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(共26张PPT)
Learning To Be Consistent in Continuation Writing
(读后续写之一致性)
目录/contents
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续写评分标准
分析文本
学生习作赏析
续写的四个一致性
课堂总结
Learning To Be Consistent
Continuation Writing
读后续写之一致性
Criteria 评分标准
第五档（21-25分）
完全达到了预期的写作目的。
● 与所给短文融合度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理；
● 内容丰富，故事发展合理、逻辑性强，续写完整，符合写作目的与情境；
● 所使用语法结构和词汇多样、准确和恰当，可能有个别错误，但完全不影响意义表达；
● 有效地使用了语句间的连接手段，结构清晰，意义连贯。
第四档（16-20分）
达到了预期的写作目的。
与所给短文融合度较高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接较为合理；
内容比较丰富，故事发展比较合理、有逻辑性，续写比较完整，比较符合写作目的与情境；
所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达；
比较有效地使用了语句间的连接手段，结构比较清晰，意义比较连贯
Gifts for Jace
I’ll never forget the day that one of my students shyly raised his hand and said that he had never received a gift. My shocked fifth-graders were discussing a reading story about a boy who was not going to be getting anything for his birthday because money was tight that year. Even though this class was very open during reading discussions, Jace’s honesty surprised even me. What was even more eye-opening was the fact that this sweet, fifth-grade boy had gone ten years and never experienced the joy and surprise of receiving a present.
I searched my mind for a reason that he might be saying this. Did he want attention from his peers No, that was definitely not his style. Was he exaggerating （夸大）？Again, he was not the type. Then I remembered his story. His mother was out of the picture and he lived alone with his dad. His father had a hard time holding down a job, and coming to think of it, I didn’t see his father at registration or parent-teacher conferences. Even though on the outside Jace was a bit untidy, he always came to school with a smile and sincere enthusiasm for learning.
A couple of weeks after Jace’s comment, he was absent from school due to the fact that he had moved away. This happened to be the day I was sending home the annual note about the classroom Christmas gift exchange. Traditionally, each boy was to bring a gift for a boy in the three-dollar range and the same was true for each girl.
As we were discussing the specifics, a girl raised her hand and sincerely suggested that we do away with our traditional policy, and each buy a gift for Jace instead. The enthusiasm grew as the students discussed the kinds of things they knew Jace would like. We took a quick vote and consistently agreed to go ahead with this wonderful idea.
A story
when
where
who
what
Activity 1 Reading for the setting
Before Christmas
At school &
At Jace’s home
Jace (a fifth-grade boy)
I (a teacher)
My students
Each student sent Jace a gift
Characters
Jace
Jace Classmates
I
Theme
Analyzing
Fifth-graders
Para. 1 “Even though this class was very open during reading discussions, Jace’s honesty surprised even me.”… this sweet, fifth-grade boy had gone ten years and never experienced the joy and surprise of receiving a present.
Para. 2 Even though on the outside Jace was a bit untidy, he always came to school with a smile and sincere enthusiasm for learning.
Para 4 . The enthusiasm grew as the students discussed the kinds of things they knew Jace would like. We took a quick vote and consistently agreed to go ahead with this wonderful idea.
sweet, untidy, optimistic, enthusiastic for learning, poor
thoughtful/ helpful/ considerate/ kind
teacher, careful, supportive,
The little act of kindness reminded everyone of the true meaning of Christmas-- love and care.
Tip 1:
Be consistent with the theme.
gifts

love
Does it consist with the character
A couple of weeks after Jace’s comment, he was absent from school due to the fact that he had moved away.
Tip 2: Be consistent with the characters.
Activity 2 Reviewing the plot
1. My fifth-graders were discussing a reading story about a boy when Jace shyly raised his hand and said he ______________.
had never received a gift
Reviewing the plot
2. I remembered Jace’s family background– his mother was out of the picture and his father had a hard time ______________.
holding down a job
Reviewing the plot
3. A couple of weeks later, Jace was absent from school because he ______________ when I was arranging for the annual classroom Christmas ______________ .
had moved away
gift exchange
Reviewing the plot
4. A girl sincerely suggested we each ___________ for Jace and we all agreed.
buy a gift
Paragraph 1:
Days before our Christmas vacation, the gifts began to pour in.
What were the gifts
Why were the gifts chosen
How did I feel
How did I contact Jace
How would I send the gifts
Paragraph 2:
As I drove down his road, I saw a light flashing, signaling which home was his.
Activity 3 Developing the plot
Tip 3: Be consistent with given beginning sentences.
What did I think of this experience
What was Jace’s reaction
How did Jace receive the gifts
Activity 4
Sample study
1
“故事发展合理、
逻辑性强，
续写完整，
符合写作目的与情境”
“与所给短文融合度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理”
“与所给短文融合度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理”
“有效地使用了语句间的连接手段，结构清晰，意义连贯。”
Sample study 2 Please circle expressions that make the writing coherent.
“有效地使用了语句间的连接手段，结构清晰，意义连贯。”
The proper use of
Pronoun (代词) eg, here, there, his, our, they, one…
With + O + C eg. With sb. Doing/ sth. done; with sth. to do,…
Clauses eg. … that/ which/when/ what/ as/ before/ after …
Linking words eg. Too…to…, ultimately… , and, but, also, even, still, however, ….
Tip 4: Be consistent between sentences.
Activity 5 Collect examples of linking words
Practice: Fill in the blanks to make the passage coherent
______________
ranging from
_____________
meanwhile
______
One
______
who
_______
even
_____
that
______
When
“___
But
chuckled.
Tip 5: Show instead of telling
A story is an accident,
which begins with a problem and ends with a solution.
A good story often has a good theme.
A better story “shows more than tells”.
A great story displays details properly.
Let “body language” speak!
Let “action” speak!
Tip 5: Show instead of telling
Activity 6 Translation
Para. 2 “Show, instead of telling”
As I drove down his road, I saw a light flashing, signaling which home was his. It took several trips back and forth for my car to get the gifts inside. ____________ (盯着) the piles of carefully wrapped gifts, joy ___________________________ (掺杂着感激) was written on his face. Unforgettable was Jace’s joyful smile that (像星星照亮夜空) ____________________________________. Thinking about my thoughtful students and how excited I was to tell them about finding Jace, I had a smile of my own, and was thankful to be a part of one of __________________________________（人生中最重要的一课）.
Eyes fixed on
mingled/ combined with gratitude
lit up the sky like a string of twinkle lights
the most important “lessons” of their lives
summary
Technique:
Show instead of telling
Task:
Check and polish your writing.

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