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（2024浙江首考续写题目）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Eva spent the first week of high school trying to keep her head above water. One of the major headaches for her was finding her way in the huge school building. It was a six-story building. On each floor, hallways stretched in four directions, leading to classrooms, laboratories, and teachers’ offices. Somewhere in the building, there was also a library, a cafeteria, and a gym.Having a poor sense of direction, Eva found it impossible to get around in such a huge building. All the different hallways and rooms were too much to think about, let alone commit to memory. She decided that she would memorize where her classes were and then pretend that the rest of the place didn’t exist.
In her fast P.E. class, Eva was shocked when Coach Pitt announced that everyone had to run one mile around the track outside. She searched the faces of her classmates for signs of panic. There was nothing she feared more than having to run a whole mile. To Eva, “a mile” was used to describe long distances. It was ten miles from her home to her grandfather’s, and that always seemed like a long way, even in a car!
When Coach Pitt blew his whistle (哨子), Eva figured she would be left in the dust. However, while some of her classmates edged ahead, others actually fell behind. “It’s just the beginning,” she thought. “I’ll come in last for sure.”
Soon Eva began to breathe hard, with her heart pounding and legs shaking. Feeling desperate, Eva started using a mind trick on herself. She stopped thinking about the word “mile.” Instead, she focused on reaching the shadow east on the track by an oak tree up ahead. Then she concentrated on jogging to the spot where the track curved (拐弯). After that, she tried to see if she could complete her first lap. One lap turned into two, then three, then four.
Paragraph 1: When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised.
Paragraph 2: Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building.
优秀范文1
Paragraph 1：When Coach Pitt said "Great work" to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised. Never had she thought that running a whole mile could be such a easy job for her. It occurred to her that it was the mind trick she used that enabled her to finish the course. So, after celebrating her success by completing another lap, Eva began to wonder whether the trick would work in other cases, such as ..., the huge school building! She couldn't remember how many times she had been lost in the building, struggling to find her way in the past week. Would her trick work Well, one wouldn't know before trying.
Paragraph 2：Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building. Eva started from the ground floor. Instead of concentrating on where to go, Eva focused on reaching the flower pot nearby the teachers’ offices, the signs outside the labs and the announcement board between the classrooms and others. It was not long before Eva finished the exploration of the building. On her face was a broad smile registering the pride. Not until then did she realize she had conquered the headache brought by the poor sense of direction, and that she was ready to overcome whatever challenge she would meet in the future with her wisdom.
个人觉得这篇文章简单流畅，没有什么花里胡哨的高级词汇，重点还是主要以高考词汇为主，也符合考续写的初衷。虽然本文有部分小错误，但是总体来说用法和表达给人的感觉很舒服。接下来我们总结一下这位同学的高分特点。
1.符合“简简单单清清楚楚明明白白”的考试要求。但这里的简单清楚明白不是低级的代名词，这篇文章完全体现出一个优秀的高中英语学习者的能力。用词虽不高级，但用的词汇却体现了流畅运用高中词汇的能力，而不像有些优秀的学生总是寻求特别高级的词汇而忽视了用法和拼写的准确性。
2.内容紧凑，没有偏题。这也是很多同学做不到的，平时分数还不错但这次高考低分的同学很大程度是因为没有准确把握主旨而被降档了。其他关于批卷上的松紧我也不予评论，过去都过去了，我们只能把握当下。3.用句丰富。句子长短结合。
倒装句：
Never had she thought that running a whole mile could be such a easy job for her.
On her face was a broad smile registering the pride.Not until then did she realize she had conquered the headache brought by the poor sense of direction, and that she was ready to overcome whatever challenge she would meet in the future with her wisdom.
名词性从句：
It occurred to her that it was the mind trick she used that enabled her to finish the course.So, after celebrating her success by completing another lap, Eva began to wonder whether the trick would work in other cases, such as ..., the huge school building!It was not long before Eva finished the exploration of the building.
优秀范文2
When Coach Pitt said "Great work" to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised.
Looking back at the track, Eva gaped at all the students that left behind - she was actually one of the leading runners! Then it struck her how vital the role the mind trick played in spurring her to challenge her limit. Simply by tearing the difficulties down into small pieces. After the class, some of her previous classmates thronged around her, urging her all the while to disclose her trick of running so fast. “You just need to run step by step.” She said mysteriously with a radiant smile flickering across her face. The following classes witnessed Eva using the same trick and gradually she became familiar with it.
Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building. Every time she went to different classrooms, Eva would meticulously observe the surroundings, and told herself only to remember one place each time. After she etched one place in her mind, she would thumb up for herself as a small award. Days turning into weeks, she found herself able to reach places she needed to go without thinking twice, so she decided to remember the places she used to ignore. By the end of the first month, Eva had already imprinted the whole map of the school in her mind. Remembering places and running had never been a breeze for Eva, yet she succeeded in both, by employing the trick of taking one step at a time.
优秀范文3：
When Coach Pitt said "Great work" to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised.
Never had she thought that running a whole mile could be such an easy job for her. It occurred to her that it was the mind trick she used that enabled her to finish the course. So, after celebrating her success by completing another lap, Eva began to wonder whether the trick would work in other cases, such as the huge school building, struggling to find her way in the past week. Would her trick work Well, one wouldn’t know before trying.
Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building. She started from the ground floor. Instead of concentrating on where to go, Eva focused on reaching the flower pot nearby the teaching offices, the warning signs outside the laboratories, and the announcement board between her classroom and other's. It wasn't long before Eva finally finished the exploration of the building. On her face was a broad smile, registering the pride in her own brilliance. Not until then did Eva realize that she had conquered the headache brought by her poor sense of direction, and that she was ready to overcome whatever challenges she would meet in the future with her wisdom.
优秀范文4：
When Coach Pitt said “Nice work!” to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised.Wide-eyed with the coach’s words, she couldn’t believe that she had actually completed the mile run, something she never thought she could do. The sense of accomplishment and pride she felt in that moment was overwhelming. It made her realize that sometimes our biggest obstacles are the ones we create in our own minds. This experience taught her the valuable lesson that with determination and a positive mindset, she could overcome challenges she never thought possible.
Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building.She started by memorizing the important landmarks in the building, such as the library, the cafeteria, and the gym. Instead of feeling overwhelmed by the size and complexity of the building, she focused on navigating to these key locations. After breaking down the daunting task into smaller, manageable goals, she gradually became more comfortable and confident in finding her way around. Eva realized that just like tackling the mile run, she could conquer her fear of getting lost in the school building by applying the same strategy—taking one step at a time, staying focused, and not letting fear hold her back.
优秀范文5：
When Coach Pitt said“Nice work!”to her at the finish line, Eva was surprised. The moment she turned around, Eva's eyes widened as she witnessed many of her classmates still trailing behind. Instead of being left in the dust, she not only completed the intimidating“mile”but also surpassed the others.“The mind trick worked!”As she caught her breath, Eva recalled the details of the entire run - the panic before the whistle, the early gasps, and the key points in the final half. The sense of accomplishment surged through her as she positively beamed, realizing that sometimes breaking down challenges into smaller, manageable goals could make even the most daunting tasks achievable. Confidence ignited, Eva was inspired to confront the other challenges that plagued her.
Eva decided to use the same trick to deal with the school building. This time, standing at the gate, Eva didn’t overwhelm herself with the intricate maze of hallways and rooms, but began to break down the vast labyrinth, floor by floor, into several specific landmarks. Just as she focused on the shadow and the oak tree during her mile run, Eva particularly memorized key locations like the library, cafeteria, and gym. Gradually, she mapped out her own mental navigation, making the seemingly insurmountable structures more manageable. Now whenever she trod confidently through the corridors, Eva was sure that whether it was the physical challenge of running a mile or the mental challenge like navigating the school building, a cool head, a step-by-step mindset, and unwavering persistence were the most valuable tools she would ever have in overcoming life's obstacles.

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