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The Charm(魅力)of Schoolyard
In the charm of school life, where classrooms are seats of knowledge and the schoolyard becomes source of memory, there are fund of stories mixed with humor, warmth, and teacher-student relationships.
Mr. Smith was country teacher, but not an ordinary one; he was a storyteller, a mentor(人生与师), and a friend to all his students. His classroom was a world of its own, full of colorful characters and brilliant ideas
One day, during the noon break, a student named Alice noticed a wandering kitten padding(潜行)through the familiar grounds where many schoolyard tales were born. Alicer to Mr. Smith, who had magical tricks for handling even the smallest things. With Mr. permission, Alice and her classmates built a shelter for the kitten in a corner of the campus.
The days turned into weeks, and the kitten grew under the tender care of Mr. Smith and his students. Once in a while, she became a temporary resident of the classroom. much to the delight of the whole class. They named her “Schoolyard,” a name that generalized the spirit of their school days.
As the year progressed, Schoolyard became not just a kitten, but a tie connecting each of them and a thread of continuity in their lives. She played on desks, slept in chairs, and hid in folders, thus becoming unofficial mascot(吉祥物)of the classroom. the students found comfort in her presence, and Mr. Smith, joy in watching them grow through her company.
As graduation neared, Mr. Smith gathered his students for one last lesson. He told them that they would soon be exploring new horizons. He reminded them that life was full of unforeseeable twists and turns along with unexpected potentials just like the appearance of a kitten in their schoolyard. At the moment, the students were greatly touched and deep down there arose a strong love for those memorable warmth and healthy laughter of their school days.
Thereafter, Mr. Smith and the students agreed to meet here once again in ten years.
注意:
1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式作答。
A decade later, Mr. Smith greeted his former students at the school gate.
“Isn't that our Schoolyard ” cried Alice, gazing at the classroom door.
文本分析
文章大意：
这篇文章讲述了学校生活中充满魅力的校园，以及一位名叫Mr. Smith的老师和他的学生们与一只小猫“Schoolyard”之间的故事。Mr. Smith不是一位普通的教师，他既是学生们的人生导师，又是他们的朋友。他的课堂充满了丰富多彩的人物和出色的想法。有一天，学生们在午休时发现了一只小猫，他们把它带到Mr. Smith那里，并在他的许可下，在校园的角落里为小猫建造了一个避难所。随着时间的推移，小猫在他们的照顾下逐渐成长，并成为他们生活中的一条纽带。她成为了他们课堂上的非官方吉祥物，给学生们带来了安慰，也让Mr. Smith看到了他们成长的快乐。当毕业临近时，Mr. Smith召集他的学生们上最后一课，提醒他们生活充满了不可预见的转折和未知的可能性，就像小猫出现在他们的校园里一样。最后，他们约定十年后再次相见。
主题思想：
描述了校园生活中教师与学生之间的深厚情感以及他们共同养育的一只小猫所代表的纽带作用，强调校园生活的魅力与温暖，并表达了对未来的美好期待。
伏笔所在：
文章中提到师生们约定十年后再次相聚，为故事的续写提供了可能。
续写的基本思路：
主要写师生十年后的互动（彼此的变化，校园的变化，相互的思念等）。为了与第二段衔接，需要有场景的转换，即从校门口移步到教室门口。
主要写师生和小猫的互动（确认是他们的Schoolyard，或者不是他们的Schoolyard，但要有相应的情节支撑；撸猫，玩耍，一起回忆有猫有彼此陪伴的美好岁月等）。
注：1. 以上仅供参考，学生习作内容可有灵活度，只要能与上下文衔接，合理即可；Schoolyard，既是猫的名字，也是象征着校园生活中学习之余同学们亲近自然，亲近彼此，师生之间不同寻常的相处方式和校园的美好的“吉祥物”，如果学生习作中体现这一点，应属加分项。
情节构建的重点
点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；
点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；
点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；
点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。
官方范文，
A decade later, Mr. Smith greeted his former students at the school gate. “I’m so glad we can find each other here today,” Mr. Smith, vibrant and energetic as ever, said as he looked around at the faces of his former students, leading them down memory lane towards their former classroom, recollecting their shared childhood in the familiar schoolyard. As they walked down the hallways, they swapped stories of success and challenges since they parted and shared how much they missed their good old younger days. “Life has been good, and our best memories are here, especially on the schoolyard,” Mr. Smith continued, evoking a moment of silence. Then they recalled Schoolyard, their loyal mascot and silent confidant. Unknowingly, they found themselves back in the classroom.
“Isn’t that our Schoolyard ” cried Alice, gazing at the classroom door. There, floating back and forth, was the very kitten from their childhood. “Indeed, she is,” nodded Mr. Smith, his face breaking into a smile. Schoolyard, their beloved mascot, now an elderly cat, still retained her enchanting innocence, her green eyes twinkling with curiosity. The students gathered around her, gently handling, stroking and petting her. Laughter filled the air as they recalled their playful days with Schoolyard on campus. As the sunset, the students bid farewell to Mr. Smith, Schoolyard, and each other. Standing in the place where their journey began, they felt grateful for the memories and the profound impact Mr. Smith had left on their lives; they knew these school days and the charm of Schoolyard, their loyal companion, would always hold a special place in their hearts.

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