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读后续写材料：
It's quite impressive to see Canada geese flying into the clouds.They live to be around 25 years old and are veryloyal.They never forget their first home.No one knows this more than my family.
In 2000, when I was seven, my parents and I came back from a T-ball game one late spring afternoon. To our surprise, two adult geese and a baby goose were in our driveway(车库前的私人车道）。The adults were shocked by us and flew away, but their baby was too young to fly|and couldn't follow.We are no strangers to the ways of wildlife, so we knew to avoid contact with the baby, hoping he could join his parents.
Hours passed, and night fell. The tiny little thing was wandering around our yard,unaware of what could happent it was clear that the baby needed protection,warmth,and food to make it to the morning, so we brought him onto our back porch and set up a wire fence to enclose and protect him.
We all pretty much slept with one eye pen till moming.And then another morning. And another. Each day, we tried eagerly to get the baby back to his parents, who kept coming to our yard. He wouldn't go to them to claim him. The baby goose had clearly decided we were his new family and we gave him a name ---Peeper,because he would follow us around the yard making a peeping(唧唧叫）,nonstop.
Days turned into weeks, and weeks, and weeks turned into months,until almost year passed. Peeper slept on ou back porch in typical goose fashion.Every day,my dad would clear his droppings with water and throw him up intothe air, so he could fly a loop around the house,coming back again once the porch was clean.
Paragraph1:One evening,my uncle was over, and my dad wanted to show him Peeper's loop_________________________________________________________________________
Paragraph2:It came as a shock 20 year later when an aging adult goose made his way back to my yard.
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材料有5段，续写后两段，其文章总共7段。我们需要文本挖掘解读，但又要超越文本。材料采用最为朴素的视角---第一人称来叙述：一个自然界的小生命在人类家园里成长的短暂时光。“我”的叙述似山间溪水，简单淳朴。那么，文字的美需要透过接受主体的心灵折射，才能得到彰显。因此，文本梳理我选择从一系列有梯度的设问开始。
文本层面：
梯度问题链：梳理文本，透视文本，超越文本。
1问：Why did I talk about the lifespan and loyalty of Canada geese in the first paragraph ( 为什么在第一段中“我”提到了加拿大大雁的寿命和忠诚？)
答：（略）
2问：What can you infer from the underlined sentence in the second paragraph （从第二段划线句子你可以推断出来什么？）
答：My father knows some common sense about protecting wild animals.
3 问：What are the words in the article to describe Canada geese Is there a difference What can you infer from different names ( 在文章中描写加拿大大雁都用到了什么字眼？有区别吗？从不同的称呼中你能推出测出来什么？)
答：a baby goose --- their baby-- The tiny little thing --the baby--.he baby goose ---Peeper. It can be seen that Canada geese &“ I ” get along with each other and “ I ”like the big bird more and more.
4 问：Why does the author use the verb was wandering （作者为什么使用was wandering这个动词？）
答：On the one hand, it shows how much the author likes it, on the other hand, it shows how relaxed babay goose is！Or the babay goose are curious about the new place ( full of curiosity. ) （一方面表现了作者的喜欢程度，另一方面表现了babay goose 的放松。）
5 问：Do you think Babay Goose was lucky （你觉得babay goose幸运吗？）
答：I think he is extremely lucky. He was not driven away instead of being protected in the human world. Human being provide him with food, warmth and bed.
追问：(父亲的爱（或者说保护）分几个维度？)
6 问：Why didn’t his parents claim him (为什么他父母来过而没有和他相认)
答：（透视矛盾本质）( 在文学的角度它属于blank point ( 未定点)，需要读者通过想象或审美去解读，没有标准答案。但我仍然觉得需要一个科学的答案，毕竟无论人类还是动物、昆虫都不会抛弃掉自己的幼儿的。)于是，我查到了较科学的答案：在动物生命早期建立起来的一种长期有效（不可逆）的学习行为，被称为印痕行为（imprinting）。这一行为会影响动物对父母、配偶、天敌、栖息地等的认知。而这一行为的敏感度随着年龄增大而变弱。小鸡小鸭如果出壳后第一眼看到的是人类，就会跟在人类后面，把人类当成自己的母亲。这就是“亲子印痕”的一个例证。如果鸟类在幼雏阶段与人类过多接触，很有可能导致其对人类“脱敏”和依赖，进而失去野外生存的能力。这和第二段中（The adults were shocked by us and flew away, but their baby was too young to fly|and couldn't follow.）是比较吻合的吧。
7 问：Why do we sleep until moring with our eyes open （为什么我们睁着一只眼睡觉直到早晨？）
答：We want him to be reunited with his parents and to have their company. （我们希望他和父母团聚，有父母的陪伴。）
词语&句式使用层面：
1 问：Why are there successive expressions about time in the text （为什么文中连续出现关于时间的表达？）（比如：1 Hours passed, and night fellAnd then another morning. And another. 2 Days turned into weeks, and weeks, and weeks turned into months,until almost year passed.）
答：（A）to move the story forward.
（B）Our love for baby goose grows with time .
（C）As time goes by, goose grows up.
（D） a figue of speech---Repetition
追问（what’s the function of the Repetition ）
答:By repeating the same words,phrases,clauses,or sentences,the mood is intensified,meaning reinforced,and stress realized.(目的在于加强语气、加深印象、阐明观点，达到强调语言的效果。)
2 问：What are the functions of “ could ” and “ typical ” in the following sentences
（1） but their baby was too young to fly and couldn't follow与 Peeper slept on back porch in typical goose fashion.
（2）my dad would clear his droppings with water and throw him up into the air, so he could fly a loop around the house,coming back again once the porch was clean.
答：We use ‘could’to talk about general ability in the past. ‘typical’ 也可以解读为标准的成年Canada goose（英姿飒爽）。这样的一个baby goose （weak( to young )-strong-typical）长大了。
那么父亲给baby goose清扫粪便时，baby goose总会飞一圈，父亲打扫完毕他才飞回来时作者用到了一个词“would”: 可解释为：“would”can also describe behavior, often in the sense of what is habitual or regular.
比如：Every summer he would go away for a month, whithout saying where or why.
我们可以看到父亲和baby goose之间形成了一种默契与和谐（harmony），这样的和谐中有信任，有尊重，有耐心，有慈爱。也许此时baby goose 已是某种意义上我父亲的“儿子”，更准确地说是一个鲜活，有感情，有感应，有温度的生命个体。本性让它寻找蓝天，湖泊，草地与自由。记忆中和生命中最柔软的部分（爱和忠诚）让他从这里出发或又怀念渴望回到这里。
情节推进层面：
Too young--baby goose--a typical goose--25years old
所以，真正美好的事物，不一定要永远拥有它，即使是短暂的相遇、瞬间的闪光，它只要带给了我们美和爱，只要它在我心中，那就是真正的相遇，也是我真正的所得。文中我们应探寻出这种隐伏性主题。进而确保为续写后两段提供正确的指南。诚如弗洛伊所言，每一个作品中都有一个“作者陛下”。发现作者背后的情，引导审美趣味，提升学生的美感素养，在课堂里引入活水。
父亲心中的大爱呵护着一种生命的行进与生长，小peeper 得到的爱不是似洪水一样，它是山间的小溪，满山的杜鹃花，是彼此的空间，自由和尊重。我们从文本中提炼出 ：亲情，自我，自然，自由。这样学生对于文中情感和语言的领悟才能从肤浅走向深沉。语言只是路径，发展思想，涵育情感才是文学的生命。情感即是一种生命力，也是一种吸引力（对读者而言）。因而文本是拿来超越的，对文本的深度开掘要入乎其内，出乎其外，导引出一个美丽的方向。这样更能促进学生理解作品并进一步提炼主旨。
下水作文：
Paragraph1:
One evening,my uncle was over, and my dad wanted to show him Peeper's loop . When he cleaned the peeper’s droppings as he always did peeper ruffled up his feather and spread the powerful wings. Stooding beside him,I can feel the wind from wing beat. One minute later, he perched upon the ladder to dispay his fine feathers as if only by this can he live up to my uncle’s eyes popping out in surprise.“ Will he leave ” Worry filled my heart for I love him so much that I am afraid I will lose him some day. He flew higher and higher and then disappeared into the clouds .“ What a naughty little thing and he will be back soon! ” said my father .However, we spent another sleepless night.
Paragraph2:
It came as a shock 20 year later when an aging adult goose made his way back to my yard. My father and I were mowing the lawn when he appeared as handsome as ever. Peeper’s arrival greatly excited my Dad and he went straight to the barn to get bird food while peeper waited to be fed. like a baby. My father once said it was the sky, the lake, and the grass that were his real home. But for peeper, he had a unique one--- our home. We love each other, respect each other ,be loyal to each other and we enjoy.
下水作文译文：
第一段：
一天晚上，我叔叔来了，我爸爸想给他看看Peeper如何翻跟头。他像往常一样清理粪便，他竖起他的羽毛，展开了有力的翅膀。站在他旁边，我能感觉拍打翅膀引起的风。一分钟后，他栖息在梯子上，展示他精致的羽毛，仿佛只有这样才能不辜负叔叔瞪大眼睛投来的目光。“他会离开吗？”我心里充满了担忧，因为我太爱他了害怕有一天我会失去他。他飞得越来越高，然后消失在云端。“多淘气的小东西啊，他很快就会回来！”父亲说。然而，我们又度过了一个不眠之夜。
第2段：
20年后，当一只年迈的成年鹅回到我的院子里时，我感到震惊。当时我和父亲正在割草坪，它看起来还像以前一样英俊。Peeper的到来让我爸爸非常兴奋，他直接去谷仓拿鸟食，而Peeper则像个婴儿一样等待投喂。父亲曾经说过，天空、湖水和草地才是他真正的家。但对于Peeper来说，他有一个独特的家---我们的家。我们彼此相爱，相互尊重，彼此忠诚，我们享受其中。

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