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2024年高考英语写作短文故事续写的作文
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Dave and Patrow are an old loving couple In his career as a TV photojournalist and later shooting and editing videos, Dave always made it to finish his work successfully on deadlines. He considered it his superpower. He was so busy that he seldom/spared any time to keep his kids company. Now his children had started their own careers. He was not talkative and always buried himself in his own world. He never bought expensive things and always avoided wasting. Patrow always supported Dave and took good care of the family.
Last year, the couple retired from work and started their travel. After a seven-hour drive back home to Wood bury, Minnesota, Dave planned to do what he always did; carry their suitcases upstairs to unpack and do laundry.
“Dave, please, let's just relax and leave it for tomorrow,”said Patrow. She didn't want to see
Dave felt tired.He agreed and joined her on the couch to watch their favorite new series,“Yellowstone.A few minutes into the show, Dave made an unusual sound, The noise was so shocking that Patrow turned to check on him. Dave's eyes and mouth were open, but he wasn't moving. His heart wasn't beating.Fortunately,Patrow had taken a CPR (心肺复苏术) class at work, The training kicked in.She rolled him off the couch onto the floor, called the ambulance and started to perform CPR After nearly 10 minutes, doctors arrived, They rushed Dave to the hospital. Doctors said Dave cardiac arrest could be due to stress.
After two weeks，Dave finally came out of the coma(昏迷)“Where's my wife ” he asked the nurse eagerly.
注意:
1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。
范文一
The nurse phoned Patrow." I have good news. Somebody's asking for you." With a mixture of excitement and nervousness, "Is he Dave " she whispered. "Yes." No sooner had she heard the name than she ran towards Dave. When she saw Dave's face, she couldn't hold back her tears any longer. "Don't give yourself too much pressure, let's do something relaxing," Patrow said. "How about doing some work projects " "I want to launch a project where everyone can post their works."
His other work project is to co-work a book with his wife about their experience. "The book will be amazing." Without hesitation, they began to gather information. With his professional competence, Dave volunteered to take photos for them and added them to the book. Finally, the book was finished. This book holds the memories and experiences of Patrow and Dave.
范文一：进一步优化润色成拔高款作文，蓝色是好词好句好素材，尖子生可以选用
The nurse phoned Patrow." I have good news. Somebody's asking for you."A blend of anticipation and jitters filled the air as she whispered, "Could he be Dave " Confirmation came in a simple "Yes." The mere mention of his name sent her dashing towards Dave. At the sight of his familiar face, her tears flowed uncontrollably. "Take it easy, we need some relaxation," Patrow comforted her. "Why not embark on a creative project " he suggested. "I envision a platform where everyone can showcase their talents."
His other work project is to co-work a book with his wife about their experience. "Imagine how incredible the book could be," Dave enthused. Without a moment's hesitation, they embarked on gathering inspiring content. Leveraging his photography skills, Dave offered to capture the essence and weave them into the book's pages. In due course, their labor of love was complete — a book that encapsulates the shared journey and cherished memories of Patrow and Dave.
空气中弥漫着期待与紧张的氛围，她轻声问道：“他会不会是戴夫呢？”一个简单的“是”确认了她的猜想。仅仅听到他的名字，她就忍不住朝戴夫奔去。看到他熟悉的脸庞，她的泪水止不住地涌出。“放轻松点，我们需要一些放松，”帕特洛安慰她。“为什么不开始一个创意项目呢？”他建议道。“我设想了一个平台，每个人都可以在上面展示自己的才华。”
“想象一下这本书会有多精彩，”戴夫兴奋地说。他们毫不犹豫地开始收集灵感内容。戴夫利用他的摄影技巧，主动提出捕捉精髓，并将它们编入书页中。在适当的时候，他们的爱心之作完成了——这是一本封装了帕特洛和戴夫共同旅程和珍贵记忆的书。
范文一与范文二：优化改写理由供参考
1.“A blend of anticipation and jitters filled the air” 用词更高级，营造了一种期待与紧张交织的氛围，比原先的“mixture of excitement and nervousness”更富有文学色彩。“Confirmation came in a simple 'Yes.'” 增加了句子的动态感，使得对话更加生动。
2.“The mere mention of his name sent her dashing towards Dave.”“dashing”比“ran”更能传达出女主角急切的心情。
3.“her tears flowed uncontrollably”“flowed uncontrollably”比 “couldn't hold back her tears”更能形象地描述女主角泪流满面的情景。
4.“Patrow comforted her”— 直接点明了帕特洛的安慰行为，使得句子更加简洁明了。“Why not embark on a creative project ” “embark on”比原先的“doing some work projects”听起来更加正式和有计划性。
5.“I envision a platform where everyone can showcase their talents” “envision”和“showcase”两个词提升了句子的层次，使之听起来更有远见和创意。
6.“Leveraging his photography skills, Dave offered to capture the essence and weave them into the book's pages” “leveraging”和“weave”两个词使得句子更加专业和流畅。
7.“In due course, their labor of love was complete” “labor of love”这个短语增加了感彩，强调了这本书是他们心血的结晶。
8.“encapsulates the shared journey and cherished memories of Patrow and Dave” “encapsulates”和“cherished memories”提升了句子的表达效果，使之更加感人和深刻。

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