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读后续写：学霸队友
（友谊主题）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
When Dr.Gullikson was assigning(指定)project mates for his psychology class, I secretly hoped he would pair me with my best friend or at least a classmate I could have some fun with. Above all, hoped he wouldn't assign me to work with the fiercely competitive extremely serious fellow who always wore dark clothes and apparently had a personality to match.As fate (命运)would have it, Dr. Gullikson very deliberately matched everyone inclass and announced that I would be working with the one person in class I wanted to avoid
I went up to my new teammate and introduced myself. He looked at me as though I weren't there. I felt he treated me as though I would hold him back and probably make him fail to get an A in the course. He wasn't mean or abusive. He just gave me the impression he could do whatever project we dreamed up better if he did it alone.Needless to say, I didn’t look forward to an entire term of being brushed off but I tried to make the best of it and didn't say anything for fear that I would make things worse.
The project required each team to develop a hypothesis (假说)set up an experiment to test the hypothesis, do the statistical analysis and present the findings. Whatever grade the team received would be shared by both students.
When my teammate and I met to discuss our project, I was uneasy. Here was this challenging student who had a reputation for single-mindedness and good grades - the exact opposite of me. actually wanted to drop the class at one point, but stopped short because I didn't want to give him the satisfaction of my chickening out. I decided to stick to it no matter what.
After long discussions, we somehow agreed to do a study on the psychological well-being of teenagers.I wasn't sure what it meant exactly, but at least we had a topic.
We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans.
One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease.
审题：
1.构思续写两段主要情节
结合对文章主题、环境、人物、情节等要素的分析以及对续写第一段、第二段段首句的分析，可以构思续写第一段和第二段的主要情节。
续写第一段的主要情节:We didn't work well with each other at the beginning, but learned to cooperate later.
续写第二段的主要情节:I successfully completed the project on my own.
2.构思续写“四点”内容
根据对原文的分析和两个段首句推测两段首尾部分“四点”的内容，确保段落当中和段落之间情节连贯以及文章的主题和结局积极向上。
续写第一段的段首衔接句:When I asked him questions, he always answered with an icy tone.
续写第一段的段尾衔接句:Our relationship improved.
续写第二段的段首衔接句:I was afraid that I would fail to finish the project alone.
结尾句:We became good friends from then on.
3.呼应前文
原文中对“我”的队友的性格描写较多，因此，续写时对于人物的行为及心理描写应符合人物的性格特点，以此达到与原文协同的目的。如:
Above all, I hoped he wouldn't assign me to work with the fiercely competitive, extremely serious fellow who always wore dark clothes and apparently had a personality to match.2 He looked at me as though I weren't there.3 He wasn't mean or abusive. He just gave me the impression he could do whatever project we dreamed up better if he did it alone.
4 Here was this challenging student who had a reputation for- the exact opposite of single-mindedness and good grades me.
分析:这四个句子表明“我”眼中的队友是一个好胜心强、极其严肃、极具竞争意识的学霸。而“He wasn’t mean or abusive.”则表明他并不刻薄，也不会恶语相向，只是不擅长沟通与合作。“我与这位学霸成为队友后，经过长时间的接触与合作，学霸对“我的冷漠态度应该会有所改变。在续写时要把握好这位学霸队友的性格特点以及他对“我”态度的前后转变。
结合文中出现的以下伏笔，预测续写部分可能发生的情节。 I actually wanted to drop the class at one point, but stopped short because I didn't want to give him the satisfaction of my chickening out.I decided to stick to it no matter what. One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease Worried as I was, I would put much more efforts into our project and hoped not to let my teammate down.
分析:前文提到了“我”成绩不如队友，对项目课题一知半解想过退出项目，但为了不让队友因为“我”的退缩感到满足，“我还是决定坚持做下去。这表明“我”也是一个自尊心强、能坚持的人。所以，结合已给出的续写第二段段首句可知，当得知“我的队友住院后，“我”会付出更多的努力，将更多精力投入项目中，确保项目顺利完成。
4.续写创作
前面的步骤已经将续写两段的首句和末句构思完成，接下来需要补充具体情节。请根据“五所”即人物的所见、所闻、所说、所做、所思/感) 提示，完成续写
①　How did I feel about my teammate's attitude
②　What did I do to change his attitude
③　What did he do tome afterwards
情节设计：
P1: We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans.
When I looked at my teammate's serious face and bit the bullet to ask him some questions, he answered with his precise language and icy tone (原文协同),which made me feel a mixture of admiration for his intelligence and discomfort about his indifference(定语从句)
To keep up with his pace(不定式作状语),I completely gave up my idle ways and immersed myself in the project Gradually, he changed his aloof attitude and even offered me help.
It seemed that we had gone from strangers to comrades in arms(表语从句)
4.续写创作
④　How did I feel when I saw him
⑤　What did my teammate do and say
⑥　What did I do after hearing his words
⑦　How did my teammate react towards the result
One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease.
That meant I would have to finish the project alone. I felt like I had been hit on the head by a mallet ( 比 喻). To my comfort, as I expressed my concern by his bed(时间状语从句),my teammate told me that he trusted me. I began to pour more energy into the project than I had ever done before.
Finally, I was able to share our research findings with the class and succeeded in earning a good grade for both of us. Tears of excitement and gratitude blurred my vision (无灵主语). But for my partner, nothing like this could have happened (虚拟语气)
So when he thumbed up with a rare big grin it suddenly dawned on me that we were to become kind of lifelong friends (主语从句）
5.高分范文
We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans. Those discussions were tense and too serious for my taste (原文协同)but gradually we started to reach a consensus. The outcome was an experiment, simple yet elegant Knowing my strengths and weaknesses all too well(现在分词作状语),I decided to focus on the task of working with the subjects, while he developed the scientific model.I put in my two cents’ worth whenever I could (时间状语从句), hardly sparing a thought for my usual entertainment(现在分词作状语).To my delight, he seemed to accept me little by little, and occasionally shared his ideas with me.
One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease.When I visited him (时间状语从)I noticed for the first time a sense of vulnerability on the face of my stoic teammate(神态描写).“I will complete our project,”I promised him“Don't worry, my... friend.” He made no remark, but a trace of a smile crept onto his face(神态描写)Throughout the semester,I did my level best to work on the project, and the effort paid off. We were awarded an A! Even better, I received a precious gift - the approval of a person who later became my friend for life (定语从句)
7. “友谊”主题语料
1）初来乍到
l As a transfer student, Jack walked alone along the wall of the hallway, with his head down.作为一名转校生，Jack 低着头，独自沿着走廊墙走着。
l We didn't want to give a second glance at the newcomer, because he had no outstanding qualities considering his small figure and casual T-shirt.我们不想多看这个新同学一眼，因为他身材矮小，穿着休闲的T恤，没有什么突出的特点。
2)　伸出援手
l Luckily, a girl named Summer, who offered to sit with him on his first day of school, helped him get through the tough time幸运的是，一位名叫 Summer 的女孩在他上学的第天提出和他坐在一起，帮助他度过了艰难时期。
l Classmates burst into wild applause and yelled encouragement at me. Grateful to them, I knew deep down in my heart that it was their trust that allowed me to embrace my new self.同学们爆发出热烈的掌声，并大声鼓励我。我很感谢他们，深知正是他们的信任让我能够接受新的自己。
3）友谊
l Seeing a gleam of determination in her eyes, I smiled and knew kindness and friendship were blooming in our hearts.看到她眼中坚定的光芒，我笑了，我知道善良和友谊之花正在我们的心中盛开。
l It was the friendship between us that made me realize how unique I was. At last I came out of my shell, with my heart filled with the light of friendship收获正是我们之间的友谊让我意识到自己是多么独特。最终我走出了自己的世界，心里充满着友谊的光芒
l Generally, close friendships have three “fruits’. they may comfort the heart, advise the head and help us achieve the goals we set for ourselves. Through friendship, we can become happier, wiser and more satisfied humans.通常，亲密的友谊可以结出三种“果实”:它们可以抚慰心灵，提供建议，帮助我们实现自己既定的目标友谊可以让我们变得更快乐、更睿智、更满足。
4) 产生误解
l Hearing his mean rude words, I was and overwhelmed with extreme anger, tears streaming down my face听到他那些刻薄粗鲁的话语，我被极度的愤怒淹没了眼泪顺着我的脸流了下来
l Picturing a scene where I might be snigger at for Sally's improper words, I felt a fire of rage burning in my heart.想到自己可能会因为 Sally 的不当言辞而被嘲笑的场景我感到一股怒火在心中燃烧。
l Out of envy, I quarreled with Coretti. It was the most embarrassing time in my life. I was struggling against my tears until the end of the competition.出于嫉妒，我和 Coretti 吵了起来。那是我人生中最尴尬的时刻。我强忍着眼泪，直到比赛结束
l I admitted, with my head lowering in shame, that I had actually made the most shameful mistake ever.我羞愧地低下了头，承认自己的确犯了有史以来最可4人口
5) 沟通反思
l With a determined expression, he decided to have a sincere talk with Jack, believing that communication should always be the best policy.带着坚定的表情，他决定和 Jack 真诚地谈一谈，他认为沟通总是最好的策略
l Moved by Neil's sincere smile, he finally decided to accept his suggestion that they should cooperate to bring out the best in each other他被 Neil真诚的笑容打动了,最终决定接受他的建议:他们两个应该合作，激发出彼此最好的一面。
6) 重归于好
l Grateful for his firm support and timely assistance　I hugged him tightly. I finally realized we were best　friends.我很感激他的坚定支持和及时帮助，紧紧地拥抱了他。我终于意识到我们是最好的朋友。
l This unforgettable incident, long stuck in my　memory, made me realize that honesty is the valuable　principle that guides our friendship forward.这件难忘的事件，长期萦绕在我的记忆中，让我意识到，诚实是引导我们的友谊前进的宝贵原则。
l Never had they imagined such a miracle would fall upon them and both of them sighed with relief. It was bravery and efforts that made them possess a genuine friendship and brought about a win-win situation.他们从来没有想到过奇迹会发生在自己身上，他们松了一口气。正是勇气和努力让他们拥有了真垫的友谊带来了双赢的局面。

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