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One young excellent person went to apply for a position in a big company. After he passed the first interview, the director did the last interview and made the last decision. The director discovered from the CV that the youth’ s academic(学术的) achievements(成就)were excellent all the way, from the high school to the postgraduate(研究生) research.
The director asked, "Did you get any scholarships in school " The youth answered "No". The director asked, "Was it your father who paid your school fees The youth answered, "My father passed away when Iwas one year old. It was my mother who paid my school fees. The director asked,“ Where did your mother work " The youth answered, "My mother worked as a clothes cleaner. The director requested the youth to show his hands. The youth showed a pair of hands that were smooth and perfect.
The director asked, “Have you ever helped your mother wash the clothes before The youth answered. Never. My mother always wanted me to study and read more books. What’s more, my mother can wash clothes faster than me”. The director said. “I have are quest. When you go back today, go and clean your mothers hands, and then see me tomorrow morning. The youth felt that his chance of getting the job was high. When he went back, he happily requested mother to let him clean her hands. His mother felt strange, happy but with mixed feelings, and she showed her hands to the youth. The youth cleaned his mother’s hands slowly. It was the first time that he had noticed that his mother’s hands were so wrinkled, and there were so many cuts in her hands. Some cuts were so painful that his mother shivered(颤抖）when they were cleaned with water.
Para.1: Tears came down his cheek. This was the first time the youth had realized that it was this pair of hands that washed the clothes every day to enable him to pay the school fee. After finishing the cleaning of his mother's hands, the youth quietly washed all the remaining clothes for his mother. That night, Mother and son talked for a very long time.
The mother was very happy, while the son made his mind to have his mother lead a better life
Para. 2: The next morning, the youth went to the director's office. The director noticed the tears in the youth's eyes when he told him what had happened the day before and what his plan was. The director immediately told the youth that he was hired because his company needed a person who knew appreciation. Later on, this young person worked very hard and got high pay, which was really enough to make his mother and him live a happy life.
读后续写高分策略54321
滕州一中 张秀勤
技巧篇
实力不够技巧来凑
你的作文是如何从20+瞬间降到14+的
作文主题正确，情节符合逻辑的情况下，用词特别高大上，句子长且有各种语法结构，情节跌宕起伏……为什么还得不到高分？
考场作文的唯一阅读对象是阅卷老师，而且是中国人。
在书写工整的前提下，中国阅卷老师最喜欢什么作文：
1.课标词汇以内的单词灵活运用，课标外的词汇尽量少用，保证词汇阅卷老师非常熟悉，而且也常见。
2.文章句子不要搞得太复杂，没有老师喜欢一个句子写个三五行。
3.情节必须符合逻辑，不要盲目的制造夸张情节，随意增加人物。阅卷时间那么紧张，（2020年省续写阅卷30秒一篇）必须确保让人一眼就能明白你在说什么。
4. 语言有些同学为了让情节耐看，情节设计天马行空，言语絮絮叨叨，这是大忌。
添加人物：大人物写成就，小人物写品质。
高分作文特点：
词汇准确常见、
句式多样简洁、
情节合情合理（文章问题或冲突必须解决）、
构思不标新立异、
文章点明主题。
找人物---定关系
找情节---定故事线--明线
找冲突---定方案
找情绪变化---定情感线—暗线
找主题---定升华
5个寻找
Hands with shaking ;rub her hands ;lower his head ;
trip over the words ;
Stare at him with accusing eyes
Look hard at him
One young excellent person went to apply for a position in a big company. After he passed the first interview, the director did the last interview and made the last decision. The director discovered from the CV that the youth’ s academic(学术的) achievements(成就)were excellent all the way, from the high school to the postgraduate(研究生) research.
The director asked, "Did you get any scholarships in school " The youth answered "No". The director asked, "Was it your father who paid your school fees The youth answered, "My father passed away when I was one year old. It was my mother who paid my school fees. The director asked,“ Where did your mother work " The youth answered, "My mother worked as a clothes cleaner. The director requested the youth to show his hands. The youth showed a pair of hands that were smooth and perfect.
The director asked, “Have you ever helped your mother wash the clothes before The youth answered. Never. My mother always wanted me to study and read more books. What’s more, my mother can wash clothes faster than me”. The director said. “I have a request. When you go back today, go and clean your mothers hands, and then see me tomorrow morning. The youth felt that his chance of getting the job was high. When he went back, he happily requested mother to let him clean her hands. His mother felt strange, happy but with mixed feelings, and she showed her hands to the youth. The youth cleaned his mother’s hands slowly. It was the first time that he had noticed that his mother’s hands were so wrinkled, and there were so many cuts in her hands. Some cuts were so painful that his mother shivered(颤抖）when they were cleaned with water.
4个句子---定框架
第一段段首句 第一段段尾句
第二段段首句
第二段段尾句
衔接
衔接
衔接
Tears came down his check .
The next day morning, the youth went to the director’s office.
升华
如果你的目标就是18分，现在你可以进入待机状态。。。。。。
以下内容属于为目标21+同学的特供
瞪大眼睛，看准字体颜色我们马上进入
高分写作宝典
3个回应—定细节
1.Action /Words ------------Response
2.Conflict--------------------Solution
3.Negative-------------------Positive
Wash his mother’s hands

Wash his mother’s hands


the best virtue
Indifferent

interview

Para.1: Tears came down his cheek. This was the first time the youth had realized that it was this pair of hands that washed the clothes every day to enable him to pay the school fee. After finishing the cleaning of his mother's hands, the youth quietly washed all the remaining clothes for his mother. That night, Mother and son talked for a very long time.
The mother was very happy, while the son made his mind to have his mother lead a better life.
Para. 2: The next morning, the youth went to the director's office. The director noticed the tears in the youth's eyes when he told him what had happened the day before and what his plan was. The director immediately told the youth that he was hired because his company needed a person who knew appreciation. Later on, this young person worked very hard and got high pay, which was really enough to make his mother and him live a happy life.
At that time ,he realized the reason why
the director asked him to wash his mother’s hands.
麦肯锡的负责人有一次在电梯遇见自己的大客户的董事长，而董事长问麦肯锡的项目负责人，你能不能说一下现在的结果呢？由于该负责人没有任何准备，也无法从30层到1层的30秒内把事情说清楚，最终失去了这一重要客户。从此，麦肯锡要求公司员工凡事要在最短的时间内把结果表达清楚，凡事要直奔主题、直奔结果。麦肯锡认为，一般情况下人们最多记得住一二三，记不住四五六，所以凡事要归纳在3条以内。这就是如今在商界流传甚广的"30秒钟电梯法则"或称"电梯演讲"。电梯法则主要是告诉人们我们的任何计划都必须简单而有效，你的方案如果不能使本单位的员工能够听得懂，那么你的顾客一定不懂并且他们也不会买你公司的东西；此外，一个计划如果策划人在30秒内讲不清楚，说明计划有问题并且计划不具有操作性；同样，一个员工如果在30秒以内讲不清楚公司、所在部门以及他自己的任务分别是什么，那么这个员工就已经不称职了。
莫名其妙知识小讲堂
一个主题--定升华
突出人物的character : (sincerely, lovely, helpful...)
突出人与人/动物之间的relationship :kindness, help, , love accompany...
突出事后的lesson:
结尾点题很直观，但不要无病呻吟；结尾没有点题，那么场景中要有透露
点题位置：
怎样升华:
两个提分点
Bonus
Para.1: Tears came down his cheek. This was the first time the youth had realized that it was this pair of hands that washed the clothes every day to enable him to pay the school fee. After finishing the cleaning of his mother's hands, the youth quietly washed all the remaining clothes for his mother. That night, Mother and son talked for a very long time.The mother was very happy, while the son made his mind to have his mother lead a better life. At that time ,he realized the reason why the director asked him to wash his mother’s hands.
Para. 2: The next morning, the youth went to the director's office. The director noticed the tears in the youth's eyes when he told him what had happened the day before and what his plan was. The director immediately told the youth that he was hired because his company needed a person who knew appreciation. Later on, this young person worked very hard and got high pay, which was really enough to make his mother and him live a happy life.
1.Gratitude is the best virtue of all human beings. 2.If you show gratitude for what the others have done for you, it means that you’ve gotten the key to success. 3.He’s deeply grateful to what his mother has done.
一手好字—定成败
宋小宝
宋仲基
PK
让阅卷老师
先爱上你的颜，
再欣赏你的内涵！
丑陋的作文
没有机会
展示自己的灵魂
一种实力
在绝对的实力面前没有技巧可言
Last but not least
1．死记硬背，背得“死去活来”。什么叫做“死去活来”？先有“死去”的死记硬背，才有“活来”的灵活运用。
2. 书读百遍，其义自见。碰到阅读有障碍的文章，多朗读几遍，将有助于你对文章的深度理解。
3．语感=背诵的遍数。你为什么做不好完形、阅读和作文难，就是因为你从来没有进行“彻底背诵”。 “酒肉穿肠过”式的背诵要不得。
4．鹦鹉学舌，跟着录音背。影子练习（shadowing）又叫目的语或源语复述练习，是口译工作者练习同传技巧中常见的一种练习方式。
5．背过，不等于会背。背诵的最高境界是脱口而出，指到哪里，背到哪里。 6．让背诵成为一种学习习惯。背熟了还要再背，直至脱口而出。天天背，反复背，天天吃饭，天天背诵。
7．背诵童子功。背得越多，速度越快，这叫做“背功”。对自己要信心，自信能增加记忆效果。重复就是力量。重复创造奇迹。
8．有一种背诵，叫做“素读”。素读以记忆学习为中心，反复朗读烂熟于心。 9.背诵的三个层次：鹦鹉学舌、生搬硬套、创新使用。终极目标是灵活使用。 11．熟读唐诗三百首，不会作诗也会吟。这句话同样也适用于英语学习。
作文三阶段：
1.写作随性—天马行空
2.刻意训练— 语言生硬
3.无需刻意—娓娓道来
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