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Continuation Writing
--Capture and Echo the Foreshadowing
读写构思情节合理化——捕捉伏笔，续写照应
读原文材料时缺少发现，阅读时不知道如何挖掘原文材料为续写所用；
01
续写情节衔接缺少连贯性，逻辑性不强，与原文疏离，主题升华不贴切；
02
续写背景融洽度不高，缺乏协同性、得体性和实际性。
03
读后续写中存在的问题
正确、深入解读材料，使读写构思情节合理化。
Step 1: Lead in
“契诃夫的枪”是一种情节装置，它描述了故事的每一个元素应该如何对整体做出贡献。它来自安东·契诃夫的著名的写作建议︰"如果你在第一章中说有一支挂在墙上的步枪，在第二或第三章中它绝对必须开火。如果它不打算发射，就不应该挂在那里。
如果一支上了膛的来福枪不开火就不能把它放在桌子上。子上
最好的语料和续写思路在原文
It is important to capture and echo the foreshadowing.
理论依据：
foreshadowing伏笔是文学创作中描写、叙述的一种手法，指作者对将要在作品中出现的人物或事件，预作提示或暗示，以求前后呼应。这种手法有助于全文达到结构严谨、情节发展合理的效果，其最显著的特征是有伏必应。
echo照应是文学创作中描写、叙述的一种手法，指作品下文与上文相呼应，即“回应上文”。好的伏笔与照应能起到暗示、点题、沟通文章内部联系等作用，使文理通顺，合情合理，往往能让人产生心灵共鸣或意外的阅读惊喜。
What is “echo the foreshadowing”
(2016年浙江高考)
阅读材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
①One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom, “I’m going to find a better spot for us to camp” and walked away.
②With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but fore stand, far beyond, a snow capped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.
③“Tom!” she cried. “Help!”
④No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.
⑤ Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落)somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream.To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.
⑥ As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later,another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse,thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.
注意：1.续写词数应为150个左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph1:But no more helicopter came and it was getting dark again.___________
Paragraph2:It was daybreak when Jane woke up. _________________________
Enjoy an example: read and explore(complete the blanks in P2).
Step 2: Learn to capture and echo the foreshadowing
Conflict： .
Solution: .
Theme: .
读线索5W1H
content
who
when
where
what
why
Jane was lost
they quarreled and Jane walked away
Jane, her husband Tom
one weekend in July
by the lake in the forest
main idea
(when), (what) (where)
because (why).
One weekend in July
Jane was lost
by the lake in the forest
quarrel, Jane was lost
do not quarrel, was found
learn to tolerate and communicate（love）
they quarreled and Jane walked away
One possible version:
But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Jane stopped walking and leaned against a tree by the steam. Although it was already July, she still felt very cold in the forest, and the gurgle of the stream at night added her cold and loneliness. All the fantastic memory crowded in and she couldn’t help crying, “Hadn’t I quarreled with Tom, walked away and climbed to the high place, we would be enjoying the perfect quiet night together in the warm tent.” She regretted with endless anxiety, and then became asleep with shining tears in her eyes.
It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Weak as she was, she struggled to her feet, continuing searching for assistance. To her great joy, a helicopter was flying overhead again and again. Eager and excited, she flagged her yellow blouse and spared no effort to yell so as to attract others’ attention. Fortunately, she was eventually noticed and the helicopter didn’t fly away this time. There, she saw her husband, a man staring at her, wearing an expression of relief. As tightly as possible, she hugged him and was too thrilled to say anything. Besides, they agreed never to quarrel again, determining to live the life to the fullest.
Task 2 : Capture and echo the foreshadowing？
Task 2 : Capture and echo the foreshadowing？
Tip1：捕捉原文反复出现或重点描写的特定物品，续写复现照应
Tip2：捕捉原文背景（时间、地点）和特定情节，续写复现照应
Tip3：捕捉原文人物的语言（对话）、动作、情感等细节描写，
续写复现、推进照应
Tip4：捕捉文章冲突、主题, 续写照应解决冲突、升华主题
Tip1：捕捉原文反复出现或重点描写的特定物品，续写复现照应
（2016年浙江高考）原文末段
⑥As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.
Paragraph1:But no more helicopter came and it was getting dark again.___________
Paragraph2:It was daybreak when Jane woke up. ________
续写参考范文
Paragraph 2 It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Weak as she was, she struggled to her feet, continuing searching for assistance. To her great joy, a helicopter was flying overhead again and again. Eager and excited, she flagged her yellow blouse and spared no effort to yell so as to attract others’ attention. Fortunately, she was eventually noticed and the helicopter didn’t fly away this time. There, she saw her husband, a man staring at her, wearing an expression of relief. As tightly as possible, she hugged him and was too thrilled to say anything. Besides, they agreed never to quarrel again, determining to live the life to the fullest.
①原文特定物品伏笔 & 续写照应物品
Task 2 : Capture and echo the foreshadowing？
（2016年浙江高考）原文
①One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately,on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom, “I’m going to find a better spot for us to camp” and walked away.
⑤Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落)somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream.......
续写参考范文
Paragraph 1 But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Jane stopped walking and leaned against a tree by the stream. Although it was already July, she still felt very cold in the forest, and the gurgle of the stream at night added her cold and loneliness. All the fantastic memory crowded in and she couldn’t help crying, “Hadn’t I quarreled with Tom, walked away and climbed to the high place, we would be enjoying the perfect quiet night together in the warm tent.” She regretted with endless anxiety, and then became asleep with shining tears in her eyes.
①原文背景（时间、地点）伏笔 & 续写照应点
②原文特定情节伏笔 & 续写照应点
Tip2：捕捉原文背景(时间、地点)和特定情节，续写复现照应
Task 2 : Capture and echo the foreshadowing？
（2016年浙江高考）原文
①One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom, “I’m going to find a better spot for us to camp” and walked away.
②With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.
③“Tom!” she cried. “Help!”
④No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.
⑤Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落)somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream.To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.
⑥As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later,another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.
续写参考范文：
But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Jane stopped walking and leaned against a tree by the steam. Although it was already July, she still felt very cold in the forest, and the gurgle of the stream at night added her cold and loneliness. All the fantastic memory crowded in and she couldn’t help crying, “Hadn’t I quarreled with Tom, walked away and climbed to the high place, we would be enjoying the perfect quiet night together in the warm tent.” She regretted with endless anxiety, and then became asleep with shining tears in her eyes.
It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Weak as she was, she struggled to her feet, continuing searching for assistance. To her great joy, a helicopter was flying overhead again and again. Eager and excited, she flagged her yellow blouse and spared no effort to yell so as to attract others’ attention. Fortunately, she was eventually noticed and the helicopter didn’t fly away this time. There, she saw her husband, a man staring at her, wearing an expression of relief. As tightly as possible, she hugged him and was too thrilled to say anything. Besides, they agreed never to quarrel again, determining to live the life to the fullest.
Tip3：捕捉原文人物的语言（对话）、动作、情感等细节描写，续写复现、推进照应
Task 2 : Capture and echo the foreshadowing？
①原文语言（对话）细节伏笔 & 续写照应点
②原文动作细节伏笔 & 续写照应点
③原文情感细节伏笔 & 续写照应点
情节线
情感线
续写参考范文：
Paragraph 2 It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Weak as she was, she struggled to her feet, continuing searching for assistance. To her great joy, a helicopter was flying overhead again and again. Eager and excited, she flagged her yellow blouse and spared no effort to yell so as to attract others’ attention. Fortunately, she was eventually noticed and the helicopter didn’t fly away this time. There, she saw her husband, a man staring at her, wearing an expression of relief. As tightly as possible, she hugged him and was too thrilled to say anything. Besides, they agreed never to quarrel again, determining to live the life to the fullest.
Tip4：捕捉文章冲突、主题, 续写照应解决冲突、升华主题
（2016年浙江高考）原文
①One weekend in July,...... Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. ...... and walked away.
②...... She suddenly realized that she was lost.
主题、冲突伏笔 & 续写照应点
Task 2 : Capture and echo the foreshadowing？
Summary
How to capture and echo the foreshadowing？
捕捉原文反复出现或重点描写的特定物品，续写复现照应
捕捉原文背景（时间、地点）和特定情节，续写复现照应
捕捉原文人物的语言（对话）、动作、情感等细节描写，续写复现、
推进照应
捕捉文章冲突、主题, 续写照应解决冲突、升华主题
Tip1
Tip4
Tip3
Tip2
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
The annual Halloween arrived, during which kids dressed in traditional clothes went to neighbors houses to ask for candy.
Allison lived in a small town. That day after dinner, Allison put on her dress her father had just bought for her. The dress was cheap and second-hand because her family was poor. But Allison still thanked her dad and said," Everyone will love my dress!" Then, she left for neighbors houses to ask for candy.
On the way, she came across Anna and her friends and wanted to join them."No! Look at your dress! It's ugly!" Anna said. Her friends also laughed. "Look at our dresses, especially mine! It's new and beautiful," Anna added. Her friends nodded, and in some way they were right. Anna's dress was shiny and looked expensive. She always had the best clothes because her parents were rich.
Allison was shocked and sad. The kids not only disliked her dress but made fun of it." You can't come with us!" Anna stressed. "We would never hang out with you!" The other kids agreed and laughed. They all left to start collecting candy for the night while Allison was left alone, embarrassed in the middle of the street.
Anyway, she knew all the neighbors. She often helped around carrying their groceries and helping them with their gardens. People around there knew her. She didn't need to hang out with Anna or her friends. "I'll go just alone," the little girl said to herself and started walking.
She as well as Anna and her friends walked in the same direction: towards their first neighbor Mrs Vaughan's house. But Allison walked behind and kept her distance from them. And she stopped when Anna and her friends were near Mrs Vaughan's house.
Just then, Mrs Vaughan looked out of her window. She noticed that Allison was being excluded by Anna and her friends. She knew it was probably because of Allison's poor dress. She immediately felt pity for Allison, who often helped her and other neighbors. She decided to give Allison much more candy as a reward and teach Anna and her friends a lesson.
注意：1.续写词数应为150个左右；
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: When Anna and her friends knocked on her door, Mrs Vaughan opened it.
Paragraph 2: Anna looked up and said, “our clothes are more beautiful! But you gave Allison more candy! Why "
Step 3 Exercise：Have a try!
who
when
where
what
why
Main idea： (when), (what)
(where) (why).
Conflict： Solution: Theme:
读线索5W1H
content
who
when
where
what
Why
main idea
(when), (what)
(where)
(why).
Halloween
on the street, near Mrs Vaughan’s house
Allison, Anna and her friends, Mrs Vaughan
Allison was excluded by Anna and her friends
because of the cheap and second-hand dress
Halloween
Allison was excluded by Anna and her friends
on the street near Mrs Vaughan’s house
because of the cheap and second-hand dress
Conflict： .
Solution: .
Theme: .
Allison was excluded because of the cheap and second-hand dress
realise the real beauty and become friends
Never judge by appearances.
work in group and exchange your ideas
Tips 特定物品 特定背景和情节 人物的语言（对话）、动作、情感等细节描写 冲突、主题
已给原文伏笔 背景： 特定情节： 语言（对话）： 动作： 情感变化： 冲突、主题：
续写照应思路 照应思路： 照应思路： 如何解决冲突，升华主题？
Task 4: Capture and Echo the Foreshadowing (complete the table)
Tips 特定物品、特殊人物 特定情节和背景
已给原文伏笔 背景：
续写照应思路
candy;
dress
candy ；
real beauty
Halloween；ask for candy；Mrs Vaughan’s house
She often their groceries
and their gardens.
Allison 经常帮助别人，这才是由内而外的真的美。
跟Mrs Vaughan讨糖果
特定情节：
⑦Just then, ....... She noticed that Allison by Anna and her friends. She knew it was probably . She immediately felt pity for Allison, who often . She decided to as a reward
and .
如何做到give Allison much more candy as a reward and teach Anna and her friends a lesson.
helped around carrying
helping them with
was being excluded
because of Allison's poor dress
helped her and other neighbors
give Allison much more candy
teach Anna and her friends a lesson
Tips 人物的语言（对话）、动作、情感等细节描写 冲突、主题,
已给原文伏笔
续写照应思路
新裙子美 ？什么才是真的美？
怎么解释gave Allison more candy的原因？
"No! Look at your dress! It's ugly!" Anna said.
"Look at our dresses, especially mine! It's new and beautiful,"
" You can't come with us!" Anna stressed. "We would never hang out with you!"
On the way, she Anna and her friends and wanted to .
laughed at; shocked and sad；alone
They all left ......while Allison ,......
She as well ...... But Allison and from......
和他们一起敲门，向Mrs Vaughan讨糖果？
Anna and her friends听到原因之后怎么做？
仍然disliked her dress，made fun of it，left Allison alone？
inner
beauty;
Never judge by appearances.
羞愧、抱歉; 意识到错误; 开心
being excluded
apologize and become friends
ugly
dress
语言：
动作：
情感：
came across
join them
The kids not only but .
disliked her dress
made fun of it
was left alone
"I'll go just alone,"
walked behind
kept her distance
......“our clothes are more beautiful! But you gave Allison more candy! Why "
语言：
动作：
情感：
Step 4 Evaluate and polish评价同伴作文并重写第二段
Tips 特定物品、特殊人物 特定情节和背景 人物的语言（对话）、动作、情感等细节描写 文章主题
续写照应√
Step 4 Polish and rewrite Paragraph 2
When Anna and her friends knocked on her door, Mrs Vaughan opened it. The girls greeted her, showed off their beautiful clothes and asked for candy. Mrs Vaughan, who held a bag of sweets, asked them to wait for a moment. Then, she waved to Allison, calling out, “Dear, come here!” When Allison came, Mrs Vaughan said, “Oh, how beautiful you are today!” Then, she gave Allison most of her candy although the girl declined. When Allison walked away, Mrs Vaughan divided the rest of the candy among Anna and her friends, who were a little angry and confused.
照应万圣节背景和炫耀新裙子
照应特定情节和细节Allison kept her distance, 要远远招呼过来。
①照应原文末段：more candy as a reward ； teach Anna and her friends a lesson；
②照应连贯paragragh 2 开头，“我们更美，为什么给她更多？”
Anna looked up and said, “our clothes are more beautiful! But you gave Allison more candy! Why " Mrs Vaughan looked down calmly and explained that Allison always gave us a hand and was friendly to neighbors. She has great inner beauty. "Inner beauty is more important. Why not be friends with her " Mrs Vaughan added. Hearing that, Anna and her friends' faces turned red and they realized they had done something wrong. They said goodbye to Mrs Vaughan, caught up with Allison, and sincerely invited Allison to join them. Allison nodded gladly and had new friends, who would no longer judge her by her clothes.
①照应语言细节，解释原因， teach Anna and her friends a lesson；
②照应情节helped neighbors；
③照应 冲突、主题
解决冲突，升华主题
最好的语料在原文
伏笔 & 照应，
有伏必应

有连贯性的伏笔，做连续性的埋设和照应；
为推进情节发展、主题升华服务。
Homework
Pay special attention to the foreshadowing, capture and echo it to make the story developed reasonably.
Evaluate, polish and rewrite your own writing after class.

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