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[2024届广东大湾区普通高中毕业年级第二次联合模拟考试]
正值你校社团招新，学校英文报发起“My Club”主题征文活动。请你写一篇短文投稿，介绍并推荐你参加的一个社团。
注意：
(1)写作词数应为80个左右；
(2)请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
学生存在问题：
1.审题不清，受背过的作文模板影响，开篇就把那句写信的套句写了上去 “I’m writing to.....”
2.内容很泛，即把背诵过的套句直接套，如：If you join my club, you will broaden your horizon.这种可以用于任何一篇有关参加活动的文章里的套句，是拿不到高分的。这类套句显得内容空洞，所以不能相信所谓的万能句子
3.句式单一，从头到尾就是一个句式。
4.词汇单一简单。
5.没写满所给的空间。
6.没有赏心悦目的卷面。
所以想要拿到13分以上的高分，同学们一定要从以上6点进行反思并且训练。
仔细解读一下大湾区应用文：
正值你校社团招新，学校英文报“My Club”主题征文活动。请你写一篇短文投稿，介绍并推荐你参加的一个社团。
解读：
1 要写的是一篇小短文，不是书信。
具体内容包括两大块。第一、介绍你参加的俱乐部，这应该包括俱乐部的名称、宗旨和每周开展的活动，也可以顺便提一下成立的时间。第二、我推荐此俱乐部的理由，理由可以写上两到三点。
3.时态以一般现在时为主。
谋篇布局：这种文章一般写三段。
第一段思路：学校里有很多俱乐部，上个学期我参加了某某俱乐部，发现这个俱乐部很有意义（既然题目要求你要推荐，说明这个俱乐部肯定很好）。（以很多人写的Running club 为例）
接下来思考该用哪些词汇和句式来展示你的英语功底，让改卷老师眼前一亮。词汇尽量选用高中词汇，考虑句式时要思考上下信息之间有着怎样的逻辑关系，这样思路就打开了，否则就是小学生的流水账。
With a wide range of clubs in our school, I made an informed decision to join the running club last term. Having stayed in the club for several months, now I find all the club’s events worth our full participation. （此段中用了with符合结构表原因，--ing非谓语表时间，这些都是高端句型）
第二段思路：以上分析的两大块内容写进去，像第一段一样思考词汇和句式，词汇和句式要体现多样化。
Running club的宗旨：不要写能锻炼身体（小学生才这么写）。可以写培养自律性、主动性和毅力这些品质，顺带着强身健体了。这样写就有深度了。
为了达到这个宗旨，那么相应的活动也就出来了，比如说 周一到周五的晨跑和每两周组织的越野跑等
推荐的理由自然而然地也就出来了：那就是你的收获。如：现在的你，如同变了一个人，对你的方方面产生了积极的影响：身心两方面的变化。还可以具体描述变化后带来的结果。
The running club, founded two years ago, is designed for the members to practice their discipline and perseverance. On week days, all the members are required to get up at six in the morning and run for half an hour on the track of the playground. Every two weeks, a cross-country running will be organized and the route will vary from time to time. All these activities have had a significant impact on my mind and body alike. I have been completely changed. Self-disciplined, persistent and much stronger, now I am able to positively tackle any barrier encountered in my study as well as in my daily life. （此段中用了非谓语，被动语态）
第三段思路：总结性发言，鉴于以上优点，所以我强烈推荐同学们参加我的跑步俱乐部。
From my own experience, consequently, I highly recommend that you should sigh up for my club. In the running club, you will definitely find your potential fully developed and become optimistic about yourself gradually as well as having physical fitness.
现在把三段合起来，形成以下短文，如果觉得太长，可以删掉一些不必要的细节。请注意文章里句式和词汇的多样化，以及文章的内在逻辑。
With a wide range of clubs in our school, I made an informed decision to join the running club last term. Having stayed in the club for several months, now I find all the club’s events worth our full participation.
The running club, founded two years ago, is designed for the members to practice their discipline and perseverance. On week days, all the members are required to get up at six in the morning and run for half an hour. Every two weeks, a cross-country running will be organized and the route will vary from time to time. All these activities have had a significant impact on my mind and body alike. Self-disciplined, persistent and much stronger than before, now I am able to positively tackle any barrier encountered in my study as well as in my daily life.
From my own experience, consequently, I highly recommend that you should sigh up for my club. In several months, as well as being physically fit, you will definitely find your potential fully developed and become optimistic about yourself and your future.
例文1
My Club
Today I’m talking about my club.
My club is table tennis club. It is aimed at enriching our school life and improving the relationship between students. As we all know, playing table tennis is of great benefit to us, which prevents us from being lazy and keeps us physically healthy. More importantly, playing table tennes together not only improves our relationship with friends, but also helps to relieve our stress. All in all, if you join us, you can enjoy many benefits.
What are you waiting for Quickly join us!
例文2
My club is running club. Now running club is recruiting new members who like to run.
Running club has a wide range of activities, such as running together and sharing food together. Running club not only provides a great opportunity to exercise and stay fit, but also helps to relieve stress and refresh our minds. Running club wins a wide popularity.
It would be fantastic to have you in our running club!
例1和例2，谨为记录两位男生由3分进步到10分的变化。努力，是真的有回报，或早或晚，迟早会看到光。
下水文1
There are numerous clubs in our school, but when it comes to those highly recommended, the Pingpong Club stands out as an excellent choice.
I've personally gained a lot from being a part of the Pingpong Club. Firstly, playing pingpong ensures I remain full of energy. Secondly, the club acts as an ideal medium to refresh my mind and cultivate my mental ability. The Pingpong Club isn't just a club; it's a vibrant community where you can engage in both spirited and friendly competition.
As we're actively recruiting new members, I'm genuinely excited at the prospect of welcoming you to our ranks!
下水文2
Are you seeking an exciting and dynamic club to join Look no further than the Pingpong Club, widely recognized as the top choice among our school's vibrant array of clubs.
Why does Pingpong Club ttand out Engaging in the fast-paced game of Pingpong is a fun way to ensure you're on your toes, both figuratively and literally!Our sessions are designed to refresh your mind and body, providing a much-needed break from academic stress. Moreover, Whether you're looking to unwind or simply enjoy a friendly competition, the Pingpong Club is the perfect choice for you.
So, what are you waiting for Let's hit the table and make some ripples together!

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