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八省八校联考：应用文
（告知+建议）
【2024八省八校联考】应用文写作：
第一节（满分15分）
假定你是李华，在外教课期末考试中发现有人作弊，你认为这会影响考试公平。请你给外教John写一封邮件，内容包括：
1. 情况描述；
2. 你的看法；
3. 你的请求。
注意：
1. 写作词数应为80左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
段落安排 Para.1 问候+背景+目的
Para.2
描述考试中的作弊情况+这种问题导
致的结果+提出请求/建议
Para.3 表达祝愿和期盼
思路梳理：要点分析
考试作弊
往前寻：原因/ 背景
往后探：结果
往下找：请求/建议
往上看：请求/ 建议产生的预期效果
1.个人懒惰
2.没有自信
3.学习压力
4.……
1.影响考试的公平性
2.加剧学生作弊的现象
1.作弊学生成绩作废
2.作弊学生给予一定的惩罚
3.提高同学们诚信考试的意识
1.帮助同学们正视考试的公平性与严肃性
2.创作更好的学习环境
作弊情况描述：
交换、传递答案
用电子设备作弊
要点分析
写作时需注意的要点:
1. 和外教交流并且是反映问题，存在文化差异，语气应当
委婉、诚恳，确保交际得体 (语言表达的得体性);
2. 分析的问题不能浮于表面，要具体、切中要点;
3. 提出的建议要与分析的问题相对应，以增强说服力;
4. 提出的建议要合理、可操作、有建设性。
Para. 1：Hope my email finds you well !
1. I’m Li Hua, one of your students, and I am writing to report an incident of cheating that I witnessed during the final exam.
向某人讲述某事
report sth. to sb./ recount sth. to sb./ relay sth. to sb.
2. As one of your students, I consider it my duty to point out the dishonest behaviors during our final exam.
honest/ honesty/ dishonest/ dishonesty
组织语言
inform you of a disappointing thing that I spotted...
Para. 2: 情况描述+个人观点 逻辑清晰，层层递进
情况1：电子设备作弊
Regrettably, I noticed a student seated next to me engage in dishonest behavior during the exam. He secretly took out an electronic device hidden in his sleeve and searched for the answer.
情况2：互传纸条作弊
What I witnessed was that two students seated in front of me, in an attempt to attain higher grades, exchanged answers by writing them down on a piece of paper and cast it to each other secretly.
情况3：携带小抄作弊
What made me irritated was that a student sitting in front of me brought a cheet sheet (小抄) and secretly copied the answer on his test paper.
个人观点：
影响考试的公平性
In my opinion, cheating in the exam has the potential to impact the overall fairness of the exam.
exert/ exercise an adverse/ damaging/ devastating/ severe/ negative impact on the overall fairness/ justice of the exam.
作弊学生有优势，对刻苦努力勤奋学习的学生不公平
Students who cheated on/ in the examination have an unfair advantage over other students, which is not fair on/ to other students, who have invested a lot of time and energy in their study.
学生作弊违反了学校关于考试的相关规定
Students who cheated in the exam, violated the exam-related regulations, which may undermine the fairness of the exam and lead to damaging consequences.
加剧学生作弊的现象，导致不好的学习氛围
Students who cheated in the exam may set a bad example to other students, misleading them into following their example/ lead, which may poison/ ruin/ spoil the academic atmosphere.
Para. 2: 提出请求/ 建议 礼貌原则 具体建议+好处
作弊学生考试作废
To guarantee the fairness of the test and the favorable academic atmosphere, it is a bettter choice to cancle the test scores of the cheaters and reemphasize the importance of the test.
给予作弊考生一定的惩罚
Appropriate/ Fitting punishment is expected to be imposed on the cheaters so as to assist them to realize the seriousness of their mistake as well as cultivate their awareness of maintaining honesty in the exam.
提高同学们诚信考试的意识
It is a brilliant idea to give a lectue on the theme of “Honesty in Exams” to heighten/ raise/ increase students’ awareness of it and enable them to appreciate the damaging/ devastating consequences of dishonest behaviours in exams.
委婉提建议的句型的使用：
Would it possible to...
Would it be helpful to...
…would be a better choice.
…never fails to be a brilliant idea.
Tips:
Para.3 语气委婉，再次表达希望老师考虑自己诉求的期盼。
1. Thank you for your attention to this matter. Looking forward to your favorable reply.
2. It is my sincere hope that you will take this matter into serious account. In anticipation of your earliest reply.
3. I do genuinely hope that...
Dear John,
How is everything going It’s definitely true that the English final exam has absolutely completed, but there were a bit of questions with regard to the test.
As for the final exam, what called my special attention was that a few students neglected elementary principle and cheated by gesturing their hands and glancing at others’ answer. I think that honesty and justice are of the utmost importance when everyone encounters formal examination. To guarantee the fairness of the test and the favorable academic atmosphere, it is a bettter choice to cancle the test scores of the cheaters and reemphasize the importance of the test.
I would extremely appreciate it if you could take my words into consideration.
Yours,
Li Hua extremely
参考范文
总评：
结构完整，要点清晰，
用词丰富，句式多样。
开篇点题，开门见山
问题描述准确，自己观点表述精准，紧跟个人建议
再次陈述诉求，用词委婉
Dear John,
I’m writing to express my concern about the English the final exam, during which I found someone cheating.
It was at the end of the exam that I saw someone conveying answers to another person and delivering a small paper to him. No words are strong enough to express how astonished and irritated I was. From my point of view, it’s hard to overstate the significance of fairness in exam. If we just turn a blind eye to such immoral behavior, not only will it influence the exam consequence, but also harm other students’ interests. Therefore, I want to request you to cancel their grades.
I hope that you could take my humble opinion into consideration. Looking forward to your earliest reply.
Yours,
Li Hua
参考范文
开篇陈述问题
从问题陈述、个人看法，到请求均表述准确，清晰
再次陈述诉求，用词委婉
Dear John,
I’m writing to you in the hope that you will be so kind as to deal with the terrible phenomenon about cheating, which I spotted in the final examination.
Glancing at it briefly, I spotted someone cheating by throwing a slip of paper and murmured to others softly in the course of examination. What calls for special attention is that the behavior shows the signs of unfairness and may bring about enormous terrible phenomenon. In my humble opinion, we ought to become aware of the significance of fairness and prohibit others from cheating.
I’d extremely appreciate it if you could take my opinions into consideration and prohibit others from cheating in time.
Yours,
LiHua.
参考范文
小结：
综合性文体写作建议：
现在应用文的考查不再局限于单一文体的设题，
在试题的分析中，学生应做到：
1. 要点分析完整
2. 问题表述准确
3. 原因/ 结果陈述切中要点（切忌泛泛而谈，不着边际）
4. 写作逻辑清晰
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