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A MOTHER'S DAY SURPRISE
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother's Day.How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed.They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge.They had watched their mother in the kitchen.There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.
The big day came at last.The alarm rang at 6 a.m.The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen.They decided to boil the porridge first.They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast.Jeff broke two cggs into a plate and added in some milk.Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture.Next,Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan.Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread.The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds.Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread.This time,she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute,the porridge boiled over and put out the fire.Jenna panicked. Thankfully,Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly.But the stove was a mess now.Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge.But Jeff's hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water.Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear!The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
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As the twins looked around them in disappointment,their father
appeared.
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother
iin
恐惧来源于
未知和不确定性
口 打破未知
口寻找确定
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人与社会
人与自我 人与自然
确定主角
明确问题 解决问题
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口 主 旨
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如何讲好一个故事
THE WRITER's JOURNEY
MYTHIC STRUCTURE iOR WRITERS
Tup IpitiOM
CHRISTOPHER VOGLER
续什么
口 情 节
第一幕 第二幕
第三幕
大约三十页剧本 六十页剧本
三十页剧本
Crisis Climax
▲
英雄之旅的模型
ACT I
Approx.30 screenplay pages
危机
高潮
好故事来源于好结构
◆自身努力或借助环境/工具
◆危机暂缓或尝试失败
冲 突 尝试 解决!
反应
◆ 万能的情感线
◆ 变换的动作线
转折
◆ 灵机一动
◆关键人/物
年份 主题 体裁
出处
2016.10 吵架出走迷路 记叙文
浙江高考
2017.6 旅行途中遇狼
2017.11 健忘妈妈趣事
2018.6 度假骑马迷路
2020.1 抚平狗狗心伤
2020.7 拍照意外遇险
2020.7 爱心帮助他人
山东高考
2021.1 少女南瓜卡头
浙江高考
2021.6 母亲节给妈妈准备早餐
新高考卷
【2016浙江 · 吵架出走迷路】
One weekend in July,Jane and her husband,Tom,had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest.
Unfortunately,on the way,an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel.By the time they reached the lake,Jane was so angry that she said to Tom,"I'm going tofind a better spot for us to camp"and walked away.
With no path to follow,Jane just walked on for quite a long time.After she had climbed to a high place,she turned around, hoping to see the lake.To her surprise,she saw nothing but forest and,far beyond,a snow-capped mountaintop.She suddenly
realized that she was lost.
“Tom!"she cried."Help!”
No reply.If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom.Jane kept moving,but the farther she walked,the more confused she became,As night was beginning to fall,Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night.Lying awake in the dark,Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family.She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.
Jane rose at the break of day,hungry and thirsty.She could hear water trickling somewhere at a distance.Quickly she followed the sound to a stream.To her great joy,she also saw some berry bushes.She drank and ate a few berries.
Never in her life had she tasted anything better.Feeling stronger now,Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.
As she picked her way carefully along the stream,Jane heard a helicopter Is that forme Unfortunately,the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above.A few minutes later,another helicopter flew overhead.Jane took off her yellow blouse,thinkingthat she should goto an open area and flag them if they came back again.
But no helicopters came and it was getting dark again.
It was daybreak when Jane woke up.
反应：情感线
told her that
尝试：自我鼓励
way.
尝试：危机暂缓
omorrow is
反应：情感线
per company. 衔接
But no helicopters came andi
①A wave of terror swept over he
②Her heart pounding fiercely and
she had to find a sate place.
③Tired and terrified as she was,
④Luckily,it didn't take long befo
⑤Sighing with relief,she felt ag
another day.”
⑥With that, she went to sleep, inm
反应——尝试——转折——解决
It was daybreak when Jane woke up.
①Hungry and disappointed, she , at a loss
what to do.
②It suddenly dawned on her th first.
③ Having gobbling down someb f.
④ After what seemed a century,
⑤Her face brightened up.
⑥Meanwhile, a helicopter was
⑦Upon its landing, out dashed tly,tears
v. 冲
welling up in their heart.
口反应：情感线
口转折：灵机一动
口转折：关键事物
口反应：情感线
口转折：关键事物
口解决!
⑧It was at the moment that they decided not to quarrel any more but learned口 点睛收尾
反应→尝试→转折→解决
to compromise.
v.要协
v.争吵
【2017浙江 ·旅行途中遇狼】
On a bright,warm July afternoon,Mac Hollan,a primary school teacher,was cycling from his home to Alaska with
his friends.One of his friends had stopped to make a bicycle repair,but they had encouraged Mac to carry on,and they would catch up with him soon.As Mac pedaled( 骑 行 ) along alone,he thought fondly of his wife and two young daughters at home. He hoped to show them this beautiful place someday.
Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him."Man,that's a big dog!"he thought.But when he looked to the side, he saw instantly that it wasn't a dog at all,but a wolf,quickly catching up with him.
Mac's heart jumped.He found out his can of bear spray.With one hand on the bars,he fired the spray at the wolf.A bright red cloud enveloped the animal,and to Mac's relief,it fell back,shaking its head.But a minute later,it was by his side again.
Then it attacked the back of Mac's bike,tearing open his tent bag.He fired at the wolf a second time,and again,it fell back only to quickly restart the chase.
Mac was pedaling hard now.He waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful not to slowdown.He saw a steep
uphill limb before him.He knew that once he hit the hill,he'd be easy caught up and the wolf's teeth would be tearing into his flesh.
At this moment,Paul and Becky were driving their car on their way to Alaska.They didn't think much of it when they saw two cyclists repairing their bikes on the side of the road.A bit later,they spotted what they,too,assumed was a dog running alongside a man on a bike.As they got closer,they realized that the dog was a wolf.Mac heard a large vehicle behind him.He pulled in front of it as the wolf was catching up fast,just a dozen yards away now.
The car abruptly stopped in front of him.
A few minutes later,the other two cyclists arrived.
①Seeing the car stop,N the door of the car.
②So frightened was he
"the wolf,please let me
③Seeing the wolf runni
hesitation,pulling Mac
④Three men in the car
standing there, thinking how to fight back the wolf.
口 衔 接
口 反 应：Mac 动作线
口 尝试：上车求援
口反应：情感线
口 反 应 ：Paul 动作线
口 尝试：危机暂缓
口 衔 接
反应→尝试→转折→解决
The car abruptly st
e determined
口反应：动作线
ht. 口转机：关键人物 est by throwing
口转机：灵机一动
gside the meat.
口解决!
口 自然结尾
togo vacn home mrtase uiey wound run into the
②Being aware of the wolfs cr to stay where they were and a
③Suddenly, one of the cyclist
④A good idea occurred to hin their beef and pork away.
⑤Smelling the flavor of the m
⑥The two cyclists u-turned in ( ⑦ What comforted the two cy
⑧“Thank you for stopping to
( ⑨Mac and his two friends decuco
wolf again.
①About a hundred meters aw hat had 口 衔 接
happened to their friend.
A few minutes later,the other two cyclists arrived.
续写内容拆解
好故事来源于好结构!
反应：情感线动作线
自身外在
尝试：
暂缓/失败
衔接：第二段首句
反应衔接
转折/机
解决!
点睛收尾
Para 2-
Para 1-
解决问题第一步 ：
拆解问题 !
原则：Don't tell!Show me!
口I was so scared!
我害怕
口A wave of terror swept over her.Her heart pounding
fiercely and her palm sweating,an inner voice told her that she had to find a safe place.
读后续写万能反应之情绪描写
sb.could hardly wait to do sth
without hesitation/delay/a second thought/even thinking pluck/gather up one's courage to do sth
鼓起勇气
To one's relief / surprise / delight,. .令某人欣慰/意外/开心的是 Strangely enough,it turned out that ...
Luckily,it didn't take long beforesb...
人定胜天!
天助我也!
读后续写万能尝试之我命由我或由天
It suddenly occurredto sb.that..
It struck sb.that..
It hit sb.that..
It dawned on sb.that..
使开始明白/理解
(A/An idea,thought..) occurred/came to sb.that.
.. came/flashed into one's mind.
... crowded in one's mind.
it作主语
物作主语
读后续写万能转折之灵机一动
某人突然想到…
sb.learned from sb!
Whata/an valuable/useful/great/painful lesson sb.taught me!
What a/an thrilling/pleasant/unforgettable/memorable experience sb had!
Not until then did sb.realize/notice that …
我悟了! It was not until then that sb.realized that …
This special experience in... made me realize that.
读后续写万能结尾之升华点睛
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口 先 写 对
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口 再 写 美
词的升级 →句式的升级
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