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读后续写：电梯惊魂
When we were finally dismissed from the last class of the day,
the students streamed out of the classrooms. It was another boring day
after school, I dragged my feet home as I sighed. Yet another
uneventful day, I thought. little did l know that the day would take a
turn for the worse.
当我们最后一节课被开除时，学生们从教室里蜂拥而出。放学后
又是无聊的一天，我叹着气拖着脚回家。又是平静的一天，我想。我
不知道这一天会变得更糟。
The lift lobby(电柳闻) of my flat was old and dirty. The walls,
which were painted white, had been dirtied over many cars. I reached
my flat's lobby, and pressed the lift button and went in. Just then,
Mrs Lim, my elderly neighbour, hobbled(蹦跚) in. She looked ancient
with tissue paper white hair, wearing a faded old-fashioned dress. I
held the lift door open, flashing a friendly smile, and politely greeted
her. I asked her how she felt that day and pressed the buttons. She
thanked me for being so polite, then we were silent for the rest of
the ride.
电梯大厅(电柳闻) 我的公寓又旧又脏。许多汽车把漆成白色的墙
壁弄脏了。我走到公寓大堂，按下电梯按钮就进去了。就在这时，我
年迈的邻居林太太步履蹒跚(蹦跚) 她留着一头纸巾白色的头发，穿着
一件褪色的老式连衣裙，看起来很古风。我打开电梯门，露出友好的
微笑，礼貌地向她打招呼。我问她那天感觉如何，然后按了按钮。她
感谢我这么有礼貌，然后我们在剩下的旅程中保持沉默。
The lift fell down increasingly fast. There were loud clanking
sounds here and there while the lift grew slower and slower. My
heart beat hard and fast as my hands turned cold and wet with sweat.
Unfortunately, the lift came to an abrupt stop at the fifth floor.
1pressed the buttons hard several times, but it was of no help, The
lights on the buttons had gone out, It soon dawned on me that we
were trapped, An icy fear crept up my spine. Mrs Lim was
hysterical(歇斯底里).
电梯下降得越来越快。当电梯越来越慢的时候，到处都是巨大的
叮当声。我的手被汗水弄得又冷又湿，心跳得又快又猛。不幸的是，
电梯在五楼突然停了下来。我使劲按了几下按钮，但无济于事，按钮
上的灯熄灭了，我很快意识到我们被困住了，一种冰冷的恐惧爬上了
我的脊椎。林太太歇斯底里(歇斯底里).
“We will never get out!" she cried with her face pale. It had
become a colourless mask, I had no time to lose. I pressed the bell
in the lift immediately. The sound was surely deafening, but what
other choice did I have Mrs Lim burst into tears. I tried my very
best to comfort her, telling her that everything would be all right and
that we needed to find outhow to get out safely, Mrs Lim began
having trouble breathing, and I immediately helped her sit down and
loosened her collar.
“我们永远也出不去了！”她脸色苍白地喊道。它已经变成了一个
无色的面具，我没有时间浪费了。我立即按下电梯里的铃声。声音肯
定震耳欲聋，但我还有什么选择呢？林太太哭了。我尽力安慰她，告
诉她一切都会好起来的，我们需要找到安全的出口。林太太开始呼吸
困难，我立即帮她坐下，松开她的衣领。
Paragraph 1: Several minutes passed, but no help came. …
Paragraph 2: Bang! My hopes were lifted when I heard the
firefighters on the other side of the lift. …
本文需要考生写出在电梯遇险的紧急情况下如何有效应对并如何
帮助他人保持镇定共渡难关。如果考生平时生活知识面狭窄的话，就
不能很好地续写或续写出错误的情节(如使劲地叫喊和拍打电梯等)。
几种常见的错误做法是：
1. 哭喊救命。
2. 捶打电梯。
3.静坐干等。
4.期待上帝。
可采取的自救措施：
1.尝试用自己的手机拨打911求救，但电梯里信号可能不好。
2.按下五楼以下的所有楼层数字，以防电梯再次掉落。
3.不停地按电梯里的呼救铃(SOS bell) ，因为这时可能只有它发挥作用
才能引起救援人员注意。
原文中的细节不可忽视：
1. 根据文中开头几段描述，作者放学(国外一般是在下午4点左右)后到
了自家小区乘电梯回家突遇电梯故障，事故发生时应该是傍晚，电梯
里面还是有光的，不然"我"也不可能见到邻居太太的tissue paper white
hair和她的flashing a friendly smile等。
2.”我“不是因为天色昏暗看不清电梯间里的楼层数字或警铃而胡乱按键
(pressed the buttons blindly)。
3.不是"我“没有按到呼救铃，而是不停地按求救铃才得到对方的响应，
因为社区的后勤保障中心保安临时有事不在值班室值班。
4.接到呼救后，他们要与消防部门的人取得联系，不可能马上得到救援，
如果这时写救援仍然未到位，可达到欲扬先抑的效果。强烈的反差可
以使得文章情感线跌宕起伏，续写第一段结尾如果写出现”我们"的失
望和邻居老太的身体意识更糟，这样与续写第二段首句的衔接就更加
自然。 多米老师认为这个环节非常非常重要，必不可少。
5.邻居老太太的身体反应和情绪过度(对比“我”的沉着冷静，机智处事)，
不应该是邻居太太在电梯里指导我或安慰”我“。
6.从第二段的首句提示可知，本楼栋是双电梯，消防员来救援时从另外
一个电梯通过专业工具和技术进入受困电梯进行的救援。
原文配送范文
One possible version :
Several minutes passed,but no help came.The air-conditioning had
died out, and the lift became really stuffy.We were sweating buckets.
We tried to ring the emergency alarm again. Every second that passed
was painful.“Help!!!”I screamed at the top of my lungs,trying to get
someone's attention, A wave of despair washed over me,I felt like we
would never make it.In one last effort, l tried banging on the doors.
The next few minutes felt like hours as we waited in complete
silence.
Bang!My hopes were lifted when I heard the firefighters on the
other side of thelif door, Help was finally here! The brave firefighters
hit the doors open using their tools.It felt like a hundred pound
weight was lifted off me, and Mrs Lim thanked the heavens that
someone had come to our rescue. I made a sigh of relief when the
doors were finally opened and all this drama was over. The
firefighters praised me for helping Mrs Lim. I returned their praise
with gratitude and Mrs Lim thanked me and even gave me a hug.
下水作文：
Several minutes passed, but no help came. Tension and panic
overwhelmed the lift lobby. I kept pressing the bell button and made
sure all the buttons from one to five were on. I also begged Mrs.
Lim not to bang the walls to prevent the lift falling again or shout to
save energy. Suddenly a voice came over from the speaker inside the
lobby, "May I help you " "We were trapped!” I said in a crying tone.
"Got it! Just wait." After what seemed hours, they still didn't show up
and Mrs. Lim was almost passing out . My heart sank again.
(95 words)
Bang! My hopes were lifted when I heard the firefighters on the
other side of the lift. They finally came to our rescue! I supported
Mrs. Lim up and stood in the center of the lobby to escape being
hurt by the rescue tools as the firefighters instructed. A bright beam
of flashlight pierced into the lobby and suddenly the gate opened. Out
we were! Red blood slowly returned to Mrs. Lim's pale face. She
smiled at me, saying thanks repeatedly. I felt proud of my wisdom
and calmness. I had never imagined an uneventful day turned to such
a miraculous one. (85 words)

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