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The dark sky , filled with angry , swirling clouds reflected Greg Ridley ' s mood as he sat on the stoop （门廊） of his building . His father's voice came to him again, first reading the headmaster's letter , then lecturing endlessly about his poor efforts in maths .
"I had to leave school when I was thirteen . That's a year younger than you are now. If I'd had half the chances you have . I'd ... And you want to play basketball That must be some kind of a joke . Now you just get into your room and hit those books ."
It was beginning to cool. Soon large drops of rain splashed onto his jeans. Down the block there was an abandoned house. Without much thought , Greg made a dash across the street and entered a room. Suddenly he heard a man's voice behind him ." What are you doing here "
" Who are you " Greg hardly recognized his own voice.
" I'm Lemon Brown ," came the answer.
He was an old man. It didn ' t seem that he was dangerous." You aren ' t looking for my treasure , are you " he asked.
" No. It is raining out ," Greg answered , smiling ." You have a treasure "
"Every man has a treasure ," Lemon Brown said ," You want to see mine "
" If you want to show it to me ," Greg
shrugged .
The old man carefully untied the strings, and revealed some yellowed newspaper clippings （剪报）。
Then he started telling the story of his life. He was a famous blues singer in the past. His wife died young , and his only son went abroad to work .
"I gave him these newspaper clippings that told him who I was , and where he came from. One time I came home , there was a letter saying that he got killed in an accident. It broke my heart . They sent back these clippings. That was my treasure , and when I gave it to him , he treated it just like that , a treasure ."
Lemon Brown put his rags in place and looked out of the window .
注意：
1．续写词数应为150左右；
2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
"You get on out of here and get yourself home ," said Lemon Brown .
When Greg was walking in the street , the night had warmed and the rain had stopped .
原文中文意译：
黑暗的天空中弥漫着愤怒的漩涡云，这反映了格雷格·雷德利的心情，他坐在他建筑的门廊里。他又听到了父亲的声音，先是读了校长的信，然后没完没了地讲他数学学得不好。
“我十三岁的时候不得不离开学校。那比你现在小一岁。如果我有你一半的机会的话。我会……你想打篮球吗？那一定是在开玩笑。现在你只要走进房间，看看那些书就行了。”
天开始凉了。很快，一大滴雨溅到了他的牛仔裤上。沿着街区往下有一座废弃的房子。格雷格不假思索地冲过街道，走进一个房间。突然，他听到身后有一个人的声音。“你在这里干什么？”
“你是谁？”格雷格几乎认不出自己的声音。
“我是莱蒙布朗，”回答说。
他是个老人，看起来并不危险。“你不是在找我的宝贝，是吗？”他问道。
“不，外面在下雨，”格雷格微笑着回答。“你有宝吗？”
“每个人都有一个宝藏，”莱蒙·布朗说，“你想看看我的吗？”
“如果你想给我看，”Greg耸耸肩。
老人小心翼翼地解开绳子，露出一些发黄的剪报。
然后他开始讲述自己的人生故事。他过去是一位著名的蓝调歌手。他的妻子英年早逝，他唯一的儿子出国工作。
“我给了他这些剪报，告诉他我是谁，他来自哪里。有一次我回家，有一封信说他在一次事故中丧生。这让我心碎。他们寄回了这些剪报。那是我的宝贝，当我把它给他时，他就这样对待它，一件宝贝。”
莱蒙·布朗把抹布放好，望向窗外。
主题：亲情。
框架：父子冲突---主人公邂逅老人---顿悟treasure含义。
故事设计需留意：
和老人的邂逅，告诉父亲了吗？不告诉更好写。否则容易内容重复。
情节和语言融合：多从原文找可以呼应的细节，如：天气和心情的情景交融；关键词treasure的复现和前后呼应；一些细节词的复现，如basketball, jeans, stoop, lecture等等。
官方范文:
“You get on out of here and get yourself home,” said Lemon Brown. Nodding his head, Greg followed the old man silently. When they reached the front door, the old man looked out first, saw the street was clear and told Greg to hurry home. Greg opened his arms and hugged the old man tightly. “Take care of the treasure of yours.” “That I’ll do,” said Lemon Brown, the wrinkles about his eyes suggested a smile. Then Greg walked into the darkness, the old man watching him from behind.
When Greg was walking in the street, the night had warmed and the rain had stopped. Greg didn’t even want to think how late it was. He thought ahead what his father would say and wondered if he should tell him about Lemon Brown. He thought about it until he reached his stoop and decided against it. Lemon Brown would be all right with his memories and his treasure. Greg pushed the button over the bell marked Ridley, thought of the lecture he knew his father would give him, and smiled.
参考范文1：
"You get on out of here and get yourself home," said Lemon Brown. “ I’ll be watching from the window so you’ll be all right,” he added, and went down the stairs behind Greg. When they reached the front door the old man looked out first, saw the street was clear and told Greg to scoot on home. “You sure you’ll be OK ” Greg asked. “Now didn’t I tell you I was going to east St. Louis in the morning ” Lemon Brown asked. “Don’t that sound OK to you ” “Sure it does,” Greg said. “Sure it does. And you take care of that treasure of yours.” “That I’ll do,” Lemon said, the wrinkles around his eyes suggesting a smile. “That I’ll do.”
When Greg was walking in the street , the night had warmed and the rain had stopped . Greg didn’t even want to think how late it was. He thought ahead of what his father would say and wondered if he should tell him about Lemon Brown. He thought about it until he reached his stoop, and decided against it. Lemon Brown would be OK, Greg thought, with his memories and his treasure. Greg pushed the button over the bell marked Ridley, thought of the lecture he knew his father would give him, and smiled.
参考范文2：
“You get on out of here and get yourself home,"said Lemon Bown. Hearing this, Greg frowned and murmured in a low voice. "But…But my father is angry with me... " Strangely, he poured out all his troubles to the old man he met for the first time: his favortite basketball---only a joke, in his father's eyes and his poor grades in maths. Listening silently, Lemon Brown stroked Greg's head and then said in a gentle tune. "You are lucky to be together with your father. That's your treasure." Seeing tears in Lemon Brown's eyes, Greg realized with a blinding flash what Lemon Brown truly meant." He thanked the old man and went out without hesitation.
When Greg was walking in the street, the night had warmed and the rain had stopped. All these put him in a light mood. He took a deep breath and quickened his pace towards his home. Upon seeing his father waiting anxiously on the stoop, Greg had a lump in his throat, tears welling up in his eyes. He approached his father and apologized in a choked voice. "Sorry, Dad. I will do my utmost to live up to your expectations. Basketball is my treasure and so are you ”. A little surprised but greatly relieved, his father smiled and locked his son in a tight embrance.
参考范文3
"You get on out of here and get yourself home,"said Lemon Brown. Grey lowered his head and murmured,“I don’t want to go home. My Dad will force me to study." Hearing this, Lemon Brow bent down and gazed at Grey's eyes,"He hopes that you can own a rosy future because you are his treasure. Now, go home. Your Dad might be looking for you anxiously. " Grey seemed to have understood and nodded his head with light flickering in his eyes. ”I am Dad 's treasure....." He repeated.
When Greg was walking in the steet, the night had warmed and therain had stopped. All of a sudden, he heard a loud voice."Grey! Grey! Where are you Come back, please!" That was Dad! Grey raced in the direction of the voice. Upon seeing each other, the two hugged each other tightly. Focusing on Dad's teary eyes, he was deeply ashamed. Dad squatted down and caught hold of Grey's hand, "I thought I would lose you, my honey. "Dad, you will never lose me. I am your treasure forever."

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