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(共52张PPT)
----- receiving and giving
Learing objectives:
1. Get the main idea and the plot of given passage.
2. Predict the possible plot development according to given sentences.
3. Share how to express feelings vividly and end your writing differently.
Exchange and assessment
评分时, 应主要从以下四个方面考虑：
(1)与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度
(cohesion)
(2)内容的丰富性和关键词语的应用情况; (Content & key words )
(3)应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性;
(grammar and vocabulary)
(4)上下文的连贯性。(Coherence)
解题思路：
1. 首先, 要读懂原文, 抓住故事主线, 获得基础信息和文章主旨。
— 基础信息(5W1H)：when, where, who, what, why, how
— 在此基础上总结出文章大意。
2.在阅读中获取情节发展和作者的情感变化, 和文章的基调。
根据时间（时间标注词）, 分析作者的行为（动词）、情感（形容词、副词）和表达情感的方式（动作、体裁、修辞、对环境或心理的描写性词汇）
3.研究首句, 确定情节走向
研究两段段首所给句子, 捕捉关键词眼, 由关键词引出问题设问, 明确段落发展走向, 确定基本情节。
4.挑词选句, 连篇成文
抓住关键人物和关键动作, 从主要人物的动作、语言、神态、情感入手描写，词数应为 150 左右, 把续写内容平均分配在两段中。
5.基于文章基调, 确定结尾
在掌握语篇的基本的脉络, 即故事的起承转合后（beginning, development, climax &ending）, 合理的结尾是读后续写考察的一个重点。
6.文本复查
检查自己文章的语言（如时态、单词拼写、语法错误等）、逻辑和规范性。核对字数（数行即可），注意卷面，集中精力不勾画。
Step1.
通读全文，
理清脉络
1.读六要素
2.读情节
3.读情感
4.读故事主题
WHEN and WHERE
WHY WHO did WHAT to WHOM
Read for basic information
plot 情节
setting 背景
Main idea:
......
Tip1: We can get the main idea with the help of .
5W questions
who,whom,when,where,what,how
记叙文的六要素：
1. Who
2. Where
3. When
4. What happened
5. Why
6. How
WTC原则审题
1. Who
2. Where
3. When
4. What happened
5. Topic/Theme
6. Conflict/Problem
考试时把WTC的三个板块梳理清楚，才叫把文章读透了，尽量将这些细节融入到续写里，这样才能更好地呼应全文。
Joy, a ten-year-old boy who loved nature, is always ready to help others, whether animals or humans. For example, he is always keeping water in a large basin in his yard for watering the birds and other animals.
One noon, he was playing on the grass in a bushy garden after school. He enjoyed the chirping (叽喳叫) birds, colorful butterflies, and two squirrels playing on the coconut trees. It was their own free kingdom, and Joy felt like an outsider. He decided to give them space to enjoy freely.
So he found an open grass and lay down, feeling like sunbathing on a greeny beach. Under the hot sun, Joy covered the eyes with his soft palms (手掌). His mind flew and thought about his class teacher Miss Shyla’s homework task — to do a good deed every day.
Joy stretched (伸出) out his hands, fed the squirrel some crazy biscuits and played with it. He felt the tiny eyes of a squirrel upon him. And just then, Joy saw a big rat spying on him from a hole. Upon seeing the big rat, Joy rose to his feet before it silently moving and running towards the hole. Finally, he failed to find the rat and the rat hid into its hole. Joy lay down again.
As he enjoyed the greeny beach and the sight of the blue sky, he couldn’t help but thought, “What a wonderful and blessed world it is! We humans should allow the animals to live as they wished.”
Suddenly, a tiny bird fell to the ground before his eyes. The bird shook several times and then lost consciousness (知觉). Joy jumped up and tried his best to wake the bird up, but failed. He thought the bird had fainted (晕倒) because of the heat. He couldn’t bear to see the little creature suffer and decided to take care of the bird.
Para. 1:Joy picked up the bird and rushed back home.
1. How did Joy find the bird
2. Why did Joy picked up the bird and rushed back home
3. What did Joy think when he rushed back home
4. What will Joy do after he rushed back home.
5. How could para.1 be ended reasonably
Para. 2： At last, the bird came back to life and opened its eyes......
Group talking for the plot developments
Tip 2: Arrange the key words properly in first paragraphs.
wake up, worried, injured, vet , examined, treatment,
improved......
Para. 2：At last, the bird came back to life and opened its eyes......
1. How did Joy feel when the bird opened eyes
Will the bird be great
2. What problems will the bird meet
3. How will Joy solve the problem
4. Will the bird live in Joy’s home all the time
5. How could Para.2 be ended reasonably
Tip 3: The passage can be ended variously using _______________________
_____________ _______________ ________________.
natural ending,
feeling ending,
surrounding ending,
meaningful ending, etc
Self—writing
Use some descriptive(描写性的) expressions
Read for plots, feelings, AND language
Bird’s feelings
Timeline ------------------------------------------------------------------------------>
Bird’s
behaviors
Bird’s
behaviors
Joy’s
behaviors
Joy’s
behaviors
ways to express feelings
Bird’s feelings
Joy’s feelings
Joy’s feelings
All animals have their own emotions,we should treat them like a real person.
Task 1:
Read the passage loudly for five minutes, get familiar with the main idea and make clear the 5W1H in your mind.
A:Speak out the main idea and 5W1H fluently.
B1B2:Know the main idea and make clear 5W1H.
C:Make clear when, who, where, what, how.
Task 2:
Discuss with your group for five minutes.
（1）Find one typicial artical to share your story.
A:Analyize the article.
B1B2:Can find out most of the mistakes.
C:Make clear when, who, where, what in your articles.
（2）Answer those questions in English and Chinese.
1 point/person/question
2. Where
3. When
1. Who
4. What happened
garden
one noon
A tiny bird.......
beach
Joy, a tiny bird
home
5.Why
6.How
Para.1：
Para 1: Joy picked up the bird and rushed back home. As soon as(一...就...) he entered the house, Joy placed the bird in the shade of the living room so that it could feel cool. Ten minutes passed, but the bird did not wake up. Joy became more and more worried. After asking his mother, Joy learned that the bird might have been injured. Therefore, Joy decided to turn to the vet(兽医) for help. After being examined and receiving professional treatment, the bird’s condition improved.
One possible version
polish your writing
Paragraph 2: At last, the bird came back to life and opened its eyes. Seeing the bird waking up, Joy was relieved. Unfortunately, the bird failed when attempting to fly away. Joy took the bird home, put it into a cage and took care of it carefully. A few days later, the bird finally recovered. Joy took the cage to the bushy garden, opened the cage, and released the bird. The birds flew out, chirping around Joy. Finally, it flew away freely. Recalling the good deed he had done, Joy was very happy.
One possible version
polish your writing
1.There is any possible that the bird died
2.Is it a bird or a real person
3.Is it a real story Or a fairy tale
4.All is well
原则和底线
polish your writing
A is waiting for B who is the only hope left for his company. He welcomes B by giving him a hug.
Role-play Game
Which pair do you think acts better
And why
look at his watch
question people nearby
confirm by taking off glass
slap his thighs
clap
shake hands
hug
tears well up in his eyes
anxiety
wild joy
designed by Ma Ning
The morning classes are over, Tim dashes to the canteen.
Practice
excited,
eager
Pair Work: produce a picture using language
step 1
Read the original text carefully.
step 2
Figure out the character’s emotion.
step 3
Design an action chain based on the emotion.
1.情感为核
2.动作成链
秘籍
How to produce pictures in the minds of your reader
动作链与动作面
读后续写微技能一
Jane Tan
Tip 1 构造动作链产业链？
告诉司机目的地
got into the car
told the driver her destination
1
2
3
场景一：上车把大象关进冰箱需要几步？
hailed the car
上车
拦下车
递给可怜的乞丐
1
2
3
场景二：掏钱给可怜的乞丐
give the money to the beggar
掏出一把零钱
伸进口袋
He reached deep into the pocket, pulled out a
handful of change and gave it to the poor beggar.
reached deep into the pocket
pulled out a handful of change
gave it to the poor beggar
Tip 2 构造动作面
3
2
1
Emotions
Dialogues
Inner thought
4
Actions
动作面=动作+情感，环境，语言，心理等
5
Surroundings
情绪
动作
语言
Actions
Dialogues
Emotions
“我去给你们拿点咖啡，”她笑道，朝厨房走去。
“我去给你们拿点咖啡，”她笑道，朝厨房走去。
“I'll get you some coffee ,”she smiled, heading for the kitchen.
He was overwhelmed with joy, singing and dancing in the rain.
他欣喜若狂，在雨中又唱又跳。
句型 2
主语+谓语, doing and doing
On a sunny afternoon , Jane _________(参观)the scenic spot , _________(欣赏) the magnificent waterfall and _________(拍照) countless pictures, relaxed and overjoyed.
Practice
visited
taking
appreciating
站在海边，他们仰望天空，感受着这份珍贵的平静。
句型3: doing,主语+谓语 ,doing
Standing at the seashore, they looked up into the sky, enjoying the precious peace from within.
Surroundings
Actions
Inner thought
面对这四个强壮的人，狼可能会感到受到威胁，开始
撤退。 (2017.浙江高考卷）
Facing the four strong men, the wolf might feel threatened ，starting to withdraw.
高考链接
被老师的话鼓舞，Lucy举起了手，小声说：“我来试试。”
句型 4: done,主语+谓语,doing
Encouraged by the teacher's words, Lucy raised her hand, whispering, ”I want to have a try”.
听完后深受鼓励，David伸出双臂抱住了我并微笑着说：“ 我可以做到！” (2022年 新高考I 读后续写)
Deeply encouraged after hearing this, David held out his arms and hugged me, replying in a delighted voice “ I can do it！”
高考链接
又累又饿，他们终于安全到达了目的地。
Exhausted and hungry, they eventually arrived at the destination safe and sound .
句型5.形容词做主补，主语＋谓语
Summary
1. A,B and C / A and B （三个/两个并列动词的连接）
2. 主语+谓语，doing and doing （伴随动作）
3. Doing， 主语+谓语, doing (主动动作)
4. Done ， 主语+谓语, doing (被动动作)
5. 形容词作主补，主语+谓语
情绪描写小技巧
读后续写微技能二
Jane Tan
Feeling adj. adv. Feeling adj. adv.
开心 惊讶
难过 困惑
痛苦 好奇
紧张 自信
激动 羞愧
生气 焦虑
失望 自豪
happy
delighted
happily
delightedly
sad
sadly
painful
painfully
nervous
nervously
excited
excitedly
angry
angrily
disappointed
disappointedly
surprised
amazed
surprisedly
amazedly
confused
confusedly
curious
curiously
confident
confidently
ashamed
ashamedly
anxious
anxiously
proud
proudly
1. In order to encourage other classmates, a group of boys waved the class flags excitedly.
2.Hearing that he was asked to perform a dance as a punishment for being late, Hou Jiayu lowered his head shyly and ashamedly.
3.Wearing sunglasses, Shen Jiahao looked at classmates confidently, thinking that he was
the most handsome boy in our class.
Observe the sentences carefully to find out the rule
Skill 1: Use adverbs to make actions more emotional.
使用副词让动作更具情感。
Task 1 : Translate the sentences into English
1. 嘉俊开心和激动地拍了拍桂辉的肩膀。
Jiajun patted Guihui on the shoulder happily and excitedly.
2. 他们紧张地观看100米比赛。
They watched the 100-meter race nervously.
3.俊锋开心地挥动着气球和班旗。
Junfeng waved the class flag happily.
1.Nervous and scared, Peter started to deliver his speech.
2.Confident and determined, David tried his best to run .
3.Depressed and helpless, Eric burst in tears.
Observe the sentences carefully to find out the rule
Skill 2:
Adj.1 and adj.2, sb. did sth.
怀着...和...的感情，某人做...
1.既开心又激动
2.既难过又沮丧
3.既紧张又焦虑
4.既担心又害怕
5.既坚定又自信
6.既惊讶又感动
7.既生气又失望
8.既疲倦又饥饿
常用搭配
Delighted and excited
Sad and frustrated
Nervous and anxious
Worried and scared
Determined and confident
Surprised and touched
Annoyed and disappointed
Exhausted and hungry
Tips: 使用两个意义相近的形容词进行搭配。
Task 2: Complete sentences with appropriate adjectives.
1. _________________________(感到坚定和受到鼓舞的）, David raised his head , looking at me with gratitude . （2022全国1卷）
2._________________________(感到放松的和快乐的) , David waved at me immediately after crossing the finish line , conveying his happiness and gratitude . （2022全国1卷）
3.________________________(既惊讶又感动), Mr. Alder believed what I said, giving me a second chance. (2023广东一模)
4._________________________(感到开心和兴奋的), he
received the admission letter from Guangzhou University.
Determined and inspired
Relaxed and delighted
Surprised and touched
Delighted and excited
1. So excited was Lan Yunxuan that he alomst jumped up.
2.So delighted was Liang Chiwei that he waved the balloon.
3.So sad was Klee that she
burst into tears.
Observe the sentences carefully to find out the rule
Skill 3:
So+adj.+be+主语+that从句
某人是如此的...以致于
1. ______________________that I heard my heart pounding strongly.
我非常紧张，能听到我的心剧烈地跳动。
2.______________________that she burst into laughter.
可莉非常开心，突然大笑起来。
Task 3: Complete the following sentences
So nervous was I
So delighted was Klee
Summary
使用副词让动作更具情感。
Adj.1 and adj.2, sb. did sth.
怀着...和...的感情，某人做...
So+adj.+be+主语+that从句
某人是如此的...以致于
结尾
读后续写微技能三
Jane Tan
Different expressions on endings
feeling ending: Just at that moment, a ripple of (一阵) excitement began to
cross my face.
surrounding ending: A pleasant breeze(微风) was blowing, making the leaves
of trees swinging lightly as if to be cheering for us.
meaningful ending: What mom did reminded me of a famous saying:
Roses given, fragrance in hand.(赠人玫瑰，手留余香)
Tip4: The passage can be ended variously using _______________________
_____________ _______________ ________________.
natural ending,
feeling ending,
surrounding ending,
meaningful ending, etc
Feeling analysis
Beginning
always unhappy
development
impatient, annoyed
curious, confused
worried ↑ hopeless
Climax
The writer has_________________with his mom.
misunderstanding
Ending

高考链接：请运用所学技巧续写故事
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