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专题16读后续写之 九省联考、2024浙江首考真题
方法指导与详解
（2024年九省联考）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Last summer,Hilda worked as a volunteer with dolphin trainers at a sea life park.Her job was to make sure the tanks were free of any items so that the trainers could train the dolphins to fetch specific items.However,one day after cleaning,one of the dolphins,Maya, presented Hilda with a candy wrapper from the tank.When Katherine,the trainer,saw this, she blamed Hilda for her carelessness.Upset but not discouraged by this event,Hilda decided to do some spying on Maya.
The next morning,Hilda arrived at the park early.She put on her scuba gear (水下呼吸器) and jumped into the tank for her usual,underwater sweep.Finding nothing in the tank,she climbed out of the water just in time to see Katherine jumping in on the other side.After what happened yesterday,Hilda knew what she was doing.She watched as Katherine performed her underwater search,but Hilda wasn't surprised when she surfaced empty-handed.
During the tank sweeps, Maya had been swimming playfully, but now the dolphin stopped suddenly and swam to the back part of the tank where the filter (过滤) box was located. She stuck her nose down behind the box and then swam away. What was Maya doing back there Hilda wondered. She jumped back into the water and swam over to take a look behind the box, and her question was answered. Hilda then swam across the tank following Maya’s path and emerged from the water to find Katherine removing her scuba gear. As Katherine turned around, her mouth dropped open. There was Maya at the edge of the tank with a comb (梳子) in her mouth waiting for her treat.
“Maya! Where did you get that ” demanded Katherine, taking the comb and throwing her a fish. “I know where she got it,” declared Hilda climbing out of the tank with a handful of items still wet from their watery, resting place. “What’s all this ” Katherine asked, obviously confused.
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150个左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
“This is Maya’s secret,” Hilda said with a big smile.
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Now Katherine realized what had been going on.
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【文本解析】
1.厘清人物及性格特点
Who what characteristics
Hilda: 海洋公园志愿者 负责清理海豚训练的水箱。 聪明、观察细致
Katherine: 海豚训练师 起初因为误会责备Hilda，后来意识到Hilda的洞察力和玛雅的特殊行为。 严厉的
Maya: 海豚 喜欢收集物品，并将其藏在过滤箱后面 聪明
2.运用故事山来梳理文本情节发展：
Opening: Hilda作为志愿者在海洋公园工作，负责清理海豚水箱。
Build-up: 因为Maya呈现了一个糖果包装纸，Katherine错误地责备Hilda粗心没打扫干净。Hilda决定弄清真相，通过观察，最终发现了海豚收集和隐藏物品的行为。
Climax: Hilda 向Katherine揭示了Maya的秘密并展示了海豚收集的物品。
Resolution: Katherine意识到了Hilda的细致观察和Maya的特殊行为，解开了两人之间的误解。
Ending : 故事以Katherine对Hilda的赞赏和对Maya行为的新理解结束，突出了观察、理解和团队合作的重要性。
3.段落构思
由第一段段首句“海达微笑着说 那是玛雅的秘密哦”和第二段段首句“现在凯瑟琳明白事实真相了”可知，第一段主要描写海达揭示秘密，凯瑟琳的反应以及解释秘密如何被发现的三部分。第二段主要描写凯瑟琳向海达道歉，并对玛雅行为表示理解，并突出观察、理解以及团队合作的重要性这三部分。
【范文赏析】
“This is Maya's secret,” Hilda said with a big smile. 【真相大白】In her hand, she displayed the items she had retrieved behind the filter box.“She's been keeping these from the tank, not me.” 【凯瑟琳反应】Katherine's eyes widened as she examined the small pile of objects that Maya had collected. 【秘密发现的过程】Hilda explained how she had watched Maya cleverly hide the items away, turning the tank into her own little collection spot. 【冰释前嫌】The tension in the air dissolved as Katherine realized that Hilda's dedication had revealed Maya's playful habit, not a mistake on her part.
Now Katherine realized what had been going on. 【凯瑟琳态度的转变】She looked at Maya, then at Hilda, and her stern expression softened into a smile. “I owe you an apology, Hilda. You've shown great initiative and care,” she said, her tone filled with newfound respect. 【理解万岁】Together, they watched Maya perform her tricks, understanding now that the dolphin's behavior was not a training issue but a sign of her intelligence and curiosity. 【突出主题】The day ended not with blame, but with laughter and a sense of teamwork, as they all enjoyed Maya's clever antics.
【点睛】
词汇积累：eyes widened 瞪大眼睛
her stern（严厉的） expression softened into a smile 严厉的表情化为微笑
owe you an apology 欠你一声道歉
a sense of teamwork 团队合作意识
Blame sb. for 因...责备某人
mouth dropped open （由于吃惊）张大嘴巴
[高分句型1] Katherine's eyes widened as she examined the small pile of objects that Maya had collected.
【无灵主语、定语从句】
[高分句型2] The tension in the air dissolved as Katherine realized that Hilda's dedication had revealed Maya's playful habit, not a mistake on her part.
【无灵主语、宾语从句】
[高分句型3] She looked at Maya, then at Hilda, and her stern expression softened into a smile.
【无灵主语，且创新使用了soften】
[高分句型4] The day ended not with blame, but with laughter and a sense of teamwork, as they all enjoyed Maya's clever antics（滑稽）.
【无灵主语，not...but, end with】
（2024年浙江首考）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Eva spent the first week of high school trying to keep her head above water . One of the major headaches for her was finding her way in the huge school building . It was a six - story building . On each floor , hallways stretched in four directions , leading to classrooms , laboratories , and teachers ' offices . Somewhere in the building , there was also a library , a cafeteria , and a gym .
Having a poor sense of direction , Eva found it impossible to get around in such a huge building . All the different hallways and rooms were too much to think about , let alone commit to memory . She decided that she would memorize where her classes were and then pretend that the rest of the place didn’t exist .
In her fast P . E . class , Eva was shocked when Coach Pitt announced that everyone had to run one mile around the track outside . She searched the faces of her classmates for signs of panic . There was nothing she feared more than having to run a whole mile . To Eva ," a mile " was used to describe long distances . It was ten miles from her home to her grandfather ' s , and that always seemed like a long way , even in a car !
When Coach Pitt blew his whistle （哨子）, Eva figured she would be left in the dust . However , while some of her classmates edged ahead , others actually fell behind ." It ' s just the beginning ," she thought ." I ' ll come in last for sure ."
Soon Eva began to breathe hard , with her heart pounding and legs shaking . Feeling desperate , Eva started using a mind trick on herself . She stopped thinking about the word " mile ." Instead , she focused on reaching the shadow east on the track by an oak tree up ahead . Then she concentrated on jogging to the spot where the track curved (弯）. After that , she tried to see if she could complete her first lap . One lap turned into two , then three , then four .
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150个左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: When Coach Pitt said " Nice work !" to her at the finish line , Eva was surprised .
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Paragraph 2: Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building .
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【文本解析】
1.主题语境：人与自我；面对恐惧、适应新环境、自我成长和克服困难
文本大意：
Eva 在高中的第一周艰难适应。对于没有方向感的她来说，一个重大难题是在一所楼高六层，每层有四个方向走廊的学校建筑中找到自己的路，同时体育课上跑步也是一个巨大挑战。
2.故事山梳理故事情节
Beginning : Eva 开始了她的高中生活，在这个新环境中她艰难适应。最大的挑战之一是在巨大的学校建筑中找到自己的路。建筑物庞大，使她感到迷茫。
Build - up : Eva 在巨大的学校建筑中迷路的问题逐渐升级，她决定只记住自己上课的地方。此时，体育课上的一个新挑战出现了：教练要求每个人跑一英里。 Eva 对跑步感到极度恐惧，认为自己无法完成。
Climax ：跑步的时候， Eva 开始感到绝望。然而，她使用了一个心理技巧：不再想象一英里到底有多长，而是专注于逐渐实现小目标。她的心情由恐惧慢慢转变为自信，一圈又一圈地坚持。
Resolution : Eva 最终成功地完成了跑步，并意外地获得了教练的表扬。她意识到，她所害怕的距离实际上更多是心理层面的挑战。她决定将这种分解任务的方法应用到学校的探索上，逐步熟悉整个建筑。
Ending : Eva 通过逐步攻克学校建筑的复杂性，成功地适应了新环境。故事以她的成长和自信的提升结束，她从一开始的迷茫和恐惧变得更加自信和适应。这个故事不仅是关于学习和适应的，还强调了面对挑战时心理策略的重要性。
【范文赏析】
When Coach Pitt said " Nice work " to her at the finish line , Eva was surprised . Despite her initial doubts , she had not only completed the mile but had also kept pace with many of her classmates . Her heart still pounded from the exertion ( n ．费力；尽力）, and her legs felt like jelly （紧张得发软）, but a sense of accomplishment surged through her . Breaking the daunting distance into smaller achievable targets had made the impossible possible . She realized that focusing on immediate , reachable goals , like the next bend in the track or the shadow of a tree , had distracted her from the overwhelming idea of the mile .
Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building . Instead of being daunted by its enormity , she broke it down into manageable sections . First , she focused on memorizing the route from the entrance to her first class . Gradually , she added other landmarks - the library , the cafeteria , the gym - to her mental map . Day by day , what was once a maze became a series of familiar pathways . Mirroring her triumph on the track , mastering the layout of the school marked yet another step in her journey towards self - assurance and adaptability .
【点睛】
1.词汇积累
initial最初的，kept pace with跟上...的节奏， a sense of accomplishment成就感
achievable/reachable goal 可取得的，可到达的目标，distracted sb. From 使某人从...转移注意力
overwhelming 巨大的，压倒性的，manageable 易管理的，易控制的，gradually 逐渐地， mental map心理地图，day by day 日复一日的，maze 迷宫，a series of 一系列的， triumph 巨大成功
[高分句型1] Despite her initial doubts , she had not only completed the mile but had also kept pace with many of her classmates .
【not only...but also结构/despite】
[高分句型2] Her heart still pounded from the exertion ( n ．费力；尽力）, and her legs felt like jelly （紧张得发软）, but a sense of accomplishment surged through her .
【无灵主语句子排比】
[高分句型3] Breaking the daunting distance into smaller achievable targets had made the impossible possible .
【动名词短语作主语】
[高分句型4] Mirroring her triumph on the track , mastering the layout of the school marked yet another step in her journey towards self - assurance and adaptability .
【动名词短语作主语/运用比喻的修辞手法】

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