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Continuation Writing
读后续写讲评课
Learning Aims
1.明白文本故事的意思，找到基本信息和故事要素,确定写作方向
2.根据作文评价标准评价续写作文，提高语言应用的综合能力
课前自主探究一: Review the story.
When my little brother Tom was four, Mom said something like “I’d give anything to have a few more hours in the day.” And Tom said, “Why don’t we buy a bigger clock ” If time worked that way, I could have used an extra-big clock last week!
Our teacher had asked us to make an art project showing how plants eat, “I can’t believe we only have two nights to finish it,” Noah said with a sigh. “I have no idea how I’ll get mine done.”
I didn’t say anything. Not because I was nervous --- I wasn’t nervous at all. 1 love art projects! In fact, I was so relaxed that I didn’t work on the project at all on Monday night. I planned to start the minute I got home from baseball practice on Tuesday. But there was just one thing.
I forgot baseball would run later than usual because it was the day of Baseball Buddies, which happens every month, and it’s a chance for us older students to practise baseball with the adorable younger kids. The second I got home, I threw the entire craft box (手工盒) onto the kitchen table, took out my “How Plants Eat” paper, and started to work. But just then, the telephone rang.
It was my friend Ollie, who said his grandmother Abuela had just made cookies and wanted to know if I’d come help decorate them. I love decorating cookies, and I love, love. love Abucla’s world-famous Thanksgiving cookies that only happen once a year!
I had no choice. I had to go. Ollie and I put all the star cookies with red jam filling in one group, and all the snowflakes with white cream-cheese filling in another. It was 7 o’clock when I finally got home.1 planned to work on my project right after we ate. But then another interruption hit me.
注意:
1. 续写词数应为150左右.
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡上的相应位置作答。

Para.1:
Just as I was about to start, Dad said, “Joanna, it’s your tum to do the dishes.”

Para. 2:
Looking at the big “F” on my paper, I started to reflect on what I had done these days.
The Key Elements （要素） Characters Plots Para.1
Para.2
Para.3--6
I(Joanna) , Tom, Mom, Dad, friends
“I” was regretful and understood mother’s words ,realizing the importance of time management.
“My” teacher assigned a tsak: make an
art project within two nights.
“My” plan was delayed again and again
by some unexpected things.
续写方向 借助已梳理的故事情节，结合两个续写段的给出句，推测即将发生的故事情节，确定续写方向与内容。 Para. 1 Just as I was about to start, Dad said, “Joanna, it’s your turn to do the dishes.”
Para. 2 Looking at the big “F” on my paper, I started to reflect on what I had done these days.
1. How did I feel after hearing dad’s words
2. How did I deal with my art project
1. How did “I” react to the big “F”
2. What did I do these days
3. What did I learn from it
Evaluation Criteria
Evaluation Criteria point（分数25’）
1 Cohesion and intergrity of the content (10’) 1) 续写段与给出句，续写1段和2段以及续写段与原文的衔接程度； 2) 续写内容的完整性与准确性； 1 2 3 4 5
6 7 8 9 10
2 Accuracy of language (10’) 1) 语法结构(时态、人称、单复数)与词汇使用的正确性； 2) 句型使用的丰富性； 1 2 3 4 5
6 7 8 9 10
3 Handwriting (5’) 1) 卷面的整洁程度； 2) 字迹的清晰与美观程度；
1 2 3 4 5
One Possible Version
Just as I was about to start, Dad said, "Joanna, it's your turn to do the dishes." With a sigh, I dragged my feet to the sink with piles of dirty plates. The oily dishes seemed to be teasing at my foolishness, blowing away the baseball excitement and the cookie joy. When I finally settled down at the kitchen table, the clock was striking nine! Now I understood Mom's words, "I'd give anything to have a few more hours in the day!" Overwhelmed by great anxiety, I grabbed the blank paper with my sweaty hands and hurried my pen on it. But the baseball had swallowed my energy and the cookies had stolen my creative ideas.I could barely finish when Mom rushed me to bed.
给出句与续写段无缝对接
照应原文（P1)：续写段与原文内容的衔接
Cohesion
Looking at the big “F” on my paper, I started to reflect on what I had done these days. I could find many excuses I barely had enough time to get the project properly done. But obviously we could not have more hours in a day, but we could manage our time a little better. If only I hadn't been so relaxed and had started my work on Monday night! If only I had withdrawn the desire to decorate the cookies! And I should have stuck to my plan! "So, what I really should do later is to make sure that priority goes to the most important thing," I told myself. When I started to follow this rule, my life seemed to go much more smoothly.
This was the first time that I had felt so nervous and ashamed--to hand in such a poor work, and to receive such an undesirable result.
续写1段和续写2段
无缝衔接
再次照应原文（P1）
结尾点题，
升华主旨
One Possible Version
Just as I was about to start, Dad said, "Joanna, it's your turn to do the dishes." With a sigh, I dragged my feet to the sink with piles of dirty plates. The oily dishes seemed to be teasing at my foolishness, blowing away the baseball excitement and the cookie joy. When I finally settled down at the kitchen table, the clock was striking nine! Now I understood Mom's words, "I'd give anything to have a few more hours in the day!" Overwhelmed by great anxiety, I grabbed the blank paper with my sweaty hands and hurried my pen on it. But the baseball had swallowed my energy and the cookies had stolen my creative ideas.I could barely finish when Mom rushed me to bed. This was the first time that I had felt so nervous and ashamed--to hand in such a poor work, and receive such an undesirable result.
Intergrity
回答第一个问题
1. How did I feel after hearing dad’s words
回答第二个问题
“ How did I deal with my art project ”
Looking at the big “F” on my paper, I started to reflect on what I had done these days. I could find many excuses I barely had enough time to get the project properly done. But obviously we could not have more hours in a day, but we could manage our time a little better. If only I hadn't been so relaxed and had started my work on Monday night! If only I had withdrawn the desire to decorate the cookies! And I should have stuck to my plan! "So, what I really should do later is to make sure that priority goes to the most important thing," I told myself. When I started to follow this rule, my life seemed to go much more smoothly.
回答第一个问题
“How did I react to the big “F” ”
回答第二个问题
“What did I do theses days ”
回答第三个问题
“What did I learn from it ”
One Possible Version
Just as I was about to start, Dad said, "Joanna, it's your turn to do the dishes." With a sigh, I dragged my feet to the sink with piles of dirty plates. The oily dishes seemed to be teasing at my foolishness, blowing away the baseball excitement and the cookie joy. When I finally settled down at the kitchen table, the clock was striking nine! Now I understood Mom's words, "I'd give anything to have a few more hours in the day!" Overwhelmed by great anxiety, I grabbed the blank paper with my sweaty hands and hurried my pen on it. But the baseball had swallowed my energy and the cookies had stolen my creative ideas.I could barely finish when Mom rushed me to bed. This was the first time that I had felt so nervous and ashamed--to hand in such a poor work, and receive such an undesirable result.
Accuracy
Looking at the big “F” on my paper, I started to reflect on what I had done these days. I could find many excuses I barely had enough time to get the project properly done. But obviously we could not have more hours in a day, but we could manage our time a little better. If only I hadn't been so relaxed and had started my work on Monday night! If only I had withdrawn the desire to decorate the cookies! And I should have stuck to my plan! "So, what I really should do later is to make sure that priority goes to the most important thing," I told myself. When I started to follow this rule, my life seemed to go much more smoothly.
Accuracy
Presentation Time
Criteria& Dimensions Points （分数）
1 Cohesion and intergrity of the content (10’) 1) 续写段与给出句，续写1段和2段以及续写段与原文的衔接程度； 2) 续写内容的完整性与准确性；
1 2 3 4 5
6 7 8 9 10
2 Accuracy of language (10’) 1) 语法结构(时态、人称、单复数)与词汇使用的正确性； 2) 句型使用的丰富性；
1 2 3 4 5
6 7 8 9 10
3 Handwriting (5’) 1) 卷面的整洁程度； 2) 字迹的清晰与美观程度；
1 2 3 4 5
Sample 1
Presentation Time
Criteria& Dimensions Points （分数）
1 Cohesion and intergrity of the content (10’) 1) 续写段与给出句，续写1段和2段以及续写段与原文的衔接程度； 2) 续写内容的完整性与准确性；
1 2 3 4 5
6 7 8 9 10
2 Accuracy of language (10’) 1) 语法结构(时态、人称、单复数)与词汇使用的正确性； 2) 句型使用的丰富性；
1 2 3 4 5
6 7 8 9 10
3 Handwriting (5’) 1) 卷面的整洁程度； 2) 字迹的清晰与美观程度；
1 2 3 4 5
Sample 2
Presentation Time
Criteria& Dimensions Points （分数）
1 Cohesion and intergrity of the content (10’) 1) 续写段与给出句，续写1段和2段以及续写段与原文的衔接程度； 2) 续写内容的完整性与准确性；
1 2 3 4 5
6 7 8 9 10
2 Accuracy of language (10’) 1) 语法结构(时态、人称、单复数)与词汇使用的正确性； 2) 句型使用的丰富性；
1 2 3 4 5
6 7 8 9 10
3 Handwriting (5’) 1) 卷面的整洁程度； 2) 字迹的清晰与美观程度；
1 2 3 4 5
Sample 3
读后续写本班得分情况
分数段 人数
0-10分 3人
11-15分 25人
16-19分 16人
20-25分 4人
存在的问题
1.部分学生卷面书写潦草，多次进行涂改。
2.词汇原因，导致没有看懂故事内容。
3.内容衔接连贯问题。
4.语言问题：动词时态语态，双谓语，名词单复数及句式简单等。
平均分：14.96
Correcting & Polishing Time
TIPS:
1.修正低级语法错误（时态，语态，单复数，词形混用...)
2.添加情绪情感描写，使用形象生动的词汇。
3.使用非谓语动词。
4.运用从句...
Just as I was about to start, Dad said, “Joanna, it’s your turn to the dishes.” Thinking that my art project was unfished and it was the deadline of the project this night, I got the butterflies in my stomach because I had no choice but to do the dishes. I rushed to the kitchen with the piles of dirty plates and washed them as quickly as I could. when I finished doing the dishes, it was nearly 9 o’clock . Seized by a strong sense of nervousnesss,I did’t know how to finish it in such a short time though I loved art progect. At last, I completed it in a messy way. As a result, my art teacher gave me a big “F” on my paper.
Homework
Homework:
1.to recite the possible version.
2.to polish your own version.

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