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Continuation Writing
第二节（满分 25分）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
My brother and I drove to a famous destination last week. Because we were so absorbed in our conversation that my brother took a wrong turn.
Unfortunately, this mistake took us towards a bridge and we had no way to turn back. Unwillingly, my brother paid the bridge fee and drove on. He was clearly annoyed by the mistake and the waste of $4.
Eventually, we reached an exit slipway. As we took it, my
brother noticed a car pulled over to the side of the road. A young guy was standing nearby trying to phone someone. I was busy trying to figure out which way we should go next but my brother pulled over and asked the guy if he needed any help. The young man had a flat tire and needed a wrench（扳手）to get it off.
My brother gave him a wrench, and then began to help him change the tire. We started getting to know the young man who was from a neighborhood nearby. He said that this was a bad week for him. Earlier he had gotten into a minor car accident, and now he had this flat tire on his way home from
work. But he called us “a breath of fresh air” and kept thanking us because he really would have been stuck if we hadn’t come along.
After we had finished the job, he thanked us again and pulled out $20 and tried to give it to us. “No,” I said, “We were never supposed to get on that bridge. We made a mistake, but now we know why we did. It was to help you. Thank you for turning our mistake into a chance to serve.”
Then he asked us where we were going and we told him the sight we were going to. He was surprised, saying the place was not far from his home.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右;
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
He invited us to stay in his home so that we could visit the place early the next day._____________________________
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The next day, we got up early to prepare our tour. __________________________________________________
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Story
when
where
who
what
how
why
last week
a famous destination，towards a bridge，an exit slipway，the guy’s home
主要人物I，my brother；次要人物a young guy
We helped a young man in trouble.
The young man had a flat tire.
1. 浅层信息理解
首先要审题：⑴体裁：_______；⑵人称：_______________；⑶主体时态：____________；主题语境：____________________ 。
记叙文
第一人称
一般过去时
人与自我之做人做事
一、准确理解材料，理清人物事件
2. 深层信息理解
①理清故事的发展线索（How）
PARAGRAPH（段落）
Behaviors（行为）
Topic（段意）
drove to，were so absorbed in，took a wrong turn，had no way to turn back，paid the bridge fee，drove on，was clearly annoyed
We took a wrong way on the way to a famous destination.
Para. 1 & 2
2. 深层信息理解
①理清故事的发展线索（How）
PARAGRAPH（段落）
Behaviors（行为）
Topic
（段意）
reached，noticed，pulled over，trying to phone，pulled over and asked，had a flat tire，needed，help him change，had gotten into，kept thanking
We helped the young man on an exit slipway.
Para. 3 & 4
2. 深层信息理解
①理清故事的发展线索（How）
PARAGRAPH（段落）
Behaviors（行为）
Topic（段意）
finished，thanked，pulled out，turning … into，asked，told，was not far
The young man thanked us for our help.
Para. 5 & 6
②挖掘文章人物的情感
I．主次人物分析
根据原文和续写两段首句可知，“我”和我的哥哥以及年轻人是第一、二段段续写的主要人物；年轻人的家人可能是第一段续写的次要人物。第一段主要围绕我和哥哥接受了年轻人的好意及在年轻人的家里发生的事展开，第二段根据首句及年轻人的性格，续写可围绕年轻人主动提出带着我和哥哥去目的地展开，年轻人的家人也可以出现，考生可以根据自己的故事情节进行合理安排。
②挖掘文章人物的情感
II．人物情感和性格分析
根据文中“我”和哥哥的动作（drove to，were so absorbed in，took a wrong turn，had no way to turn back），可以看出我们沉浸在对话中，注意力不集中，转错了弯，踏上了不能回转的路，从中可以看出我和哥哥健谈和开放外向的人物性格；由was clearly annoyed by the mistake and the waste of $4，可以总结出“我”和哥哥不情愿付了桥费，“我们”的心情是沮丧的。根据my brother的动作（pulled over，asked the guy if he needed any help，gave him a wrench, help him change the tire）可以看出哥哥乐于助人的人物性格。由年轻人called us “a breath of fresh air” and kept thanking us），以及（thanked us again and pulled out $20 and tried to give it to us） 可知年轻人是个懂得感恩的人物，为后文做我们向导提供可能，为最终一个错误可以转换成好事做了铺垫。
②挖掘文章人物的情感
III．场景分析
根据文本首句（drove to a famous destination）可知，故事开始于去著名景点的路上；由（this mistake took us towards a bridge，reached an exit slipway）可知，故事发展在上桥后，踏上了不能掉头的路；由段首句（He invited us to stay in his home，to prepare our tour）可知，故事“冲突”的解决应该发生在我们去年轻人家里和年轻人带着我们去景点的过程中。
②挖掘文章人物的情感
IV．动作分析
根据原文中主要人物“我”哥哥（drove to,were so absorbed in, took a wrong turn, had no way to turn back，paid the bridge fee，drove on，was clearly annoyed）的动作描写，可推测他们不是很富裕，但是很健谈，开放。根据my brother的动作（pulled over and asked the guy if he needed any help，gave him a wrench, began to help him change the tire可知哥哥尽管自己处于麻烦中但还帮助别人，他是一个乐于助人的人。因此，在续写的第一段中可写“我”和哥哥乐于接受年轻人的好意；根据the young man（thanked us again and pulled out $20 and tried to give it to us）可知，第一段的续写中应该着重续写年轻人邀请我们去他家，给与我们帮助，第二段中续写年轻人对我们帮助的回报。
②挖掘文章人物的情感
V．心理活动分析
根据原文中“我”和哥哥的心理描写was clearly annoyed可知，一开始我和哥哥是不愉快和沮丧的。但是通过年轻人回报的帮助，我们心情有了转变。第一段中可以写我们乐意接受年轻人的帮助；第二段的续写着重围绕年轻人带着我们参观景点展开描写，最后故事达到升华。
②挖掘文章人物的情感
VI．对话分析
本篇文章对话描写不是很多，主要是我说的话（“No,” I said, “We were never supposed to get on that bridge. We made a mistake, but now we know why we did. It was to help you. Thank you for turning our mistake into a chance to serve.”）但却起着画龙点睛的作用。
②挖掘文章人物的情感
VII．文章基调
续写第一段的内容需要围绕“我”和哥哥欣然接受了年轻人的好意，三人开车回了年轻人的家，在这里，年轻人的家人感谢我们对他们儿子的帮助，以及给我们准备了饭和房间。第二段围绕年轻人为了回报我们的好意，做我们的向导，给我们带来了一次有意义的旅行。最后点明主题：把错误变成了正能量，这得归功于我们平静和开放的心态。
②挖掘文章人物的情感
VII．文章的铺垫和伏笔
伏笔是作为在续写下文时可能出现的人物或事件的预先提示或暗示，目的达到“前有伏笔，后有照应”的效果。
文章前半部分My brother and I drove to a famous destination last week. Because we were so absorbed in our conversation that my brother took a wrong turn为后文年轻人做向导带我们去旅游提供了铺垫。Unfortunately，Unwillingly，annoyed说明了我和哥哥当时心情不愉快的，沮丧的，为后文通过帮助年轻人得到了回报，从而心情愉悦，进而为升华主题埋下伏笔。再根据He was surprised, saying the place was not far from his home为后文年轻人做向导回报我们埋下了伏笔。
②挖掘文章人物的情感
VII．文章的铺垫和伏笔
根据He (the young man) said that this was a bad week for him. Earlier he had gotten into a minor car accident, and now he had this flat tire on his way home from work可看出年轻人最近遇到的麻烦事比较多，终于得到了“我们”的帮助，为后文双倍回报他人做好了铺垫。对话“No,” I said, “We were never supposed to get on that bridge. We made a mistake, but now we know why we did. It was to help you. Thank you for turning our mistake into a chance to serve.”为升华主题做好了铺垫。
3. 整合本篇的故事情节和情感线索：
我”和哥哥一起开车去旅游，路上转错了弯，迷路了，但是路上遇到一个车坏了的年轻人。“我们”帮助了他，帮他换了轮胎，他不断感谢“我们”他为了回报我们的的帮助，邀请“我们”去他家，同时给“我们”做向导……。
二、分析续写段首，确定续写方向
由第一段首句内容He invited us to stay in his home so that we could visit the place early the next day（他邀请我们住在他家，这样我们第二天一早就可以参观那个地）可设问如下：
①How did we feel after hearing what he said?
②Did we accept his invitation?
③What did he do after we accepted his invitation?
④How did the family treat me?
⑤How did we spend the night?
二、分析续写段首，确定续写方向
根据第二段首句 The next day, we got up early to prepare our tour（第二天，我们起得很早，准备我们的旅行）可设问如下：
⑥What did we prepare for the trip ?
⑦How did the young man offer?
⑧What reaction did we have after the young man offered the help ?
⑨What was our visit like?
⑩What did I learn from the event?
根据六要素和自己的想象，借助文本资源，创设续写两段故事的情节。
Paragraph 1：[开端]“我们”接受了年轻人的邀请。[故事发展]来到年轻人家→他的父母欢迎我们→盛情招待我们→准备房间休息→度过了有意思的一晚。
Paragraph 2：[高潮]年轻人给我们做导游。[结局] 享受一次难忘的旅行。[感悟]是这次错误使我们有机会帮助了这个年轻人，是平静和开放的心态让我们心情愉悦。
三、运用和原文相一致的语言风格组织续写情节
所见
所闻
所感
所思
外貌描写
环境描写
动作描写
心理描写
情感描写
所见
所做
所感
Appearance
Surroundings
Behavior
(Verbs)
Emotions/ Feelings
通过细节描写呈现出情节的____________
跌宕起伏
UP---DOWN--UP
Use the descriptive techniques to enrich the details
四、创设情节，激活表达
温馨提醒：以上续写技巧无需面面俱到，要有所侧重，要根据文章具体需要恰当运用
Summary
第一段情节构建：
要与原文情节的衔接；
要与第一段的关键词衔接；
要与第二段段首语的衔接。
第二段情节构建：
要与第二段的关键词衔接；
要与文本开头的遥相呼应；
要“意料之外，情理之中”；
要根据具体语境弘扬真善美，凸显主题，升华精神。
五、高分范文
本文按照一定的时间顺序进行动作描写，文章层次清楚，上下文连贯。
He invited us to stay in his home so that we could visit the place early the next day. It was the most convenient way to visit the sight the next day, so we happily accepted his kind offer with gratitude. He jumped into his car, leading us to where he lived. After knowing what had happened, his parents expressed their heartfelt thanks for our helping their son. The family made a big feast to treat us and emptied a comfortable room for us to have a pleasant night.
用so引导并列句及副词happily和介词短语凸显“我”和哥哥的喜悦和感激之情
谓语动词jumped和现在分词leading做伴随状语，突出动作节奏感
使用介词短语after knowing作时间状语和what引导的宾语从句突出时间的先后和感激的理由
用精确性、富节奏的made和emptied一连串动作动词短语推动按时间顺序发展故事
五、高分范文
The next day, we got up early to prepare our tour. Not familiar with the destination, my brother and I were discussing which direction we should take when the young man came towards us, insisting on accompanying us on the trip. After having breakfast his parents had prepared with the young man, we set off together delightedly. With the local guide leading us, we were exposed to the charm of the tourist attraction, which became an unforgettable experience. It dawned on me that it was the mistake that gave us an opportunity to help the young man and it was the calm and open mind that lit up our day.
使用not familiar形容词作原因状语，使用were doing......when引导时间状语从句，现在分词insisting做伴随状语展现极强的前因后果画面感
使用介词After后接动名词having作状语和副词delightedly为后面的愉快旅行做好铺垫
使用With的复合结构， 恰当被动语态be exposed to及which非限制性定语从句，突出“我们”乐于助人得到了别人的回报
使用It dawned on me that......以及强调句it was ......that......，点明主旨，升华主题：是这次错误使我们有机会帮助了这个年轻人，是平静和开放的心态让我们心情愉悦。

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