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Connection in Continuation Writing
读后续写之段落衔接与连贯
Lead in
W: Do you like the movie Sister 我的姐姐
M: I think Shen Teng did a job in Hi，Mom!你好，李焕英
W: Well… Shen Teng is very humorous.
M: But I think Yang Mi made a lot of money from A Writer’s Odyssey刺杀小说家.
W: Well…
M：
A man and a woman was in a blind date相亲. The man failed to leave a good impression on the woman. What’s wrong with their conversation
There was no connection in their conversation.
21—25分（优秀）
1. 与所给短文融合度高，与所提供的各段落开头语衔接合理；
2.内容丰富，故事发展合理，逻辑强 3. 所使用语法结构和词汇多样、准确和恰当，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意思表达； 4.有效地使用了语句间的连接手段，结构清晰，意义连贯 16-20分（比较优秀）
1. 与所给短文融合度高，与所提供的各段落开头语衔接较为合理；
2. 内容丰富，故事发展比较合理，有逻辑3. 所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意思表达；
4. 比较有效地使用了语句间的连接手段，结构比较清晰，意义比较连贯。
新高考全国卷续写 浙江卷续写
Logic and Reasonable
The importance of connection
2.衔接: 3分
(1)全文内容衔接、连贯自然。(1分)
(2)第一段第一句与上文最后一句衔接。 (1分)
(3)第一段最后一句与第二段第一句衔接。 (1分)
Connection in the continuation writing
Connection between the two Paras and the original text (两段内容与原文的衔接)；
Connection between the given sentences and their next sentences (所给句与随后句的衔接)；
Connection between the ending of Para.1 and the given sentence(s) of Para.2(第一段的结尾与第二段所给句的衔接) ；
Connection between the ending of the story and the theme.(最后落脚点与主题的呼应)
Presentation
“But you will be a beautiful narrator,”she said. Reminding me how much I loved to readstories aloud to her, she continued to stress,“The narrator 's part is just as important as the part of a princess.”（所给句与随后句的衔接）Her wise words inspired me with courage and confidence. But on the evening of the performance, I suddenly felt nervous backstage again. My teacher came over to me.“Your mother asked me to give you this," she said, handing me a dandelion. Looking at it, I knew my mother was out there for me, which calmed me down.（第一段结尾与第二段所给句的衔接)
After the play, I took home the flower. My mother made it into a dried flower and put it into a glass bottle. (所给句与随后句的衔接）Every time I see it, I am reminded of this unforgettable experience. I have participated in many school plays, tried different roles and made many speeches ever since. Gradually, I've become really good at performing and public speaking, seldom feeling nervous onstage now. For this, I am forever grateful to my mother, who has made me what I am today.最后落脚点与主题的呼应theme:自信，成长，感恩
Example
Presentation&observation：如何衔接？
利用主位化结构快速衔接段首句。主位化结构就是一个句子可以分为主位和述位，为了方便起见，我们把谓语动词前面的内容称为主位，谓语动词后面的内容称为述位。根据主位化结构可分主位衔接式和述位衔接式。
Example:
Long,long ago, there was a mountain.
On the mountain stood a temple.
In the temple lived an old monk.
The old monk was telling to a young monk a story.
The story went like this....
Presentation&observation：如何衔接？
利用主位化结构快速衔接段首句。主位化结构就是一个句子可以分为主位和述位，为了方便起见，我们把谓语动词前面的内容称为主位，谓语动词后面的内容称为述位。根据主位化结构可分主位衔接式和述位衔接式。
主位衔接式：1.The Milu deer, a species with large horns, used to be common in China long ago. _____________________________________.
述位衔接式：1.I began school at six. _____________________
主位+述位衔接式：I did all this in one great day at Futuroscope. ___________________________________________________________
Like other deer, they lived together and ate grass and the soft part of trees such as small branches.
The school where I studied for only two years was three kilometers away.
Futuroscope is one of the largest space-age parks in the world, which I have been long for visiting.
Practice1
___________（1）One day she was asked to visit a prison. At first the prison officers did not want to let others visit the women prisoners.
___________（2）Yuan Longping is quite satisfied with his life. However he doesn’t care about being famous.
1.判断下面句子采用了哪种衔接形式并划出对应的主位和述位
____________（3）The next morning，Wang Peng opened his restaurant earlier and put the above sign（菜单） outdoors. 衔接句：Staring at the new sign, he pictured that his restaurant was full of customers again.
Practice1
“But you will be a beautiful narrator,”she said. Reminding me how much I loved to readstories aloud to her, she continued to stress,“The narrator 's part is just as important as the part of a princess.”（ ）Her wise words inspired me with courage and confidence. But on the evening of the performance, I suddenly felt nervous backstage again. My teacher came over to me.“Your mother asked me to give you this," she said, handing me a dandelion. Looking at it, I knew my mother was out there for me, which calmed me down.（ ）
After the play, I took home the flower. My mother made it into a dried flower and put it into a glass bottle. （ ）Every time I see it, I am reminded of this unforgettable experience. I have participated in many school plays, tried different roles and made many speeches ever since. Gradually, I've become really good at performing and public speaking, seldom feeling nervous onstage now. For this, I am forever grateful to my mother, who has made me what I am today.最后落脚点与主题的呼应theme:自信，成长，感恩
2.赏析并判断范文使用哪种形式衔接
Task1：阅读全文，理清文章脉络后续写4个重要句子（1.第一段首句衔接句，2.第一段末句衔接句，3.第二段首句衔接句，4.结尾主题升华句）
Niesha could not forget the way she had frozen in front of the class today. Mr. Roberts had divided the class into groups to do presentations. Today had been Niesha's turn. However, her hands had shaken so badly that she couldn't read her notes. Her voice had become softer to the point of silence. Mr. Roberts
had kindly ended Niesha's pat of the presentation, even though she had clearly not finished. He had also asked Niesha to stay after class for a moment.
“Niesha, I know you're shy, but you worked hard on this project. I'd hate to see you give up on yourself." Then Mr. Roberts hesitated, before saying,“If I give you another chance until tomorrow, do you think you can find your courage " Niesha nodded, grateful for the chance. She went as quickly as she could to her next class. She kept her head down and hoped the school day would end soon.
When she reached her back steps that afternoon, she could see an inviting light coming from the kitchen windows. Momma was baking. Momma studied Niesha's face 'as she came into the kitchen. “What's wrong, Niesha "
Tears shone in Niesha's brown eyes. She told her the whole story. Momma was silent for a moment, her hands still busy with the cake.“Why is it that you can talk to me about anything and everything, but you can't talk to your class " Momma asked. She set the timer (计时器) and then said,“Let me show you something.”
Niesha followed Momma to her bedroom. There Momma showed her a book filled with newspaper clippings and pictures. In it there was a blue ribbon (丝带) that said "First Place”and a picture of herself when she was very young, standing with her parents.
“I won it for public speaking (演讲). When I started on the speech team I was quiet as a mouse, but I ended the year as the winner. It wasn't easy at first---I wasn't sure of myself at all. I worked hard, and mostly I faced my fears. You just need to find your courage."
Practice2应用与提升---使用主位化结构改写练习
Read for main idea:
Niesha was supposed to give a ____________in Mr.Roberts’ class today, but she was so _______ that she could not speak up. So Mr. Roberts made her______ and gave her another _________ tomorrow. When she got home, she told her mum _______________. Her mum showed her a ________________ about ________________________, in order to ___________ her and told her to find ______________.
presentation
shy
stop
chance
the whole story
blue ribbon
her public speaking
encourage
her courage
续写要求:1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Hearing Momma's words, Niesha gazed at the precious blue ribbon. 1.________________________________________________________________
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2.________________________________________________________________
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The next day Niesha again walked to the front of the classroom to give her presentation.
3.________________________________________________________________
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Practice2应用与提升---使用主位化结构改写练习
Hearing Momma's words, Niesha gazed at the precious blue ribbon. She imagined
the scene where her momma tried her best to overcome her fears and gether her courage to deliver a fantastic speech to the audience.Perceiving Neisha's anxiety, Momma reassured her and reached out her hand to tie the blue ribbon onto Niesha's wrist with a disarming smile. Restored and determined, she gritted her teeth to find her courage.In front of the mirror Neisha continuously practiced from pronunciation to tone, even gesture. “Try harder,”she cheered her up when drowsiness fell upon her.
The next day Niesha again walked to the front of the classroom to give her presentation. Shy,she lowered her head for seconds. Shortly afterwards, courage found its way back the moment she caught sight of the blue ribbon.Comforted and inspired, she took a deep breath, gethered up her courage, and began, "Dear fellstudents,…..”Niesha cast a glance at Mr. Roberts standing in the corner smiling at her. A self-reassuring smile spread across Niesha's face. She knew for sure that she had found her courage, in the mill and in the adversity.
Practice&revision
What happened to the crew members in the Elephant Island
Captain Shackleton set out to find help on South Georgia Island.
We had to be careful not to go outside too ofen, as the changing temperatures could make us ill. 1._______________________________________________________
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2._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
When the rescue finally came, we felt such relief and joy that many of us could not hide our tears. 3._____________________________________________________________________
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Practice3：复习与迁移---使用主位化结构续写
We had to be careful not to go outside too ofen, as the changing temperatures could make us ill. 1._______________________________________________________
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2._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
When the rescue finally came, we felt such relief and joy that many of us could not hide our tears. 3._____________________________________________________________________
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Practice3：复习与迁移---使用主位化结构续写
搬家路上遭遇车祸-爬出送货车-目睹惨状-绝望-救援到来-感恩
Diversity
Continuation Writing
courage perseverance
Homework:
Finish your passage(2021年新高考1卷读后续写）using what you have learned in the class.

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