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高考英语读后续写素材积累——动作描写
手部描写、腿部描写
手部描写
1. With a gentle flick of her wrist, she beckoned him closer. （她轻轻地转动手腕，示意他靠近。）
2. Without missing a beat, his nimble fingers danced across the piano keys. （他敏捷的手指在钢琴键盘上神采飞扬，不曾错过一个音符。）
3. Holding the delicate brush, he painted strokes as if whispering secrets to the canvas. （手握着精致的画笔，他如同对画布低语般地勾勒着每一笔。）
4. With a confident grip, she deftly wielded the sword, showing off her impeccable skill. （她自信地握紧剑柄，熟练地挥舞着剑，展现出她无可挑剔的技艺。）
5. Cupping his hands, he splashed water onto his face, revitalizing his tired spirit. （他捧起双手，将水洒在脸上，为疲惫的心灵注入了新的活力。）
6. With a subtle twist of her fingers, she unraveled the mystery locked within the ancient scroll. （她轻轻扭动手指，解开了古卷中隐藏的谜团。）
7. Holding the delicate porcelain teacup, she sipped the fragrant tea, her eyes twinkling with delight. （握着精致的瓷杯，她品尝了芳香的茶，眼神中充满了喜悦。）
8. Clasping her hands tightly, she made a fervent wish, hoping it would come true someday. （紧紧地握着双手，她发出了一个真诚的愿望，希望终有一天能够实现。）
9. With a gentle stroke, he caressed his lover's face, expressing his tenderness without words. （轻轻地抚摸着恋人的脸，他用行动无需言语地表达了自己的温柔。）
10. Holding her breath, she delicately threaded the needle through the fabric, creating a beautiful embroidery. （屏住呼吸，她小心翼翼地穿过布料，绣出了一幅美丽的刺绣。）
11. With precision and concentration, he skillfully manipulated the thin wires, crafting an intricate piece of jewelry. （凭借准确和专注，他熟练地操纵着细细的金属丝，打造出一件精美的珠宝。）
12. Using firm, deliberate strokes, she sculpted the clay into a lifelike figure, revealing her artistic talent. （她用坚定而有意的划痕，将黏土塑造成一个逼真的形象，展现了她的艺术才华。）
13. Twirling the pen between his fingers, he contemplated his thoughts before transferring them onto paper. （他用手指旋转着笔，思考着自己的想法，然后将它们写在纸上。）
14. With a flick of his wrist, he effortlessly threw the ball into the hoop, scoring a perfect three-point shot. （他轻轻一抖手腕，毫不费力地将球投进篮筐，得分了一个完美的三分球。）
15. Gently grasping the delicate petals, she carefully plucked a single flower from the garden, treasuring its beauty. （轻轻握住精致的花瓣，她小心地从花园中采摘了一朵花，珍视着它的美丽。）
16. Gingerly holding the fragile crystal, he polished it to perfection, revealing its dazzling brilliance. （小心翼翼地握着易碎的水晶，他将其抛光到完美无缺，展现了其耀眼的光彩。）
17. With a flick of his wrist, he gracefully waved goodbye to the crowd, leaving them in awe of his performance. （他轻轻一挥手腕，优雅地与观众告别，令他们对他的表演赞叹不已。）
18. As his fingers effortlessly moved across the keyboard, the mesmerizing melody filled the room, captivating everyone's hearts. （他的手指毫不费力地在键盘上舞动，迷人的旋律充满了房间，让每个人都陶醉其中。）

腿部描写
1. With a graceful leap, she alighted on the stage, as if a butterfly had landed on a delicate flower.
她以优美的跳跃着陆在舞台上，仿佛一只蝴蝶栖息在一朵娇嫩的花朵上。
2. The dancer's legs moved in perfect harmony, as if they were extensions of her music-filled soul.
舞者的腿部动作完美地协调一致，仿佛它们是她充满音乐的灵魂的延伸。
3. With a flick of her ankle, she effortlessly executed a pirouette, defying gravity's constraints.
她轻松一动脚踝，优雅地旋转，挣脱了重力的限制。
4. The athlete's legs propelled her forward with unwavering determination, as if she could conquer any obstacle in her path.
运动员的腿部动力强劲，伴随着坚定的决心将她推向前方，仿佛她能够征服道路上的任何障碍。
5. His legs glided across the dance floor, a seamless fusion of strength and elegance.
他的腿部在舞池上滑翔，展现出力量和优雅的完美融合。
6. With a lightning-fast kick, she soared through the air, leaving the audience in awe of her agility.
她迅疾地一脚冲天而起，让观众惊叹于她的敏捷。
7. The gymnast's legs extended to the heavens, defying the boundaries of human flexibility.
体操运动员的腿部伸展至天际，挑战着人类柔韧性的极限。
8. With each step, his legs painted a picture of grace and strength, moving in perfect synchrony.
他每一步都展现了优雅与力量的画面，两条腿完美地同步运动。
9. Her legs swayed like slender branches in the wind, adding a touch of ethereal beauty to her every movement.
她的腿部如同细长的枝条在风中摇曳，给她的每一个动作增添了一抹飘逸的美感。
10. With a controlled extension, his legs seemed to defy physics, defying the limitations of human anatomy.
他控制着腿部延伸，仿佛挑战物理规律，突破了人类生理结构的限制。
11. Her legs glided across the ice, leaving trails of elegance as she gracefully danced on the frozen stage.
她的腿部在冰面上滑翔，优雅地舞动，留下了优美的踪迹。
12. With a controlled leap, her legs propelled her into the air, defying the constraints of gravity for a brief moment.
她控制着腿部一跃而起，短暂地突破了重力的限制。
13. The ballet dancer's legs moved with precision and fluidity, seamlessly transitioning from one graceful pose to another.
芭蕾舞者的腿部动作精准而流畅，毫不费力地从一个优美的姿势过渡到另一个。
14. With a gentle flex, her legs propelled her across the water, as if she were a mermaid gliding through the sea.
她轻柔地用腿部推动身体在水中滑行，仿佛她是一只在海洋中游动的美人鱼。
15. The athlete's legs pumped with such power and speed, it was as if they had a mind of their own.
运动员的双腿以如此的力量和速度疾驰，仿佛它们拥有自己的思维。
16. With each precise kick, her legs sliced through the air like a pair of beautifully honed blades.
她每一次精准的踢腿，仿佛一对美丽锋利的刀刃在空中划过。
17. His legs effortlessly propelled him upwards, defying the limitations of human strength and gravity.
他的腿部毫不费力地将他推向高空，挑战着人类的力量和重力的极限。
18. With a series of quick steps, her legs moved in perfect syncopation, creating a mesmerizing rhythm.
她连续快速地迈步，双腿完美地同步，营造出一个令人陷入迷醉的节奏。
19. The gymnast's legs twisted and turned in mid-air, defying expectations and leaving the audience in awe.
体操运动员的腿部在空中扭转，超越了人们的预期，让观众赞叹不已。
20. Wit a swift kick, his legs propelled the ball into the net, as if guided by an invisible force.
他迅疾地踢出一脚，双腿将球推入球网，仿佛有一股无形的力量引导着它。
21. Her legs moved in perfect unison with the rhythm of the music, as if they were a part of a grand symphony.
她的腿部与音乐的节奏完美地协调一致，仿佛它们是一场宏伟交响乐的一部分。
22. With a graceful extension of her leg, she pointed her toe towards the sky, reaching for the heavens.
她优雅地伸展腿部，脚尖指向天空，伸向苍穹。
23. The dancer's legs fluttered like delicate wings, carrying her across the stage with effortless grace.
舞者的腿部翩翩起舞，像娇嫩的翅膀一样，毫不费力地带她穿越舞台。
24. With a swift and fluid motion, her legs executed a perfectly synchronized kick, leaving the audience breathless.
她的腿部灵活迅疾地完成完美的踢 kick 动作，让观众屏住了呼吸。
25. The runner's legs pounded against the pavement, carrying her forward with determination and strength.
跑者的双腿重重地踏在路面上，带着坚定和力量将她推向前方。
26. With a light bounce, her legs effortlessly lifted her off the ground, as if defying the laws of gravity.
她轻盈地弹跳，腿部毫不费力地将她离开地面，如同挑战重力的法则。
27. The athlete's legs lunged forward with precision and control, deftly maneuvering through the obstacle course.
运动员的双腿以精确和控制的方式向前伸展，在障碍赛道中熟练地操控着。高考续写之如何阅读材料
阅读材料方法
- 找出矛盾（要解决的问题），主线情节
- 找到主人公的诉求，主线情节
- 找到可以点明、反衬、暗示某种品质的句子
- 找到值得庆祝、纪念和令人悲伤、后悔的事情
- 找到是否有值得主人公反思、牢记的（某个亲人、朋友、同学、老师说的）话，在续写中呼应
- 找到值得主人公怀念的人物
- 找到是否有值得主人公怀念的情形
- 掠过次要情节
材料分析
Whenever I spread marmalade (橘子酱), I am reminded of my mother,a five-foot-tall angel who even befriended a skunk( 臭鼬).【值得主人公怀念的人物】【主题：人和动物 - 一般人和动物成为朋友，大多都是宣扬这个人的善良 —— 但是看到后文和续写，发现这篇文章，续写部分核心不是“母亲和skunk的故事”，而是“我和skunk的故事”】
One day, while she was busy picking beans in the backyard, she came across a skunk no more than a meter away. The skunk's embarrassment was evident as he had undoubtedly been rummaging (乱翻)through the garbage. He still had a marmalade jar stuck on his nose. Mom took pity on him.Instead of worrying the creature would spray something smelly all over her and the beans,she smiled compassionately at the little thing and extended a helping hand. Kneeling on the ground,she inched across the grass,reached out,and twisted the jar —very carefully.【这一段体现出“母亲很善良”】
The jar slipped off.The skunk nodded a thank-you before slipping away into the woods at the back of the garden.Obviously,there was no spraying incident,thanks to my remarkable mother.She repeated this tale numerous times,always calling the skunk Marmalade.However, that was not the end of the story.【说明后文我和这只动物还有联系】Three summers later,when I was about twelve, another encounter occurred. 【在读后续写中，只要动物在文章一半走了，后边一定会回来】
It was a rainy morning,and both my mother and father had gone to work.My friend Rob came over to play,and we decided to run the electric train in my room.Suddenly,a scratching sound emerged from the attic(阁楼) .Rob assumed that it might be some kind of animal. Curiosity got the better of us,and we ventured towards the source of the sound.【到这里还没交代这个声音是什么，可以猜一下就是那个skunk回来了】
I cautiously opened the attic door in the hall.The noise ceased abruptly.I climbed up the stairs,Rob following my lead.There behind the toy box near the chimney stood the animal 一 black with a distinct white stripe down his back. Was he scared and trembling I believe so,at least that's what I remember.Instinctively,I retreated,fearing the potential spray or bites from the creature.“Hey,Rob,”I whispered urgently,"It's a skunk.Let's go to the kitchen and figure out a way to get him out of here.”【基本可以断定这个动物就是skunk】
注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Para 1. In the cupboard,several paper cups and a jar of marmalade caught our sight.
Para 2. Rob and I followed the skunk as he ate his way down the stairs.
分析续写两句话
第二段首句
第一句“Rob and I followed the skunk as he ate his way down the stairs. ”
说明第一段“我” 用了某个东西来吸引他从阁楼中走出来。用的是什么呢？材料首段和续写首句都提到了a jar of marmalade，基本可以判定用这个句子酱来吸引她
第一段
“several paper cups and a jar of marmalade caught our sight.”
这个东西吸引了我们之后，走过去之后心里想什么？做些什么？我们在“想出用marmalade诱惑skunk这个方法之前”，心里又想了什么？怎么和前边“母亲和这个skunk”的故事联系起来？
第一段
如果不详细描写“我的心理活动”，那么第一段就只剩下“我用marmalade诱惑这只skunk”这部分内容了
结合第二段首句
说明“我们用橘子酱诱惑这只skunk时，skunk并没有出来，而是我们把句子酱放好之后，它才出来，所以我们才能跟在它后边”
第二段
“这只skunk走之后”，会做什么？对我们做什么才能体现出这只动物的依依不舍呢？他最后又去了哪里？能否从前文找到线索？
设计两段情节
No.1
第一段
1. 【提示：呼应前文母亲和skunk】
—— 接近这只skunk，我突然想起母亲多年前遇到的那只skunk，心里想这会不会就是那只？
2. 【提示：心理思考怎么把它弄出去】
—— 回想起母亲之前用橘子酱招待它，我把橘子酱倒进杯子里，希望用美食把它吸引出去。
3. 【提示：到这里发现字数不够，所以需要详细描写skunk看到我倒橘子酱之后的反应和吃橘子酱的过程】
—— 于是我拿着杯子往下走，每隔3-5个台阶放一个杯子
—— 终于，我把最后一个杯子放在门外时，我发现从楼梯上探出一只小脑袋，它走到第一个杯子那里，嗅了嗅，舔了舔，然后看了看我们
—— 我和Roh担心我们在它不敢吃，于是我们站在它视线之外的位置
—— 果然，不一会，我们便听到了杯子的声音，我们因此知道它开始吃橘子酱了
No.1
第二段
1. 【提示：听到它吃东西的声音之后，我们又怎么做？看到了什么？】
—— 它一边吃一边回头看我们，也没有躲开，仿佛已经确定我们对它没有威胁
2. 【提示：它吃完之后的反应是什么】
—— 我们看着它爬到外边，吃完最后一点橘子酱，回头盯了我们几秒，好像要对我们表达感谢，然后回头快速钻进树林里
3. 【提示：它走之后，我和朋友Roh什么感受？】
—— 这时Roh开口说“它还挺可爱的，想不到对人类这么放心”
—— 我回复说“它大概率是我妈妈几年前招待过的那只skunk，现在又来回找吃的”
4. 【提示：还要提一下“主人公的妈妈”，和前两段形成闭环】
—— 妈妈回来后，我跟它分享了今天的经历，妈妈说“看你的描述，它应该就是Marmalade，看来它是把这里当成第二个家了，因为我们家的人都很善良、热情”
续写
（可适当删减）
第一段
As I approached the skunk, I suddenly recalled the skunk my mother met years ago. I wondered if it was the same one. Could it have returned looking for my mother's treat again Remembering that my mother once fed it marmalade, I decided to do the same. I filled a cup with marmalade and hoped to attract it outside. Holding the cup, I went downstairs, setting down a cup every three to five steps. At last, when I placed the final cup outside the door, I spotted a small head peeking from the stairs. It approached the first cup, sniffed it, licked it, and then looked at us. Concerned it might be too frightened to eat with us watching, my friend Roh and I hid from its view. Soon enough, we heard the sound of the cup, indicating it had begun eating the marmalade.
第二段
As it ate, the skunk kept looking back at us but did not run away, as if it had decided we were not a threat. We watched it crawl outside, finish the last bit of marmalade, and then stare at us for a few seconds, as if to say thank you, before quickly slipping into the woods（用到原文的词汇）. Roh then said, "It's quite cute, isn't it Surprising how it trusts humans so much." I replied, "It's probably the same skunk that my mom took care of a few years ago, and it's come back looking for food." When my mom returned, I shared today's experience with her. She said, "It must be Marmalade. It seems like it’s made this place its second home because our family is warm and kind"
第二篇
材料
When I was seven years old,my family moved from Mexico to America. In Mexico, I was a cheerful girl who loved making people laugh with my jokes and inventing fun games to play with my friends.However,when I arrived in America,I found it hard to fit in【矛盾、问题所在：难以融入】,and I became quieter.
We lived in a small house with a modest yard where we grew vegetables—my responsibility.While I took pride in watching them grow,there were times when I dreamed of having a beautiful garden like my schoolmate Luella's【主人公诉求】,with its delicate tulips (郁金 香).Although Luella lived in the same neighborhood as me,we barely knew each other
It was after a tornado that Luella and I finally became close friends.【联想：作者想要一个和Luella‘s家花园一样的花园，经过了tornado两个人还成为了好朋友 —— 那么两个人大概率是在花园这件事上互相帮助，或者其中一方帮助了另一方】
The tornado struck on a Sunday afternoon.The gentle breeze transformed into a strong wind,and thick gray clouds filled the sky.Gradually,the tornado took shape, starting as a thin rope and growing into a large black funnel(漏斗) .My entire family gathered in the bathroom,seeking shelter from the storm.Terrified,I sat close to my mom,knees in my chest. After the storm had passed,our worries and fears were replaced by relief that we were unharmed and that our house had remained undamaged.【掠过次要情节：灾难前后过程，不重要，因为重点写的是“after tornado两个人如何成为好朋友”】
As I stepped outside, I witnessed the extent of the damage the tornado had caused to our neighborhood【是Luella的花园遭受了损失，所以大概率是主人公帮助了Luella】. Across the street,a tall tree had fallen, crushing Luella's garden in front of her yellow house.We hurried over to check on it.Fortunately,her family seemed to be away at the time,and no one was injured. However, her once-beautiful garden was in ruins, with the fallen tree destroying the tulips and debris(碎片)spread everywhere. I could only imagine how heartbroken they must feel seeing this.
1.Then my mom's usual words rang in my ear,"It is more blessed to give than to receive,”【值得主人公牢记的话 - 一般需要在续写中呼应 —— 但是考虑到这句话和本文主旨“友谊、互助”没什么关系，所以可以呼应，也可以不呼应 —— 我个人觉得还是不呼应好，不然太刻意了 —— 但如果真的点了，写通顺也可以】and my family started to think about how we could help.
Just at that moment,Luella's family returned in their car.
Even after the debris was cleared,I could still sense Luella's sorrow for her lost garden.
Step 2：分析续写两句话
2.第二段第一句“after the debris was cleared”，说明第一段“我”帮助了Luella’s family清理院子
3.第一段，Luella回来之后看到什么？心情如何？看到的是残破不堪，感到震惊、难过、悲伤类似（如果没有描写Luella看到的景象和感受，我认为是不合理的）
4.第一段，“我”看到Luella的反应，我又是什么表现？应该是同情、安慰
5.第一段，但是我又因为没有fit in而感到害羞，所以我不可能一下子就主动上去帮忙
6.第一段，我们是怎么帮助他们的呢？可以是妈妈先去，然后我受到了鼓舞之后再去
7.第二段，要以“我和Luella成为好朋友”“我成功fit in”为最终目标，至于“It is more blessed to give than to receive”，我觉得可点可不点，因为这句话和全文主旨“友谊、互助”没什么关系
8.第二段，我怎么鼓励Luella并和她成为了好朋友呢？我主动提出和她一起种花，培育植物和友谊
Step 3：设计两段情节
第一段：
1.Leulla一家开始收拾废墟Luella满脸震惊、难过
2.妈妈走过去，安慰、拥抱他们
3.我受到了鼓舞，也加入他们。并和Luella在合作中交流
4.描写清理打扫的过程
第二段：
1.环境描写：破败不堪的景象
2.我提出和她一起种花
3.Luella现出笑容
4.我们不仅在培育花草，还在培育友谊
5.这个花园是我们友谊的见证
Step 4：写作
第一段：Just at that moment, Luella's family returned in their car. Their were shocked and saddened by the scene where there were ruins and broken branches everywhere. As they surveyed the wreckage（残骸）, Luella wept and groaned（叹息）. Before I could do something, my mother approached them, comforting them and giving them a warm embrace. Inspired by her example, I bashfully（害羞地） came forward to Luella and offered to help. She looked at me, with affection in her eyes, and nodded. Together, we picked up fallen branches and flowers, clearing the destroyed flowerbeds.
第二段：Even after the debris was cleared, I could still sense Luella's sorrow for her lost garden. The empty space where tulips and other flowers once flourished seemed badly hurt. As the sun shines again, I invited Luella to join me in planting new flowers in both our yards. With each seed planted, her smile slowly returned. What we nurtured was not only new gardens but our friendship. The garden we rebuilt wasn't just a place giving off cents. it was a witness to how we shared hardship and cultivated friendship.
第三篇
（人物1）Michael saw the trouble coming. There standing in the hallway was Frank（人物2）, the boy who enjoyed making fun of anyone at any given moment. Frank was tall and strong, so few of his victims stood up to him. Michael hated the idea that Frank always got away with his wrongdoing. Yet like most kids who were picked on, he just took it quietly and waited for the unpleasant to pass.（Michael很讨厌Frank - 同学矛盾 - 但全文主要矛盾是否是同学冲突，需要结合后文来继续看）
Frank walked up, his eyes locked on the books in Michael’s arms. When they met, Frank stopped unexpectedly, “Hey, let me see those books!” Some students watched as Michael held out the books he was carrying, trying not to give away his nervousness.
Frank took a book, looked inside for a second, and then threw the book at Michael, who dropped all the other books. “Hey, those are school property,” Frank barked, “Be careful!” Then he walked away, laughing loudly.（Frank 欺负 Michael - 矛盾爆发）
Michael, his cheeks turning red, half kicked the fallen books. Suddenly a hand picked up one book. “You look like you could use a pally (盟友),” a friendly voice said. It was Ramon（人物3）, the most athletic boy in the high school. Michael couldn’t believe Ramon was stopping to help him as they barely spoke.（Ramon来帮他）
“Thanks,” Michael sighed with relief. “It’s confusing. I don’t know what his problems is.”
“Well, as I see it,” Ramon said, “you need to find a way to end this.” Michael nodded, stuck for what to say. Ramon continued, “You know my grandmother used to tell me whenever I had a problem with someone. She’d say, ‘You can catch more flies with honey than with vinegar (醋).’”
Looking puzzled, Michael asked, “What does that mean ”
“It means kindness may be more effective than anger,” Ramon explained.（值得主人公牢记、警醒的话 —— 可以在续写中呼应）
“Can you just tell Frank to stop picking on me ” Michael suggested.
“That’s vinegar,” Ramon laughed as he walked away. “Try honey instead.”
Ramon’s words left Michael thinking.
The next school day brought Michael’s usual pain. There stood Frank, and Michael knew it would be just seconds before he had to face him in the middle of the hall. Frank came nearer.
注意：
（1）续写词数应为150个左右；
（2）请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Then, suddenly, the unexpected happened.
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Michael bent down and quickly picked up Frank’s books on the floor.
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分析续写两句话
1. 先看续写第二段第一句“Michael bent down and quickly picked up Frank’s books on the floor.”—— 说明第一段“Frank” 遇到了问题“他的书掉了”，“Micheal”却用善良的行为来回应。这个善良的行为就是“帮助Frank”捡书
—— 但是第一段如果单纯“Frank的书掉了”，那么就算Michael帮了他，Frank也不会感谢什么
—— 因此，可以在这里设计情节是：“Frank被其它东西或者自己绊倒，受到了大家的嘲笑”
2. 再看续写第一段第一句：“Then, suddenly, the unexpected happened.”
—— the unexpected，具体是什么“出乎意料的事情”，需要考生自己编
—— 可以设计：Frank本来想使坏，但是Frank走过来时不小心歪了一下脚，然后摔倒了，结果引起了大家嘲笑。这个时候主人公Michael想起了那句话“catch more flies with honey than with vinegar”，并没有跟着大家一起嘲笑他
3. 然后再看续写第二段第一句
—— 就因为Michael这一个举动，Frank一下子就和Michael成为好朋友，不大可能，我们怎么设计的合理一些呢？
—— 可以这样设计：Frank从尴尬中缓过来，对Michael的行为感到震惊，然后说了谢谢。最后结尾再点一下提就好
续写设计
Frank一脸坏意，抱着一堆书走过来。Michael不知道他心里要打什么算盘，只是觉得他自己又难逃一次捉弄。正当他猜Frank会如何使坏，他该如何应对时，突然“砰”的一声，原来是Frank莫名其妙摔倒了。这时同学们开始偷笑，有人小声说“他竟然能被自己绊倒，真是好笨”。看到Frank眼前的境遇和同学们的反应，Micheal心里感觉非常舒适，准备也讥笑一番。但是这时候他突然想起Roman说的话“you can catch more flies with honey than with vinegar.”于是他做出了令所有人都出乎意料的决定。
Then, suddenly, the unexpected happened. Frank, with a prankish（捉弄人的） look, was walking over with a pile of books. Michael didn't know what Frank intended to, but he felt sure he was about to be made fun of again. Just as he was guessing how he should respond, suddenly there was a loud "bang" – Frank had fallen over. Then the classmates began to tease him, and someone whispered, "He can even trip over himself, how silly." Seeing Frank's awkward situation and other people’s reaction, Michael felt quite pleased and was ready to join in the laughter. But at that moment, he remembered Ramon's words, "you can catch more flies with honey than with vinegar." So, he made a decision that surprised everyone.
然后他把书交到Frank手里。Frank看到眼前Michael的帮忙，先是震惊，然后看着他，一声“谢谢”从他口中出来，然后默默走开。同学们也瞬间安静了下来，停止了对Frank的嘲笑，各自回头过去自己的事情。接下来，一整天，Frank都没有捉弄任何人，更没有像之前那样欺负Micheal。虽然Frank没有为之前的行为道歉，但是此时此刻，Michael也知道他的善举起了作用。看到Frank安静了一天，Roman也找到Michael“恭喜你学会了如何去应付这类人”，他回复说：“你说的对，善良确实比愤怒重要得多，有时候我们是需要用honey来应付flies”
Michael bent down and quickly picked up Frank’s books on the floor. Then he handed the books back to Frank, who was shocked by Michael's help at first, then looked at him and a "thank you" came out of his mouth before he walked away. The classmates also instantly quieted down, stopping their laughter at Frank, and turned back to their own affairs. For the rest of the day, Frank didn’t tease anyone, nor did he make fun of Michael as he had done before. Although Frank did not apologize for his previous behaviors, at this moment, Michael knew his act of kindness had had an effect. Seeing Frank keep quiet all the day, Ramon came to Michael and said, "you have learned how to handle people like this." He replied, "You were right, kindness is indeed much more important than anger. Sometimes we do need to use honey to deal with flies."高考续写之如何分析材料
分析材料哪些信息可以呼应
- 筛选可以使用的词汇：一般是和线索、引起矛盾出现的事物、导致矛盾升级的事物有关的词汇
- 找出矛盾（要解决的问题）
- 明确氛围和环境
- 找到“续写两句话”没有提到的情节，但是却可以点明、反衬、暗示某种品质，比如值得庆祝、纪念和令人悲伤、后悔的事情
- 找到是否有值得主人公反思、牢记的（某个亲人、朋友、同学、老师说的话，可以在关键情节时激励主人公）
- 找到是否有值得主人公怀念的情形
材料
The notice was posted next to the mailboxes in the apartment building I had just moved into. “A Mitzvah (善行) for Mrs. Green,”【主题词】 it read, “Sign up to drive Mrs. Green in 3B home from her chemotherapy (化疗) treatments twice a month.”【Mrs. Green是谁？】
Since I wasn’t a driver, I couldn’t add my name, but the word “mitzvah” was always wandering in my thoughts after I went upstairs. It’s a Hebrew word that means “to do a good deed”. But according to my grandma, it also had another meaning. This was the one she was always pointing out to me because she noticed that I thought it a shame to let people do things for me. “Linda, it’s a blessing to do a mitzvah for someone else, but sometimes it’s a blessing to let another person do something for you.”
【融洽 - 呼应材料“引起主人公思考和启发的话语”】
【思考：为什么让别人帮你的忙也是一种善意？】
One evening, snowflakes had been falling past my window for several hours when the time to leave for class came. I labored to the bus stop, reaching it just as a bus went by. For an hour, I prayed desperately that a bus would come. Then I gave up. The wind at my back pushed me towards home. Even if I wanted to ask someone for a good deed, which I did not, there wasn’t a soul on the street.【你会注意到：到这里都没提到Mrs Green】
But as I pushed the door of my apartment open, I found myself face to face with a woman at the mailbox with a set of keys in her hand. Obviously she had a car and was going out. In that split second, desperation overcame my pride and I blurted (脱口而出), “Could you possibly give me a lift ” An odd look crossed her face and she agreed without hesitation.
l【融洽 - 呼应了前文“sometimes it’s a blessing to let another person do something for you”】
l【你会注意到：到这里都没提到Mrs Green，但是却提到了这个a woman，还不是可以猜测她就是Mrs Green】
On our way to my school, she spoke so warmly that I felt comfortable. “You remind me of my grandmother.” I said. A slight smile crossed her lips. “Just call me Grandma Alice as my grandchildren do.” When she dropped me off, I thanked her again and again.
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Back home I heard a neighbor saying “Good night, Mrs Green.” to Grandma Alice on the stairs.
Mrs. Green visited me later and said, “May I tell you something ”
【第一段续写】
Back home I heard a neighbor saying “Good night, Mrs Green.” to Grandma Alice on the stairs.
思考【融洽度、衔接度与内容丰富】
【这里知道Grandma Alice 就是 Mrs Green】
【融洽：她怎么了？- cancer】
【衔接：我第一次知道Mr Green就是Alice，想到什么？- 一个得了癌症的人竟然看起来这么健康】
【融洽与衔接：把所有线索、引起作者思考的话语、引起作者心情变化的情节、人物关系，整合到一起 —— it’s a blessing to do a mitzvah for someone else, but sometimes it’s a blessing to let another person do something for you.奶奶说的这句话和Mrs Green的行为有什么关联？—— 因为她得了癌症，身体虚弱，让她帮我的忙会让她感觉她依旧对他人有帮助、依旧健康、依旧充满生命的活力】
第一段范文
Back home I heard a neighbor saying “Good night, Mrs Green.” to Grandma Alice on thestairs. Mrs. Green, the woman with cancer【融洽度：呼应开头的cancer】. “Grandma Alice” was Mrs. Green【融洽与衔接度：呼应开头和续写首句的Mrs Green的真正身份】. I stood on the stairs, my hand covering my mouth【内容丰富：反映作者思考、情感变化的动作，细节描写】: I had asked a person struggling with cancer to go out in a snowstorm to give me a lift to school. “Oh, Mrs. Green,” I stammered（结结巴巴地说）【内容丰富：用词生动，反映作者情绪变化的动作】, “ I didn’t realize who you were. Please forgive me.”【衔接度】 I forced my legs to move me up the stairs.【内容丰富：表达生动，反映作者情绪变化的动作】 In my apartment, I stood still, not taking my coat off. How could I have been so insensitive In a few seconds, someone tapped on my door.【衔接度：衔接下文】
【第二段续写】
Mrs. Green visited me later and said, “May I tell you something ”
思考【融洽度、衔接度与内容丰富】
【融洽与衔接：什么内容会与主题 “it is a blessing to let others do sth for you”相关呢？】
第二段范文
Mrs. Green visited me later and said, “May I tell you something ” I nodded slowly, motioning her toward a chair, sinking down onto my couch【衔接度/融洽度/内容丰富】. “I used to be so strong.” she said. She was crying. “I used to be able to do things for other people. Now everybody keeps doing things for me, giving me things, cooking my meals and taking me to places where I want to go. It’s not that I don’t appreciate it, but I don’t have chances. Tonight before I went out to get my mail, I prayed to God to let me feel like part of the human race again. Then you came along ...”【融洽度/衔接度/内容丰富：交代上文内容，为什么“让别人帮助你也是对他人的善意？”】It was not until then that I understood the true meaning of my grandmum’s remarks: sometimes it’s a blessing to let another person do something for you because they need you to let them feel you need them.【点明主旨】
如何分析材料
Step 1：建议先读后边的续写首句，再读材料。先根据续写首句，猜一下大概写什么，然后方便去原文找一些【可以用到的词汇】
1.Pretty soon, other grandbabies started to arrive, and each of them had their own turn on the little red can.
2.Decades later, Grandma proudly pulled out the little red can again when I traveled to Cleburne with my daughter.
3.发现关键词：
- little red can
- Grandma
- grandbabies
4.猜主旨：和love and affection亲情有关
5.提问：red can 和本文有什么联系
6.提问：为什么Grandma是proudly pulled out，为什么是骄傲滴？是当年我用这个red can做了什么了不起的事让Grandma感到骄傲咩？
Step 2：阅读材料
- 筛选可以使用的词汇：在材料中找描写red can的词用在续写中；在材料中找到“red can解决了某些问题的词”用子啊续写中
- 找出矛盾（要解决的问题）
- 明确氛围和环境
- 找到“续写两句话”没有提到的情节，但是却可以点明、反衬、暗示某种品质，比如值得庆祝、纪念和令人悲伤、后悔的事情
- 找到是否有值得主人公反思、牢记的（某个亲人、朋友、同学、老师说的话，可以在关键情节时激励主人公）
- 找到是否有值得主人公怀念的情形
材料
One of my favorite possessions is a little red can. It sits among my collections, looking somewhat old and out of place. But this can is special. It has a history. It was dear to me when I was younger, but mean even more to me now.
——【确认是回忆过去，联想到续写两句里的red can 和 decades later —— 可以猜到“主人公我和祖母之间可能因为这个‘red can’产生了更紧密的关系”】
——【接下来要回忆过去，可以猜一下，这个red can是怎么来的】
I've always loved to visit my grandparents in Cleburne, Texas, and as anyone in the family can tell you, there is always a gathering around the dining room table for meals and conversations so that we can keep in touch closely. It is important to keep in touch with the family members since we are busy with our own business, so my family members keep the tradition to have the gathering every month. We enjoy the moment when all of us meet in a place and communication helps us to solve the problem of isolation【祖父母家能让我们不再isolated】. As the first grandbaby, though, I was at a slight disadvantage. When I sat in the dining chair, only my nose could reach the table. Cleburne is a small town with a small population, and the phone book could only lift me an inch. So, Grandma and Grandpa came up with the idea of the little red can.【这个red can估计早就有了，毕竟也用了定冠词“the”，说明特指 —— 结合续写第二句的proudly，是不是可以把“爱和亲情的传承”当成是本文的主旨呢】
It was about ten inches high, made of tin, and painted a glorious shiny red【描写red can的词，可以用在续写中（具体看情况）】. It worked perfectly, enabling me to bang away on the table with my little spoon and cup as I tried to keep up with the joyful talks around the table【让主人公怀念的场景，可以呼应】. After I finished a meal, I was placed on the floor, and the can was opened, and all sorts of surprises kept me busy【让主人公怀念的场景，可以呼应】 while the adults visited. The can was full of lovely dolls which attracted little girls like me greatly. Besides, there were fresh and novel items that were mysterious to me and left me to explore. 【red can里的惊喜，是点名red can这个关键信息的句子，这里的内容可以在续写里用上】
1. 续写词数应为150词左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Pretty soon, other grandbabies started to arrive, and each of them had their own turn on the little red can.
Decades later, Grandma proudly pulled out the little red can again when I traveled to Cleburne with my daughter.
第一段续写
情节思考
1.联想下一段的第一句proudly，祖母为什么因为【这个red can】感到骄傲
2.把【red can】和【love / affection between families】联系起来
3.是不是可以说【这个red can】是家族传承的
原创情节
1.每个人都快乐地摆弄着盒子里的玩意儿items
2.我们迫不及待地给每个人规定玩耍的时间，每次轮到我玩耍，我都玩到忽略其他人的存在
3.小时候对我来说，这个red can只是个装满惊喜、能让我开心的小东西
4.当时我还不明白这个red can的含义，长大一点，父亲告诉我这个red can也是他小时候和我祖母小时候的玩具
5.这么多年一直作为亲情纽带的象征传承了下来，期间一遍又一遍重新上色、维修，才保持如此光鲜的外表。
写作
Pretty soon, other grandbabies started to arrive, and each of them had their own turn on the little red can.
① We played with the items inside with great joy. We couldn’t help setting playtime for everyone, and I tended to igonore others’ presence every time the red can was in my hands. ② The can for a child was nothing but a little container filled with suprises. ③ At that time, I didn’t truly understand the meaning of it. ④ As I grew up, I learnt from my father that this red can was also a toy my grandma and he played when they were children. ⑤ It has been passed down as a symbol of family ties for so many years, during which time it has been recolored and repaired to maintain its glorious shiny red（原材料词汇）.
第二段续写
情节思考
1.我刚进入祖母的家，有什么感受？
—— 不能上来直接写red can，这样清洁不饱满，也不方便凑字数；
—— 只要描述你去了某地，都要先描述去这个地方的第一感受
2.我的女儿也来了，怎么把daughter代入情境中？
—— 女儿像我当初一样，被red can里的各种surprises吸引
—— all sorts of surprises kept my daughter busy
3.再次回到这里，会不会回忆起以前的场景？
4.收尾：以family, red can, bond, love, left by grandma等信息收尾
原创情节
1.每次拜访祖母，我都要先在以前bang with my cup and spoon的桌子旁坐一会
2.回忆美好的童年when我的其它cousins 一起玩耍，以及那个red can
3.跑跳声、笑声、哭声，在我脑海中都萦绕不去
4.突然一阵声音把我从回忆中拉出来，我才发现red can已经到了我的女儿手里，我的父母在旁边看着她笑着
5.看着女儿如此kept her busy，我感觉非常开心
6.然后我和祖母坐在桌子旁分享最近的生活，聊着、笑着，享受着这份爱和亲情。
7.我知道，这个red can还要继续传承下去
写作
① Every visit to my grandmother's house brought me back to the moment when I bang with my cup and spoon on the table. ② Sitting at the table would remind me of the scene where my cousins and I played together with sounds of running, laughter and tears echoing through the house. ③ Suddenly a sound forced me out of my memory. Then I found the red can was in my daughter's hands, my grandma standing by smiling at her. ④ Watching my daughter kept busy with it fills me with great joy. ⑤ Then, my grandmother and I chatted at the table, sharing recent stories and laughing. We were fully immersed in the love and affection of families. ⑥【结尾】I knew that this red can would continue to be passed down through generations, carrying with it the essence of our family bond.英语读后续写精讲思路
第一篇
This Friday brought a mix of emotions—both excitement and disappointment—all because of a flyer from school
情绪：为什么又兴奋又失望 - 是否需要在续写中体现？还需要结合后文来看】.
When I got home, Mum saw the flyer in my hand and asked, “What's this ”
“A flyer for a five-day art camp,” I explained. “But Emily can't go.”
flyer 传单】【最后作者一定是要去这个地方的，且看看遇到了什么问题
“Would you like to attend ”Mum asked. “You've always loved art.” Her words reminded me of what Emily had said earlier: “Tessa, you're the real artist. My brother thought the roses I painted were rocket ships.”I sighed. Mum patted my back. She knew I had a hard time jumping into something with no familiar faces around. “Maybe next year.”
① 续写主要矛盾、要解决的问题：“社交恐惧”“不敢融入有陌生面孔的新环境”】
② 具体怎么解决，用什么方式，要看后文有什么提示
“Maybe,” I echoed. Then I told Mum I wanted to go outside to draw the Westons' pine tree( 松树 ). She nodded with an encouraging smile.
As I walked into the bright sunshine, I couldn't help but think about the art camp. I wished I felt a little bit braver. Emily could make friends with a whole bus of kids in ten minutes, but my stomach felt like a little boat tossed in a heavy storm when I was surrounded by strangers... By the time I started drawing, I had made up my mind to forget about the art camp. 到这里主人公还在纠结
I began by drawing the pine tree's strong and straight trunk, and then added the beautiful branches, making sure the upper ones lifted gently towards the sun. Lost in my work, I jumped when I heard Mr. Weston speak up, “You’ve done a great job showing the strength of that tree on paper.”
“Thanks,” I smiled, glancing up.
As I drew the needles to the branches, Mr. Weston told me something I never knew about pines: If you plant the root ball too deep, the tree dies. Their roots grow out, not down—to get enough water and grow tall.
重要句子：
① 使用隐喻；
② I never know about pines，说明是让我牢记的句子；
③ 肯定对“我鼓起勇气参加art camp”有所启示；
④ plant the root ball too deep可以理解为是“太隐藏自己，不接触外界人”;
⑤roots grow out可以理解为是“走出去，接触外界事物，个人才能发展好”；
⑥ 这意味着后文续写，要把自己比喻为branches】
“You have a good eye, Tessa.”With these words, Mr. Weston nodded goodbye.
续写词数应为150左右；
请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Paragraph 1: His words made me pause and think.
Paragraph 2: The next Monday, I signed up for the camp.
分析续写两句话
1. 先看续写第二段第一句“The next Monday, I signed up for the camp.
—— 说明第一段都在写“我做决定的过程”
2. 再看续写第一段第一句“ His words made me pause and think.”
—— 这里提示已经很明显了“think”
—— 说明接下来都写“我思考的过程”
—— “我到底想一些什么”才能写到80-100词呢？
—— 当然是原材料倒数第二段的那句话给我的启示
3. 再来看第二段
—— 第二段“我参加艺术夏令营”之后，经历了什么给我带来改变？
—— 结合对原材料的分析，有几点是需要再第二段体现：① 我最后一定是开始愿意和陌生面孔接触、融入了陌生环境；② 我最终参加夏令营之前，可以提一下妈妈什么态度（这部分可写可不写吧）；③ 参加夏令营一开始是什么反应；④ 怎么发生变化的，要写出这种转折；
—— 当然了，还可以写“我的内心活动”
设计两段情节
第一段
His words made me pause and think. 我开始由此想到我和Mr Weston所说的树有很大的相似性，如果我的根只是深入地下，或者说如果我只是胆小地躲起来，不敢面对生面孔，那么我永远无法成熟起来。想到这里，我觉得art camp对于我来说可能是一个成长的契机。我应该开始尝试突破自己的，挖掘自身的潜能，毕竟未来还有很多场合都需要我面对这种情形。想到这里，我仿佛没那么恐惧了。
His words made me pause and think. I began to think about how similar I was to the tree Mr. Weston talked about. If my roots merley went deep underground, or if I just shyly hid away, afrad to fit in new environment where there are many new faces, then I could never really grow up. Thinking about this, I felt that the art camp might be an opportunity for me to grow. I should start trying to break out my boundaries and tap my potential. After all, there will be many situations in the future where I need to face these kinds of challenges. Thinking about this, I seemed to become braver.
第二段
The next Monday, I signed up for the camp. 我事情来龙去脉告诉妈妈后，她的眼神充满骄傲和喜悦，说很开心能看到我的成长，也很欣慰我能从Mr Weston的话语中感悟如此深刻。到了art camp开营的那天，我 刚走进教室，一开始还是感觉不舒适，不敢抬头看他人，也不敢与他人讲话。但转念想到我来到这里的目的，和Mr Weston的话，我鼓起勇气找到前排的位置坐下，并主动与同学交谈，分享我的作品，并开始享受这种感觉。逐渐地，我不再抗拒接触陌生面孔，开始感受到了我向外生长的快乐。
The next Monday, I signed up for the camp. After telling Mum the whole story, her eyes lit up with pride and joy. She was relieved to see my growth and my deep understanding from Mr. Weston's words. On the first day of the camp, I walked into the classroom feeling uneasy, but remained hesitant to make eye contact or start a conversation with anyone. But then, thinking of my purpose for being there and Mr. Weston's encouraging words, I took a seat at the front and began talking with my classmates, sharing my artwork, and enjoying the atmosphere. Gradually, as I not longer objected to meeting new people and found the joy of my roots branching out.
第二篇：
原材料
“Have you decided on your major ” my parents inquired.
“Bioengineering, of course.” I responded without the slightest hesitation.
I entered this world with Poland syndrome, a disease that prevented the formation of my right arm and pectoral muscles(胸肌). My parents, believing that playing with Lego could enhance my dexterity(灵巧), gifted me my first kit when I was five. Struggling to piece the components together, I crafted my first Lego work – a car. As I got older, I grew obsessed with Lego Technic, a more advanced range, and how to use it to build more delicate structures. By the age of nine, I had fashioned my first prosthetic arm(义肢)using Lego Technic – a simple box that perfectly accommodated my right arm.
This early creation sparked my drive for further exploration. Years later, I developed another prosthetic arm that I called the MK-1, which had fingers, a motor, a pressure sensor, a movable elbow joint, and a grabber capable of picking things up.
Before constructing it, I had already decided against traditional prosthetics. Not because they were ineffective, but because playing with Lego did significantly improve my dexterity, helping me adapt to my condition. However, a more frustrating reason was that prosthetics were too expensive. My parents and I had looked into getting one a few years earlier, only to be discouraged by the prohibitive price. So, I concluded that I might not need one because I was managing well without. Nevertheless, the joy of creating prosthetics with Lego remained, and I continued making them purely for the fun of it.
As the years passed, my creations evolved from MK-1 to the more advanced and comfortable MK-V. It featured a control unit that could send and receive orders from sensors on the arm to the motors, with cables that contract like muscles.
One day, a couple with their eight-year-old son, who lost both arms in an accident, reached out to me after learning about my creations. Short of money, they couldn’t afford well-functioning prosthetics. “Daniel,” the father earnestly asked, “we were wondering if you could possibly help build a set of prosthetics for our son.”
注意:
1.续写词数应为150左右:
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
I knew it would be a challenging and demanding task, but I responded with a “yes”.
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I rushed to the boy’s home and secured the prosthetics onto him!
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下面是官方给的参考
I knew it would be a challenging and demanding task, but I responded with a “yes”. The boylifted his head with his once lifeless eyes now glittering with a spark of hope. I beamed at himwith a radiant smile and without any delay, embarked on the task, ①The subsequent days witnessed how I carefully selected the Lego pieces that catered to the boy's interests and intricately integrated practical components to enhance its flexibility. Days turned into weeks, and theboy-customized prosthetics finally took shape. It's time for them to fulfill their intended purpose. 【74字】
I rushed to the boy 's home and secured the prosthetics onto him. ② Holding breath, we anxiously awaited the result -they worked! The room erupted with cheers! The boy expressed his gratitude and sprinted to his parents to envelop them in the biggest hug he hadn't been able togive for years. The scene was truly inspiring. Never had I imagined that my creations, born out ofmere fun, would someday make such a profound difference. It is on that day that I made up mymind to commit myself to making a lasting impact in the realm of prosthetic innovation.【83字】
下面我们可以去思考下在哪里扩写
读后续写的原则是：不能在非主要情节上用太多文字，主要情节就是【矛盾出现、加剧、解决的环节】，可以从这三个方面入手
在官方范文第一段找到【解决矛盾过程】定位在【我组装义肢这部分】
在官方范文第二段找到【问题解决后】定位在【男孩试用义肢这部分】
可以在这两个地方进行扩写
扩写
第一段：把第一段①【制作义肢的部分】扩写为【设计、制作、调整改进】三部分内容
The following day witnessed how I carefully designed several prototypes and selected out that matched the boy’s requirements. From the second on, I have selected the Lego pieces, assembled them together, adjusted them to ensure flexibity. Throughout the process, I met many difficulties, but finally I made it when the boy-customized prosthetics finally took shape week later.（这部分原文36词，扩写之后变成60词）
第二天，我精心设计了几款原型，并选择了一个符合男孩需求的方案。从第二天开始，我挑选乐高积木，组装它们，调整它们的位置以确保灵活性。在整个过程中，我遇到了许多困难，但最终在一周后，男孩定制的假肢终于完工。
第二段：在第二段②增加【安装、试用的过程】
I fitted it on and let him try to pick something up. Then I held my breath as he walked toward the fruit tray on the table. As I watched him picked up an apple, we were certain that the prosthetic worked！
我把它装在男孩的断肢上，让这个男孩试着抓起一个东西。我屏住呼吸，祈祷不要失败。当我看着他走向桌子旁，抓起一个苹果时，我们确定，这对义肢可以使用！（这部分原文9个词，增加之后是42词）
第三篇
One day, while at work in a coal-mine in Malden, I happened to overhear two miners talking about a great school for poor people in Virginia. It was Hampton Institute. The school was established to provide opportunities for poor but worthy students who could work out all or a part of the cost of board, and at the same time be taught some trade or industry.【导入，和教育相关】
I was on fire constantly with one ambitionand that was to go to school. I decided at once to go to that school. Finally the great day came and I started for Hampton. I had only a small, cheap bag that contained what few articles of clothing I could get. The distance from Malden to Hampton is about five hundred miles. I had not been away from home many hours before it began to grow painfully evident that I did not have enough money to pay my fare (路费) to Hampton
【作者很贫穷，被录取了也没什么钱付路费】
【到这里好像没有看出这篇文章最后要升华的中心思想】
【我们可以猜一下：中心思想可能是“追求教育”“坚持”“坚强”“追逐梦想”】
By walking and begging rides in some way, I finally reached the grounds of the Hampton Institute after a number of days, tired and dirty. As soon as possible after reaching, I presented myself before the head teacher for assignment to a class.【出现了新人物，那么中心思想应该和新人物有关】 Having been so long without proper food, a bath, and change of clothing, I was like a worthless loafer (游荡者).
I did not, of course, make a very favourable impression upon her, and I could see at once that there were doubts in her mind about the wisdom of admitting me as a student.【要解决的问题（需要在续写中呼应）：教师不认可主人公】 I tried to impress her in all the ways I could with my worthiness. How I wished that I could get a chance to show what was in me.【主人公主要目标、结局：主人公成功得到了老师认可】
After some time, the head teacher said to me, “The adjoining (隔壁的) classroom needs sweeping. Take the broom and sweep it.”
注意：
1.续写词数应为150左右;
2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
It occurred to me at once that here was my chance.
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The head teacher went into the room and inspected the floor and closets.
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Step 2：结合材料，分析续写两句话
1. 结合材料中的“I did not, of course, make a very favourable impression upon her”和续写第一句话
—— 可以分析：如果主人公想让head teacher对他印象深刻，就只得把眼前的任务“sweep the adjoining classroom”做好
—— 所以第一段主要写：我仔细打扫的过程
—— 详细来说，第一段内容要包括：我如何如何在打扫时关注细节、扫了哪里、怎么清理的、我为什么这么关注细节、我的目标
2. 结合材料中的“ there were doubts in her mind about the wisdom of admitting me as a student”和续写第二句话
—— 可以分析结局：老师接受主人公成为他的学生、接受主人公成为Hampton Institute的一员
—— 中间写：教师检查任务、发现我的优点、称赞我、与之前的态度的变化
Step 3：设计两段情节
第一段：
It occurred to me at once that here was my chance.
我决定把这件事做到最好，以证明我的价值。我拿起扫把、抹布和白色涂墙漆，走进教室，从教室后方开始清理，不放过每一个角落的灰尘、不放过墙上的每一道学生的涂鸦、不放过桌子里每一片纸屑。我还把所有桌子、椅子重新摆齐规整，确保窗户能映出人影。就这样过了几个小时，在我投入全部精力之后，教室仿佛是新的一样，我满意地去找校长，希望能获得她的称赞，让她接纳我成为Hampton Institute的一员。
I decided to do the best job to prove my worth. Then I took up the broom, cloth, and white wall paint, and went into the classroom. I started the task from the back, meticulously cleaning every corner, clearing every student’s doodle from the walls, and removed every piece of garbage from the desks. I also placed all the tables and chairs neatly, ensuring that the windows were spotless and bright enough to reflect one’s image. Having put into all my energy into the task, I found the classroom show a new look. Pleased with my work, I went to the head teacher’s office, hoping to be praised and accepted as a member of Hampton Institute.
第二段：
The head teacher went into the room and inspected the floor and closets.
也没有放过每一扇窗户和每一个角落。检查之后，她一句话没说，让我跟她去办公室，我怀着忐忑不安的心情跟着她，以为我哪里没有做好，正想着如何解释时，她温柔地开口对着我说：“你的工作已经超出了我的预期，你真是个很细心的学生，欢迎加入Hampton Institute，希望你未来在学业上有所成就”。这一刻起，我才算是真正实现了上学的梦想，我心里十分感动，泪水开始在眼眶里打转，不仅仅是获得了校长的认可，还是因为我即将开启新的人生。
She didn't even overlook a single window or corner. Having inspected the classroom, she kept silent and asked me to follow her to her office. I walked behind her, filled with anxiety, thinking I might have missed something and wondering how to explain. But to my surprise, she then gently said to me, "Your work was beyond my expectations. You are indeed a careful person. Welcome to Hampton Institute. I hope you achieve great success in your studies."At that moment, I felt that I had finally realized my ambition of going to school.I was deeply touched, and tears began to well up in my eyes. It wasn't not only because I gained the head teacher's approval but also because I was about to start a new life.读后续写细节描写：特写技巧
什么是特写镜头？
突出重要细节：当你想强调故事中的关键元素或对象时，如重要的物品、人物的某个特征，或者某个情节的转折点。
深化角色描写：通过特写可以更深入地展现角色的内心世界和情感变化，比如角色的面部表情、眼神、手势等。
强化氛围和情绪：在需要加强读者对场景气氛或情绪的感受时，如描绘一个恐怖的场景或一个浪漫的瞬间。
加强情节的冲击力：在故事的高潮或关键时刻，使用特写可以增加情节的张力和冲击力，让读者产生更强烈的情感反应。
促进情节的发展：在故事需要细致的情节推进时，特写可以帮助描绘情节发展的微妙变化。
特写镜头使用场景【FEDS】
F - Feelings (情感)：用来深入描绘和传达角色的情感细节。
E - Events (事件)：用于突出关键事件的重要细节。
D - Decisions/Logic (决策/逻辑)：用来展示角色的思考过程、决策或逻辑推理。
S - Setting/Scene (设置/场景)：用于详细描述环境或设置特定的场景氛围。
特写镜头技巧【“细感情”】
1.细节聚焦
面部描写：聚焦于眼神、嘴角的微笑或皱纹等，通过这些细节传达情感和性格。
动作描写：关注手势、姿态或其他身体动作，以此表现角色的心理状态或故事发展。
环境描写：挑选出场景中的一个重要元素，比如桌上的一束花、墙上的一幅画，用以营造氛围。
2.感官体验：
利用视觉、听觉、嗅觉、触觉和味觉等感官描述，使读者能够“看到”、“听到”或“感受到”这些细节。
3.情感传达：
特写描写与角色的情感状态或故事情节紧密相连
“特写镜头”描写训练
1. 细节：眼睛（泪、眼睛颜色）、嘴、眉头紧皱（frown） 2. 感官：看到了什么？ 3. 情感：难过？惊恐？
中文：他的眼睛瞪得大大的，泪水在眼眶中打转，最终无声地滑落。他的嘴巴微微张开，露出惊讶和痛苦的神情。 English: His eyes were wide open, with tears swirling in his sockets before silently sliding down. His mouth was slightly ajar, revealing an expression of surprise and pain.
试着用语言描述表情 1. 细节： —— 眼神：犀利，目光集中，瞳孔缩小 —— 嘴：微微张开 —— 耳朵：竖起来 —— 肌肉：紧绷 2. 感受：饥饿 3. 情绪：紧张、激动、坚定 中文：这只猫的眼神犀利且集中，瞳孔紧缩成一条细线，仿佛专注地盯着猎物。它的嘴微微张开，露出尖锐的牙齿。耳朵竖立，捕捉着周围的每一个声音。它的肌肉紧绷，像弓一样拉紧，准备随时发力。 English: The cat had a sharp, focused gaze, with its pupils narrowed to thin slits, as if intently watching its prey. Its mouth was slightly open, revealing sharp teeth. Its ears stood erect, capturing every sound around. Its muscles were taut, like a bowstring pulled tight, ready to spring into action.
试着用语言描述草丛和露珠 1. 细节：露珠形态？ 2. 感官：视觉上，露珠像什么？颜色如何？ 3. 情感：传递一种什么样的感受？ 中文：春雨刚过，每一株草叶都挂着晶莹的露珠。这些小小的水珠在柔和的阳光下熠熠生辉，像珍珠般镶嵌在绿色的绒毯上。露珠的形状完美无瑕，透明清澈，仿佛大自然的珍宝。 English: After the spring rain, every blade of grass was adorned with sparkling dewdrops. These tiny droplets shone brilliantly under the gentle sunlight, like pearls embedded in a green velvet carpet. The dewdrops were flawlessly shaped, crystal clear, resembling nature's treasures.
试着用语言描述动作 1. 细节：手指形态？手指怎么样弹奏的（缓慢、激昂）？效果如何？ 2. 感官：听到了什么样的音乐？ 3. 情感：听众感受如何？可以用什么修辞来形容听众感受？ 中文：手指轻柔地在键盘上滑动，每一次触碰都那么缓慢而精确。指尖轻轻压下每个键，慢慢地抬起，仿佛在空气中挥舞着一支无形的指挥棒。 English: Fingers gently glided across the keyboard, each touch slow and precise. The tips pressed down each key softly, lifting slowly as if waving an invisible baton in the air.
“特写镜头”在读后续写中的应用（1）
原材料：
开端
Hassan和Moiz，两个以欺负他人著称的恶霸，正在街上寻找下一个受害者。此时，Usman，一个热爱阅读的善良邻居，正从书店带着几本新书和一个旧笔记本回家。当Usman无意中路过他们时，Hassan和Moiz决定将他作为目标，开始追赶并调戏他。Usman试图忽略他们，只想尽快回家。
高潮
在追逐中，Usman不慎掉落了他的笔记本。Hassan捡起笔记本，打算继续嘲笑Usman。然而，Usman冲上前来，推开Hassan，抢回笔记本并尽力逃跑。最终，在Usman家附近，Hassan和Moiz追上并抓住了他，从Usman手中夺走了笔记本。当Hassan打开笔记本，阅读里面的内容时，他被深深触动，泪水充满了眼眶。他意识到了自己的错误，向Usman道歉，并与Moiz一起离开了现场。
In fact, there was a story about a bully in Usman’s notebook.
After that day, the once troublesome and upsetting Hassan and Moiz disappeared.
续写特写镜头
1. Hassan's eyes widened, reflecting a storm of emotions, as he absorbed each word in Usman's story, his gaze flickering with the dawning of regret and empathy.
2. A single tear escaped Hassan's eye, slowly tracing a path down his cheek, symbolizing the silent breaking of his hardened exterior.
3. Moiz watched Hassan, his eyebrows knitted in confusion and concern, a subtle shift from his usual indifferent expression.
4. Hassan's hand, once used for intimidation, now trembled gently as he carefully turned the pages of Usman's notebook, showing a newfound reverence for the words.
5. As realization dawned, Hassan’s posture subtly changed; his shoulders, once stiff with defiance, now slumped slightly, bearing the weight of his remorse.
“特写镜头”在读后续写中的应用（2）
原材料：
开端
故学校的社区服务日，Maya和她的班级计划为一所养老院的老人们制作贺卡。这也是Maya第一次在学校穿戴腿部支架，这个支架旨在帮助她走路更稳定。为了让支架看起来更可爱，Maya精心地装饰了它，添加了漂亮的蝴蝶图案。尽管如此，她仍对同学们的反应感到不安。整个上午，同学们都在偷看她的腿支架，但没有人说什么。
矛盾出现
在教室里，当Maya正在画小绿芽和漂亮的花朵时，她的朋友Samir走过来坐在她旁边。Maya感觉到Samir的目光紧盯着她的腿支架，并听到他问：“那是用来做什么的？”不知道如何回答，Maya装作没听见。几秒钟的尴尬后，她回头看着他，发现他看起来有些难
In a sudden wave of bravery, Maya asked, “What’s it like being in a wheelchair ”
Deeply impressed by Joan, Maya offered to sit beside Samir on the bus ride back home.
特写镜头：
1.Maya's fingers hesitated over her drawing, her eyes briefly flitting to Samir's inquiring gaze, reflecting her internal conflict between wanting to explain and wishing to avoid the topic.
2.The delicate green buds Maya was drawing trembled slightly under her unsteady hand, mirroring her own sense of vulnerability as she felt Samir's attention on her leg brace.
3.A flicker of sadness crossed Samir's face, his eyes softening with empathy as he noticed Maya's discomfort, revealing his concern for his friend.
4.Maya's eyes lingered on the butterfly patterns on her brace, a small smile tugging at her lips, a momentary escape into the pride of her artistic creation despite her apprehension.
5.When turning back to face Samir, Maya's expression was a complex tapestry of fear, courage, and the tentative trust in a friend's understanding, all conveyed in the brief meeting of their eyes.

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