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(共14张PPT)
Sally’s birthday was approaching, and the excitement that usually filled her heart was now replaced with disappointment and stress. Turning eleven was a big deal, and she had always celebrated it with a grand party surrounded by her friends. However, this year was different. The burden of excessive homework and her parents’ struggling business weighed heavily on her, forcing Sally to make the difficult decision of not having a birthday party, even though it was an event she enjoyed dearly every year.
One day, during break, her best friend, Jane, with a curious look in her eyes, approached. “Are you going to have a birthday party this year ” Jane asked, sensing Sally’s sadness.
“No,” Sally sighed and replied sadly, “There’s just too much going on and my parents are going through financial difficulties.”
She smiled weakly, trying to conceal her immense disappointment and stress, but Jane saw through her pretence (假装) easily. Jane nodded thoughtfully and did not say anything. After the break, Sally saw her talking to one of their classmates, Sarah, secretively. Curious, Sally went over to them, but as soon as Jane saw her, she quickly walked away. Sally was startled by Jane’s strange actions and turned towards Sarah.
“What did she say ” Sally asked.
However, Sarah simply shrugged and walked away with Jane, leaving Sally standing there, feeling left out and anxious.
What is happening Sally wondered anxiously. Are they keeping something from me
As Sally’s birthday drew nearer, Jane was often found chatting softly with her other classmates. Whenever Sally went over to them, they would just walk away or tell her that they were talking about a secret which Sally was not allowed to know. Jane has never kept secrets from me before, Sally thought. Her heart fell. Even her friends were distancing themselves from her! She swung between confusion and sadness with each passing moment, desperately trying to figure out what was happening. Why were her friends distancing themselves from her And what were they hiding
【情节分析】Sally的11岁生日马上就要到了，她自己非常激动并且也十分期待。然而，繁重的学业，加上父母亲的财政危机，等原因，她不得不做出一个艰难的决定——今年不过生日。她感到十分悲伤。但是，她的好朋友Jane察觉了此事，于是和班上同学精心为Sally准备了一场生日聚会，在生日这天，给Sally一个惊喜。
who Sally, Sarah and Jane, other classmates
Where Classroom
When Before and on the day of Sally's birthday
what Her classmates prepared a birthday party for her
How They secretively prepared a birthday in the classroom, waiting for Sally.
Why Sally’s burden of excessive homework and her parents’ struggling business
Plot
语言：
1. 注意拼写，语法错误，时态错误，不规范用法。
多写高级句式： 非谓 、独立主格、 定从、 名从、 倒装、 强调
多从原文找线索，利用相关词汇，提高与原文的契合度
内容：
不随意添加人物：老师，父母
不随意变换地点
少一点对话和心理描写
注意
书写工整，卷面干净
字数满150
Paragraph 1: On the day of Sally's birthday, she went to school and found her classroom in total darkness.
How did Sally feel and what did she do (puzzled, switch on the lights)
What happened to her classmates (sing in chorus, clap hands, present the cake)
What was Sally’s reaction seeing the secret birthday party (moved, astonished)
Paragraph 2: Tears sprang from Sally's eyes and her face broke into a radiant smile.
What did Sally do express her gratitude (speechless, hug, bow, extend her gratitude)
What’s her classmates’ reaction (hand their gifts)
What’s the theme of the story (love, friendship)
必写高级句式： 非谓 、独立主格、 定从、 名从、 倒装、 强调
2. 多从原文找线索，利用相关词汇，提高与原文的契合度
How to write
设计示例：P1： 描写对象——Sally、 朋友同学们Sally： 好奇 困惑，走进教室 试图开灯同学们：亮起灯 欢呼 从角落窜出 表达祝福 拍手 唱歌 拿着蛋糕走进Sally环境：教室精心布置 生日蛋糕放在桌上Sally：明白了一切
P2: 描写对象——Sally、JaneSally：激动惊讶 语塞Jane：走进 拥抱 说话（具体语言内容 结合文章线索设置，最好能突出文章中心主旨）Sally：感动；通过语言+动作（鞠躬等）表达感谢感悟: 对友情的感悟谨记：
情节设计
On the day of Sally’s birthday, she went to school and found her classroom in total darkness.A wave of confusion washed over（(情绪)突然而深刻地袭来）her as she stepped hesitantly into the room, her heart pounding. She reached for the light switch, but before her hand could find it, a chorus of（一片...声；齐声；in chorus齐声地，一起地）voices broke the silence. “Surprise!” Her classmates, led by Jane, jumped out from all sorts of hiding places. With the room flooded with light, Sally’s eyes widened in surprise and disbelief. The classroom was decorated with balloons and streamers（彩带）. A beautiful cake sat（被放在）on the teacher’s desk, and in the corner, a pile of presents waited to be unwrapped.
Para.1
Tears sprang from Sally’s eyes and her face broke into a radiant smile. She turned towards Jane, who was grinning from ear to ear. “We knew you couldn’t have a party this year, so we decided to bring the party to you,” Jane said, her eyes twinkling with mischief（眼里闪烁着调皮神色）. The cloud of confusion lifted from Sally’s mind as she realized that her friends hadn’t been distancing themselves from her and they were planning this surprise all along. The sadness that had been haunting her disappeared, replaced with joy and gratitude. As she cut the cake, Sally realized that this was indeed a grand birthday party, just like the ones she used to have.
Para.2
Overwhelmed by enormous puzzle, she reached out her hand to turn on the light. （非谓语）
All of a sudden, a flicker of flame lit up the whole room which was decorated with colorful ballons and ripples. （定从）
One look and she knew what her classmates were up to.
With an elegant cake held in her hands, Jane approached Sally, exclaiming, “Happy birthday!” （非谓语）
Meanwhile, an amazing choir of “Happy birthday” echoed in the room.
Never did she thought that her classmates would secretively prepare such a grand and delicate birthday party to her. /It never entered her mind that…（倒装）
Covering her mouth with her hands, she stood rooted to the ground, with eyes wide open, speechless. （非谓语）
At that time, the former disappointment and stress were replaced with immerse exhilaration and thrill. （被动）
Sally blew the candle and made a wish, the crowd bursting into thunderous applause and cheers. (独立主格)
She threw herself into Jane’s arms and hugged her tightly, said in a choked voice, “Thank you! But for you, I wouldn’t have such a grand party. It was the most unforgettable birthday that I had ever experienced.”（虚拟语气，定从）
Jane whispered smilingly, “That’s what friends are for.”
Sally’s arms were stuffed with exquisite gifts, tears blurring her eyes. (独立主格)
With friends’ company and encouragement, Jane knew she had the courage to conquer every obstacle in life.
Paragraph 1: On the day of Sally‘s birthday, she went to school and found her classroom in total darkness.
1. A strong sense of puzzle overwhelmed her when she stepped into the classroom.
With caution, she felt her way towards the switch, her heart racing(独立主格).
2. But before her hand could reach for it, a chorus of the “Happy Birthday” song emerged.
3. Suddenly, the lights were switched on, and her classmates, together with Jane, showed up out of nowhere.
4. Sally stood rooted to the spot, with her eyes wide in disbelief(with复合结构).
5. Like magic, the classroom was flooded with colorful balloons and streamers(彩带), and on the teacher’s desk was a fancy and attractive birthday cake(倒装).
6. Her classmates would organize a surprise birthday party for her, which was her wildest dream(定从).
Paragraph 2: Tears sprang from Sally‘s eyes and her face broke into a radiant smile.
1. Full of delight and gratitude, she embraced each of her classmates tightly.
2. For a while, the classroom burst a ripple(波纹，一阵阵) of laughter and the sound of soft music lingered(流连) in it.
3. The disappointment and stress that had put on her for weeks was swept away.
4. Surrounded by the warmth and love of friendship(非谓语), Sally was aware that it was a moment she would value and it would engrave(铭记，深深印入) in her life.
5. However, words failed her when he turned and offered her heartfelt thanks to Jane.
6. Jane approached and handed her a unique gift, staring at her with a twinkle in her eyes (非谓语).
7. Tears of gratitude rolling down(独立主格), she knew that no matter what troubles she may come across, she would always have her friends by her side(宾从).

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