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24太原市高一下英语期中作文解读与示范
第一节 (满分10分)
假定你是李华，你校外语节的演讲主题是“低碳生活，绿色行动”，请你写一篇号召“光盘行动”的英文演讲稿参赛，内容包括：1.活动意义；2.提出倡议。
注意：
词数60左右，开头已给出；
2.为使行文连贯，可适当增加细节。
Dear Friends,
I'm Li Hua, from Class 8. I'm giving this speech today to call on everyone to take part in the Clear Your Plate campaign. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________
行文与示范：
战略：方向——人与自我（校园话题——绿色行动演讲——对接B2U5环境保护）
战术：内容——1.意义（题设内容汉语）；2.倡议（角度1：点多少吃多少——对接2022全国1卷B芝麻菜；角度2：鼓励更多人加入）；3.勿忘收尾（呼吁）
Dear Friends,
I'm Li Hua, from Class 8. I'm giving this speech today to call on everyone to take part in the Clear Your Plate campaign. It will definitely help us develop a consciousness of adopting low-carbon lifestyle and green actions in our daily life. Just taking the following simple steps, each of us could live in closer harmony with our environment. Firstly, it is useful for us to reduce waste by asking the school canteen to not include the side dish we won’t eat. Secondly, we are required to encouraged more people around us, like our relatives and friends to join the campaign. I believe only in this way can we see more clear waters and green hills in the near future. （5句）
锦言妙语：
1....的意识——consciousness of
2.过低碳生活与采取绿色行动——adopting low-carbon lifestyle and green actions
3.非谓语做状语——Just taking the following simple steps
4.与环境和谐相处——live in closer harmony with our environment
5.it形式主语——it is useful for us to do
6.应该做——are required to do
7.部分倒装——only in this way can
点评：
本次高一下期中的小作文，结构与逻辑比较清晰，话题为熟悉的环境话题，正好与B2U5正文的内容契合。同时命题的要求与当下的新课标命题保持一致，除了字数60字（高考为80字）少一点外，别的差异不但（建议：可以按照高考要求进行行文与练手）。
范文亮点：
I'm giving this speech today to call on everyone to take part in the Clear Your Plate campaign.
运用了不定式做目的状语。
It will definitely help us develop a consciousness of adopting low-carbon lifestyle and green actions in our daily life.
运用了一般将来时。
Just taking the following simple steps, each of us could live in closer harmony with our environment.
运用了分词短语作状语。
Firstly, it is useful for us to reduce waste by asking the school canteen to not include the side dish we won’t eat.
运用了形式主语以及定语从句。
Secondly, we are required to encouraged more people around us, like our relatives and friends to join the campaign.
运用了被动语态。
I believe only in this way can we see more clear waters and green hills in the near future.
运用了倒装。
24太原高一下期中读后续写解读与示范
第二节(满分15分)
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
人与自我——问题解决——对接B3U1
My little brother Peter and I got permission from our parents to camp in a field close to our farm. But, being adventurous boys, we knew it would be more exciting to camp in the woods that lay beyond the river. Excited, we went away with our tent and food.
Carrying our heavy load, we walked along the riverbank, hardly noticing the distance or the burning sun. We were eager to reach our destination before lunchtime. Along the way, we saw some birds searching for food around a fallen tree trunk. As we entered the cool, shadowy woods, we began to search for a suitable camping spot. Peter wanted to stay close to the river at the edge of woods, but I insisted that we camp further away. Unwillingly, Peter followed me deeper into the woods. "This is really a wonderful setting!" I said in excitement. We put up our tent, and settled down to eat the sandwiches we had made. About an hour later, we decided to find our way back to the river to catch some fish.
注意：
1.续写词数应为100个左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1
“Are you sure that this is the right way ” Peter asked. __________________________________________________
第一段续写：“你确定这是正确的路么”皮特问。——本段提示可知：兄弟两人迷路了。同时结合二段提示，继续可以得知：兄弟两人最终还是找到了正确的方向。因此，本段续写的关键在于面对迷路时，兄弟两人的反应与应对，为了更好地体现冲突，可以通过兄弟两人来设计反差，同时为二段的主题升华做铺垫。——参考词汇：Peter；woods；riverbank；fallen tree trunk；find our way back；catch fish
行文与示范：
Paragraph 1
“Are you sure that this is the right way ” Peter asked. Hearing the question, I looked around and immediately a terrible fact came to my mind that we lost in the woods. I tried to hide my fear. Still, I was betrayed by my trembling body language. Out of my imagination, Peter didn’t complain about me but comforted me, then carefully searching some clues we had left. It took both of us a long time to finally find the fallen tree trunk and the riverbank. Although it was impossible to catch fish, finding our way back home really taught me a lot.（6句）
Paragraph 2
Returning home, we couldn't wait to tell the anxious parents about our adventure story. _____________________
第二段续写：回到家，我们迫不及待地告诉焦急的父母我们的冒险故事。——本段续写的核心在于，对于发生的迷路事件再次回顾，父母如何从焦急到不焦急的反应变化，从侧面反应出我们成长与冷静处事的态度。——参考词汇：woods；Peter
行文与示范：
Paragraph 2
Returning home, we couldn't wait to tell the anxious parents about our adventure story. From their eyes and facial expressions, I could feel how much they loved us in such a committed state that when they hugged us, I still felt their hearts beat strongly. After a while of silence, they burst into laughter, affirming what we had done when being lost in woods was correct. Then they further praised Peter for keeping calm when something incident occurred, which at that moment taught me a lifelong lesson that no matter what challenges I might encounter in my life, I could bear in mind that a clear mind was a must.（3句）
点评：
本次高一下期中的读后续写，使一篇典型的人与自我（问题解决）主题，与同步课本B3U1话题密切关联。从内容的层面而言，主题明确，立意鲜明，通过兄弟两人行事风格的差异，把两人的性格区分的淋漓尽致，为问题的解决与“我”的成长与升华做好了内容铺垫，是一篇不错的命题。
续写作文：
Paragraph 1
“Are you sure that this is the right way ” Peter asked. Hearing the question, I looked around and immediately a terrible fact came to my mind that we lost in the woods. I tried to hide my fear. Still, I was betrayed by my trembling body language. Out of my imagination, Peter didn’t complain about me but comforted me, then carefully searching some clues we had left. It took both of us a long time to finally find the fallen tree trunk and the riverbank. Although it was impossible to catch fish, finding our way back home really taught me a lot.（6句）
Paragraph 2
Returning home, we couldn't wait to tell the anxious parents about our adventure story. From their eyes and facial expressions, I could feel how much they loved us in such a committed state that when they hugged us, I still felt their hearts beat strongly. After a while of silence, they burst into laughter, affirming what we had done when being lost in woods was correct. Then they further praised Peter for keeping calm when something incident occurred, which at that moment taught me a lifelong lesson that no matter what challenges I might encounter in my life, I could bear in mind that a clear mind was a must.（3句）
续写亮点：
Hearing the question, I looked around and immediately a terrible fact came to my mind that we lost in the woods.
运用了现在分词短语作状语。
Still, I was betrayed by my trembling body language.
运用了方式状语。
Out of my imagination, Peter didn’t complain about me but comforted me, then carefully searching some clues we had left.
运用了现在分词短语作状语。
It took both of us a long time to finally find the fallen tree trunk and the riverbank.
运用了形式主语it。
Although it was impossible to catch fish, finding our way back home really taught me a lot.
运用了主从复合句，让步状语从句。
Returning home, we couldn't wait to tell the anxious parents about our adventure story.
运用了现在分词短语作状语。
After a while of silence, they burst into laughter, affirming what we had done when being lost in woods was correct.
运用了现在分词短语作状语。
Then they further praised Peter for keeping calm when something incident occurred, which at that moment taught me a lifelong lesson that no matter what challenges I might encounter in my life, I could bear in mind that a clear mind was a must.
运用了非限制性定语从句。

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