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2023年6月新高考全国I卷英语
读后续写解析
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Teaching objectives
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Possible version
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Text interpretation
CONTENTS
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Writing ideas
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Writing analysis
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Given text
Basic information
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指导学生准确确定文本、时空、人物和事由；
指导学生谋篇布局，故事情节衔接自然，叙事完整；
指导学生遣词造句，言语得体。
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Given text
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阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest, I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language. Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did.
So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail His reply: “Because I love your stories. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.” Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try.
I chose Paul Revere’s horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith (银匠) in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming. My story would come straight from the horse’s mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny, and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice.
What did the horse think, as he sped through the night Did he get tired Have doubts Did he want to quit I sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere’s horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I checked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half-dozen books on Paul Revere from the library. I even read a few of them.
When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud and said, “Great. Now, write it again.” I wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn’t win, I wouldn’t care.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Para1: A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news.
Para2: I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.
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Text interpretation
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Key Elements From the Given Text
When and where
Characters
What
How and why
When I was in middle school
Enter a writing contest
At first--Doesn’t love writing--Came from Brazil,
English was second language—Give it a try
When writing --Want to quit , but keep going , write it over and over again.

social studies teacher
Me
The teacher encouraged me
When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest, I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language. Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did.
So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail His reply: “Because I love your stories. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.” Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try.
I chose Paul Revere’s horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith (银匠) in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming. My story would come straight from the
Text interpretation（人物性格分析--Me）
1.作者开始的时候因为英语写作不好，比较自卑.
2.在受到老师鼓励的时候，敢于尝试。
the horse’s mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny, and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice.
What did the horse think, as he sped through the night Did he get tired Have doubts Did he want to quit I sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere’s horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I checked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half-dozen books on Paul Revere from the library. I even read a few of them.
When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud and said, “Great. Now, write it again.” I wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn’t win, I wouldn’t care.
原文分析
3.善于思考。4.意志坚强，勤奋努力。5.苦中作乐.
6. 对赢得比赛没有信心，但并不在乎。
Text interpretation（人物性格分析--Me）
When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest, I said no without thinking. I did not love writing. My family came from Brazil, so English was only my second language. Writing was so difficult and painful for me that my teacher had allowed me to present my paper on the sinking of the Titanic by acting out a play, where I played all the parts. No one laughed harder than he did.
So, why did he suddenly force me to do something at which I was sure to fail His reply: “Because I love your stories. If you’re willing to apply yourself, I think you have a good shot at this.” Encouraged by his words, I agreed to give it a try.
I chose Paul Revere’s horse as my subject. Paul Revere was a silversmith (银匠) in Boston who rode a horse at night on April 18, 1775 to Lexington to warn people that British soldiers were coming. My story would come straight from the
Text interpretation（人物性格分析--social studies teacher ）
1.欣赏学生，善于通过不同的方式让学生展示自己的才能。
2.善于鼓励学生，给学生以信心。
the horse’s mouth. Not a brilliant idea, but funny, and unlikely to be anyone else’s choice.
What did the horse think, as he sped through the night Did he get tired Have doubts Did he want to quit I sympathized immediately. I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit. But, like Revere’s horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I checked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half-dozen books on Paul Revere from the library. I even read a few of them.
When I handed in the essay to my teacher, he read it, laughed out loud and said, “Great. Now, write it again.” I wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn’t win, I wouldn’t care.
原文分析
3.对学生要求严格，一丝不苟。
Text interpretation（人物性格分析-- social studies teacher ）
relative emotions with the development of the storyline
When I was in middle school, my social studies teacher asked me to enter a writing contest, I said no without thinking.
Self-abased
I got tired. I had doubts. I wanted to quit.
Self doubted
But, like Revere’s horse, I kept going. I worked hard. I checked my spelling. I asked my older sister to correct my grammar. I checked out a half-dozen books on Paul Revere from the library.
persistent
When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn’t win, I wouldn’t care.
Enjoyable and self breakthrough
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writing ideas
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What’s the genre of the passage
Narration（记叙文）
Argumentation（议论文）
Exposition（说明文）
Read for the genre
Read for the climax of the story
I wrote it again, and again and again. When I finally finished it, the thought of winning had given way to the enjoyment of writing. If I didn’t win, I wouldn’t care.
1、突破自我局限得到突破
2、没有退缩、坚持不懈
Theme
我作为一个来自巴西，英语为第二语言的孩子，英语写作特别困难，但在老师的鼓励之下，通过自己的努力获得了写作的乐趣。弘扬正能量：只要坚持不懈的努力，即使是自己不擅长的领域也会有所收获。老师的欣赏和鼓励会对学生产生积极的影响。
Paragraph 1 ：
A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news.
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Paragraph 2 ：
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Writing ideas
Prediction----在老师办公室里我们会有怎样的对话？
老师祝贺我，肯定我的天赋。
我感谢老师的鼓励，让我对写作有了态度上的转变。
根据第二段段首句the award presentation ,而且我要去参加颁奖仪式，可推断出消息是我的作品获奖了。
I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.
News 是什么？
情节设计
Para1: A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news.
1.揭示news 是什么？
1.见面时的动作描写
2.我的心情：难以置信
Writing ideas
Writing ideas
Para2: I went to my teacher’s office after the award presentation.
2.老师祝贺我，肯定我的天赋
3.我感谢老师，让自己写作有了态度转变。明白只要坚持不懈的努力，即使是自己不擅长的领域也会有所收获。
Now,it’s time for you to write!
Possible version
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Sample
A few weeks later, when I almost forgot the contest, there came the news. I won the first place. Hearing the news, I stood there, frozen. I couldn't believe my ears. Had I heard right My classmates gave me a look of disbelief at first, and then cheered and clapped happily. When I came to my senses, tears of excitement came to my eyes. At the award presentation, I accepted the award certificate, extremely nervous and excited. At that moment, I couldn’t help thinking of my teacher.
I went to my teacher's office after the award presentation. When I presented the award certificate to my teacher, his eyes glistening with tears, he reached out his hands and hugged me tightly. I expressed my sincerest gratitude to the teacher and attributed this small achievement to him. Looking into my eyes, he said, “I'm so proud of you. It's your own hard work that paid off. Believe in yourself and you can write better and better.” I nodded determinedly. That was when I fell in love with writing.
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writing analysis
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考纲要求
提供一段350词以内的语言材料，要求考生依据该材料内容、所给段落开头语和所表示关键词进行续写（150词左右），将其发展成为一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。
1.原文材料350词以内，所需写文章150词左右。
2.原文多是情节丰富的记叙文，偶尔有少量的议论文。
3.原文给出10处左右的标有下划线的关键词语，所需写短文应有5个以上。
4.续写部分分为两段，每段开头语已经给出。
5.续写部分为半开放性质。需要我们根据所给短文的情节进行合理的逻辑推理，并使用部分所给词汇，将阅读和写作紧密地结合起来。
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考纲分析
评分原则
1.本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。
2.评分时，先根据所续写短文的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量、确定或调整档次，最后给分。
3.词数少于130的，从总分中减去2分。
4.评分时，应主要从以下四个方面考虑：
（1）以所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；
（2）内容的丰富性和对所标出关键词语的应用情况；
（3）应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；
（4）上下文的连贯性。
评分标准
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5.拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个重要方面，评分时，应视其对交际
的影响程度予以考虑。
6.如书写较差以致影响交际，可将分数降低一个档次。
Homework
1. Finish and polish the continuation writing.
2.Read the possible version and continuation writing loudly.
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