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01 文章原文
THE PET LAMB
Almost all the possessions had been sold to buy food and clothing for the family. At last, nothing was left but the pet lamb. At the thought of parting with the little creature, Mrs. Grant felt sad because the children loved it very much. Having struggled hard, she had to make up her mind to sell the lamb. But she could not ask any child to go for the butcher. Finally, she went herself with a heavy heart, dragging her leaden feet and bargained with the butcher for the sale of Daisy.
While the children were all playing with the lamb, the butcher and his boy came to the door. “You see I am here for the lamb.” Said the butcher in a loud voice. Hearing this, one child ran to her mother’s side, and asked what was happening in alarm. Mrs. Grant gently pushed the child aside, bent down and was about to tell the truth.
"That's my lamb now, Charlie!" said the butcher's boy, in a playful tone, going up to Daisy with a rope in his hand.
"No, it is not your lamb. It is our lamb!" said Charlie, placing himself in front of it.
But the boy, pushing him aside, threw a rope round Daisy's neck, and began to drag the little creature away. The poor lamb bleated very sadly. The cry of grief which fell upon the mother's ears was too much for her, and her heart sank within her. In a moment, begging with tearful eyes, the children were all around their mother with voices choking with sobs for their little pet.
“Pray tell your boy to stop a moment," she said in husky(沙哑的) tones to the butcher.
The boy, at a word from the butcher, stopped dragging the lamb, and the little creature stopped its bleating.
In a trembling voice, Mrs. Grant explained to them how badly off they were after their father died. She also added that the kind butcher had given the money for Daisy. With this money, she could buy her children bread to eat.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的次数应为150词左右；
2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
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But the more she explained, the stronger her children begged for Daisy.
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The butcher, who had been watching all, was touched in his heart.
02 文章注意
原文情节概述：因家境贫寒，妈妈(Mrs. Grant)不得不打算将孩子们十分珍视的羊(Daisy)卖掉，虽然自己也十分不舍。为了不让孩子们发现，她偷偷去找屠夫(Butcher)，但是在卖羊的过程中遇到孩子们阻挠，孩子们十分伤心，妈妈便跟孩子们解释卖羊需要补贴家用
接续部分发展方向
P1段首语“妈妈越解释，孩子们越想留下羊羔”；P2段首语“屠夫一切看在眼里，非常感动”；
P1接续部分要写出“孩子们恳求妈妈留下羊羔的过程”，这也是“屠夫非常感动”的关键；P2情节发展即为总结部分，结果是美好的，屠夫并没有带走羊羔，呈现温暖和谐的场面（总结），一家人的生计也得到解决（首尾呼应）。
03 英国语文第二册Lesson25 原接续部分
“No! no! no!” the children cried, “we don't want you to sell Daisy! We won't have our dear little lamb sold! It is our lamb, and you must not sell it, mother. We will rather go without bread than have the lamb sold!” It was in vain that Mrs. Grant tried to make her children see that she could not help selling the lamb. The more she talked, the stronger did they plead for Daisy. At last she handed back the silver, saying, "I cannot sell it just now, sir. Wait until another time. I must try to keep up a little longer."
The butcher, who had been watching all thatwent on, was touched in his heart; and when Mrs. Grant offered to return the money, he said, "I'll take neither the lamb nor the money, Mrs.Grant." Though I am a butcher, I have no harder heart than other men. I'll not rob the children of their pet. I'll buy Daisy from you, and give it back to the children. “Come, Joe, you must not take that lamb. It shall never be killed by me.” And as he spoke, his voice shook, and he dashed his hand quickly across his eyes. Daisy was at once set free; and as the children gathered round and stroked the pet, their little hearts were filled with joy. By the kind help of some friends, the poor mother never again found herself so hard pressed as when she tried to sell the children's pet lamb.
注意：1. 原版文章在各情节表达中语言描写居多，且多为口语词汇；2. 因续写部分评定标准仍然在于“表达”层面，所以句式的多样化十分重要，但原版接续部分并未能体现句式多样化；3. 可以对原版情节发展做出修改，第一段可添加Daisy的描写，可利用动作、心理、语言多角度重笔墨描写孩子们不舍并恳求妈妈的过程，第二段可添加总结。
04 续写文章分析—P1
“Please don’t sell Daisy, Mom!” the children sobbed
内容设置：孩子不舍（语言描写：恳求）
However, regardless of their constant pleading, Mrs. Grant had no alternative but to sell it to support her family.
内容设置：妈妈坚持卖
表达设置：核心动词选择have no alternative but; 添加介词短语regardless of; but to sell it to support her family可以选择用介词due to/with the intention of等表达因果/目的逻辑
The joyful moments Daisy and the children had spent together crowded into their minds,which intensified their sorrow.
内容设置：孩子不舍（心理描写：回忆美好）
表达设置：可以利用xxx crowded into mind作为心理描写的句式；添加关系代词that引导的定语从句（省略that）；添加which引导的非限制性从句
While Daisy, whose startled gazes shifted to the butcher, crouched quietly under Charlie as if expressing the unwillingness to leave.
内容设置：羊的描写（状物）
表达设置：在状物的场景中添加whose引导的定语从句是非常不错的选择；添加as if
Actually, they already regarded Daisy as a member of family. Despite the reluctance to sell Daisy, Mom still insisted on the butcher's taking the lamb away.
内容设置：虽然不舍，但妈妈仍然坚持卖掉Daisy
表达设置：insist on后加入动名词形式实现句式多样化；添加despite表达让步概念
05 续写文章分析—P2
“I won’t rob the children of their beloved pet.” the Butcher deposited the money back on the Mrs. Grant’s wrinkled hands. “Keep the money to buy some bread!”
内容设置：屠夫没有拿走羊羔并留下钱（语言描写）
表达设置：deposit v. 放置；wrinkled hands 皱巴巴的手
Confused and surprised, Mrs. Grant hesitated for a moment before expressing the deep gratitude with tears flowing down, “Thanks for your kindness.”
内容设置：妈妈表达感激
表达设置：hesitate更能表达妈妈的困惑和对突如其来的好事儿不知所措；形容词confused and surprised作评注性状语表达情绪
The cry of grief of the children gave way to the astonishment and delight.
内容设置：孩子情绪由悲伤转为兴奋
表达设置：并没有采取色彩比较浓重的大情绪表达，而是利用抽象名词及核心动词give way to来表达情绪
They stroked the lamb affectionately and they snuggled tightly.
内容设置：团聚喜悦
表达设置：动作stoke/snuggle
What really touched the family of Mrs. Grant was the generosity and sympathy, on which the emotional family reunion depended.
内容设置：总结
表达设置：介词+which/whom结构；总结表达中比较万能的结构；what引导的主语从句
05 参考答案
The more she talked, the stronger did they plead for Daisy. "Please don't sell Daisy, Mom!" the children sobbed. However, regardless of their constant pleading, Mrs. Grant had no alternative but to sell it to support her family. The joyful moments Daisy and the children had spent together crowded into their minds, which intensified their sorrow. While Daisy, whose startled gazes shifted to the butcher, crouched quietly under Charlie as if expressing the unwillingness to leave. Actually, they already regarded Daisy as a member of family. Despite the reluctance to sell Daisy, Mom still insisted on the butcher’s taking the lamb away.
The butcher, who had been watching all thatwent on, was touched in his heart. “I won’t rob the children of their beloved pet.” the Butcher deposited the money back on the Mrs. Grant’s wrinkled hands. “Keep the money to buy some bread!” Confused and surprised, Mrs. Grant hesitated for a moment before expressing the deep gratitude with tears flowing down, “Thanks for your kindness.” The cry of grief of the children gave way to the astonishment and delight. They stroked the lamb affectionately and they snuggled tightly. What really touched the family of Mrs. Grant was the generosity and sympathy, on which the emotional family reunion depended.

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