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2024年高考英语写作话题 短文故事续写
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“Mommy, don't go,"my three-year-old son screamed in tears as I walked to the door My fifteen-year-old leaned against the kitchen counter with his arms folded across his chest, not screaming, but glaring at me as I pulled his little brother off my legs
“Are you mad at me too ”You spend all your time keeping other people's kids company, but what about us ” Dylan complained and left angrily.
I was shocked and a little hurt. How could my own child not understand that the work I was doing was saving lives Then the answer hit me. He didn't know because he had never seen what Healing the Children actually did, Dylan had heard stories of sick children, but had never once looked into the eyes of a child and understood the hard truth that without our assistance, the child would likely die.
Get dressed You are going with me,”I said
I spent the drive explaining the case of Hector to my son, who pretended to ignore me the entire time.“He's seven, only weighs thirty pounds and is very sick, He has a complicated heart condition called Tetralogy of Fallot, which could kill him, It is a miracle that he is still alive.”
I continued to explain that it took a team of volunteer medical staff to get Hector to the hospital from his remote village and tend to him while he was there. Still, Dylan seemed
completely unimpressed We stopped at a convenience store for water and snacks Dylan had one large and one small Slurpee (思乐冰饮料) He said the small one was for Hector I doubted whether the little guy would be able to drink it, but remained silent. This was the first interest Dylan had shown in being there. Therefore.I wasn't about to ruin it
I stopped at the nurses’ station to check on Hector's progress while Dylan went to his room.Our patient was recovering physically, but the nurse was concerned that Hector was struggling emotionally. She said,“Kids usually recover fast, but he hardly speaks and never smiles.”
注意:1.续写词数应为150左右; 2请按如下格式在相应位置作答。Imagine my surprise when I heard laughter from Hector's room.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
On the way home that night, Dylan asked me several times whether Hector would be okay.____________________________
范文一
Imagine my surprise when I heard laughter from Hector's room. Surprisingly, I rushed into Hector's room and found Dylan there. He was talking with Hector, and it seemed that they were getting along well, as there was a big smile on Hector's face. I couldn't believe my eyes to see Hector smiling and speaking with Dylan. Turning back and seeing me, Dylan told me happily, "I was telling some jokes to Hector and he felt pleased and better." I was shocked by the change Dylan brought to Hector.
On the way home that night, Dylan asked me several times whether Hector would be okay. Soon, it was time to leave. Dylan hugged Hector warmly and promised he would come back to see him again. I promised Dylan that Hector would be okay, but he is alone and needs company. Dylan told me he would continue to visit Hector until he was completely recovered. A flood of warmth surged up from the bottom of my heart when hearing Dylan's words.
Later, when Dylan had time, he would go to the nurses' station to accompany Hector, telling stories and jokes to him. Hector became more active and healthier. It was the power of care and companionship that changed both of their lives.
范文二
Imagine my surprise when I heard laughter from Hector's room. To my surprise, as I burst into Hector's room, there was Dylan, engaging in lively conversation with him. The wide smile spreading across Hector's face hinted at the warmth of their interaction. It was almost unbelievable to see Hector, usually reserved, laughing and chatting freely with Dylan. Catching sight of me, Dylan exclaimed with joy, "I've just shared a few jokes with Hector, and his spirits have clearly lifted." The transformation Dylan had brought about in Hector left me astonished.
On the way home that night, Dylan asked me several times whether Hector would be okay. As the time came for Dylan to depart, he embraced Hector affectionately, promising a swift return. I reassured Dylan that Hector would be fine, emphasizing that companionship was what he truly longed for. Dylan vowed to visit Hector until he made a full recovery. Dylan's reassuring words filled me with warmth and hope.
In the days that followed, Dylan frequently visited the nurses' station to keep Hector company, entertaining him with stories and jokes. Hector's vitality and health visibly improved. Undoubtedly, it was the profound power of care and friendship that had a profound impact on both their lives.
令我惊讶的是，当我冲进海克特的房间时，发现迪伦在那里，正与他热烈交谈。海克特脸上洋溢的灿烂笑容暗示着他们之间交流的温馨。看到平时内向的海克特现在竟然和迪伦一起开怀大笑，自由交谈，简直令人难以置信。看到我后，迪伦高兴地喊道：“我刚和海克特分享了几个笑话，他的精神明显振作起来了。”迪伦给海克特带来的变化让我震惊。
当迪伦要离开的时候，他深情地拥抱了海克特，并承诺很快就会回来。我向迪伦保证海克特会没事的，同时强调他真正渴望的是陪伴。迪伦发誓会一直看望海克特，直到他完全康复。迪伦的安慰话语让我充满了温暖和希望。
在接下来的日子里，迪伦经常去护士站陪伴海克特，给他讲故事和笑话。海克特的活力和健康状况明显改善。毫无疑问，正是深厚的关怀和友谊对他们的生活产生了深远的影响。
范文一与范文二优化改写理由供参考
1.“engaging in lively conversation”比“talking”使用更高级的词汇和短语更具表现力
2.“wide smile spreading across”比“there was a big smile on”更生动。
3.The wide smile spreading across Hector's face hinted at the warmth of their interaction. It was almost unbelievable to see Hector, usually reserved, laughing and chatting freely with Dylan. 结合了简单句、并列句，使文章更有层次感。
4.增加细节和情感色彩：“It was almost unbelievable to see Hector, usually reserved, laughing and chatting freely with Dylan”通过对比展现了海克特的性格变化和与迪伦之间的亲密关系。
5.“as the time came for Dylan to depart”, “in the days that followed”通过更加流畅的过渡和连接词使故事更加连贯。
6.Hector's vitality and health visibly improved. Undoubtedly, it was the profound power of care and friendship that had a profound impact on both their lives.在结尾处强调了关怀和友谊的力量，提升了文章的主题深度。

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