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大湾区2023—2024学年第二学期期末联合考试 高二英语
本卷共8页，分三部分，满分120分。考试时间120分钟。
注意事项：1.答卷前，考生务必将自己的学校、班级、姓名、考场号、座位号和准考证号填 写在答题卡上，将条形码横贴在答题卡“条形码粘贴处”。
2. 作答选择题时，选出每小题答案后，用2B 铅笔在答题卡上将对应题目选项的 答案信息点涂黑；如需改动，用橡皮擦干净后，再选涂其他答案。答案不能答 在试卷上。
3. 非选择题必须用黑色字迹的钢笔或签字笔作答，答案必须写在答题卡各题目指 定区域内相应位置上；如需改动，先划掉原来的答案，然后再写上新答案；不 准使用铅笔和涂改液。不按以上要求作答无效
4. 考生必须保证答题卡的整洁。考试结束后；将试卷和答题卡一并交回。
第二部分阅读(共两节，满分50分)
第一节(共15小题；每小题2.5分，满分37.5分)
阅读下列短文，从每题所给的A 、B 、C 、D四个选项中选出最佳选项。 A
The tastiest hotels around the world
For food enthusiasts on vacation,few places feature more high-end dishes than the Michelin-starred restaurants in the world's top hotels.Here are some recommendations to consider.
The Restaurant,Dolder Grand:Zurich,Switzerland
Sitting in the hills above Zurich,the Dolder Grand is home to “The Restaurant”led by chef Heiko Nieder.This two-Michelin-starred dining destination has creative dishes and impressive wine. Hjem:Northumberland,UK
Located in rolling hills in Northumberland,Hjem is one of the UK's most sought-after places to dine and spend the night.Offering a one-Michelin-starred menu,Hjem highlights local produce, providing a true taste of the region.Be sure not to miss their breakfast,included in the room rate.
C te By Mauro Colagreco,Capella Bangkok:Thailand
Overlooking Chao Phraya river,this one-Michelin-starred C te By Mauro Colagreco at Capella Bangkok combines tastes from France with traditional Thai ingredients.Open for lunch and dinner, it offers a tasting menu.
Pergola,Rome Cavalieri,a Waldorf Astoria Hotel:Italy
Situated in a roof garden atop the Rome Cavalieri,a Waldorf Astoria Hotel,La Pergola is the only three-Michelin-starred restaurant in Rome.Signature dishes include homemade pasta.As for the hotel side of things,you'll find rooms decorated with invaluable art pieces dating back three centuries.
21.Which restaurant offers a true taste of the local food
A.The Restaurant. B.Hjem.
C.C te By Mauro Colagreco. D.Pergola. 22.What do we learn about C te by Mauro Colagreco
A.It offers Thai breakfast. B.It is a rooftop restaurant
C.It is under French influence. D.It is open around the clock. 23.What do these four hotels have in common
A.They are all 3 centuries old. B.They all sit in the hilly areas.
C.They are all located in Europe. D.They all serve high-end dishes.
B
When Alex Lin was 11 years old,he came across an alarming article in the newspaper highlighting the improper handling of e-waste,such as burying outdated computers in backyards and throwing cellphones in the garbage.This is dangerous as e-waste contains poisonous chemicals and substances that can leak into the environment,getting into crops,animals,water supplies,and even humans.
“I was deeply concerned,”recalls Alex.He immediately conducted a survey to assess the situation in his town.The results were astonishing:Among the respondents,only one in eight even knew what e-waste was,let alone how to properly dispose of it.
Determined to make a difference,Alex immediately set up a project under WIN,the organization he had established with his friends two years prior to address community issues.The WIN team publicized their efforts in the local newspaper and distributed notices tostudents,urging residents to bring their unwanted electronics to the school parking lot.They successfully collected over 21,000 pounds of e-waste,including outdated computers from the school system.Following this,they established a permanent e-waste drop-offcenter.
Recognizing the imporance ofreuse,which is seven times more efficient than recycling,Alex and his team began exploring ways to refurbish(翻新)the old computers.He persuaded his school to integrate computer refurbishment into the curriculum,enabling students to collect,restore,and distribute 260 computers to children in need
Realizing that a drop-offcenter alone was not a sustainable solution,Alex took his efforts to the state level in 2006.He spoke at the state house,advocating for a new e-waste bill that would outlaw the dumping(倾倒)of e-waste.Along with other supporters,he engaged with lawmakers,presented slideshows,and gathered over 370 signatures.Ultimately,the bill was passed into law.
Thanks to the efforts of individuals like Alex and his team,the message of safe e-waste disposal is gradually gaining attention.As Alex states,“Today's technology should not become tomorrow's poison.”
24.What was the issue that concerned Alex
A.High investment of e-waste recycling.
B.Pollution from burying old computers. C.Unsafe management of electronic waste.
D.Wasted stuff in thrown-away electronics.
25.What words can best summarize Alex and his team
A.Generous yet inefficient B.Innovative and committed.
C.Passionate yet undisciplined. D.Conventional and cautious. 高二英语试卷第2页(共8页)
26.Why did Alex and his team explore ways to refurbish old computers
A.To reuse the computers. B.To offer his school a course. C.To recycle the computers. D.To improve study efficiency. 27.What is the main message conveyed in the last sentence of the passage
A.Future e-products need to be eco-friendlier
B.Individuals can drive great change on e-waste. C.E-waste is a pressing concern for now and later. D.Old electronic items should be treated properly.
C
The train driver completed his journey to the station and climbed down from the train to get a cup of coffee.Suddenly,the train started on its own to the garage for servicing.Not to worry; programming of trains to move automatically from stations to railway garages is a practice that has actually been in place for over 25 years,particularly in the fully automated urban rail network.
The next big stage,the evolution from automatic to truly autonomous (自主的)trains,is already here.It willtake train autonomy to a new level,meaning that the next generation of trains will be able to locate themselves in their environment and interact with other train traffic without human assistance.They will have the ability to detect and manage on their own all elements of their environment,operated by a connected traffic management system.
The shift toward train autonomy is speeding up due to digitalization.Digital technologies include artificial intelligence,big data,connectivity—such as the intermet of things connecting trains to intelligent railway switches—and built-in information secerity Collectively,they will enable the train to achieve true autonomy for safe and efficient operations.With these digital technologies,Rail Management Systems can automatically set routes,visualize the condition of the railway network in
real time,optimize(优化)resoufces,ard calculate forecasts based on actual data.In addition,Driver Advisory Systems provide a continuous flow of comprehensive information to enable drivers to make safe decisions.
Beyond the clear benefits for rail operators and passengers,autonomous trains will bring significant benefits to society.That is because more efficient traffic management will mean increased train frequency and improved services in crowded areas.With more than 55 per cent of the world's population in cities today—and with nearly 70 per cent projected by 2050,addressing urban transport issues is critical.
28.What does the author intend to do in paragraph 1
A.Provide related background information.
B.Illustrate train operation and maintenance. C.Introduce the concept of autonomous trains. D.Emphasize the significance of train security.
29.What does the underlined word“evolution”in paragraph 2 mean
A.Shift. B.Option. C.Distance. D.Extension.
30.What is the third paragraph mainly about
A.How digitalization facilitates train autonomy. B.What digital technologies are applied to trains. C.How train drivers make fast but safe decisions. D.What benefits autonomous trains have brought.
高二英语试卷第3页(共8页)
31.What benefit do autonomous trains bring to society
A.Optimizing railway data and resources.
B.Improving traffic efficiency and quality. C.Criticizing transport problems in cities.
D.Decreasing the crowdedness on the train.
D
Remote work,once celebrated as a pandemic-era (疫情时代)solution,now faces challenges. Some influential figures in banking are leading the charge to phase out remote work.Major financial institutions like Goldman Sachs are returning to traditional five-day workweeks,reflecting a broader trend away from remote work.Tech leaders such as Google are also tightening control,linking attendance to performance reviews.The widespread support for remote work benefits seems to be declining as employers apply stricter policies.
Recent global surveys reveal a disconnect between employers'remote work plans and employees'desires.Employers worry about decreased productivity with remote work,citing studies showing lower efficiency compared to office-based work.Despite these concerns,employees remain firm in their preference for remote work,seeking more flexibility in their work arrangements.
Remote work's appeal lies in time saved from traveling to work and a better work-life balance. Studies show remote work saves an average of 72 minutes daily,equal to significant time savings annually.Employees feel more engaged while working remotely,valuing these benefits as much as an 8%pay increase.The shift to remote work has been solidified by the pandemic,with many workers now in part-time or fully remote setups that may be challenging to backtrack.
It is no coincidence that the crackdown on remote work is happening as some industries cool. Job cuts across Wall Street and Silicon Valley have handed power back to businesses.However,even in tech and finance some employees are standing their ground.In May Amazon said that 300 employees staged walkouts over the e-empire's return-to-work policies.
Other firms are quietly adapting with the times.Deloitte and KPMG,two professional-services giants,want to reduce their office footprint in favour of more remote work.The gap between the two sides of the work-from-home battle may yet narrow.The question is whether the bosses or the bossed will yield the most.
32.What trend do the examples given in paragraph 1 reflect
A.Going back to offices. B.Shortening workdays
C.Home-based working. D.Flexible working time.
33.What can be inferred from paragraph 2
A.Employees exhibit better work at home.
B.Employees do not value work efficiency. C.Employers have a problem in connection. D.Employers advocate working in the office.
高二英语试卷第4页(共8页)
34.Why is restoring conventional work patterns a challenge
A.Because employees will be paid less.
B.Because traveling is no longer popular. C.Because of resistance from the workers.
D.Because of improvements in technology. 35.What is the best title for the text
A.Employers Agree with Employees
B.Work Efficiency Cries for a Reform
C.Work-from-home Holds Huge Appeal D.Fight over Remote Work Goes Global
第二节(共5小题，每小题2.5分，满分12.5分)
阅读下面短文，从短文后的选项中选出可以填入空白处的最佳选项。选项中有两项为多余 选项。
How to Make Your Personality Work for You
According to the World Economic Forum,financially successful individuals tend to be people with traits(品质)like outgoingness,engagement,expressiveness,and high energy. 36 ;it's at the core of who you are.Understanding your personality traits can help you capitalize on them for
career success
How your personality impacts your career
37 .You see things based on your past thoughts and experiences,and it impacts what
you believe will happen in the future.That outlook translates into your workplace and career decisions.If you have an optimistic personality research shows that you are likely to have more career success than someone who is pessimistic.
38
The frst key to letting your personality be a beneficial driving force in your career is to allow the genuine“you”to shine through.Be yourself.Actively engage in tasks and seek out assignments in areas where your personality shines through.If you're happier and more fulfilled in your work and your productivity increases,chances are that people will notice.Let your good work speak for you.Your passion and abilities can open doors of opportunity.
Personality alone may not be enough
Ideally,everyone would find their work fulflling,engaging,and love what they do.But we all know that's not always the case. 39 .Although you are a social,engaging person,you have a position where staying quiet and working alone is what gets the job done.In this situation,it's important to consciously(自觉地)use soft skills like active listening,understanding others'feelings, and being polite and considerate. 40
A.Your personality can benefit your career
B.Unique personality may advance in your career
C.Your job may not be one that fits your personality
D.But personality is more thanjust the traits you exhibit E.Your personality colors your outlook and point of view
F.Your personality plays a big part in what you say and the things you do
G.Those are crucial for career advancement and creating a positive work environment 高二英语试卷第5页(共8页)
第三部分语言运用(共两节，满分30分)
第一节 (共15小题；每小题1分，满分15分)
阅读下面短文，从每题所给的A 、B 、C 、D四个选项中选出可以填入空白处的最佳选项。
Writing a book is no easy task,even for adult professional writers.Many would-be authors dream of a day when their work can be found on 41 shelves.But for 8-year-old Dillon Helbig, that 42 has already become a reality in a 43 way.
Dillon created an 81-page graphic(图画的) 44 titled“The Adventures ofDillon Helbig's Crismis”on a hardcover notebook using colored pencils.He 45 decorated the cover to make it look like a published book.Then he brought the book to his local library,and secretly 46 it among the children's books.
Imagine the librarians' 47 when Dillon's mom called the next day to inform them of her son's“achievement”.Instead of 48 it,they took time to read the novel.Its 49 elements featuring Santa,a walking bomb,and a talking turkey,caught their attention.They decided to officially 50 the book in their collection.
Now eager readers are waiting to 51 the book.If each reader kept it for the standard four weeks,it would take four years to 52 the waiting list.This experience has strengthened Dillon's resolve to pursue a career as a(n) 53
Hats off to Dillon for following his dreanr and making it happen,to his supportive mom for 54 him,and to the librarians who 55 and protected a child's passion for writing.
41.A.bookstore B.reading room C.library D.exhibition hall
42.A.dream B.attempt C.task D.effort
43.A.conventional B.negative C.natural D.unique
44.A.plan B.novel C.program D.file
45.A.illegally B.expertly C.immorally D.nicely
46.A.claimed B.threw C.slipped D.stored
47.A.amazement B.annoyance C.admiration D.disappointment
48.A.borrowing B.investigating C.dismissing D.purchasing
49.A.realistic B.cultural C.chemical D.imaginative
50.A.publish B.include C.download D.remove
51.A.check out B.carry out C.pull out D.work out
52.A.sort B.clear C.review D.recommend
53.A.author B.librarian C.reader D.collector
54.A.criticizing B.rewarding C.reminding D.encouraging
55.A.recovered B.reviewed C.recognized D.revealed
高二英语试卷第6页(共8页)
第二节 (共10小题；每小题1.5分，满分15分)
阅读下面短文，在空白处填入1个适当的单词或括号内单词的正确形式。
In December 2023,Harbin,a city famous for its winter landscapes,once again transformed into a frozen wonderland as the 25th Harbin lce and Snow Festival 56 (formal)opened its gates.
The city,known 57 the “Ice City”for its freezing winters,has long been a hotspot for winter sports enthusiasts and tourists alike.The Ice and Snow Festival, 58 began in 1963, has grown ever since to become one of the largest winter festivals in the world.It 59 (attract) millions of visitors from around the globe to witness the breathtaking displays of ice sculptures, snow art,and winter 60 (activity)each year.
The theme of the 25th Ice and Snow Festival,“Dragon Soars Over Ice and Snow:Chasing Dreams in the Asian Winter Games,"was 61 nod to the city's rich cultural heritage and its dream of hosting major winter sports events.The highlight of the festival was the massive ice and snow sculptures,which 62 (carve)out of solid ice and snow bricks by skilled artists.These sculptures, 63 (range)from abstract art to life-size copies of celebrated landmarks,were indicative of the artistry and 64 (creative)of the artists involved.Some of the sculptures were even 65 (equip)with LED lights,creating a magical and otherworldly atmosphere at night.
第四部分写作(共两节，满分40分)
第一节 (满分15分)
假定你是李华，你校文学社计划举办一场以中国古典名著《红楼梦》(A Dream of Red Mansions) 为主题的展演活动。请你以该社团负责人的名义写一则英文通知发布在校园网上。 内容包括：
(1)展演目的；
(2)展演安排；
(3)邀请参加。 注意：
(1)写作词数应为80左右；
(2)请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
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Notice
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高二英语试卷第7页(共8页)
第二节 (满分25分)
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
I was in New York City on a school trip.I called home from a pay phone,and my little sister, Alex,said four envelopes had arrived:Georgetown,Cornell,William and Mary and the University of Massachusetts.She then opened and read them to me in her ten-year-old voice:“We regret that we do not have a place for you...”Rejected from Georgetown.“You were one of many qualified candidates..”Rejected from Cornell.And number seventy-three on a waiting list of seventy-five at William and Mary.Accepted to U Mass,my safety school.
I didn't digest the rejections immediately.I toured the United Nations,took train home and went back to school.Then I realized that other people had gotten into schools they really wanted to go to.Up to that point in my seventeen years,I hadn't really failed at anything.I got good grades, made the school team and scored well on my SATs.I hadn't experienced any major disappointments in my life,no deaths,no disease,no divorce,no cavities(龋齿)even.So being rejected seemed disastrous.
I had always assumed I'd go to one of the“good schools.”I really wanted to be chosen:This is the place for smart people,and we want you.U Mass,on the other hand,had the reputation of being a party school to which,come September,I'd be headed with the guy who sat next to me in tenth-grade history and who,during tests,left his book open on the floor and turned the pages with his feet.
I did not get active like my friend Heather,who,having been rejected by her first choice,made I Love Lucy-style plans to drive to the Duke campus with her soccer ball and her science-fair project to show the admissions board(招生委员会)exactly what they were rejecting.I simply said things like,"I've decided to give up the undergraduate degree and take a cake-decorating course."The subtext in this was:I'm stupid.The world isn't fair.
注意：
(1)续写词数应为150左右；
(2)请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
I remained bitter until one day,my father sat me down. Deeply touched by his words,I began to reassess my situation.
高二英语试卷第8页(共8页)
大湾区高二年级2023—2024学年度第二学期期末统一考试
英语参考答案及评分细则
第二部分阅读(共两节，满分50分)
第一节(共15小题；每小题2.5分，满分37.5分)
21-23 BCD 24-27 CBAD 28-31 CAAB 32-35 ADCD
第二节(共5小题，每小题2.5分，满分12.5分) 36-40 DEACG
第三部分语言运用(共两节，满分30分)
第一节(共15小题；每小题1分，满分15分)
41-45 CADBD 46-50 CACDB 51-55 ABADC 第二节(共10小题；每小题1.5分，满分15分)
56.formally 57.as 58.which 59.attracts 60.activities
61.a 62.were carved 63.ranging 64.creativity 65.equipped
【注：单词拼写、大小写未区分不给分】
第四部分写作(共两节，满分40分) 第一节(满分15分)
Notice
In an effort to bring classics to life and help students deepen thetr appreciation for traditional culture,our literature club is delighted to present a cultural performance centered around the classicChinese masterpiece,A Dream of Red Mansions
As scheduled,the event will be held in our school hall from 7 pm to 10 pm next Monday.It will feature dramatic readings,traditional costume displays,and a guzheng recital.Additionally, our respected Chinese language teachers will grace the occasion with a soulful musical performance,immersing you in the rich literary world of the classic.
We warmly invite all teachers and students to participate in this cultural celebration,which provides a fascinating insight into the heart of the charming and enlightening masterpiece.
第二节(满分25分)
I remained bitter until one day,my father sat me down.Having noticed my sadness,he asked
what was troubling me.I opened my heart to him,pouring out my frustrations about the rejections and my fears for the future.“I always thought I'd get into one of the good schools,Dad.Now I feel like a failure,like I'm not good enough.”After listening attentively for a while,my father gently reminded me of all my accomplishments—the countless projects I had excelled in,the teams I had led,and the awards I had earned.He concluded with a reassuring smile,“I understand how painful these rejections feel,but they are not a reflection of your worth.I know you have the strength to overcomethis challenge,and I will be here to support you every step of the way.”
Deeply touched by his words,I began to reassess my situation.My father helped merealize
that dwelling on the rejections would only hinder me from reaching my full potential.True success is not defined by prestige,but by how we respond to life's challenges.Shifting my mindset from self-pity to determination,I decided to embrace the opportunities at the University of Massachusetts,knowing my journey would be shaped by mywillingness to grow.With a renewed sense of purpose,I dived into my studies,joined campus organizations,and discovered new passions that enriched my life in ways I had never imagined.The initial disappointment soon gave way to anticipation and excitement.Looking back now,I am forever grateful to my father for his unwavering support and wisdom,which have been invaluable in shaping the person I am today.
【应用文写作】评分细则
【评分原则】
1. 本题总分为15分，按5个档次给分；
2. 评分时，应主要从内容、词汇语法和篇章结构三个方面考虑，具体为：
1)对内容要点的覆盖情况以及表述的清楚程度和合理性；
2)使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、恰当性和多样性；
3) 上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性。
3. 评分时，先根据作答的整体情况初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来综合衡量，确 定或调整档次，最后给分。
4. 评分时还应注意：
1)词数少于60的，酌情扣分；
2) 单词拼写与标点符号是写作规范的重要方面，评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。 英、美拼写和词汇用法均可接受；
3) 书写较差以致影响交际的，酌情扣分。
【各档次给分范围和要求】
第五档(13～15分)
1. 覆盖了所有内容要点，表述清楚、合理；
2. 使用了多样并且恰当的词汇和语法结构，可能有个别小错，但宠全不影响理解：
3. 有效地使用了语句间衔接手段，全文结构清晰，意义连费、完全达到了预期的写作目的。 第四档(10～12分)
1. 覆盖了所有内容要点，表述比较清楚、合理；
2. 使用了比较多样并且愉当的词江和语法结构，可能有些许错误，但不影响理解；
3. 比较有效地使用了语句间衔接手段，全文结构比较清晰，意义比较连贯。达到了预期的写作 目的。
第三档(7～9分)
1. 覆盖了大部分内容要点，有个别地方表述不够清楚、合理：
2. 使用了简单的词汇和语法结构，有一些错误或不恰当之处，但基本不影响理解；
3. 基本有效地使用了语句间衔接手段，全文结构基本清晰，意义基本连贯。基本达到了预期的 写作目的。
第二档(4～6分)
1. 遗漏或未清楚表述一些内容要点，或一些内容与写作目的不相关；
2. 所使用的词汇有限，语法结构单调，错误较多，影响理解；
3. 几乎不能有效地使用语句间衔接手段，全文结构不够清晰，意义不够连贯。未能达到预期的 写作目的。
第一档(1～3分)
1. 遗漏或未清楚表述大部分内容要点，或大部分内容与写作目的不相关；
2. 所使用的词汇有限，语法结构单调，错误较多，严重影响理解；
3. 几平没有使用语句间衔接手段，全文结构不清晰，意义不连贯。完全未达到预期的写作目的。
0 分
未作答；所写内容太少或无法看清以致无法评判；所写内容与题目要求完全不相关。
【读后续写】评分细则
【评分原则】
1. 本题总分为25分，按七个档次进行评分。
2. 评分时，主要从内容、词汇语法和篇章结构三个方面考虑，具体为：
1) 续写内容的质量、续写的完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度。
2) 所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、恰当性和多样性。
3)上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性。
3. 评分时，应先根据作答的整体情况确定其所属的档次，然后以该档次的要求来综合衡量， 确定或调整档次，最后给分。
4. 评分时还应注意：
1)词数少于120的，酌情扣分；
2) 单词拼写和标点符号是写作规范的重要方面，评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑， 英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受；
3) 书写较差以致影响交际的，酌情扣分。
【各档次给分范围和要求】 第七档(22～25分)
1. 创造了丰富、合理的内容，富有逻辑性，续写完整，与原文情境融洽度高；
2. 使用了多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达流畅，语言错误很少，且完全不影响理解；
3. 自然有效地使用了段落间、语句间衔接手段，全文结构清晰，前启呼应，意义连贯。
第六档(18～21 分)
1. 创造了比较丰富、合理的内容，比较有逻辑性，续写比较完整，与原文情境融洽度较高：
2. 使用了比较多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达比较流畅，有个别错误，但不影响理解：
3. 比较有效地使用了语句间衔接手段，全文结构比较清晰，意义比较连贯。
第五档(15～17分)
1. 创造了基本合理的内容，有一定的逻辑性，续写基本完整，与原文情境相关：
2. 使用了比较恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达方式不够多样性，表达有些许错误，但基本不影响 理解；
3. 使用了语句间衔接手段，全文结构比较清晰，意义比较连贯。
第四档(11～14分)
1. 创造了基本完整的故事内容，但有的情节不够合理或逻辑性不强，与原文情境基本相关；
2. 使用了简单的词汇和语法结构，有部分语言错误和不恰当之处，个别部分影响理解；
3. 尚有语句衔接的意识，全文结构基本清晰，意义基本连贯。
第三档(6～10分)
1. 内容和逻辑上有一些重大问题，续写不够完整，与原文有一定程度脱节；
2. 所用的词汇有限，语法结构单调，错误较多且比较低级，影响理解；
3. 未能有效地使用语句间衔接手段，全文结构不够清晰，意义不够连贯。
第二档(1~5分)
1. 内容和逻辑上有较多重大问题，或有部分内容抄自原文，续写不完整，与原文情境基本脱节；
2. 所使用的词汇非常有限，语法结构单调，错误极多，严重影响理解；
3. 几乎没有使用语句间衔接手段，全文结构不清晰，意义不连贯。
第一档(0分)
1. 未作答：
2. 所写内容太少或无法看清以致无法评判：
3. 所写内容全部抄自原文或与题目要求完全不相关。
【续写解读与评分建议】
1. 语篇解读
这篇文章通过作者的个人经历，生动地描绘了一个高中生在申请大学时遭遇挫折的心路历 程，同时也反映了青少年在面对人生重大选择时的复杂情感和自我认知。
文章开篇即设置了一个具体的场景：“我在一次学校旅行中来到了纽约市。”紧接着，通过 描述“我”给家里打电话的情节，引出了主题——大学申请的结果即将揭晓。接下来，通过妹妹 Alex的口，逐一揭晓了“我”申请的四所大学的录取结果：被乔治城大学(Georgetown) 和康奈 尔大学 (Cornell) 拒绝，在威廉与玛丽学院(William and Mary)的候补名单上排名靠后，被 马萨诸塞大学(UMass) 录取。回到学校后，“我”意识到身边的其他人已经如愿进入心仪的学 校，内心的挫败感开始涌现。回顾了自己十七年来的“成功”经历K从未真正失败过的“我”, 面对大学申请的失败，感到了前所未有的沮丧。“我”→直认为自己会进入一所“好学校”,然 而，现实却给自己上了一课。面对失败，“我”并没有像朋友Heather 那样准备采取积极的行动 去争取或展示自己的价值，而是选择了消极的言辞来表达自己的不满和沮丧。
2. 续写解读
续写这两段时，考生需要保持文章的情感逻辑连贯性，同时推动故事向积极的方向发展，让 “我”从失落和沮丧中走出，重新找到自我价值和目标。
第一段续写思路：
情感铺垫：首先，可以通过“我”对父亲的倾诉简短地回顾一下“我”持续苦闷的状态，比 如“我”如何沉浸在被拒绝的痛苦中，对未来感到迷茫和不确定。
父亲的角色：强调父亲作为一个智慧、慈爱的角色出现，选择了一个合适的时机来与“我” 进行深入的对话。父亲的这一举动本身就充满了关怀和期待，为后文的转折做铺垫。
对话内容：父亲可能会以理解但不纵容的态度，分享自己或他人面对挫折的经历，强调人生 中的失败是常态，关键在于如何从中学习和成长。父亲的话语应充满正能量，鼓励“我”正视失 败，看到其背后的价值。
情感变化：虽然“我”可能一开始并不完全接受或理解父亲的话，但这段对话至少在“我” 心中种下了一颗思考的种子，为后续的转变埋下伏笔。
第二段续写思路：
内心转变：承接上一段，“我”被父亲的话语深深触动，开始从内心深处反思自己的态度和 立场。这里可以描述“我”内心的挣扎、思考过程，以及逐渐接受现实、放下包袱的心路历程。
积极行动：在重新评估了自己的情况后，“我”决定采取积极的行动。这可能包括重新审视 自己的兴趣、能力、目标，以及制定新的计划或策略来应对未来的挑战。比如，“我”可能决定 更加努力地准备转学申请或者尽快适应新学校等。
自我发现与成长：在这个过程中，“我”不仅找到了新的方向和目标，还发现了自己内在的 潜力和价值，学会了如何面对失败、如何从挫折中汲取力量，并更加坚定地相信自己的能力和未 来。
展望未来：最后，可以简短地展望一下“我”的未来。可以展望近景：“我”已经拥有了更 加积极、乐观的心态和更加明确的人生目标，为未来的成功奠定了坚实的基础；也可以展望远景： “我”决定拥抱在马萨诸塞大学的机会，并以全新的态度投入学习、参与校园活动、发现新的兴 趣，丰富“我”的大学生活，在实践中获得了不断的成长和进步。
总之，考生需要通过这两段的续写，帮助主角完成从失败到重新站起的情感转变，还需展现 主角在逆境中成长、自我发现的过程，给读者以深刻的启示和正能量。因为是父亲帮助主角完成 了上述过程，所以文章最后也可以转向家庭亲情的角度提炼主题。
3. 评分建议
评分时，建议从内容 (What) 和方法 (How) 两个维度综合衡量，为作文准确定档。
内容方面，可从主题和情节两个维度考量：
1)主题：是否与前文一致 是否符合社会主义核心价值观 2 ) 情 节 ：
完整性：故事各部分是否齐全 是否续写了结局
合理性：是否违背常识/常理 是否违背原文的逻辑意义
衔接性：续文与前文之间、段首句与段落续文之间、第一段续文结尾与第二段首句之间是 否有效衔接
创新性：(属较高要求)在不违背完整性、合理性和衔接性要求的前提下，是否构思巧妙， 令人眼前一亮
方法方面，可从语篇和语言两个维度考量：
1)语篇：故事语篇特征是否典型(如：故事完整；时态一致；使用描述性语言等)
2) 语言：
正确性：语法正确(句型、用词、搭配、时态、一致性等)
丰富性：使用的语言手段是否丰富多样(灵活运用简单句、并列句、复合句、非谓语、特 殊句型、逻辑连接手段等)
得体性：所使用的语言手段是否符合语境需要 是否地道自然 是否与原文风格一致 流畅性：内容与逻辑是否连贯、流畅
关于主题偏离的处理：出现严重的主题偏离时(如故事结局消极、负面，颂扬的主题与原文 毫不相关),建议从最高不超过及格分往下评。主题有所偏离，但不太影响故事情节发展，视其 程度采取扣1-2分的方式处理。
关于合理性问题的处理：因前文没读懂而导致的情节严重偏差，建议从最高不超过及格分往 下评。在续文部分情节逻辑自洽的前提下，因忽略前文重要线索而导致的个别关键情节与前文不 融洽，采取降一档的方式处理；因文化背景知识不足、个别生词不理解等导致的常识性错误或细 节不合理，酌情扣1-2分。
关于完整性问题的处理：视完成部分的内容质量和字数情况综合判断。例如：虽然只续写了 其中一段，但该部分完成质量好、字数达到要求，可采取降一档的方式处理。

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