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读后续写：奔跑吧David！
题目：
It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route(路线)through thick evergreen forest.
I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent（问题）today. I walked over and asked him why he wasn’t with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run.
What was wrong He had worked so hard for this event!
I quickly searched the crowd for the school’s coach and asked him what had happened. “I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him,” he explained uncomfortably. “I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide.”
I bit back my frustration(懊恼). I knew the coach meant well（好意）—he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.
David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team. It just took him longer—that’s all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination.
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me.
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
【文本分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者是一名特殊教育教师，在大型越野赛跑那天，发现患有大脑疾病的大卫独自站在一旁。作者问其原因，他说准备放弃比赛。从教练口中得知，因为担心同学们会嘲笑大卫，所以教练想让大卫自己去决定是否参加赛跑。作者让大卫追寻自己的内心，不理会别人的看法。大卫最终参赛，尽管遇到困难，他战胜了自己，这已经无关名次，而是他的勇敢和坚定让这一切成为可能。
【续写内容】
①由第一段首句内容“我们挨着坐着，但大卫不愿看我一眼。”可知，第一段可描写作者鼓励大卫继续完成比赛，大卫经过强烈的心理斗争，最终决定参加比赛。
②由第二段首句内容“我看着大卫和其他选手一起走到起跑线上。”可知，第二段可描写大卫开始参赛，虽然中途遇到困难，但是在我和大家的鼓励下，仍然坚持到最后，完成比赛。
情节设计：
范文：
第一段We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me.
David心情+动作：难过焦虑+垂头掩面
Overwhelmed(=Seized,Consumed) by a surge of frustration and anxiety//With a surge of ...written on his face, David dropped (=bent/ lowered/ bowed/ ducked) his head and avoided my gaze//he cast his eyes down and stared at his shoes, covering his face with his hands//with his face buried in his hands//burying his hands in his face.【情绪+动作；动作链；过去分词；现在分词；with结构】
我心情+动作：尴尬+拍拍肩膀鼓励他
A bit awkward and hesitant, I gently patted him on the shoulder and looked him straight in the eye, “I am always confident of your ability and proud of your perseverance. Go ahead!”【形容词做状语；情绪+动作+语言；对话应少而精；最好能反扣前文】
David的反应：听到鼓励开心，并回应我(感动，决心)
Upon hearing my encouragement//Delighted to hear my encouragement, David lifted/raised his head slowly, a big smile spreading across his face//eyes twinkling/ sparkling/glittering with hope. Tearing shining in his eyes//Tearfully, he responded in a trembling/ shivering but firm tone/voice, “ Thank you! I would like to give it a try.”【时间衔接；情绪+动作；现在分词】
我催促鼓励他去（承上启下）
Feeling his blazing determination, I urged him to head to the track.【原因做衔接；动作描写；现在分词】
第二段I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
比赛开始：描述（切换后的）赛场全景
低分写法：The game began.
高分写法：The instant (把主语从比赛换成别的象征) a whistle announced the beginning of the cross-country run, all the participants ran like an arrow.【时间衔接；借代和无灵主语；比喻】
David努力奔跑(情节应该符合客观事实，他肯定是落后于人)
方法1.偏叙述
然而，David很快落后于人（结果）
However, David was left behind within a few minutes.
方法2.偏描写
然而，David显然上去不接下气脚步变得沉重（过程，细节）
However, David was apparently out of breath and his footsteps were increasingly heavy.
我观战：从远处吼叫，加油
I, feeling a mixture of excitement and uneasiness, yelled/exclaimed out loud from the distance, hoping to offer him more strength.【情绪+动作；现在分词】
比赛快结束：David接近终点，大家包括coach都给他掌声，他一瘸一拐到达终点
The second he approached the finishing line, he was greeted by thunderous applause by the audience, other runners and the coach. Despite the difficulty and pain, he continued limping to the line.【时间衔接；被动语态；正能量；提coach反扣前文】
我的反应：拥抱哭泣开心
Upon his arrival, I hugged him tightly, excitement depriving me of all power of utterance and my eyes brimming over with tears.【时间衔接；情绪+动作】
结尾感悟——坚持不懈，忽略别人的眼光
强调句：It was my encouragement and his persistence that helped him accomplish the tough task.
虚拟：Without this experience, David would have never realized we should ignore other’s judgement and stick to our goal.
最终自测：
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me.
被一阵沮丧和焦虑压垮，他低下头，避开了我的目光，脸埋在了双手里。
我有点尴尬和犹豫，轻轻地拍了拍他的肩膀，直视他的眼睛说道：“我一直对你的能力有信心，也为你的毅力感到骄傲。去吧！”
听到我的鼓励，大卫很高兴，他慢慢地抬起头来，脸上绽开了灿烂的笑容。眼中闪着泪光，大卫用颤抖但坚定的语气回答：“谢谢！我想去试一试。“
我感到他那炽热的决心，催促他向跑道走去。
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
一声哨响宣布越野跑开始，所有参与者就像箭一样跑了起来。然而，大卫显然是上气不接下气了，脚步声也越来越沉重。
我感到一阵激动和紧张，从远处大声叫喊，希望能给他更多的力量。
他一接近终点线，就得到到观众选手们和教练雷鸣般的掌声的迎接。尽管困难和疼痛，他还是尽力一瘸一拐地走向终点。
他一到，我就紧紧地拥抱着他，兴奋得说不出话来，热泪盈眶。正是我的鼓励和他的坚持帮助他完成了这项艰巨的任务。
语料默写：
被一阵沮丧和焦虑压垮__________________________________________
低下头，避开了我的目光，脸埋在了双手里。_____________________________
_____________________________________________________
尴尬和犹豫_________________________________________
轻轻地拍了拍他的肩膀_________________________________________
直视他的眼睛_________________________________________
对你的能力有信心_________________________________________
为你的毅力感到骄傲_________________________________________
去吧！_________________________________________
很高兴听到我的鼓励_________________________________________
慢慢地抬起头_________________________________________
脸上绽开了灿烂的笑容_________________________________________
眼中闪着泪光_________________________________________
用颤抖但坚定的语气回答_________________________________________
炽热的决心_________________________________________
催促某人做_________________________________________
一声哨响宣布越野跑开始_________________________________________
像箭一样跑了起来_________________________________________
上气不接下气_________________________________________
脚步也越来越沉重。_________________________________________
大声叫喊_________________________________________
希望能给他更多的力量。_________________________________________
一..就..._________________________________________
得到雷鸣般掌声的迎接_________________________________________
尽管困难和疼痛_________________________________________
尽力做_________________________________________
一瘸一拐地走向终点_________________________________________
他一到_________________________________________
热泪盈眶_________________________________________
正是我的鼓励和他的坚持帮助他完成了这项艰巨的任务。______________________
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写好续写 需具备哪些能力
1.推敲主题——明线+暗线
2.设计情节（各4-6句）——承上启下，上下句衔接（时间衔接、原因衔接），反扣/呼应伏笔的巧思
3.遣词造句——情绪描写和动作描写，动作链，非谓语动词，独立主格结构，无灵主语，被动语态
被一阵沮丧和焦虑压垮__________________________________________
低下头，避开了我的目光，脸埋在了双手里。_____________________________
_____________________________________________________
尴尬和犹豫_________________________________________
轻轻地拍了拍他的肩膀_________________________________________
直视他的眼睛_________________________________________
对你的能力有信心_________________________________________
为你的毅力感到骄傲_________________________________________
去吧！_________________________________________
很高兴听到我的鼓励_________________________________________
慢慢地抬起头_________________________________________
脸上绽开了灿烂的笑容_________________________________________
眼中闪着泪光_________________________________________
用颤抖但坚定的语气回答_________________________________________
炽热的决心_________________________________________
催促某人做_________________________________________
一声哨响宣布越野跑开始_________________________________________
像箭一样跑了起来_________________________________________
上气不接下气_________________________________________
脚步也越来越沉重。_________________________________________
大声叫喊_________________________________________
希望能给他更多的力量。_________________________________________
..就_________________________________________
得到雷鸣般掌声的迎接_________________________________________
尽管困难和疼痛_________________________________________
尽力做_________________________________________
一瘸一拐地走向终点_________________________________________
他一到_________________________________________
热泪盈眶_________________________________________
正是我的鼓励和他的坚持帮助他完成了这项艰巨的任务。______________________
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