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tiptoe [ t pt ]
vi. 踮着脚走；蹑手蹑脚地走
pace [pe s]
vi. 踱步，走来走去
slip [sl p]
sneak [sni k]
vi. 潜行；偷偷溜走
rush [r ]
dash [d ]
Storm in/out
charge
vi. 匆忙；猛冲
“动”手“动”脚
助力读后续写
Continuation Writing
—to make action descriptions
vivid
Requirements of curriculum standards
for continuation writing (读后续写课程标准要求)
《普通高中英语课程标准》明确提出能续写语篇,并在高考命题中以写作部分的考试形式提出，考生阅读故事性短文,根据其中情节,续写故事,使之完整.
浙江省于2016年高考首次采用读后续写题型,随着高考综合改革的推进,该题型在其它很多省份得以推广。读后续写将阅读理解与写作实践,模仿与创造力相结合,充分体现了语言学习的创造性建构过程. 读后续写,对学生阅读,思维,文化,写作能力进行综合考查,体现了英语学科的核心素养。
读 后 续 写 高 考 真 题
题 号 问题 原 因 办 法 体裁 主题思想 侧重点
2023新高考Ⅰ 参加不擅长上的英语写作比赛 老师鼓励作者参加 不断修改 反复重写 记叙文 克服困难，获得成功，表达感谢 动作描写
2022新高考Ⅰ 残疾的David因害怕别人嘲笑不敢参与越野赛 老师让他自己选择参加还是不参加 特教老师的劝说 记叙文 战胜自卑 动作描写
2021新高考Ⅰ 双胞胎做早餐把厨房弄得一团糟 给母亲惊喜,庆祝母亲节 … their father appeared 父亲助攻 记叙文 母亲节惊喜 动作描写
2020新高考Ⅰ Bernard如何赚钱帮助养家 经济衰退 John had an idea: 做爆米花卖钱 记叙文 助人献爱心 动作描写
2020.07 浙江 野熊来到营地前 熊闻到面包大蒜气味 tried known actions: ... 辣椒水 直升飞机 记叙文 险境求生 动作描写
2017.06 浙江 骑行遇狼 未知 向路过轿车求助 记叙文 险境求生 动作描写
Objectives
By the end of the class, we are able to
1) create action chains(动作链)；
2) vivify and modify(修饰) the actions；
3) create action scene(动作面) from multi-dimensional perspectives (多维视角).
How to make your action descriptions vivid
1. Mr.Bean attempted to cheat in the exam.
During the exam, Mr. bean looked around, slowly moved towards his deskmate, and attempted to glance at his answers.
2. He got up in the morning.
He dragged himself out of the bed in the morning.
3. The boy said sorry to his father.
The boy hung his head to the ground and mumbled an apology to his father.
4. The meat is delicious.
The meat makes my mouth water.
5.The news made me surprised.
The news made my jaw drop.
6. The boy heard mom’s words, smiled and jumped off the tree.
Hearing mom’s words, the boy smiled and jumped off the tree.
Hearing mom’s words, the naughty boy smiled cheerfully with his eyes shining with excitement and jumped off the tree skillfully like a monkey.
用更细致的动作代替结果性的动作，可使抽象动作层次化、过程化，并附加修饰词或升级句式可使读者在阅读时脑海中自然而然地构建出电影般的画面感。
Step 1 Read and discover---which of the following sentences are more vivid Why How
Pre-action
（先前动作）
Trans-action
(过渡动作)
Post-action后续动作
During the exam, Mr. bean looked around, slowly moved towards his deskmate, and attempted to glance at his answers.
A
B
C
Action description
具体的动作描写
Step 2 How to create action chains---break one general action down into several concrete actions. 将结果性的动作，根据时间轴分解成更细致的连贯性的微动作，使动作结果过程化
Sentence pattern 1: Sb did A, did B and did C 动作依次发生时
Learn to create action chains—to show, not to tell.
吃完早饭，Tom 去上学.
Pre-action:
Trans-action:
Post-action:
After breakfast, Tom picked up his school bag, said goodbye to his parents, walked out of the house and headed to school.
Step3 How to modify修饰the action to make it more vivid
After breakfast, Tom quickly/swiftly/anxiously threw his schoolbag onto his back, without saying goodbye to his parents, _________________out of the house, and headed for school.
by using adverbs to make action more vivid.
rushed/stormed
picked up his school bag and said goodbye to his parents
Said goodbye to his parents and walked out of the house
went to school/headed to school
by using concrete verbs to make action more vivid
After having breakfast,
he _________________________took over his schoolbag from his mom, __________________
said goodbye to his parents，walked out of the house, and headed for school.
cheerfully/merrily
chirped叽叽喳喳，欢快地说,
/mumbled嘟哝，含糊地说
singing
句式2: 非谓语Doing A(+doing B)，sb did sth.
or: sb did sth，非谓语Doing A(+doing B).
happily/slowly/gratefully
2. My father patted me on the shoulder and encouraged me never to give up my dreams.
My father patted me on the shoulder, encouraging me never to give up my dreams.
1. Mary saw the ring on the table and felt a little shocked.
Seeing the ring on the table , Mary felt a little shocked.
Sentence pattern 2: 非谓语Doing A(+doing B)，sb did sth...
sb. did sth…., 非谓语doing A(+doing B)
变式练习 Polish(用非谓语)
同一对象同时发出不同动作
使用具体的动词构建动作链
Doing短语, +主句
= 主句，+doing短语(主动)
使用副词或介词短语修饰动作
小结
构建基础肢体动作链
Action-chain
Step 4 How to create action scene—动作链 + 情感、环境、心理、语言
After having breakfast, he quickly threw his schoolbag on his back, without saying goodbye to his parents, rushed /stormed out of the house, and headed for school_________________________. Mom’s kind warning _________________
can never catch up with him.
语言
心情
_________________________________________________________
(此处加入环境描写)
anxiously/with anxiety
with butterflies in his stomach/ like a cat on hot bricks.
环境
On a hot morning, there was no wind. The sun had already begun to burn.
“be careful”
After having breakfast, he slowly picked up his schoolbag, cheerfully chirped goodbye to his parents, singing out of the house, and headed for school like a happy bird.
__________________________________________________
(此处加入环境描写)
The sky was blue, and birds were singing happily in the trees. Even flowers were smiling at him.
变式练习
小结: 动作链 + 环境、心理、语言= 构建动作面 action scene
把动作链和心理活动，语言，环境等结合，形成动作面，从多个角
度描绘一个场景scene
action chains
conversations
action scene
surroundings
inner
thoughts
Examples:
You failed an important exam and felt sad. What would your best friend do
You tried cooking for the first time. What would you do
You hesitated to take part in a competition. What would your teacher or parents or friends do
You met a beggar. What would you do
You met a little puppy幼犬 abandoned被抛弃的 on the road, sick and helpless. What would you do ……...
Work with your teammates, imagine a scene, act it out with your partner and then write it out by using what we have learned today.
Step5 show your creativity.
(learn to create tasks根据所学自己编题)
Example:
You failed an important exam and felt sad. What would your best friend do
As soon as I learned the result, I felt the world came to an end. Feeling extremely sad, I couldn‘t help but burst out crying on my seat. Tears rolling down my face uncontrollably, I was totally absorbed in my miserable world when my desk mate noticed me. She came over and asked me what happened in a gentle voice. However, I was just too sad to say anything. She sat silently beside me, offering tissues纸巾 patiently. Finally I managed to control myself and told her that I failed the exam. She comforted, “ I believe you. You are always excellent, and you are always a role model to me. You can prove yourself next time.” Her words seemed to have magic power, which made me feel calm and regain my confidence. I hugged her tightly to show my heartfelt gratitude. I also realized what a great friend she was!
Step 6 make a summary of this class and give
comments on our classmates.
Task1: remember useful expressions and reflect：
①what have you learned in this class
② can you apply these methods to your writing in the future exams
Task2:choose one of the scenes and try to describe it vividly by applying what we have learned during this class.(任选一个场景加以描写)
Scene 1 跳水救人 Henry jumped into the river and saved Robert.
Scene 2 在全班面前进行演讲 Tom gave a speech in front of the whole class.
Homework
Thank You
形容词：excited/angry/nervous/misty泪眼朦胧的/tearful眼泪汪汪的;jaw-dropping令人瞠目结舌的
副词：desperately / uncontrollably/tightly/cheerfully/hopefully/helplessly...
with+情感类名词：with delight/excitement/unwavering坚定不移的 determination
with+身体部位：with one’s sweaty hands/weather-beaten face 饱经风霜的脸
with复合结构：with one’s heart beating/pounding wildly;
with hesitation/excitement/sadness/regret written on one’s face
其他介词短语：in a(n) soft/gentle/low/excited/deep/quiet/loud voice；without hesitation;
at a snail’s pace 蜗行，非常缓慢 like a cat on hot bricks如热锅上的蚂蚁
with/have butterflies in one’s stomach心里 忐忑不安的、七上八下的
on pins and needles 如坐针毡
like a happy bird 像一只快乐的小鸟
加入修饰词，如副词，介词短语，使动作更情绪化，从而使人物表达更鲜活
语言的优美必须有
语言的积累
Word Bank
general verbs （笼统) concrete verbs(具体词）
walk
run
Look/ see
say/ talk
cry
eat
tiptoe/sneak/creep (悄悄地缓慢移动，蹑手蹑脚地走) / slip溜; stagger 摇摇晃晃地走inch缓慢移动 ； pace来回踱步
dash/rush/charge /storm (猛冲)
glance/glimpse (瞥见); glare (怒视); stare/gaze(盯着看，凝视) ;
peep窥视、偷看；take a quick peep/glimpse of 迅速瞥/瞟一眼
chat /whisper (耳语)/ comfort/ explain/ add/ continue /admit/ reply/ complain/ stutter结结巴巴地说/mumble 嘟哝；chirp叽叽喳喳，欢快地说
weep/sob (啜泣)、 swallow one’s sadness; make one’s eyes water
bite(咬) 、take a big/small bite; chew （咀嚼) swallow(吞咽)
wolf down（狼吞虎咽）, make one’s mouth water
语言的优美必须有语言的积累

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