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续写：Mia第一次登台讲故事
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一
篇完整的短文。
It was the first week of Mia's middle school. The bell's ringing
brought her out of her daydreaming. She nervously gathered her books,
preparing to reach another classroom for the next new class.
Mia followed the other kids and rushed into the hallway. Others
walked in groups, chatted, and laughed, using the break to socialize.
Mia, instead, walked alone along the wall of the hallway, with her
head down. She was a shy girl, afraid to speak in front of other kids,
and didn't think others would like her.
Mia finally sat in Mr. Johnson's Language Arts class nervously.
“Welcome to Language Arts,” said Mr. Johnson. He told jokes as he
talked about English. Mia forgot to daydream and laughed along with
the rest of the class. “We'll have some fun with language,” he said.
“Just wait and see.”
Fun was far beyond what Mia desired. She just wanted to be
like other kids—running with friends in the hallway, laughing and
joking between classes. Reminded of her pimply(长粉刺)face, she felt
hopeless and disappointed.
“Take out a piece of paper,” the teacher continued, when pointing
at words on the blackboard. “Write for the next thirty minutes on this
topic.” Mia began writing crazily as idea after idea fought for
recognition in her head. The final result was a short story about a
beautiful beach house. As she wrote, she could smell the salty air,
hear the crashing waves and feel the pull of the sand beneath her feet.
For just a moment, she forgot where she was. She was lost in the
story.
“OK, pass your papers forward,” said the teacher. “Let's see what
we have.” For the rest of the class time, the teacher read each
individual work aloud. Mia originally thought it would be awkward.
However, she was gradually attracted by the excitement in the
teacher's voice. “He's actually enjoying this,” she thought. When the
class would be soon over, there were still fifteen students' papers not
read, including Mia's paper. Then, Mr. Johnson announced his decision,
asking these students to read their work themselves in front of the
class next class.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
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本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了Mia是一个害羞的女孩。由于脸上长满了青春痘，她期待能和同学自由玩耍但又害怕他们笑话。在语言艺术课上，Mr. Johnson让每个孩子写一个短故事，然后他当堂课读这些故事。最后留下十五个学生写的故事没有读并要求这些学生下次课自己上来读自己写的小故事。
A week later, the bell rang and the Language Arts class began again.
After Mia finished her reading. the clapping from her classmates continued for a long time.
1.段落续写：
①由第一段首句内容“一周后，铃声响起，语言艺术课又开始了。”可
知，第一段可描Mia上去读自己故事时刚开始很不自信，很紧张，通过
Mr. Johnson的帮助，她逐渐进入状态，同学们也聚精会神地听。
②由第二段首句内容“Mia读完后，同学们的掌声持续了很长时间。”可
知，第二段可描写同学们很喜欢Mia的故事，Mia对自己的成功感到震
惊和激动，从此她爱上了写作并逐渐自信了。
2.续写线索：Mia上台读故事紧张——Mr. Johnson缓解气氛——Mia顺
利读完自己写的故事——得到同学们认可——Mia爱上写作——Mia变
得更自信了
学过的微技能：
(1) 主题是明线(解决当下的矛盾：完成一次当众讲故事)与暗线
(Mia在同学们的积极反馈下和老师的鼓励下发现了自身的优点，获得
了自信，对自我能够更正确地认知)相结合
(2) 续写第一段的最后一句起着“承上启下”的作用，尤其需要精心构思
(3) 利用人物角色的切换来推动情节，但重点还是放在主角身上
(4) 非谓语动词(现在分词/过去分词/不定时 )，with结构
(5) 情绪出现--情绪变浓--情绪转换的固定句型
(6) 动作+情绪+语言
(7) 动作链拆解
(8) 无灵主语
(9) 结尾句：记忆之花，玫瑰花床，温暖阳光…或者反扣故事开头处的
某个细节
范文：
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_____.一周后，铃声响了，语言艺术课又开始了。
A week later, the bell rang and the Language Arts class began again
【读前，读中。主要人物是Mia，重点描述其“从害怕到鼓起勇气
到享受其中”的心理变化及动作，角色切换到老师和其他同学的反应】
1.其他的学生走上舞台，一个接一个地读着报纸，很快就轮到米娅了。
米娅垂头，心砰砰跳，她挪过人群，出汗的手紧握着报纸，身体晃动。
Other students went on the stage and read the papers one by one,
and soon it was Mia's turn.Head dropping and heart thumping, Mia
inched her way through the crowd, with her sweaty hands clutching
the paper, shaking.
【尽快介绍背景，引出主人公，切忌转弯抹角浪费笔墨；细节描
写“紧张”；使用现在分词作状语，with结构】
2.约翰逊先生感到她的紧张，他轻轻地拍了拍她的肩膀，直视着她的眼
睛：“不要怕。你能做到！”
Feeling her nervousness, Mr. Johnson patted her gently on the
shoulder and looked her straight in the eye, “Don't be afraid. You can
make it!”
【细节描写“安慰”；原因与上文衔接；使用现在分词作状语；使
用了动作+语言】
3.一种温暖和放松的感觉掠过她的全身，米娅深吸了一口气，眼睛盯着
报纸，开始阅读。米娅如此专注于她的故事，以至于她没有注意到观
众，被她精彩的故事所吸引，所有人都专心而安静地听着她的故事。
A sense of warmth and relaxation surging through her, Mia took
a deep breath, focused her eyes on the paper and began her reading.
So absorbed in her story was Mia that she didn't notice the audience,
attracted by her fantastic story, all listened to her attentively and
quietly.
【细节描写“放松”；使用独立主格结构；情绪+动作；动作链拆解；
细节描写“听众被吸引，认真倾听”与下一段“听众热烈鼓掌”合理衔接；
使用了so…that句式、过去分词】
___________________________________________________________________________________.米娅读完书后，同学们的掌声持续了很长一段时间。
After Mia finished her reading, the clapping from her classmates continued for a long time
【读后。主要人物是Mia，重点描述她在这次经历之后的感受和经
历对其影响】
1.当米娅从报纸上抬起眼睛时，她惊讶地发现每个人都兴奋地盯着她看。
米娅做梦也没想过会有如此积极的反应。一丝羞怯的笑容浮现在她感
到难以置信的脸上。
When lifting her eyes from the paper, Mia was astonished to find
everyone staring at her excitedly. It was beyond Mia's wildest dream
to expect such positive response. A timid smile crept and spread
across her unbelievable face.
【细节描写“惊讶”；使用分词作状语；细节描写“难以置信的惊喜”；
使用无灵主语】
2.那节课后，渐渐地米娅走路时会抬起头。与此同时，她继续写作，并
喜欢上在人们面前讲话。
After that class, Mia gradually lifted her head while walking. At
the same time, she kept writing and enjoyed speaking in front of
people.
【细节描写“自信后的变化”，“抬头、写作、说话”等细节与前文呼应】
3.正是这段经历和约翰逊先生的鼓励，让米娅从一个绝望的白日梦女孩
变成了一个更勇敢、更自信的女孩。
It was this experience and Mr. Johnson's encouragement that
turned Mia from a hopeless daydreaming girl into a braver and more
confident one.
【点明主题；与材料开头daydream呼应；使用强调句型】
最终自测：
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其他的学生走上舞台，一个接一个地读着报纸，很快就轮到米娅了。米娅垂头，心砰砰跳，她挪过人群，出汗的手紧握着报纸，身体晃动。
A week later, the bell rang and the Language Arts class began again
约翰逊先生感到她的紧张，他轻轻地拍了拍她的肩膀，直视着她的眼睛：“不要怕。你能做到！”
一种温暖和放松的感觉掠过她的全身，米娅深吸了一口气，眼睛盯着报纸，开始阅读。米娅如此专注于她的故事，以至于她没有注意到观众，被她精彩的故事所吸引，所有人都专心而安静地听着她的故事。
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After Mia finished her reading, the clapping from her classmates continued for a long time
当米娅从报纸上抬起眼睛时，她惊讶地发现每个人都兴奋地盯着她看。
米娅做梦也没想过会有如此积极的反应。一丝羞怯的笑容浮现在她感到难以置信的脸上.
那节课后，渐渐地米娅走路时会抬起头。与此同时，她继续写作，并喜欢上在人们面前讲话。
正是这段经历和约翰逊先生的鼓励，让米娅从一个绝望的白日梦女孩变成了一个更勇敢、更自信的女孩。
语料默写：
1.很快就轮到某人了________
2.垂头，心砰砰跳________
3.一点点挪过人群________
4.出汗的手紧握着…________
5.轻轻地拍了拍她的肩膀________
6.直视着她的眼睛________
7.一种温暖和放松的感觉掠过她的全身
8.________
9.深吸了一口气________
10.眼睛盯着…________
11.如此专注于她的故事，以至于…
____________
12.专心而安静地听着…________
13.从…抬起眼睛________
14.惊讶地发现________
15.某人做梦也没想过…________
16.一丝羞怯的笑容浮现在她感到难以置信的脸上。________
17.抬起头________
18.正是这段经历和某人的鼓励，让某人从一个…变成了一个更勇敢、
更自信的女孩。
________

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