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2020年新高考Ⅰ卷
读后续写分析
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试卷续写材料呈现
The Meredith family lived in a small community. As the economy was in decline, some people in the town had lost their jobs. Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet. People were trying to help each other meet the challenges.
Mrs. Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. She knew they had problems, and they needed all kinds of help. When she had time, she would bring food and medicine to them.
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One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, who took care of him and could not go out to work, and their little boy. The little boy—his name was Bernard—had interested her very much.
“I wish you could see him,” she said to her own children, John, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help to his mother. He wants very much to earn some money, but I don’t see what he can do.”
试卷续写材料呈现
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After their mother left the room, the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I wish we could help him to earn money,” said Clara. “His family is suffering so much.”
“So do I,” said Harry. “We really should do something to assist them.”
For some moments, John said nothing, but, suddenly, he sprang to his feet and cried, “I have a great idea! I have a solution that we can all help accomplish (完成).”
试卷续写材料呈现
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试卷续写材料呈现
The other children also jumped up all attention. When John had an idea, it was sure to be a good one. “I tell you what we can do,” said John. “You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us Well, we can make popcorn (爆米花), and put it into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.”
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试卷续写要求
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too. ________________
With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. ___________________________
词汇积累
make ends meet 收支相抵；勉强维持生计
a great deal of + 不可数名词 “大量的…”
(a great of time 大量时间)
文章大意
文章主要讲述了The Meredith family一家 在经济萧条期间通过制作爆米花并且鼓励邻居小男孩Bernard售卖爆米花来帮助其赚钱的故事。该故事围绕“互帮互助”这一主题展开。
文本分析
梳理原文
梳理原文（记叙文五要素）
The Meredith family and Bernard
One morning
In a small community
The Meredith family: kind → warm-hearted → sympathetic → helpful
Bernard: helpful → upset → eager → grateful
The Meredith family helped Bernard to earn money for his family
Who
When
Where
How
(emotion)
What
(main idea)
读五要素
情节+情感分析
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情节
情感
交代背景，经济萧条下，人们的生存现状。
人们都在互相帮助，充满斗志
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情节
情感
善良的Mrs. Meredith开始想办法救济穷人。
内心善良，举止有爱
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情节
情感
Mrs. Meredith对一个穷人家小孩Bernard产生兴趣。
父亲病卧在床，母亲无法工作，Bernard内心压力巨大
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情节
情感
Mrs. Meredith询问孩子们该如何帮助Bernard 去赚钱。
善良的孩子们兴奋激动热情讨论
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情节
情感
孩子们讨论决定制作爆米花并且让Bernard去派送从中赚钱。
终于想出了解决方案，内心激动。
续写段1.
情节
情感
①描写Mrs. Meredith是如何赞同并鼓励孩子们行动的；
②结合续写段2的既给收据推断出，这里还需要描写Mrs. Meredith都领着孩子们做了哪些准备工作
孩子们既激动又兴奋。
When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too. ______________
续写段2.
情节
情感
①描写Bernard售卖爆米花的过程。（动作/语言）②根据读后续写的“happy ending”原则，这里还需要描写出Bernard售卖爆米花是效果的，成功转到了一些钱③升华主旨：互相帮助，助人为乐。
Bernard对The Meredith family的感激之情
With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. _________________________
句子衔接
（使用“TEAM”框架）
读后续写“TEAM” 框架
T: transitional sentence 衔接句
E: environment/emotion 环境/情感描写
A: action 动作描写
M: monologue/conversation 内心独白/对话
续写小贴士：
第一段
When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too. ______________________________
①（衔接句）
She nodded with a smile and encouraged her three children, “ Let’s get started!”
描写Mrs. Meredith 对孩子们的赞同
②（心理描写）
The children were all very thrilled about making popcorn.
描写孩子们做爆米花的激动心情
③（动作描写）
描写孩子们做爆米花的准备过程
John went to the local supermarket to buy some paper bags for popcorn while Clara and Mrs. Meredith carried a big box of corn back together.
④（动作描写）
Mrs. Meredith taught the children to make popcorn in patience, as a result, they can make popcorn successfully.
描写Mrs. Meredith 教孩子们做爆米花
⑤（动作描写）
描写孩子们送爆米花去找Bernard的过程
They put the popcorn in the paper bags, headed for Bernard’s home and told Bernard how to sell the popcorn.
⑥（衔接句）
Thrilled and grateful, Bernard could hardly wait to have a try.
与第二段首句相衔接
第二段
With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. _________________________________________
①（衔接句）
He placed the bags of popcorn on his bike, and took them around to the houses, calling out “Delicious popcorn! Only 5 dollars!”
描写Bernard如何售卖爆米花
②（心理描写）
People were curious about the little who selling popcorn.
描写周围人们的好奇心理
③（动作描写）
描写人们买爆米花的过程
People gathered around him and began to buy some bags of popcorn. Later, all the popcorn was sold out.
④（动作描写）
Bernard sold popcorn successfully and he earned some money for his family. He held Mrs. Meredith’s hands tightly to expressing his gratitude for their help.
描写Bernard对Mrs. Meredith 一的感激动作
⑤（对话描写）
描写Bernard表达感激的话语
“No matter when or where, we need to help each other, which is the human kindness.” Mrs. Meredith smiled.
⑥（升华主旨）
Gifts of roses, hand there are lingering fragrance.
升华主旨“赠人玫瑰，手留余香”
When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too. She nodded with a smile and encouraged her three children, “ Let’s get started!” The children were all very thrilled about making popcorn. John went to the local supermarket to buy some paper bags for popcorn while Clara and Mrs. Meredith carried a big box of corn back together. Mrs. Meredith taught the children to make popcorn in patience, as a result, they can make popcorn successfully. They put the popcorn in the paper bags, headed for Bernard’s home and told Bernard how to sell the popcorn. Thrilled and grateful, Bernard could hardly wait to have a try.
With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. He placed the bags of popcorn on his bike, and took them around to the houses, calling out “Delicious popcorn! Only 5 dollars!” People were curious about the little who selling popcorn. People gathered around him and began to buy some bags of popcorn. Later, all the popcorn was sold out. Bernard sold popcorn successfully and he earned some money for his family. He held Mrs. Meredith’s hands tightly to expressing his gratitude for their help. “No matter when or where, we need to help each other, which is the human kindness.” Mrs. Meredith smiled. Gifts of roses, hand there are lingering fragrance.
Thank you ~

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