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阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
When I was 12 years old, my grandparents passed away. I was really close to them, and losing them was the hardest thing I’ve ever had to go through. I couldn't eat, sleep, or think; I felt like I couldn’t ever breathe. It was as if my whole world had fallen down from under me, and I fell into this huge hole of depression.
Although I was battling depression, I was determined to make my high school years the best of my life. It was difficult to be happy, but I had to try. I joined Women’s Choir(合唱团). Mr.Wright was the choral director and he was so funny that the first day, I just knew I had made the best decision of my life.
As the year progressed,I loved chorus more and more. I began to smile again and really enjoy life.
Then one day that all changed. My friends---or those that I thought were my friends---started talking about me behind my back. I was hurt, and I sat by myself. Mr.Wright came over and asked what was wrong. The look in his eyes told me I could trust him. Trying hard to hold back tears, I told him the whole story.
When I finished, he nodded and told me,“If you never learn anything from me, learn this: No one is worth stealing your joy. ”What Mr. Wright said really struck a chord (心弦) in my heart. He truly cared about me and what was going on. He not only saved me but influenced every day of it.
I began to realize that my happiness didn't depend on what others thought of me. I slowly let go of the hurt and pain, and with each passing day, I felt myself regaining the strength to smile again. The chorus became my sanctuary (避难所)，a place where I could lose myself in the beauty of music and forget about the world's troubles.
注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。
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Out of gratitude for all of these, I decided to write a letter to Mr.Wright.
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Years later, I follow in Mr.Wright's footsteps, becoming a choir teacher myself.
【考查目标】
本次月考试题读后续写主题语境为“人与自我”，涉及“学校生活”、“认识自我，丰富自我，完善自我”、“正确的人生态度”等内涵意义。续写材料难度中等，但在短时间内构思出情节合理、衔接得当的短文仍然不易。
其实，高考英语自从加入读后续写这个写作试题以来，英语试卷的整体难度就提升了。考生必须加快前面题型的答题速度，才能为两篇写作题目节省出更多的构思空间。另外，写作本身属于创造性劳动，是稀缺资源，需要很多知识的积淀，耗费大量时间的构思，才能在最后收获让人眼前一亮的作品。
师生关系一直是教育的热点话题，也是各级各类考试读后续写题目常考的内容。上次月考提到的是老师对学生从开始的误解到最后的理解，而本次考试是老师对学生更加正面的影响——帮助学生走出同学欺凌的阴影并影响了学生的职业选择。
读后续写这个相对有创造性的半开放性试题要求考生在限时阅读的基础上，合理想象，续写两段文字，以使故事完整、情节合理、衔接有序和语言生动，来对抗写作内容的固化。我想这也是教育部教育考试院设置该题型的目的，希望考生有更多的想象空间来展示写作水平，以读促写，引导高中英语教学的改革。
【文本主旨】
文本讲述了作者在经历祖父母去世和朋友的背叛后陷入悲伤，但后来在合唱团老师Mr. Wright的帮助下重新找到快乐，意识到自己的幸福不取决于别人的看法，合唱团成为了作者精神的庇护所，让她能够在音乐中忘却烦恼。
【续写分析】
读完文章，考生需要记住的几个关键点：①作者因为加入了Mr. Wright负责的合唱团走出了失去亲人的阴影，重新唤起了对生活的热爱 ②在遭受了朋友的背叛后，Mr. Wright鼓励作者依靠自己，学会坚强 ③Mr. Wright的建议和支持对学生时代的作者很重要，帮助作者度过了情绪的低谷。
根据前文表述和续写两个段落开头的提示，续写内容分析如下：
由续写第一段开头句Out of gratitude for all of these, I decided to write a letter to Mr.Wright.可知，本段主要阐述作者给Mr. Wright写信时的状态和书信内容，可以围绕对老师的所作所为表示感谢展开。另外，由于续写第二段开头提到作者多年后，也成为一名老师，所以本段还可以在信中提到未来想成为像老师的一样人，使文章上下文更有衔接，不唐突。当然，本段也可以酌情增加Mr. Wright看到信时的反映等情节，以使续写情节更趋饱满。其实，对于无话可说的学生来说，本段还可以巧妙地加入对过去发生事情的重述，增加文章的衔接和粘性。
根据续写第二段开头语 Years later, I follow in Mr.Wright's footsteps, becoming a choir teacher myself.可知，本段的时空和人物身份都发生了转换。作者在Mr.Wright的影响下，也成为一名合唱团的老师。本段续写的内容相对开放，可以写作者如何像Mr. Wright一样温暖贴心地关爱学生；也可以写成为老师后，回去看望Mr. Wright的感人场景等。只要言之有理，情理之中，都可接受。结尾升华部分可以强调了难忘师恩对自己的影响，或者是感谢生命中黑暗时刻那些给与自己关爱的人。
【下水文1】
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Out of gratitude for all of these, I decided to write a letter to Mr. Wright. On paper, I expressed how his kindness and wisdom had rescued me from the most challenging period I had ever faced. I thanked him for teaching me that my happiness was up to my own willingness, not dependent on the opinions of others. I wanted him to know it was his humor and passion for music that had shaped my life, guiding me to be a reliable person like him. The moment I put down my pen, in relief, I finally conveyed my deep appreciation to Mr. Wright, imagining his sincere smile when he read the letter. (97 words)

Paragraph 2: Years later, I follow in Mr. Wright's footsteps, becoming a choir teacher myself. Inspired by his ability to uplift others’ spirits through music, I knew I wanted to pay forward the same kindness and guidance to my students. Standing in front of my own choir class, I could see the reflection of my younger self in their eyes---searching for comfort and belonging. Just as Mr. Wright had done for me, I spared no effort to be a source of support and encouragement for younger souls. Every day, I shared the magic of music and his greatest words “No one is worth stealing your joy.”, which changed my life forever. (96 words)
【下水文2】
Paragraph 1: Out of gratitude for all this, I decided to write a letter to Mr. Wright. In the letter, I expressed my appreciation for what he had done for me. During those days, his kindness seemed like a ray of sunshine slipping through the window of my heart. He made me look at the hopefulness of my life and helped me through my sadness at losing my lovely grandparents. I became more outgoing and confident. I don't know what would have happened if Mr. Wright hadn't stepped in on that day. But he really struck a chord in my heart and encouraged me to struggle with life. At that time, I made my own decision to become a choir teacher like Mr. Wright.
Paragraph 2: Years later, I followed in Mr. Wright's footsteps and became a choir teacher myself. I often help my students face difficulties, just as Mr. Wright helped me. That sorrowful memory has slowly faded from my mind. I still often lose myself in the beauty of music and forget about the world's troubles, just like before. I have become friends with those people who used to talk about me behind my back. And I keep in touch with Mr. Wright. He said he was proud of me, and a great sense of happiness washed over me. Of all possessions, Mr. Wright's kindness is the most precious.

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