
一、题目
①"Go back, Mom! Go back!" shouted my six-year-old daughter, June. I quickly turned around to cast my doubtful eyes on the back seat, worried I had forgotten her younger sister. I was relieved to see the girls safe and sit in their car seats, but June's expression was one of pure anxiety. "Mom, we have to go back," she insisted. "Someone needs our help."
②As I looked back from the driver's seat, I spotted a young man in rags playing his guitar. His skinny, poor-looking dog rested next to his feet near an old, worn cardboard sign that read, "Homeless, please help."
③We'd come across homeless people before and had talked about their needs and struggles. I should seize the chance to set a good example for my daughter to give a helping hand. So I searched for some cash, only to find I had nothing but credit cards. "I'm sorry, sweetheart, but I don't have any cash,"I said. " I have some, mom!"June replied. She opened her little pink purse and pulled out a five-dollar bill. "Oh, good. I'll pay you back when we get home," I responded with a sigh of relief. "No, Mom," she insisted, "I want to help him. I don't want you to pay me back. I want to give him my money."
④As we drove down the crowded rows of the parking lot, I reassured her that we would get to him. When we got there, I called out, "Excuse me, sir!" He cautiously walked toward our car and answered, "Yes, ma'am " "Here you go, sir." June stretched out her entire body to hand him her five-dollar bill through window and explained, " I want you to have this." He smiled and hesitatingly asked, "This was your money " "Yes! I want you to have it," she proudly answered. "Thank you," he said, touched by her thoughtfulness.
⑤We exchanged a smile, and as we drove away, my younger daughter Scarlet began to cry. I hadn't noticed that she had emptied her purse and was holding two quarters in her tiny hands.
Paragraph1: "Mom, I wanted to help, too," she sobbed.
Paragraph2: Now with tears in his eyes, he said in disbelief, "You want to help me "
cast my doubtful eyes on sb/sth 向……投下怀疑的目光 11. the crowded rows of the parking lot 停车场里拥挤的一排排车
relieved adj.宽慰的，不再忧虑的 12. reassure sb 安抚；使……安心
insist v.坚决要求；坚持 13. get to sb 到达他那里
a young man in rags 一个衣衫褴褛的年轻人 14. cautiously adj.小心翼翼地，谨慎地
an old, worn cardboard sign that read, "Homeless, please help." 一块破旧的纸板牌子，上面写着：“无家可归，请帮帮我。” 15. stretched out her entire body through window 她把整个身体伸过窗户
come across 偶然遇见，碰上 16. hand him her five-dollar bill 把她的五美元钞票递给他
seize the chance to do sth 抓住机会做某事 17. hesitatingly 踌躇地
set a good example for sb 为某人树立好榜样 18. thoughtfulness 体贴
give a helping hand 施以援手 19. empty her purse 掏空钱包
I responded with a sigh of relief 我松了一口气。 20. hold two quarters 拿着两枚25分硬币
二、审题思考
（1）大小女儿钱数对比？→第一段段首句后“我”的反应？
（2）第二段段首句，男子为何热泪盈眶？
（3）第二段段首句，男子为何in disbelief？
（4）施与受，男子如何回报？
三、微情节设计
Paragraph1: "Mom, I wanted to help, too," she sobbed.
Paragraph2: Now with tears in his eyes, he said in disbelief, "You want to help me "
四、教师下水文短语
v.啜泣，抽噎
看着……
犹豫做某事
因为
某人不能做某事
商品
然而however
泪流满面的
v.融化
和……
亮闪闪的眼睛
（眼睛）充满…（感情）
做某事的坚定决心
调转车头
改变（颠倒，逆转）方向
向……前进
走到某人面前→蹦蹦跳跳到某人面前
伸出手
紧握硬币
用……回应
肯定的点头
微微颤抖
泪水夺眶而出
接过某物
对……感激
善举
摇尾巴
欢快地
向某人表示感谢
也
令人难忘的
作为回报
可爱的，讨人喜欢的
跟着音乐跳舞
沐浴在阳光下
感到宽慰的
v.绽放
五、连词成篇
"Mom, I wanted to help, too," she sobbed.
(1) 看着这两枚二十五美分的硬币，我犹豫着要不要回去，因为他们买不到任何商品。
____________________ the two quarters, I was __________ to go back, ____________________ their __________ to buy any __________.
(2) 然而，她泪流满面的脸融化了我的心，还有那闪闪发光的眼睛，里面充满了帮助一个需要帮助的人的坚定决心。
__________, her ____________________ face __________ my heart, ____________________ the __________ eyes, which ____________________ ____________________ to help a guy in need.
(3) 我是如此的骄傲和感动，以至于我改变了方向，再次向停车场驶去。
____________________________________________________________ I ______________________________, ____________________ the parking lot once again.
(4) 斯佳丽蹦蹦跳跳到那个年轻人面前，伸出手里攥着硬币的手，“先生！我也想帮助你。”
____________________ the young man, Scarlet ______________________________ __________ coins, “Sir! I want to help you just like my sister.”
Now with tears in his eyes, he said in disbelief, "You want to help me "
(1) 斯佳丽肯定地点了点头。
Scarlet __________ with ____________________.
(2) 男人双手微微颤抖，泪水夺眶而出，接过硬币说：“我对你们的善举感激不尽。”
With his hands ____________________ and tears ____________________, the man __________ the coins, “I ________________________________________ your ____________________.”
(3) 他那只瘦瘦的、看起来很可怜的狗欢快地摇着尾巴，好像也在向我们表示感谢。
His __________, __________ dog __________ its tail __________, as if ____________________ to us __________.
(4) 那个男人用吉他弹了一首令人难忘的歌曲作为回报，我可爱的女孩们跟着音乐跳舞。
The man played a __________ song __________ the guitar ____________________, with my __________ girls dancing ____________________.
(5) 沐浴在阳光下，我感到相当宽慰，因为我发现善良之花已经在孩子们的心中开放了。
__________ in the sunshine, I was rather __________ to __________ that _________________________________ _.
六、最终自测
"Mom, I wanted to help, too," she sobbed. 看着这两枚二十五美分的硬币，我犹豫着要不要回去，因为他们买不到任何商品。然而，她泪流满面的脸融化了我的心，还有那闪闪发光的眼睛，里面充满了帮助一个需要帮助的人的坚定决心。我是如此的骄傲和感动，以至于我改变了方向，再次向停车场驶去。斯佳丽蹦蹦跳跳到那个年轻人面前，伸出手里攥着硬币的手，“先生！我也想帮助你。”
Now with tears in his eyes, he said in disbelief, "You want to help me " 斯佳丽肯定地点了点头。男人双手微微颤抖，泪水夺眶而出，接过硬币说：“我对你们的善举感激不尽。”他那只瘦瘦的、看起来很可怜的狗欢快地摇着尾巴，好像也在向我们表示感谢。那个男人用吉他弹了一首令人难忘的歌曲作为回报，我可爱的女孩们跟着音乐跳舞。沐浴在阳光下，我感到相当宽慰，因为我发现善良之花已经在孩子们的心中开放了。

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