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应用文训练3（评价+建议）
建议信是生活中常用的一种应用文文体，一般结合某一问题进行反馈再提出看法、建议或忠告。需要注意反馈评价类词汇句型，同时提出的建议要合理，有说服力，语气要礼貌委婉。
一、常用评价/反馈/建议类词汇
给出看法
关于这个活动
提出建议
给与反馈
真诚地
参加
作为活动的参与者
考虑我的建议
offer/give/share one's opinion / voice my views
concerning the activity
put forward /express my suggestions
give my feedback
with sincerity
participate in
as a participant in the activity
take my suggestions into consideration
/account
How to make evaluation
活动评价常用短语
吸引人的
引人注目的
组织得井井有条的
受到良好反响的
开拓视野的
值得称赞的
丰富课余生活
增添色彩
appealing
remarkable
well-organized
well-received
eye-opening
praiseworthy
enrich one’s after-school life;
add a new dimension/color to campus life
How to make evaluation
增添色彩
add a new dimension/color to campus life
提升兴趣/热情
arouse /fuel one’s passion for /stimulate students’ enthusiasm;
提供平台欣赏独特魅力
provide/offer a platform for English-lovers to appreciate its unique charm;
缓解学业压力
ease/relieve/reduce academic pressure;
加深对...的理解
deepen one’s understanding of...;/ have a more thorough/comprehensive understanding of...;
使所有人沉浸在经典文学的魅力中 immerse everyone in the charm of classic literature;
Requirements
审题五问：
体裁：
对象+语气：
人称：
时态：
每段要点：
para 1
para.2
para.3
评价+建议
学生与老师(活动负责人)
正式
思考：需要自我介绍吗？
需要问候吗？
第一人称；第三人称
一般过去时，一般现在时
(自我介绍)背景信息+写作目的
评价+建议（都是重点）
希望采纳+期盼祝愿（加点感谢）
假定你是某国际学校的学生李华，最近你校举办了一年一度的“英语周”活动，请你给活动负责人Mr Ryan写一封邮件，内容包括:
1.评价活动;
2.提出建议。
Our problems in para.1
假定你是某国际学校的学生李华，最近你校举办了一年一度的“英语周”活动，请你给活动负责人Mr Ryan写一封邮件，内容包括:
考场作文问题：
1.没有自我介绍，与收信人的关系没有定位好；
2.时态错误，这个活动已经举办了，而不是没有举办；
3.体裁理解出错，综合类信件写成了单一的建议信或者新闻；
How to organize para. 1
I’m Li Hua, studying in Class 2 Grade 3. As a participant fully involved in the annual English Weekly held recently, I'm writing to voice my views with sincerity and share my humble advice with you.
I’m Li Hua from Class 2 Grade 3. Having participated in fantastic English Weekly in the charge of you, I can hardly wait to express my deep appreciation and sincere suggestions to you.
I’m Li Hua , a student having just participated English Weekly .Thanks for organizing such a brilliant event, I’m writing to give you my feedback and some suggeations concerning the activity.
第一段需包含写作的背景和写作目的，要点要全不要遗漏。
Practice makes perfect
(2023苏锡5月英语二模改) 如你是来自中国的交换李华, 你刚刚参观了你校博物馆举办的一次“遇见艺术家”的展览, 请你给活动负责人Mr Ryan写一封邮件，内容包括: 1. 评价展览 2. 意见建议
I’m Li Hua an exchange studnet from China . Having participated in fantastic English Week in the charge of you, I can hardly wait to share my opinions/thoughts concerning the activity with you.
(2022温州二模)假定你是李华, 你已经完成国外某大学的网络课程学习。请你给该课程负责人写一封关于 课程学习反馈的邮件, 内容包括:1. 你的评价;2. 你的建议。
I’m Li Hua, a student having just completed your well-received online course — Spoken English for Communication, and I’m writing to give you some feedback.
How to make evaluation in para. 2
adj作状语，with 结构
not only....but also;
v-ing 表结果；which定语从句
常用的 结构
添头
中点缀
续尾
How to make evaluation in para. 2
Appealing and well-organized
Informative and eye-opening
With various competitions for us to participate in
With abundant games for us to experience
多样的句式
adj作状语
______________________________ (吸引人的，组织有序的）,the activity turned out to be a marvelous success.
____________________________(信息丰富，开拓视野的), the activity gained dramatic popularity .
with 结构
_____________________________________________(有多种比赛可以参加), the activity provided opportunities for us to showcase our talents in English and offered us a golden chance to appreciate the beauty of English literature.
___________________________________________(有丰富的游戏供我们体验), many students were motivated to immerse themselves in the charm of English .
With various competitions for us to participate in, the activity not only provided opportunities for us to showcase our talents in English but also offered us a golden chance to appreciate the beauty of English literature
How to make evaluation in para. 2
which provided us with a valuable opportunity to immerse ourselves in the English language and culture.
多样的句式
not only....but also结构
这些活动提升了学习英语的氛围，丰富了我们的校园生活。
The activities enhanced the atmosphere of learning English and they added a new dimension to our campus life.
Not only did the activities enhance the atmosphere of learning English but also they added a new dimension to our campus life
which 定语从句
There is no denying that the activity was a total success,__________________
__________________________________________________________________
(这为我们提供了一个宝贵的机会，让我们沉浸在英语语言和文化中。)
How to make evaluation in para. 2
providing students with a golden chance to explore and appreciate the beauty of English literature.
cultivating students’ students’ enthusiasm in English
promoting our oral English and offering a stage for us to showcase ourselves.
多样的句式
v-ing 表结果结构
The English Week activities were enjoyable and productive for students,
__________________________________________________________________________________(为学生提供了一个探索和欣赏英国文学之美的绝佳机会。)
Engaging and interactive（具有参与性和互动性）, the English Week activities in high school won wide popularity, ____________________________________________________(培养学生学习英语的热情).
A heated debate concerning english literature enjoyed high popularity, ________________________________________________________________(提高我们的英语口语能力，为我们提供一个展示自我的舞台。)
How to combine two different opinions
先抑后扬--转折
However, there also exist some problems.
To make your course even more appealing and effective, I highly recommend ......
Wonderful as the activity is , the English week will be better if ......
先抑后扬--怎样合理提建议
It is suggested/advised that …It is advisable to do…
It’s a good choice to do…
It would be a good idea if…
It’s of great importance/significance to do…
Ending para 3
Should you take my suggestions into consideration
I would appreciate it if you take my suggestions into consideration/ account
期待采纳与回信（表示感谢）
如果你采纳我的建议,我将感激不尽。
_______________________________________________________________ and wish our next English Week enjoyable and productive.
__________________________________________(如果你采纳我的建议）, I would be more delightful and grateful.
感谢给我们安排这样一个活动，希望你觉得我的建议对你有用。
Thanks for providing us with such an excellent event and I hope that you’ll find my suggestion helpful to you.
Appreciation 改
Dear Sir/Madam,
I’m Li Hua from Class 2 Grade 3. Having participated in fantastic English Week in the charge of you, I can hardly wait to express my opinions and sincere suggestions to you.
Attractive and eye-opening, the event is extremely beneficial to my English study. With abundant games to participate in, the activity not only offered us chances to put what we’ve learnt in class into practical use but also provided us a platform to showcase our talents. Besides, the lecture given by a professor on English literature is enlightening and uplifting(启发性的，令人振奋的）, which immersed us in the charm of English literature. However, it would be better if talent show could be included in the next English Week.
Thanks for providing us with such an excellent event and I hope you’ll find my suggestion helpful .
Yours sincerely,
Appreciation改
Dear Mr Ryan,
I’m Li Hua. Having experienced the annual “English Week”, I’m writing to give my feedback and provide some suggestions.
Appealing and well-organized, the English Week turned out to be a great success , which provided students with a golden chance to explore and appreciate the beauty of English. Besides, what amazed everyone present was that the event included various competitive activities, ranging from English dubbing (配音）competition to talent show. However, I have noticed that there are some students who are unable to participate in any of the activities. Thus, I think it would be better if there could be some activities less competitive or of pure fun, allowing everyone an opportunity to get involved, such as English corner and appreciating English movies.
Your consideration of my suggestions will be highly appreciated. Wish the event a greater success next year.
Your’s sincerely
Appreciation
考场作文点评：
1.要点清晰明确；
2.语言多样化，巧妙的使用了定语从句，和连接词；3.语气符合人物设定，字迹清晰，思路清晰，语言准确。
Consolidation
假定你是李华, 你已经完成国外某大学的网络课程学习。请你给该课程负责人写一封关于 课程学习反馈的邮件, 内容包括:
1. 你的评价;
2. 你的建议。
注意: 1. 词数 80 词左右;
2.可以适当增加细节, 以使行文连贯。
Appreciation
Dear Sir/Madam,
Having finished the online course - English Public Speaking, I’m delighted to express my deep appreciation and sincere suggestions to you.
Informative and professional, the course is very beneficial to my study. It has abundant materials to share as well as chances to practice, providing me practical skills on public speaking and a platform to showcase myself. Besides, the instructor is humorous and patient, which makes his lessons vivid and easy to follow. However, it would attract more learners if you could arrange flexible learning schedule, like providing weekend classes.
Thanks again and looking forward to attending your next course.
Yours sincerely, Li Hua
(2023·全国I卷高考书面表达)假定你是李华，外教Ryan准备将学生随机分为两人一组，让大家课后练习口语，你认为这样分组存在问题。请你给外教写一封邮件，内容包括；
1. 说明问题；2. 提出建议。
注意: 1. 写作词数应为80个左右：2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
高考真题链接
【导语】本篇是应用文写作，要求考生给外教写一封邮件，告诉他将学生随机分为两人一组，让大家课后练习口语，你认为这样分组存在问题。
【详解】
1. 词汇积累
首先：to begin with → first of all
提高：improve → progress
建议：suggestion → advice
选择：choose → select
2. 句式拓展
简单句变复合句
原句：My suggestion is to group students based on their language abilities or to let students choose their own partners.
拓展句：My suggestion is that we are supposed to group students based on their language abilities or to let students choose their own partners.
【点睛】[高分句型1]
This can hinder the progress of students as the more advanced one may dominate the conversation, leaving little room for the other students to improve.（运用了现在分词作状语）
[高分句型2]
Besides, Students may feel uncomfortable or less motivated if paired with someone who they don’t get along with or have difficulty communicating with.（运用了省略句和who引导定语从句）
【范文】
Dear Ryan,
I’m Li Hua from Class 3. I think it’s not a good idea to randomly pair up students for the spoken English training after class. The reasons are as follows.
To begin with, randomly pairing up students may lead to unbalanced language abilities within the groups. This can hinder the progress of students as the more advanced one may dominate the conversation, leaving little room for the other students to improve. Besides, students may feel uncomfortable or less motivated if paired with someone who they don’t get along with or have difficulty communicating with.
My suggestion is to group students based on their language abilities or to let students choose their own partners. This way, everyone can feel more comfortable practicing and improving their spoken English together.
Thank you for considering my suggestion.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
Appreciation
Dear Mr Ryan,
I’m Li Hua. Having experienced the annual “English Week”, I’m writing to give my feedback and provide some suggestions.
Admirably, with such a great diversity of activities, ranging from English dubbing competition to talent show, many students extinguished themselves with a high level of English competence. Besides, the carefully selected prizes for the winners literally amazed everyone present. However, I have noticed that there are some students who are unable to participate in any of the activities. Thus, I think it would be better if there could be some activities less competitive or of pure fun, allowing everyone an opportunity to get involved, such as English corner and appreciating English movies.
Your consideration of my suggestions will be highly appreciated. Wish the event a greater success next year.
Yours sincerely
Li Hua

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