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2024年高考英语写作读后续写主题之成长感悟类
真题回顾
2020年新高考卷： - 主题：社会互助与个人贡献（人与社会）
- 情境：Meredith家庭在一个经济衰退的小镇上，通过帮助贫困家庭展现社区的团结和互助精神。
2021年新高考I&II卷： - 主题：家庭与节日庆祝（人与社会）
- 情境：双胞胎为母亲准备母亲节惊喜，通过早餐服务表达对母亲的爱和感激。
2022年新高考I&II卷： - 主题：个人挑战与社会支持（人与社会）
- 情境：David，一个有脑部疾病的十岁孩子，决定参加越野跑，面对个人挑战并得到社会支持。
2023年浙江1月卷：- 主题：人与自然的关系（人与自然）
- 情境：救助一只被困的蜂鸟，展现人类对自然界生物的关怀和保护。
2023年新高考I&II卷：- 主题：个人成长与自我克服（人与自我）
- 情境：一个英语为第二语言的学生通过参与写作比赛克服个人困难，实现自我成长。
2024年高考英语浙江1月卷：- 主题：适应新环境与心理调适（人与自我）
- 情境：Eva在高中新环境中努力适应，通过跑步锻炼克服对长距离跑步的恐惧。
高考冲刺读后续写提分有效对策：
1. 理解原文：仔细阅读原文，确保完全理解故事情节、人物性格和主题思想。
2. 情节连贯：确保续写部分与原文情节紧密相连，逻辑合理，避免突兀的情节转折。
3. 人物一致性：保持原文中人物的性格和行为特征的一致性，避免人物形象的突变。
4. 语言风格：模仿原文的语言风格，包括词汇的选择、句式的构造和整体的语调。
5. 情感投入：在写作中投入情感，使读者能够感受到人物的情感变化和故事的感染力。
6. 词汇与语法：注意使用恰当的词汇和正确的语法结构，避免低级的拼写和语法错误。
7. 文化元素：适当融入文化元素，增加故事的深度和丰富性，但要确保文化信息的准确性。
8. 创新思维：在保持原文风格的基础上，尝试加入新颖的情节或视角，展现创造力。
9. 多次修改：完成初稿后，多次审阅和修改，精炼语言，优化表达。
10. 模拟练习：通过模拟历年的高考真题进行练习，熟悉题型，提高写作效率。
11. 时间管理：在实际考试中，合理分配时间，确保有足够的时间来完成读后续写的任务。
12. 教师反馈：在备考过程中，积极寻求教师的反馈和建议，及时调整写作策略
写作要点
个人成长是了解自我、完善自我、开发自我潜能的持续过程。因此在读后续写中，个人的成长不仅涉及到知识层面上，更多涉及到情感、态度和价值观(含品德)。语篇往往是学生比较熟悉的场景:学校生活、家庭生活及工作(劳动)场景。最终的升华指向:健康的生活方式，积极的生活态度，完善的自我, 优秀的品行及更好的规划(学习,生活和职业)。按照情节的发展，语篇分为三个阶段。
成长前的困扰 情境描写+消极情绪的累积→高潮
成长中的蜕变 成长的动机+过程中变化的心情。
成长后的升华 成长后的收获+积极情绪(喜悦、满足和骄傲等)

写作语料：成长前的困扰
情境描写: "In the dimly lit classroom, the whispers of my classmates felt like daggers, each one piercing through my confidence."
消极情绪的累积: "The mounting anxiety was a constant companion, a shadow that refused to be shaken off, no matter how hard I tried to ignore it."
高潮: "The moment of truth arrived, and with it, a surge of panic. My heart pounded in my chest like a drum, echoing the rhythm of my fear."
成长中的蜕变
成长的动机: "It was the small, encouraging words from my teacher that sparked a flame within me, a flame of determination that refused to be extinguished."
过程中变化的心情: "With each passing day, the whispers of doubt were drowned out by the growing chorus of my own belief in myself. I was no longer just surviving; I was thriving."
惊讶、希望、成长: "The surprise of my own progress was a beacon of hope, a sign that the seeds of growth I had sown were finally sprouting."
成长后的升华
成长后的收获: "The knowledge that I had overcome my fears and limitations was a treasure more valuable than any grade or accolade."
积极情绪: "Joy bubbled within me like a spring, a testament to the journey I had undertaken and the person I had become."
喜悦、满足和骄傲等: "Pride was not just a feeling; it was a declaration of my resilience and a celebration of the person I had grown to be."
主题升华句
1.However, from then on I promised that this broken watch would always remind me to be patient until truth emerged itself.然而，从那时起，我保证这块破表会一直提醒我要有耐心，直到真相自己浮出水面。
2.She confirmed the l4-year-old would be a superhero one day, so would her son, who was unfolding his hidden wing!她证实，这位14岁的女孩有一天会成为超级英雄，她的儿子也会展开他隐藏的翅膀
3.It was Mom who taught me we should never take for granted the very things that most deserve our gratitude. 是妈妈告诉我，我们永远不应该把最值得我们感激的事情视为理所当然的。
4.Thought it was a tough year that I struggle a lot with my identity, it was that day that I realize I can be a hero that kid’s needed.我认为这是艰难的一年，我经常为自己的身份而挣扎，就在那一天，我意识到我可以成为一个孩子需要的英雄。
5.Through our lives, we can gain a lot and lose so much. But being honest should always be with us, as honesty is always regarded as a virtue在我们的生活中，我们可以获得很多，但会失去很多。但诚实应该永远与我们同在，因为诚实总是被视为一种美德。
6.It's never too late to learn. Each individual has the right to accept more challenges and make more attempts.学习永远为时不晚。每个人都应该并且有权利去接受更多的挑战，做更多的尝试。
7.Actually, every individual possesses talent. Be brave when you find it and also make efforts. You can create miracles in the end.
事实上，每个人都有天赋，发现它的时候要勇敢，也要付出努力，最终你会创造奇迹。
【分析】possess 拥有。create miracles表示创造奇迹。
8.It's never too late to go for your dream. As long as you grasp every opportunity and take full advantage of it, you will stand a chance to realize your dreams.追梦永远不晚。只要你抓住机会，充分利用机会，你就有机会实现梦想。
As long as we dare to dream and don't let difficulties get in our way, anything is possible.
只要我们敢于梦想，不被困难所阻挡，一切皆有可能。 【分析】take full advantage of 充分利用， realize your dreams表示“实现梦想”
9.克服困难促而成长
The journey to success is not smooth. It is full of challenges and difficulties. We should be brave to face them. As long as we don’t give up hope and make every effort to overcome all the difficulties, we will surely achieve our goal (success) finally.
通往成功的路不会平坦，充满挑战和艰辛。我们要勇敢面对。只要不放弃希望并竭尽全力克服所有困难，我们最终会实现我们的目标（成功）。
写作真题
My dad, George, only had an eighth grade education. A quiet man, he didn't understand my world of school activities. From age 14, he worked. And his dad, Albert, took the money my dad eared and used it to pay family expenses.
I didn't really understand his world either:He was a livestock trucker, and I thought that I would surpass (超过)anything he had accomplished by the time I walked across the stage at high school graduation.
Summers in the mid-70s were spent at home shooting baskets, hitting a baseball, or throwing a football. , preparing for my future as a quarterback on a football team. In poor weather, I read about sports or practiced my trombone(长号).
The summer before my eighth grade I was one of a group of boys that a neighboring farmer hired to work in his field. He explained our basic task, the tractor fired up and we were off, riding down the field looking for weeds to spray with chemicals. After a short way, the farmer stopped and pointed at a weed which we missed. Then we began again. This happened over and over, but we soon learned to identify different grasses like cockle furs, lamb's-quarters, fox tails, and the king of weeds, the pretty purple thistle. It was tiring work, but I looked forward to the pay, even though I wasn't sure how much it would amount to.
At home, my dad said, "A job's a big step to growing up. I'm glad you will be contributing to the household." My dad's words made me realize that my earnings might not be mine to do with as I wished.
My labors lasted about two weeks, and the farmer said there might be more work, but I wasn't interested. I decided it was not fair that I had to contribute my money.
注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。
Paragraph 1:When I bought my paycheck home---it was$119---my dad wanted to talk to me.
Paragraph 2:I was surprised that my dad allowed me to use the money as I wished
构思过程
第一步 split +3C
Setting: summer / at home
Plot: 作者开篇交代不上善言辞的父亲小小年纪(八年级)辍学，打工赚钱，赚来的钱被爷爷全部收去贴补家用。父亲对自己的学校生活不理解。作者也不理解父亲的世界，还轻视做卡车司机的父亲，觉得自己高中毕业就可以碾压父亲所有的成就。反观自己目前的生活，作者每年夏天就是全部用来练习各种球，极力追求自己的各种爱好。
然后，在即将升入八年级的那个署假，作者去隔壁邻居家打工，劳作虽繁重，但作者还是蛮期待那份工资。这时爸爸提醒作者工作是迈向成长的一步，终于可以贴补家用了。作者意识到自己辛苦赚来的钱将不属于自己。两周劳作后，邻居说还需要继续帮工，但作者了无生趣，不想再继续，觉得自己要把钱贴补家用太不公平了。我拿着两周的薪水119美元回到家，爸爸想找我谈谈.……父亲让我自己随自己心意支配我的薪水，我感到十分惊讶……
Theme:主旨确定之前我们应的留意文章中的clue 和 conflict
Conflict:父亲是一个quiet man，懂事体贴的人而我不理解父亲，轻视父亲。
父亲提醒我赚来的钱可以贴补家用，而我辛辛苦苦只为拥有一笔自己的钱。
Clue:全文的线索围绕钱这个线索来开展，父亲8年级辍学赚钱与我8年级前的署假
打工赚钱形成强烈的对比。通过所给的2段续写提示句，不难推出，作者会把自己的钱心甘情愿地拿出来,所以显而易见，本文的主题属于人与自我，自我的成长，自己从不理解父亲到理解父亲，从自私的老我变成体贴理解家人的新我。
Language :
1无灵主语+排比句 Summers in the mid-70s were spent at home shooting baskets, hitting a baseball, or throwing a football. , preparing for my future as a quarterback on a football team.
2 动作描写之 动作链He explained our basic task, the tractor fired up and we were off, riding down the field looking for weeds to spray with chemicals.
3心理描写It was tiring work, but I looked forward to the pay, even though I wasn't sure how much it would amount to.
4语言描写At home, my dad said, "A job's a big step to growing up. I'm glad you will be contributing to the household."
句式模仿
1无灵主语+排比句 毫不犹豫，下面的话出现了，投篮，打棒球，踢足球，为我作为足球队的四分卫做准备，除了像你一样支付家庭费用。
Without any hesitation, the following words popped out, to shoot basket, hit a baseball , throw a football and prepare my future as a quarterback on a football team, anything but to pay family expense like you.
2动作描写之 动作链 被感人的话语震慑住，看到他越来越弯的背，一种内疚和自私的感觉在我心中升腾奔涌
Seized by the touching words and seeing his increasingly hunching back, a sense of guilty and selfishness welled up in my mind and surged through myself.
3心理描写
显然，我爸爸会说服我贡献我所有的收入。这绝不公平。我绝望地想
Obviously , my dad will persuade me to contribute all my earning. it's never fair . I thought in my mind hopelessly 可回扣引用的原文
1 Summers in the mid-70s were spent at home shooting baskets, hitting a baseball, or throwing a football. , preparing for my future as a quarterback on a footbal1 team.
2 "A job's a big step to growing up
3 he didn't understand my world of schoo1 activities.
第二布局:续写2段内容安排，每段3个场景，每个场景1-3句话，长短句夹杂
para l:When I bought my paycheck home---it was $119--my dad wanted to talk to me.
场景1不用说我爸爸是想劝我上交
场景2 爸爸没有劝我，只问我打算如何花这笔钱场景3 我脱口而出我的花钱计划，父亲点头应允
para 2:I was surprised that my dad allowed me to use the money as I wished.
场景1爸爸解释说，他虽然不懂我的学校生活，但支持我场景2 看着爸爸日渐弯驼的背，我顿感自私
场景3 我主动把钱交出，猛然发现自己已然理解父亲
第三 ：遣词造句润色修改+撰写成
【范文赏析1】
para l:When I bought my paycheck home---it was $119--my dad wanted to talk to me.Obviously , my dad would try to persuade me to contribute all my earning. It's never fair. I thought in my mind hopelessly, grabbing the money tightly in my sweating fist. After a long silence, he didn't ask as expected,instead, he gently said“How do you plan to spend the money from the farmer " Without any hesitation, the following words popped out,“to shoot basket, hit a baseball , throw a football and prepare for my future as a quarterback on a football team, anything but to pay family expense like you.”At that , my dad nodded and let me keep the money.
para 2:I was surprised that my dad allowed me to use the money as I wished. Staring at my confused expression, my dad explained:“Though I can't understand your world of school activities, still I will stand by you". Seized by the touching words and seeing his increasingly hunching back, a sense of guilty and selfishness welled up in my mind and surged through myself.“No, dad , this time , I will hand in all my earnings." I stopped my dad stepping out . Not until then did I realize I had suddenly understood my father, I would never surpass his love for me and a job's really a big step to growing up.
【范文赏析2】
When I brought my paycheck home—it was $119—my dad wanted to talk to me. He sat me down at the kitchen table, his face serious but not unkind. "Son," he began, "earning money is more than just a way to get what you want. It's about learning responsibility and the value of hard work." I listened, feeling a mix of resentment and curiosity. He continued, "I want you to understand that every dollar you earn is a reflection of your effort and dedication." He then surprised me by saying he would let me decide what to do with the money, but with one condition—I had to save a portion of it for my future. His words resonated with me, and I realized the importance of financial responsibility and planning.
I was surprised that my dad allowed me to use the money as I wished. It was a moment of newfound trust and independence. I decided to follow his advice and set aside a part of my earnings for savings. With the rest, I treated myself to a new pair of basketball shoes I had been eyeing and some books on football strategy. The experience taught me the balance between enjoying the fruits of my labor and being prudent with my finances. It was a valuable lesson that stayed with me as I continued my journey through high school and beyond, shaping my approach to both work and life. My dad's quiet wisdom had a profound impact on me, and I was grateful for the life lesson he had so subtly imparted.
【范文赏析3】
Paragraph 1:When I brought my paycheck home—it was $119—my dad noticed the envelope sticking out of my pocket. His expression softened as he glanced at me, a mixture of curiosity and understanding in his eyes. He motioned for me to join him in the living room, where he sat in his favorite armchair. As I approached, I saw a flicker of pride in his gaze, though he remained his usual reserved self.
Paragraph 2:I was surprised that my dad allowed me to use the money as I wished. He nodded silently as I explained my plans—to buy a new baseball glove and save the rest for an upcoming school trip. His acceptance meant more to me than any words could express. With a subtle smile, he tapped my shoulder before returning to his newspaper, his unspoken support echoing in the air. This simple interaction bridged the gap between our worlds, reminding me of the quiet strength and understanding that defined my father.

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