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读后续写真题呈现：
Self-Portrait
Alia was disappointed to find herself in the drawing studio. She had been sick with the flu during the week when everyone else got to pick their classes. She had hoped for Astronomy or Marine Biology, but they were full by the time she got to choose. She loved everything about science, from the way it used facts and formulas to how it revealed the basic nature of things. But art was so . . un-scientific.
The first class project was self-portraits. Some students were drawing self-portraits using mirrors. Others were working from photographs. Alia glanced at the incomplete sketches, feeling like a cat in a dog show. But she had no choice. Hesitantly, she lifted a pencil, only to pause before the canvas. Confusion and reluctance were evidently written on her face; she had no idea how to proceed with her strokes.
The teacher came up to Alia's easel(画架). Seemingly having noticed her trouble, he sat next to her.
"Every portrait begins with a circle, " he said. "Then you create a series of lines.”
老师展示To demonstrate, he drew a group of small, quick portraits. He began each one with a circle, some straight lines, and a triangle to determine where the eyes, nose, and chin should go. To Alia's amazement, each portrait on the paper took form. Alia had never thought about it, but the features of everyone's face were in the same spots. "Go ahead and give it a try." The teacher handed the pencil back to her.
Taking a deep breath, Alia began her own self-portrait. She drew the basic form of a head, the way she had been shown. From there, she used lines to plot the features of her face. She had to take note of each detail, with each stroke, line and curve demanding her close attention. One wrong measurement could throw off the whole portrait.
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The process took patience and precision.
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Admiring her work, Alia suddenly realized drawing was just what she had hoped for.
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文本分析：
考场上估计很多学生会苦恼素描相关的描写性语言。每当没有相关积累的时候一定要向原文去提取语料，例如文章中出现的feature, sketch, plot, stroke，line, curve 等等都可以直接利用起来。
文本简析主题语境：人与社会之个人成长
本文的聚焦于三个方面：
Alia因生病错过了选科学课的机会，勉强选了画画课；
体验画画的过程，老师的展示，让Alia在体验中去感受画画的魅力；
最终体验出成果，画成了她的自画像，由此改变了自己对画画的看法。
主要内容：所给文章共六段：分成三部分
Part 1: （para1）Alia 因病不得已选了画画课；
自画像艾丽娅失望地发现自己在画室里。在每个人都要去选课的那个星期里，她得了流感。她本来希望选天文学或海洋生物学，但等她选择的时候，这两门课已经满了。她热爱科学的一切，从它使用事实和公式的方式，到它如何揭示事物的基本本质。但艺术是如此……与科学无关。
Part2: (para2-5) Alia的亲身体验：第一节画画课+老师演示如何画画+鼓励
第一节课的课主题是自画像。一些学生正在用镜子画自画像。其他人则利用照片来画画。艾丽娅瞥了一眼那些不完整的草图，感觉自己就像一只参加狗展的猫。但她别无选择。她犹豫地举起一支铅笔，但在画布前停了下来。她的脸上显然写着困惑和不情愿;她不知道如何继续画一笔一划。
老师走到Alia的画架前(画架)。他似乎注意到了她的麻烦，坐在她旁边。“每幅肖像都以一个圆圈开头，”他说。“然后你创造一系列的线条。”为了证明这一点，他画了一组小而快速的肖像。他先画了一个圆圈、几条直线和一个三角形，以确定眼睛、鼻子和下巴的位置。令阿丽亚惊讶的是，纸上的每一幅肖像都成形了。艾丽娅从来没有想过这个问题，但每个人脸上的五官都在同一个地方。“去吧，试一试。”老师把铅笔还给了她。
Part3 (para6.) Alia 专注地开始画自画像
深吸一口气，艾丽娅开始了她的自画像。她按照别人给她看的样子，画出了一个头的基本形状。从那里，她用线条画出她脸部的特征。她必须注意到每一个细节，每一个笔画、线条和曲线都要求她密切关注。一个错误的测量可能会使整个图像失真。
读后续写情节发展：　
带领学生去体验此类续写文本类型的特点：内心冲突---体验—解决冲突---个人成长与转变；
文本难度大，可以利用原文的内容进行回扣创作。利用所给首句的信息名词，进行平行主语的叙述，交叉主语的叙述，或直接回扣原文进行叙述。
3. 本文人物比较单一：主角Alia 是整个故事冲突的产生者，解决冲突也是主动在体验中去进行。配角老师起到辅助作用，引导Alia 让体验顺利进行。所以老师可再写，也可不写。笔者的第二段基本都是平行主语 Alia的感受和体验。
范文
The process took patience and precision. It was much like the scientific experiments Alia adored. She closely observed the proportions of her face, the way a scientist might study a complex formula. Each feature demanded her undivided focus, as she carefully translated the three-dimensional reality onto the two-dimensional plane. The rhythm of her drawing mirrored the methodical steps of a scientific procedure. Slowly, the initial resistance and confusion gave way to a meditative absorption in the task at hand. As her self-portrait emerged from a series of geometric guidelines, Alia discovered a sense of achievement in the deliberate and thoughtful application of pencil to paper.
Admiring her work, Alia found that drawing was surprisingly what she had hoped for. The self-portrait before her was not just a collection of lines and shapes but a deep exploration of her own face, a meticulous examination of her own features. She realized that art and science were not so distinct; both required a keen eye, a steady hand, and an open mind. Her initial skepticism had been transformed into a quiet appreciation for the unexpected joy found in the strokes of her pencil. Suddenly it occurred to her: Don't assume you won't like something until you try it. This newfound appreciation for art would forever intertwine with her love for science, shaping her journey of self-discovery and enabling her to perceive the world through a richer, more vibrant lens.
这个过程需要耐心和精确。这很像阿丽亚喜欢的科学实验。她仔细观察自己脸部的比例，就像科学家研究复杂的公式一样。每个特征都要求她全神贯注，因为她小心翼翼地将三维现实转化为二维平面。她绘画的节奏反映了科学程序的有条不紊的步骤。慢慢地，最初的抗拒和困惑让位于对手头工作的沉思和专注。当她的自画像从一系列几何指南中浮现出来时，Alia发现了一种成就感，这种成就感来自于铅笔和纸的深思熟虑的应用。在欣赏自己的作品时，阿丽亚发现绘画出乎她的意料。她面前的自画像不仅仅是线条和形状的集合，而是对自己脸部的深入探索，对自己五官的细致检查。她意识到艺术和科学并不是那么泾渭分明;两者都需要敏锐的眼睛，稳健的手和开放的思想。她最初的怀疑已经转变为一种安静的欣赏，因为她在铅笔的笔触中发现了意想不到的快乐。她突然想到:在你尝试之前，不要假设你不会喜欢它。这种对艺术的新发现将永远与她对科学的热爱交织在一起，塑造了她的自我发现之旅，使她能够通过更丰富、更有活力的镜头来感知世界。
范文升级
Patience and precision were the key to the process, resembling the scientific experiments that Alia held in high regard. She observed her face with meticulous attention, akin to a scientist studying a complex formula. Each feature commanded her complete focus as she skillfully translated the three-dimensional reality onto the two-dimensional plane. The methodical steps of a scientific procedure mirrored the rhythm of her drawing. Gradually, initial resistance and confusion dissolved, replaced by a meditative absorption in the task at hand. From a series of geometric guidelines, her self-portrait emerged, bestowing upon Alia a sense of achievement derived from the deliberate and thoughtful application of pencil to paper.
As she admired her work, Alia discovered that drawing had surprising qualities she had longed for. The self-portrait before her transcended mere lines and shapes, delving deep into an exploration of her own face, a meticulous examination of her own features. She realized that art and science were not mutually exclusive; both necessitated a keen eye, a steady hand, and an open mind. Initial skepticism transformed into a quiet appreciation for the unanticipated joy found in the strokes of her pencil. A sudden realization struck her: one should not assume disdain for something until it is given a fair try. This newfound appreciation for art would forever intertwine with her love for science, shaping her journey of self-discovery and granting her a richer, more vibrant lens through which to perceive the world.
下水文1
The process took patience and precision. Looking into the mirror, Alia carefully studied the subtle curves and angles of her face all the while busy calculating the proportions and measuring the gaps between the features. It seemed as if she was dealing with a math problem since the eyes, nose, and mouth should be accurately placed in the right place. With teacher's guidance echoing in her mind, each time she started with a circle and built from there. As she proceeded Alia found herself becoming more engrossed in the task, forgetting her initial reluctance towards art.With each stroke of the pencil, she delicately captured the essence of her outline, and her self-portrait slowly came out on paper.(112w)
Admiring her work, Alia found that drawing was surprisingly what she had hoped for. The“unscientific” stuff actually shared similarities with the science she loved, They both required meticulous observation, intense concentration and considerable resilience. What amazed her even more was that the act of drawing allowed her to express herself in a way that science never could and each stroke of the pencil revealed a part of herself she never knew existed. No longer disappointed at not getting her desired science classes, she now discovered a newfound passion anajoy in the process of creating art room that moment on, she not only embraced art wholeheartedly but also was ready to attempt something new, eager to explore endless possibilities in life and uncover more about herself. (113w)

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