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读后续写动作描写之动作链与动作面得构建
PART ONE
01
构造动作“链”
动作“链”与动作“面”
动词是英语语言中的主角，很多语句都包含有动作的描写。但我们在描写动作的时候往往会有个毛病，那就是动作描写太过于单薄。那么如何将动作构建的饱满呢 要想动作描写写得生动而有画面感，主要两种思路：构建“动作链”与“动作面”。
动作链：把一个动作结果拆分成一连串得细微动作，让动作描写既丰富又生动。
动作面：同一个场景，多镜头描述，把不同得镜头剪接在一起。构成一个饱满得动作画面。
对比动作描写
1.He took a taxi to the police station.
2. He flagged down(挥手示停) a taxi, jumped in with a suitcase and said to the driver, "Go to the police."
构造动作链句式:
1、主语+动作A+动作B and 动作C（三个并列谓语，动作依次发生）
2、Having done…, 主谓宾（表示先做了某事，再发生核心动作）
【示例】He took a taxi to the police station.
分解成动作链：他拦下一辆的士，拿着手提箱跳进去冲着司机说，“去警局”
He stopped a taxi, jumped in with the suitcase and told the driver, “Go to the police station, please.”
例句1：The singer began to sing.
翻译：歌手瞥一眼观众，深呼吸一下，就开始唱起来。
【仿写1】The singer glanced at the audience, took a deep breath and began to sing.
例句2：The boys jumped into the lake to play.
翻译：男孩们兴奋地跑到湖边，脱下衣服，跳入湖中玩耍。
【仿写2】The boys excitedly rushed to the lake, quickly took off their clothes and jumped into the water to play.
例句3：She hugged her son tightly.
翻译：她冲上前，跪下，把儿子抱在怀里。
【仿写3】She dashed forward without hesitation, knelt down and gathered her son into her arms tightly.
【示例】在银行排队等了一个小时后，这个女人变得不耐烦，然后离开了。
Having waited in line for an hour at the bank, the woman grew impatient and left.
例句1：After having queued for 3 hours, he was told that the tickets had been sold out.
翻译：排了三个小时队后，他被告知票卖完了。
【仿写1】Having queued for 3 hours, he was told that the tickets had been sold out.
例句2：：She wandered aimlessly in the street for hours, then she felt a little hungry and wished for something to eat.
翻译：她在街上漫无目的地逛了好几个小时，感到有点饿，想吃点东西。
【仿写2】Having wandered aimlessly in the street for hours, she felt a little hungry and wished for something to eat.
例句3：：After he told the truth, he felt at ease in his mind and returned home with a lighter heart.
翻译：说出真相后、他心里轻松了很多、心情放松地回家了。
【仿写3】Having told the truth, he felt at ease in his mind and returned home with a lighter heart.
PART TWO
02
编织动作“面”
对比画面描写
1.It was an unforgettable time.
2. Gathering around the campfire, they feasted on BBQ, enjoying the unforgettable moment.
编织动作面句式:（应用好非谓语动词）
①Doing...，主句，doing...
② Done...，主句，doing...
③主句，doing...and doing...
④（With）...doing／done...，主句，doing...
①Doing...，主句，doing...
例句：他们站在空旷的路边；仰望着天空；感受着这份珍贵的平静。
Standing beside the empty road, they looked up into the sky, feeling the precious peace from within.
练习：围在营火旁，他们吃着烧烤，享受这一令人难忘的时光。
Gathering around the campfire， they feasted on BBQ，enjoying the unforgettable moment.
② Done...，主句，doing...
“Lucy举手回答问题”可以编制画面：
被老师的话所鼓舞，Lucy举起了手，小声说，“我来。”
例句：Encouraged by the teacher＇s words，Lucy raised her hand, whispering, “I'll do it.”
练习：被眼前的这一幕吓坏了，他一动不动，不知道该说什么。
Terrified by the scene in front of him， he was rooted to the spot， being at a loss what to say.
③主句，doing...and doing...
他欣喜若狂，在雨中又唱又跳。其中“又唱又跳”可以用 doing and doing 的结构
例句：He was overwhelmed with joy， singing and dancing in the rain.
练习：他激动地鼓掌，一边点头，一边微笑。
He clapped his hands with excitement， nodding and smiling.
④（With）...doing／done...，主句，doing...
例句：：贝贝坐在泳池边，双臂低垂，思考自己是白熊猫还是黑熊猫。其中“坐”和“思考”两个动作的发出者都是贝贝，但是“低垂”动作的发出者并不是贝贝，应该在drooping前面加上动作的发出者“双臂”。
例句：（With）his arms drooping，BeiBei sat beside the pool, wondering whether he was white or black.
“一个人靠在树上”这一简单的动作可以拆分为如下的一系列动作“面”：
练习：他【头耷拉】着，【背靠】在树上，【反思】之前发生的一切。
(With) his head drooping, he leaned on the tree, reflecting on what had happened.
【高考实战运用一】(2023年新高考I卷读后续写片段)
运用读后续写“动作链”技巧，把下面的语篇补充完整。
A few weeks later, I almost forgot the contest when the news came. To my surprise, I was informed that my essay had ranked first in the contest. A mix of excitement and doubt washed over me.________________________________________________（再三仔细检查后，我再也无法控制自己，立即与我的英语老师分享了这个消息。）Without her help, I would never have had the chance to obtain the honor. My face lit up with joy as I accepted the award, my
smile filled with pride. I felt a burst of gratitude welling up in my heart and surging though me.
【高考实战运用一】(2023年新高考I卷读后续写片段)
运用读后续写“动作链”技巧，把下面的语篇补充完整。
A few weeks later, I almost forgot the contest when the news came. To my surprise, I was informed that my essay had ranked first in the contest. A mix of excitement and doubt washed over me.Having double-checked it, I could no longer contain myself and promptly shared the news with my English teacher.（再三仔细检查后，我再也无法控制自己，立即与我的英语老师分享了这个消息。）Without her help, I would never have had the chance to obtain the honor. My face lit up with joy as I accepted the award, my
smile filled with pride. I felt a burst of gratitude welling up in my heart and surging though me.
【高考实战运用二】(2022年新高考I卷读后续写片段)
运用读后续写“动作链”技巧，把下面的语篇补充完整。
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me. Tapping him gently on the shoulder, I asked David what had caused him to decide to give up the opportunity. ____________________________________________（犹豫了一下，他低声回答：“你知道，我跑得很慢，而且我的跑步姿势很难看，这会让别人嘲笑我。”） ______________________________（我笑了笑，摇摇头说：“事实上，所有的人都尊重和钦佩那些克服自己的困难，勇敢地实现目标的人。”）“Really ” He seemed to be in doubt about my words. Seeing me nod firmly, he wore his big toothy smile again, his eyes sparkling with excitement and curiosity.
【高考实战运用二】(2022年新高考I卷读后续写片段)
运用读后续写“动作链”技巧，把下面的语篇补充完整。
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me. Tapping him gently on the shoulder, I asked David what had caused him to decide to give up the opportunity. Having hesitated for a moment, he replied in a low voice, “You know, I run very slowly and my running posture is ugly, which will result in others laughing at me.”（犹豫了一下，他低声回答：“你知道，我跑得很慢，而且我的跑步姿势很难看，这会让别人嘲笑我。”） I smiled, shook my head and said, “As a matter of fact, all the people respect and admire those who overcome their own difficulties and bravely achieve their goals.”（我笑了笑，摇摇头说：“事实上，所有的人都尊重和钦佩那些克服自己的困难，勇敢地实现目标的人。”）“Really ” He seemed to be in doubt about my words. Seeing me nod firmly, he wore his big toothy smile again, his eyes sparkling with excitement and curiosity.
(2021年新高考I卷读后续写片段)
运用读后续写“动作链”技巧，把下面的语篇补充完整。
In the morning, as scheduled,____________________________________ （双胞胎早早起床，踮着脚走进厨房，从袋子里舀出面粉）Once they set about making bread，they felt confused. At that time，___________________________________________________________（他们的爸爸溜进厨房，轻拍双胞胎的肩膀，柔声安慰道）“Don’t quit. You can overcome the challenge.” The twins made the bread smoothly. __________________________________________________________（他们端着早餐，向楼上走去，喊醒他们的妈妈）. With her eyes glittering with excitement, the mother was so content that she gathered her children into her arms.
(2021年新高考I卷读后续写片段)
运用读后续写“动作链”技巧，把下面的语篇补充完整。
In the morning, as scheduled,the twins got up early, tiptoed to the kitchen and scooped some flour out of the bag. （双胞胎早早起床，踮着脚走进厨房，从袋子里舀出面粉）Once they set about making bread，they felt confused. At that time，their father slid into the kitchen, patting the twins’ shoulders and comforting them in a soft voice，（他们的爸爸溜进厨房，轻拍双胞胎的肩膀，柔声安慰道）“Don’t quit. You can overcome the challenge.” The twins made the bread smoothly. Then they carried the breakfast, advanced upstairs and woke up their mother. （他们端着早餐，向楼上走去，喊醒他们的妈妈）. With her eyes glittering with excitement, the mother was so content that she gathered her children into her arms.
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