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(共30张PPT)
Theme
Human&Self
Human&society
Human&nature
Continuation Writing
“遇险类”读后续写
A guessing game
It is an amazing ball of fur.
It has legs and paws.
It has thick, shinny black coat.
It may swim.
It is a puppy.
It is our hero.
Her name is____________.
Onyx---a dog
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词数和书写 really matter!
A story
whenwhere
who
what
how
What should we Read for Writing
1. Read for identity & relationship人物身份和关系
She was the prettiest puppy we had ever seen, and the whole family immediately fell in love with her. We named her Onyx because of her thick, shiny black coat. She spent her first vacation with us when she was only ten weeks old and had her first bath and swim in the St. Lawrence River. We had no clue that this amazing little ball of fur would end up being our hero.
As she grew older, Onyx became more and more involved in our family activities. On hot summer days, Onyx enjoyed floating on the river with us in her own rubber tube (橡皮圈). Amazingly standing on the top of the tube, she smiled while showing off her perfect balance. Resting her front legs and paws over the edge of the rubber tube, she kept her eyes shut as she floated until she'd had enough of the warm sun on her black coat.
拓展词汇积累：
puppy 小狗；幼犬
bunny 小兔子 kitten 小猫咪
piglet 小猪崽 chick 雏鸡
One day, our eighteen-year-old daughter, Margie, announced she was going to swim across the bay. No one in the family was free to go swimming with her. The unwritten rule, regardless of swimming ability, was to have a companion in the water with you, especially when swimming the width of the bay. I was not a good swimmer, so I said to Margie, “Take Onyx with you.” Having heard her name, Onyx woke up from a nap and was ready for action. Margie signed the dog to follow her. Onyx ran to the water next to her. They entered the freezing river together and swam side by side across the bay.
I watched from the bank as they reached the sandbar (沙洲) on the far shore. They rested a few minutes before diving into the water for the return trip. I felt uneasy for some reason and continued to watch the pair swim side by side.
What does “the pair” refer to
2. Read for cohesion 连贯
在往年高考真题中，曾经考过四次：
2016年：夫妻吵架，森林迷路。
2017年：骑车旅行，中途遇狼。
2018年：农场度假，骑马迷路。
2020年：拍照北极熊遇险。
拓展词汇: forest, cave, well, can, cage, castle；Santa
wolf, horse, polar bear, dolphin, shark, tortoise, turtle
Paragraph 1:
Suddenly I heard Margie calling out, “I have a cram (痉挛) in the leg!”
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Paragraph 2:
Seeing the pair approaching the riverbank, I breathed a sigh of relief.
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承上：Struggling
过渡：Feeling/Reaction
启下：Rescue
承上：Relief
过渡：Reunion/Gratitude
主题：Inspiration from the expereience---hero
3. Read for plot
My daughter’s struggling （in the water）
佳句分享：
佳茗：She started struggling in the water and tried to use all her strength to float on the water.
迎熙：patted the water up and down
场景模拟：她挣扎着，大声呼救，但都是徒劳。
She struggled and screamed for help, but in vain.
beat about in the water
My feeling
①无灵主语：
A flush of N.(fright/panic/fear/hopelessness) overwelmed him/welled up in him.
梓毓：A wave of hopelessness swept over me.
佳乐：A flood of panic swept over me.
李捷：A sense of worry overwhelmed me.
捷：
Hearing what Margie called out, I couldn’t help trembling.
Hearing that, my heart jumped quickly and my lips quivered out of control.
雨婷&馨瑶：
I shouted with my heart sinking.
I was rooted to the ground and my mind went blank.
慧娜：I felt I was like a tiny boat at the mercy of wild wind.
My Reaction
②巧用动词(人)：
was pounding wildly（怦怦跳）
were quivering（颤抖）
yelled at the top of her lung （歇斯底里地大喊）
shook all over like sitting on pins and needles.
（如坐针毡）
I float in the ocean of panic,...
Margie catch her rubber tube...
My hands shoke all over.
I sanked into hopelessness.
I touched by this warm scene.
floated
sank
caught
shook
Help！
was touched
Tense:
simple past tense
Rescue
②巧用动词(狗狗)：
：狗狗叫？舔？摇尾？咬着？拖拽着？向上提？游泳 转圈圈？
：barked; licked; wagged her tail; bit; dragged; lifted; swam; circled around
A black figure swam towards her like a bullet.
The brave dog dived and approached Margie, using her mouth to catch her clothes and lifting her back by nose.
Relief
我:
（宽慰）
Seeing they were safe and sound, my previous anxiety gave way to relief.
③善用Ving做状语
SVO，V’ing...
V’ing，SVO.
Margie 啜泣着(sob)，把脸埋在手里。
Margie was sobbing, hiding her face in her hands.
Reunion/Gratitude
我女儿:
（感激）
Margie raised her head with tears in her eyes.
She sobbed with tears rolling down her cheeks.
④ 善用 with复合结构 做状语
SVO with+N.
Margie 紧紧地拥抱Onyx，眼中饱含感激的泪水.
M hugged O tightly with grateful tears in her eyes.
Ending
“Never before had I imagined O was like a ray of light in the darkest time of my life .”
⑤ 巧用倒装
Never had I imagined that....
So unforgettable was the memory that...
1、感慨式：
Never had I imagined that a little dog could have such great power to save my daughter. It was our families hero forever. So unforgettable was the memory that it would never fade away in my mind.
“我从来没有想过，Onyx就像是一束光 在我生命中最黑暗的时刻。”
Ending
2、画面式
Running around, jumping upside and down, she will always be the hero in our family.
③善用Ving做状语 SVO，V’ing...
1. Read for identity & relationship人物身份和关系
2. Read for cohesion 连贯
3. Read for plot
①无灵主语： A wave of hopelessness swept over me.
②巧用动词 (人、狗)
④ 善用 with复合结构 做状语 SVO with+N.
⑤ 巧用倒装 Never had I imagined that....
So unforgettable was the memory that...
续写(15句搞定救援)
救援（动作为主，感受为辅）
狗 A black figure swam towards her like a bullet.
我 My heart pounding wildly, my mind went blank
My heart was in my mouth and butterflies fluttered in my stomach.
Butterflies in my stomach, I was at a loss what to do.
I shook all over like sitting on pins and needles.
我女儿
M was on the verge of breaking down and that was when she got hold of something.
续写(15句搞定救援)
救援（动作为主，感受为辅）
狗 A black figure swam towards her like a bullet.
我 My heart pounding wildly, my mind went blank
My heart was in my mouth and butterflies fluttered in my stomach.
Butterflies in my stomach, I was at a loss what to do.
I shook all over like sitting on pins and needles.
我女儿
M was on the verge of breaking down and that was when she got hold of something.
结果 came back safe and sound
狗 O was circling around excitedly and enthusiastically licked her fingers.
O yelled and wagged his tails merrily as if replying to M heartfelt gratitude.
我（宽慰） Seeing they were safe and sound, my previous anxiety gave way to relief.
我女儿 （感激）M hugged O tightly with grateful tears in her eyes.
“Never before had I imagined O was like a ray of light in the darkest time of my life .”
感慨 It was O’s brave heart and strong determination that saved M’s life.
Having experienced a narrow escape, SVO.
Hadn't it not been for his bravery and loyalty, my daughter couldn’t have swam back safely.
Deep down inside,I knew it was the love, courage and unwavering bond that worked.
When I took a glance at Mel, only found that Mel lied on the bottom.
I took a glance at Mel, only to find that Mel lied on the bottom.
Help！
“If this time without Margie, I will die.”
1、词数和书写 really matter!
(难忘回忆)
Never had I had such a thrilling yet dangerous trip before. The day was so unforgettable that it would stay in my memory forever.
Inspiration from the expereience
Reunion/Gratitude
“Thank you for helping me out of trouble and I will always remember what you have done for me.” He said to me gratefully.
“谢谢你帮我摆脱困境，我会永远记住你为我所做的一切。” 他感激地对我说。
Paragraph 1:
In an instant, I fell backward.
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Paragraph 2:
I pointed to my left leg and then Mel yelled for help.
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Feeling&reaction
Environment
Rescue&Relief
Gratitude
Inspiration from the expereience
In an instant, I fell backward. ①I could hear Mel calling my name, my heart racing and my mind going blank.（独立主格） After a few seconds, ②I hit the ground with a bang, my limbs feeling numb. I closed my eyes. Minutes passed, or maybe hours. I wasn't sure. ③Gradually, my senses returned, and I became aware of a gentle touch on my arm. ④Opening my eyes, I saw Mel kneeling beside me, her face filled with worry. “Are you okay ” she asked, her voice trembling.
I pointed to my left leg and then Mel yelled for help. Other climbers came. One explained our situation to the emergency service. We waited anxiously before the rescue finally arrived. ⑤Then I was loaded into an ambulance and taken to hospital. ⑥I stayed there for a week, knowing that I had survived what could have ended tragically. ⑦We learned an important lesson: even with the best equipment and preparation, mountaineering can still be extremely dangerous. From then on, we climbed with even more caution and respect for nature’s power.
Assignment
Polish your writing after class
Share your writing with your classmates
Try to learn from your classmate and meantime give some advice on improving their writing.

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