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读后续写
(谋篇布局|抓原文这3处)
原文:全部人/物+修饰词+描写占比
[读原文: 5WP1P2+角色特点+描写占比]
第一件事:串联首尾段5W1H+P1P2给定句，定事件走向
(1)读首段得知:人物+大致事件
(2)读尾段得知:具体事件+态度(列出所有角色)
(3)读P1P2给定句得知:故事结局走向
2.第二件事:划出关键词(角色特点、关键情节)
划出角色相关描写(adj/v/n):用来续写角色，改写关键词
划出矛盾/需求，关键情节:用来续写情节，甚至是“升华
3.观察各类描写占比，续写比例与其一致
(1)看各类描写:续写时尽量占比一致
(2)语法句式:尽量保持一致，也可模仿好句
占比多的描写:关键所在，决定情节走向
[读后续写:谋篇布局| 如何不离题]
续写主要考查内容、语言表达和篇章结构三方面:
内容:丰富、合理、有逻辑,完整,与原文情境融洽度高。
(读懂,贴原文写)
语言:词汇和语法结构多样、恰当，错误很少，不影响理解。
(原文基调，词汇句式风格,描写占比，续写一致)
结构:段落间、句间衔接有效，连贯。
(连接词/句首句中隔断词)
[读后续写:谋篇布局|如何不离题]
划重点三方面(内容、语言、结构):
1、与原文融洽度高:读懂;贴原文写
词汇语法多样:跟原文风格，描写占比，一致
3、连贯:连接词
续写融洽度
[2021全国1卷] (原文早餐分为French toast吐司和porridge粥)
原文:“They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge.”
习作: "breakfast" “porridge"“pizza”(与原文融洽度太差 不太贴合)
范文: As the tuins looked around them in disappointment, their. father appeared ... and Father had made some egg sandwiches and cooked some oat porridge. Then he sneaked back to bed. Meanwhile, the twins prepared the breakfast tray, added a card they had made and walked out of the kitchen.（与原文融洽度 贴合）
[读后续写:抓主旨|如何不离题]
读原文: 5WP1P2+角色特点+分析描写占比
读原文时，做3件事:
首尾段5W1H+P1P2给定句，定故事走向;
首段得知:人物+大致事件
尾段(重要)得知:具体事件+态度
P1P2首句(重要)得知:故事结局走向
串联: who/when/where/why/what/how;
最重要:列出所有角色，可续写不同角色的反应、互动
首尾段5W1H+P1P2给定句]用来:
●“who”:同一时间，各个角色的反应、互动
●“what":延续事件、动作链
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. They hugged her and yelled‘Happy Mother's Day, darling Mummy!' Mother hugged the twins. Her eyes widened at the sight of the breakfast tray. She shook Father who was pretending to snore. He feigned astonishment when he saw the breakfast. Mother bit into a
sandwich and said it was the best she had ever tasted. Jeff immediately wanted to have a bite. Jenna caught her father's eye and they winked at each other secretly. (“twins ”双胞胎分开，各自的反应)
划关键词:角色特点(adj/v/n)+关键情节;
词:画出角色相关的描写，突出特点，性格决定命运/情节
用来:续写描写角色，或用其替换词; (融洽,不离题)
(2) 句子:矛盾/问题/需求，决定故事走向的关键情节
用来:加入情节设计，解决问题/需求(甚至用于“升华”)
[ 2021全国1卷: clean the kitchen, cook breakfast ]
[金太阳联考ugly man:“funny"“terrible"“relieved"“truth"-> HE]
A MOTHER’S DAY SURORISE (黄色用来写细节 蓝色用来写心理/修饰动作)
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother's Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her
breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do. The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds.
Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff's hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
[画关键词:角色特点(adj/v/n)+关键情节]用来:
原文: But the stove was a mess now. clean it up (直接加入情节)
cook the rest of the porridge; bread turned black ; toast; porridge(用同义替换)
excitement; pleased and proud Mother; panicked; calm (延续情绪基调)
范文 As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. One look and he knew what they were up to. Seeing their crestfallen faces, he told them to clean up the kitchen while he helped them make breakfast for Mother. The twins cheered up and did as told. Within an hour, the kitchen was cleaned, and Father had made some egg sandwiches and cooked some oat porridge. Then he sneaked back to bed. Meanwhile, the twins prepared the breakfast tray, added a card they had made and walked out of 'the kitchen.
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother ир. They hugged her and yelled Happy Mother's Day, darling Mummy!' Mother hugged the twins. Her eyes widened at the sight of the breakfast tray. She shook Father who was pretending to snore. He feigned astonishment when he saw the breakfast. Mother bit into a sandwich and said it was the best she had ever tasted. Jeff immediately wanted to have a bite. Jenna caught her father's eye and they winked at each other secretly.
举例
Sam is a brave policeman who often comes across dangerous situations. However,when he was young,he experienced a funny story during his work. That was a nice day,and Sam worked at the police station as usual. A rich and beautiful woman carying a purse drove to work. She parked her car in the street outside her office. When she finished her work that afternoon, she got into her car quickly and started driving home as usual. Suddenly, she noticed a
yellow car at her back, whose driver was a man with a very ugly look. To her surprise,when she turned left, the yellow car also turned left. When she turned right,the yellow car turned right,too. When she stopped at the traffic lights,the yellow car stopped behind her.
举例
Gradually, fear came into her heart.What should she do How could she gei rid of this terrible man To deal with this situation,she decided to drive quickly to the police station where Sam worked.However,she was even more surprised when she saw the car still followed her and stopped behind her. How dare he follow me here She said to herself.She could feel her heart beating faster than ever.At that
time,Sam was standing on duty outside the police station.Seeing Sam wearing a police uniform,she was more than delighted that she would be safe.
At once,she jumped out of her car and ran to Sam without any delay. Pointing at the man inside the car,she said a bad man was following her and asked Sam to arrest him.To find what was happening,Sam walked towards the man who had stopped his car near the woman's.
But what shocked Sam was that the man didn't try to escape when he saw him.Instead,the man looked relieved. Seconds later, the man walked towards the woman and Sam.
归纳升华：don’t judge a book by its cover
P1: The man just smiled and started to tell the truth.
P2: Then, Sam was lost in thought and began to talk with the woman.
观察各类描写占比，续写比例与其一致
(1)各类描写:续写与原文占比一致
(2)语法句式:保持一致，也可模仿好句
(3)占比多的描写:关键所在，决定情节设计
举例
Mama and I spend mornings cleaning up the dirt that blows into cur house. Mama says all the dust is due to the drought. The dirt sifts into (渗进) everything. It covers our clothes. We have to wash the dishes before each meal. We rarely drive the truck because Papa fears the dust from the road will ruin the motor. 观察各类描写占比:续写尽量保持一致
When my sister, Faye, and I walk to school, we wear kerchiefs (7TJ)over our mouths so we don't breathe in the dirt. On days when the air is so bad that they close the school, we stay home and help Mama put wet sheets over the windows. But the dirt always finds a way in.各类描写:环境/动作心理
Last Sunday, there was no dirt in the air, only bright spring sunshine and a clear blue sky. After lunch, Papa headed out to the field to check on the cattle(#) while I played with Faye in the yard. The temperature suddenly dropped. I looked to the west and saw a huge black cloud of sand. All the birds flew away.
沙尘暴来临，爸爸在外。
P1:I must warn Papa, I thought to myself.
Р2: Suddenly, Papa's face appeared at the window.
范文
I must warn Рара," I thought to myself. I headed off to the field, but the storm hit so fast, and in an instant the day turned into night. By the time I entered the cow field, the fine sand was whipping across my face. I screamed for Papa, hoping my voice would lead him back. The dirt and sand stung (刺痛) my skin like a thousand bees. Although I was terrified, I refused to turn back. My dad was trapped and needed my help. Covering my face with one hand, I groped (摸索) my way toward the truck and opened the door. I tried turning the truck's lights on and off, hoping that Papa would see them flashing.
环境/动作/心理:交错
Suddenly, Papa's face appeared at the window. My heart leaped with surprise and relief. Hе opened the door and climbed onto the seat next to me. He then pulled me into his arms and said, Oh, Iris, you saved me!" Finally, the wind subsided (4 ) and the dust began to settle. Dirt was piled up to the window on one side of the truck and halfway up the door on the other. Papa kicked against the door, opening it far enough to let us out. Sand and soil drifts were everywhere, but we were safe.
环境/动作/心理:交错
举例
Sam is a brave policeman who often comes across dangerous situations.However,when he was young, he experienced a funny story during his work.
That was a nice day ,and Sam worked at the police station as usual. A rich and beautiful woman carying a purse drove to work. She parked her car in the street outside her office. When she finished her work that afternoon, she got into her car quickly and started driving home as usual. Suddenly, she noticed a yellow car at her back, whose driver was a man with а very ugly look. To her surprise,when she turned left, the yellow car also turned left. When she turned right,the yellow car turned right,too. When she stopped at the traffic lights,the yellow car stopped behind her.
观察高频语法句式:续写尽量保持一致
Gradually, fear came into her heart.What should she do How could she get rid of this terrible man To deal with this situation,she decided to drive quickly to the police station where Sam worked. However, she was even more surprised when she saw the car still followed her and stopped behind her. "How dare he follow me here "she said to herself.She could feel her heart beating faster than ever. At that time,Sam was standing on duty outside the police station. Seeing Sam wearing a police uniform, she was more than delighted that she would be safe.
At once,she jumped out of her car and ran to Sam without any delay. Pointing at the man inside the car,she said a bad man was following her and asked Sam to arrest him. To find what was happening, Sam walked towards the man who had stopped his car near the woman's.观察高频语法句式:续写尽量保持- -致
But what shocked Sam was that the man didn't try to escape when he saw him.Instead, ,the man looked relieved. Seconds later, the man walked towards the woman and Sam.
从句、非谓语: 原文高频语法句式:续写尽量保持一致
..who often comes across dangerou....who had stopped his car near...
..whose driver was a man with a very ugly look / ..where Sam worked...
To deal with this situation,.. / To find what was happening...
Seeing Sam wearing a police uniform... / Pointing at the man inside the car...
when引导的时间状语从句:
when he was young.../ When she finished her work that afternoon,
..when.. she turned lft, /. When she turned rg...吕吕
When she stopped at the traffic lights... /
..when she saw the car still... / ..when he saw him
情绪名词，做主语: ..fear came into her heart
内心活动，反问: What should she do / How could she...
“How dare he follow me here "she said to herself.
副词/介词短语，做句首: Suddenly../ To her surprie../Instead.../ Seconds later
从句、非谓语: ..who often comes across.; when引导的从句: when he was young...
情绪名词,做主语: ..far came into her heart /内心活动: What should she do
副词/介词短语做,句首: Suddenly../ To her surprise...
原文高频语法句式: 续写尽量保持一致
The man just smiled and started to tell the truth. Actually, he intended to return her purse. Surprisingly, the story went in this way. When the man parked his car, he was attracted by a snap of a purse falling to ground from a lady's bag, whose owner failed to notice it at all. Before he could managed to remind her, she pulled her car away straightforward. Without delay, he began to chase her. Fortunately, she stopped somehow at last. After recalling what had happened indeed, he asked Sam to check the money in the purse which, as expected, was exactly the right amount! Then, Sam was lost in thought and began to talk with the woman. Madam, it is incorrect to judge one by the appearance" he said seriously. Shame flushed her face. How could she misunderstand а man with а heart of gold Sincerely, she apologized to the man and asked whether she could offer him a reward for his kindness. No, ma'am," he smiled, my grandma says а good deed is its own reward." Interestingly, the man's reply still lingered in Sam's mind even now.
举例
John Blanchard stood up, straightened his army uniform(#$JE), and studied the crowd making their way through the station. He looked for the girl whose heart he knew, but whose face he had never seen, the girl with a rose.
His interest in her began thirteen months ago in a library. Taking a book off the shelf, he found himself fascinated, not with the words of the book, but with the notes penciled in the margin . The soft handwriting showed a thoughtful soul and brilliant mind. In the front of the book, he discovered the owner's name, Miss Hollis Maynell. With time and effort he found her address. She lived in New York City. He wrote her a letter introducing himself and inviting her to correspond . The next day he was shipped overseas for military service.
During the next year and one month, the two begun to know each other by mail. Each letter was a seed falling on both hearts. A romance was budding. Blanchard asked for a photograph, but she refused. She felt that if he really cared, it wouldn't matter what she looked like.
When the day finally came for him to return from Europe, they scheduled their first meeting 7 pm at the Grand Central Station in New York. You'll recognize me, " she wrote. By the red rose I'll wear my dress." So at 7:00 he was in the station looking for a girl whose heart he loved, but whose face he'd never seen.
A young lady was coming toward him. Her figure was long and slim; her blonde hair lay back from her ears; her eyes were blue as flowers; her lips and chin had a gentle firmness, and in her pale green suit she was like springtime coming alive. He went toward her, entirely forgetting to notice that she was not wearing a rose. As he moved, a middle-aged woman whispered, Going my way, Sir "
John Blanchard stood up, straightened his army uniform(制服), and studied thell crowd making their way through the station. He looked for the girl whose heart he knew, but whose face he had never seen, the girl with a rose.
His interest in her began thirteen months ago in a library. Taking a book off the shelf, he found himself fascinated, not with the words of the book, but with the notes penciled in the margin (页边的空白). The soft handwriting showed a thoughtful soul and brilliant mind. In the front of the book, he discovered the owner's name, Miss Hollis Maynell. With time and effort he found her address. She lived in New York City. He wrote her a letter introducing himself and inviting her to correspond (通信). The next day he was shipped overseas for military service.
During the next year and one month, the two begun to know each other by mail. . Each letter was a seed falling on both hearts. A romance was budding. Blanchard asked for a photograph, but she refused. She felt that if he really cared, it wouldn't matter what she looked like.
两人通过书信邮件交流，互生情愫，约定见面。情感基于灵魂契合。
女士拒绝给男土照片，认为如果他真的在乎/爱，应和外貌无关。(女士长相可能如何 )
When the day finally came for him to return from Europe, they scheduled their first meeting - 7 pm at the Grand Central Station in New York. You'll recognize me," she wrote. By the red rose I'll wear my dress." So at 7:00 he was in the station looking for a girl whose heart he loved, but whose face he'd never seen. (这段描写在强调什么？)[占比多的描写:决定主旨关键、情节走向 A young lady was coming toward him. Her figure was long and slim; her blonde hair lay back from her ears; her eyes were blue as flowers; her lips and chin had a gentle firmness, and in her pale green suit she was like springtime coming alive. Hе went toward her, entirely forgetting to notice that she was not wearing a rose. As he moved, a middle-aged woman whispered, Going my way, Sir "
约定见面，女士着装会戴红玫瑰;
见面当天，出现年轻女士&中年女士
（为何大篇幅描写young lady？中年女性的身份是 ）
P1: Almost uncontrollably he made his way to the woman,
P2: The woman's face broadened into a big smile.
熟识心灵结合原文描写占比，分析情节设计
whose heart he knew
a thoughtful soul and brilliant mind
深思熟虑的灵魂和聪明的头脑
Blanchard asked for a photograph, but she refused. ..wouldn't matter what she looked like.
要求寄照片，她拒绝。她认为长相不重要。
“By the red rose I'll wear my dress.”(爽快答应约见，并强调戴玫瑰)
A young lady (大段描写)
a middle aged woman(一小句话)
总结
[读原文: 5WP1P2+角色特点+描写占比]]
第一件事:串联首尾段5W1H+P1P2给定句,定事件走向
(1)读首段得知:人物+大致事件
(2)读尾段得知:具体事件+态度(列出所有角色)
(3)读P1P2给定句得知:故事结局走向
2.第二件事:划出关键词(角色特点、关键情节)
(1)划出角色相关描写(adj/v/n):用来续写角色，改写关键词(2)划出矛盾/需求，关键情节:用来续写情节，甚至是“升华3、观察各类描写占比，续写比例与其一-致
(1)看各类描写:续写时尽量占比一致
(2)语法句式:尽量保持一致,也可模仿好句
占比多的描写:关键所在，决定情节走向
用表格规划思路
构思前：读原文3件事（5WP1P2+角色+描写）
Who 关键词 动作：v 情绪/心理：adj 特点：n./短语
角色1
角色2
角色3
What 关键句
P1P2关键句
3W1H
平常写作训练时，可以以此表格梳理思路
在考场上可以直接在原文标记一、写大纲只需10句
固定: P1P2首句+P1尾句+P2尾两句
写大纲:十句五定法(5句有固定依据)
P1: As the tuins looked around them in disappointment, their, father appeared. P2: The tuins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.
①接着P1 (心理/动作链) ⑥接着P2 (心理/动作链)
② ⑦
③ ⑧
④ ⑨结局(紧贴首段/需求解决)
⑤根据P2 升华(归类+ 总结共性)
举例
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother's Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her
breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do. The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds.
Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff's hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
第一步
P1: As the tuins looked around them in disappointment, their, father appeared. P2: The tuins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.
①接着P1 (心理/动作链) Twins：害怕被责备+欣喜有救星 father：理解 ⑥接着P2 (心理/动作链) Twins:期待+忐忑；mother：惊喜+欣慰
② ⑦
③ ⑧
④ ⑨结局(紧贴首段/需求解决) 问题解决（符合价值观结局）
⑤根据P2 Cooked thebreakfast 升华(归类+ 总结共性) 价值观/感叹
第二步
P1: As the tuins looked around them in disappointment, their, father appeared. P2: The tuins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.
①接着P1 (心理/动作链) Twins：害怕被责备+欣喜有救星 father：理解 ⑥接着P2 (心理/动作链) Twins:期待+忐忑；mother：惊喜+欣慰
②另外5句 2个关键情节：P1爸爸帮忙做早餐+P2 妈妈开心 3个细节描写：动作、语言 环境 ⑦
③ ⑧
④ ⑨结局(紧贴首段/需求解决) 问题解决（符合价值观结局）
⑤根据P2 Cooked thebreakfast 升华(归类+ 总结共性) 价值观/感叹
第三步
P1: As the tuins looked around them in disappointment, their, father appeared. P2: The tuins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.
①接着P1 (心理/动作链) Twins：害怕被责备+欣喜有救星 father：理解 ⑥接着P2 (心理/动作链) Twins:期待+忐忑；mother：惊喜+欣慰
②语言 对话 ⑦关键情节 同时空 各个角色在做什么 由角色特点决定
③动作/环境 Clean the kitchen 原文复现 延伸 ⑧动作/语言/环境 对话
④关键环节 由角色特点决定 Father cooked breakfast；twins clean kitchen ⑨结局(紧贴首段/需求解决) 问题解决（符合价值观结局） 妈妈惊喜 呼应原文 复合价值观结局
⑤根据P2 Cooked thebreakfast 升华(归类+ 总结共性) 价值观/感叹
二 情节设计
情节设计|只需4步
“NSDD”: N需求+D困难+S方法+D结局
续写情节设计
1、“评卷员说”:情节设计原则
“需求法”(NSDD) &历年真题实战
情节设计素材:原文这三处
[读后续写:情节设计|“需求法”NSDD]
1、“评卷员说”:情节设计原则
优先等级:简单.稳妥>紧凑>丰富>故事性
2、情节构思“需求法”( NSDD )
(1) N需求+D困难+S方法+D结局
(2)历年真题，情节设计分析
3.情节线索:看原文这3处
串联大意5W1H+P1P2首句,定事件走向
(2)划关键词(角色特点、关键情节)
各类描写占比，续写比例与其一致
听评卷员说”:
●“语法、时态、拼写、标点、大小写、叙述连贯性等方面的错误率都与学生读后续写的成绩存在不同程度的正相关性。”
“普遍存在情节不严密，词汇较低级，句式变化少等情况”
“...续写内容才能与原文融洽，连贯...”
“最后附上阅卷实际操作评分标准，主要依据为是否有正确的句子，原则上就高不就低。
20分:内容顺，细节比较多，允许些许错误。
18分:内容顺，细节少些，语言有些错误。
15分:内容可读，语言错误多。
10分:内容基本完整,基本没什么完整的句子。”的要求
续写情节设计，优先顺序:
“严密、融洽、连贯”
简单.稳妥>紧凑>丰富>故事性
总结:情节设计的任务为“简单稳妥”。
◆其他维度可通过词汇、句式、连接词、各类描写来实现:
●紧凑性:情节推进+连接成分(逻辑连词+副词+介词短语)
●丰富性:各类描写、词汇、句式
●故事性:多读英语小故事，了解文化，熟悉常见情节
续写情节设计，优先顺序:
如何做到简单 稳妥？
那就要“严密、融洽、连贯” 从而贴紧原文，找线索
[读原文: 5WP1P2+角色特点+描写占比]
第一件事:串联首尾段5W1H+P1P2给定句,定事件走向
(1)读首段得知:人物+大致事件
(2)读尾段得知:具体事件+态度
(3)读P1P2给定句得知:故事结局走向
2.第二件事:划出关键词(角色特点、关键情节)
划出角色相关描写(adj/v/n):用来续写角色，改写关键词
划出矛盾/需求、关键情节:用来续写情节，甚至是“升华
3、观察各类描写占比，续写比例与其一-致
(1)看各类描写:续写时尽量占比一致
(2)语法句式:尽量保持一致，也可模仿好句
用表格规划思路
构思前：读原文3件事（5WP1P2+角色+描写）
Who 关键词 动作：v 情绪/心理：adj 特点：n./短语
角色1
角色2
角色3
What 关键句
P1P2关键句
3W1H
平常写作训练时，可以以此表格梳理思路
在考场上可以直接在原文标记
短故事 情节设计法
( 短故事情节: short story plots]
Main character Character 2 Setting Situation Theme Character action
Exposition Conflict Risings acion Climax Falling action Resolution
Story Elements
Story elements are the pieces, or ingredients, that when put together, make up a narrative story. ldentifying and remembering story elements will help you understand a story better.
Story Elements Include:
Characters people/animals in the story
Setting when/where the story takes place
problem the conflict, or main problem, that the characters have
Solution how the problem is solved
读后续写:情节设计|“需求法”NSDD简化表格进行情节设计
Needs 需求 重点看：首尾段+P1P2给定句 也可理解为：写作者要写到的内容
Difficulty 困难、障碍 设置困难 原文中找冲突、障碍（5W1H+角色特点）
Solution 行动、方法 大转机：通常在P1/P2首句 原文：所有角色/事物
Denouement 结局(需求解决) 需求被解决（复合价值观结局） 升华感悟
平常写作训练时，可以以此表格设计情节
在考场上可以直接在原文标记
历年考题情节分析：需求 结局 困难 方法：借助他人或他物
年份 主题 需求 Needs 结局 Denouement 困难 Difficulties 方法和媒介Solutions
2021.6 全国1卷 母亲节惊喜 做早餐 做好了早餐 不会做，厨房乱 爸爸帮忙
2021.6 浙江卷 暑期打工 处理挣到的钱 处理了钱:将挣到的钱给了父亲 作者不情愿贡献辛苦挣到的钱 父亲的辛劳和担心，触动了我
2021.1 浙江卷 卡南瓜视频 在网络走红 得救，视频在网络传播开来 视频在网络传播开来 获得关注 被南瓜卡住无法自救 爸爸妈妈帮忙，视频传上网络
2020.7 浙江卷 拍摄北极熊, 对峙，遇险 脱险 脱险 救援直升机30分钟才到 用辣椒喷雾击退熊;救援赶到
2020.7 山东卷 救助穷人 助人 助人 没钱 卖爆米花赚钱，路人购买
2020.1 浙江卷 浙江卷 让小狗开心 小狗开心，家庭团聚 小狗想念男孩，但他上大学未归 父母买新小狗,作伴，男孩回来
真题实战
One fall, my wife Elli and I had a single goal: to photograph polar bears. We were staying at а research camp outside the polar bear capital of the tear down the fence with his massive paws . world " - the town of Churchill in Manitoba, Canada.
Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous. Polar bears - like all wild animals -
should be photographed from а safe distance. When I'm face to face with a polar bear, I like it to be through a camera with a telephoto lens. But sometimes, that is easier said than done. This was one of those times. As Elli and I cooked dinner, a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake sniffed, and smelled our garlic bread. The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp,
which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He stood on his back legs and P1: Afew minutes later, the bear headed back to pushed at the wooden fence posts. Terrified, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew. We yelled at the bear, hit pots hard, and fired blank shotgun shells into the air.
Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off. Not this polar bear though - he just kept trying to research camp outside the polar bear capital of the tear down the fence with his massive paws .I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me a helicopter was on its way, but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived. Making the best of this close encounter , I took some pictures of the bear. Elli and I feared the fence wouldn't last through 30 more minutes of the bear s punishment. The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray. The spray burns the bears' eyes, but doesn't hurt them. So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and, through the fence, sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes.
[2020年7月浙江卷]
P1: A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp.
P2: At that very moment, the helicopter arrived.
原文找: 5W1H所有人物+特点+描写占比
One fall, my wife Elli and I had a single goal: to photograph polar bears. We were staying at a research camp outside“the polar bear capital of the world”- the town of Churchill in Manitoba, Canada.Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous. Polar bears- like all wild animals- should be photographed from a safe distance.
When I'm face to facewith apolar bear, I like it to be through a camera with a telephoto lens. But sometimes, that is easier said than done. This was one of those times.
某个秋天，我和妻子EIli有个目标:拍摄北极熊。我们住在 “世界北极熊之都”--加拿大马
尼托巴省丘吉尔镇外的一个调 研营地。给北极熊拍照很神奇，但也很危险。北极熊和所有野生 动物一样-应该在安全距离内拍照。当我与北极熊面对面时，我喜欢用带有长焦镜头的相机。但有时，说起来容易做起来难。这是其中之一。
As Elli and I cooked dinner, a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby la ke sniffed, and smelled our garlic bread. 5W1H所有人/物+特点+描写占比
The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp, which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts.
Terrified, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew. We yelled at the bear', hit pots hard, and fired blank shotgun shells into the air. Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears
off. Not this polar bear though—he just kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws.
当Elli和我做晚饭时，一只年轻的雄性北极熊在附近湖里玩耍,它嗅. 和闻到了我们大蒜面包的味道。.饥饿的熊顺着鼻子来到我们的 营地，营地被高高的铁丝网包围。他拉扯并咬住了电线，用后腿站立， 推木栅栏柱子。Elli和我吓坏了，试了所知的 所有防熊行动。我们对着喊 大叫，用力击打罐子，并向空中发 射空弹。有时这种响亮的声音会 吓跑熊。然而对这只北极熊无.效--他只是不停地用大爪子试图推倒栅栏。
I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me a helicopter was on its way, but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived. Making the best of this close encounter, I took some pictures of the bear. Elli and I feared the fence wouldn't last through 30 minutes of the bear's punishment. The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray. The spray burns the bears' eyes, but doesn't hurt them. So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and, through the fence, sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar (吼叫), the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes.
我用无线电向营地经理寻求 帮助。他告诉我一架直升飞机， 在路上了，但30分钟后才能到。充分利用这次近距离接触，我拍了一些熊的照片。EIli和我担心围栏在熊的暴行下，无法扛多30分钟。营地经理建议我用胡椒喷雾。喷雾会灼伤熊的眼睛，但不会伤害它们。于是我慢慢走近这不速之 through the fence, sprayed himinthe客, 穿过栅栏，朝他脸上喷过去。熊怒吼一声，跑到湖边洗眼睛。
NSDD分析
N需求：首位1-2段+P1P2给定句
脱险：对抗怒熊30分钟
我们：拍照
熊：吃食物
D困难：5W1H+角色特点
怒熊：凶悍 难缠
武器：只能用普通物品
S法方：
等直升机
Elli采取行动
喷雾+面包
D结局：需求解决+呼应原文
脱险：直升机来营救
我们完成拍照
熊冲破栅栏获得美食
[填入原文线索,情节仅需补2-3句]
N需求:脱险,对抗熊30分钟;惊险时刻(线索在:首尾段+P1/P2给定句)
D困难:熊凶猛;武器只能用普通物品(线索在: 5w1H+角色特点)
S方法:等直升机; Elli行动;喷雾+面包(线索在: P1/P2给定句+角色事物)
D结局:登机脱险-熊破栅栏吃食物-我拍照(线索在:需求解决+呼应原文)
P1: Aferu minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. P2: At that very moment, the helicopterarrived.
①意识到喷雾无用，熊更凶狠 ②我害怕，不知咋办 ③Elli行动,扔面包 ④行动有用，熊跑去吃面包 ⑤熊吃完又折回，惊险时刻 ⑥我们开心，得救(心理+语言) ⑦登直升机脱险(动作+心理) ⑧俯瞰营地，发现惊人一幕 ⑨熊终于冲破栅栏吃食物 ⑩我拍照，心想:“熊得逞了!
N需求:脱险,对抗熊30分钟;惊险时刻(线索在:首尾段+P1/P2给定句)
D困难:熊凶猛;武器只能用普通物品(线索在: 5w1H+角色特点)
S方法:等直升机; Elli行动;喷雾+面包(线索在: P1/P2给定句+角色事物)
D结局:登机脱险-熊破栅栏吃食物-我拍照(线索在:需求解决+呼应原文)
P1: Afew minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. Then we realized that the spray had only angered him even more, for he seemed much fiercer this time and violently pushed the fence like mad. My heart raced wildly, not knowing what to do. At this critical moment, Elli grabbed several pieces of garlic bread and threw them over the fence. It worked! The bear stopped the attack and ran to the bread. But it wasn't long before he ate up all the bread and came back again.
P2: At that very moment, the helicopter arrived.“Thank goodness we are saved!" Elli cried out. Once the helicopter landed, we got onto it in no time, excited and relieved. When we were safe on the helicopter up in the air, I was amazed to spot that the bear had finally torn down the fence and ran towards the food we left behind. I quickly took out the camera and photographed the rare scene一we were robbed by a polar bear!
Para 1: A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp.
Then we realized that the spray had only angered him even more, for he seemed much fiercer this time and violently pushed the fence like mad. My heart raced wildly, not knowing what to do.- . When we were safe on the helicopter up At this critical moment, Elli grabbed several pieces of garlic bread and threw them over the fence. It worked! The bear stopped the attack and ran to the bread. But it wasn't long before he ate up all the bread and came back again.
Para 2: At that very momeni, the helicopter arrived.
Thank goodness we are saved! Elli cried out. Once the helicopter landed, we got onto it in no time, excited and relieved. My heart raced wildly, not knowing what to do.- . When we were safe on the helicopter up in the air, I was amazed to spot that the bear had finally torn down the fence and ran towards the food we left behind. I quickly took out the camera and photographed the rare scene - we were robbed by a polar bear!
大总结
[读后续写:情节设计|“需求法”NSDD]
1、“评卷员说”:情节设计原则
优先等级:简单.稳妥>紧凑>丰富>故事性
2、情节构思“需求法”( NSDD )
(1)N需求+D困难+S方法+D结局
(2)历年真题，情节设计分析
3.线索在原文，看这3处
串联大意5W1H+P1P2首句,定事件走向
(2)划关键词(角色特点、关键情节)
各类描写占比,续写比例与其一致情节设计|呼应原文合理编
●手把手教
●原文取词
●改写&衔接
Para 1: A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp.
Then we realized that the spray had only angered him even more, for he seemed much fiercer this time and violently pushed the fence like mad. My heart raced wildly, not knowing what to do.
At this critical moment, Elli grabbed several pieces of garlic bread and
threw them over the fence. It worked! The bear stopped the attack and ran to the bread.
But it wasn't long before he ate up all the bread and came back again.
Para 2: At that very moment, the helicopter arrived.
Thank goodness we are saved! Elli cried out.
Once the helicopter landed, we got onto it in no time, excited and relieved.
When we were safe on the helicopter up in the air, I was amazed to spot that the bear had finally torn down the fence and ran towards the food we left behind.
I quickly took out the camera and photographed the rare scene - we were robbed by a polar bear!
[2020年7月浙江卷]
续写使用的红色单词都是原文的单词
One fall, my wife Elli and I had a single goal: to photograph polar bears. We were staying at a research camp outside“the polar bear capital of the world”一the town of Churchill in Manitoba, Canada.
Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous. Polar bears - like all wild animals一should be photographed from a safe distance. When I'm face to face with a polar bear, I like it to be through a camera with a telephoto lens. But sometimes, that is easier said than done. This was one of those times.
As Elli and I cooked dinner, a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake sniffed, and smelled our garlic bread.
The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp, which was surrounded by a high wire fence. .....
[2020年7月浙江卷]
1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;
2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语;
现在无下划线词了 但方法可沿用 需自己找出关键词
合理编写
原文词汇：修饰—改写—推进
那么关键词在哪里 怎么找出来
读原文3件事：角色+特点+占比
构思前：读原文3件事（5WP1P2+角色+描写）
Who 关键词 动词动作（主要情节） 情绪/心理：adj
人物1 续写：延续这些动作；或再做一遍 续写：加在名词前或表达更加 much+adj.er
人物2
其他
What 关键句 需求 冲突 待做的事
P1P2关键句 The +名词 转机（定结尾） 需求
3W1H Where/when/why/how 各类描写占比
读后续写:情节设计|“需求法”NSDD简化表格进行情节设计—线索在哪里
Needs 需求 重点看：首尾段+P1P2给定句 也可理解为：写作者要写到的内容
Difficulty 困难、障碍 设置困难 原文中找冲突、障碍（5W1H+角色特点）
Solution 行动、方法 大转机：通常在P1/P2首句 原文：所有角色/事物
Denouement 结局(需求解决) 需求被解决（复合价值观结局） 升华感悟
平常写作训练时，可以以此表格设计情节
在考场上可以直接在原文标记
[填入原文线索,情节仅需补2-3句]
N需求: __________________________________________(线索在:首尾段+P1/P2给定句)
D困难:__________________________________________(线索在: 5w1H+角色特点)
S方法:___________________________________________(线索在: P1/P2给定句+角色事物)
D结局:___________________________________________(线索在:需求解决+呼应原文)
P1: Aferu minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. P2: At that very moment, the helicopterarrived.
① ② ③ ④ ⑤ ⑥ ⑦ ⑧ ⑨ ⑩
One fall, my wife Elli and I had a single goal: to photograph polar bears. We were staying at а research camp outside the polar bear capital of the tear down the fence with his massive paws . world " - the town of Churchill in Manitoba, Canada.
Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous. Polar bears - like all wild animals -
should be photographed from а safe distance. When I'm face to face with a polar bear, I like it to be through a camera with a telephoto lens. But sometimes, that is easier said than done. This was one of those times. As Elli and I cooked dinner, a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake sniffed, and smelled our garlic bread. The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp,
which was surrounded by a high wire fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He stood on his back legs and P1: Afew minutes later, the bear headed back to pushed at the wooden fence posts. Terrified, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew. We yelled at the bear, hit pots hard, and fired blank shotgun shells into the air.
Sometimes loud noises like these will scare bears off. Not this polar bear though - he just kept trying to research camp outside the polar bear capital of the tear down the fence with his massive paws .I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me a helicopter was on its way, but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived. Making the best of this close encounter , I took some pictures of the bear. Elli and I feared the fence wouldn't last through 30 more minutes of the bear s punishment. The camp manager suggested I use pepper spray. The spray burns the bears' eyes, but doesn't hurt them. So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and, through the fence, sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes.
[2020年7月浙江卷]
P1: A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp.
P2: At that very moment, the helicopter arrived.
N需求:脱险,对抗熊3o分钟;惊险时刻(线索在: 首尾段+P1/P2给定句)
D困难:熊凶猛;武器只能用普通物品(线索在: 5w1H+角色特点)
S方法:等直升机; Elli行动;喷雾+面包(线索在: P1/P2给定句+角色事物)
D结局:登机脱险-熊破栅栏吃食物-我拍照(线索在:需求解决+呼应原文)
P1: A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. Then we realized that the spray had only angered him even more, for he seemed much fiercer this time and violently pushed the fence like mad. My heart raced wildly, not knowing what to do. At this critical moment, Elli grabbed several pieces of garlic bread and threw them over the fence. It worked! The bear stopped the attack and ran to the bread. But it wasn't long before he ate up all the bread and came back again.
P2: At that very moment, the helicopter arrived.“Thank goodness we are saved!" Elli cried out. Once the helicopter landed, we got onto it in no time, excited and relieved. When we were safe on the helicopter up in the air, I was amazed to spot that the bear had finally torn down the fence and ran towards the food we left behind. I quickly took out the camera and photographed the rare scene一we were robbed by a polar bear!
Who 关键词 动词 形容词
I&Elli goal: to photograph; tried all actions; radioed for help; I took some pictures; single goal; safe distance; Terrified; feared
Polar bear pushed the fence; pulled and bit the wire; tear down the fence; ran to; headed back; young male; hungry; angry roar; fierce; wild animals; uninvited guest; kept trying
物体（做工具） dinner; garlic bread; fence; camera; loud noises; pepper spray; helicopter; food
What 关键句（3W1H） Taking pictures of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous; the fence wouldn't last through 30 more minutes of
P1P2关键词 that very moment
[填入原文线索,情节仅需补2-3句]
N需求:脱险,对抗熊30分钟;惊险时刻(线索在:首尾段+P1/P2给定句)
D困难:熊凶猛;武器只能用普通物品(线索在: 5w1H+角色特点)
S方法:等直升机; Elli行动;喷雾+面包(线索在: P1/P2给定句+角色事物)
D结局:登机脱险-熊破栅栏吃食物-我拍照(线索在:需求解决+呼应原文)
P1: A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp.
①心里/动作线：（顺着P1首句）我们更加害怕，熊看起来更凶狠 ②Elli行动+面包“扔面包 转移熊的注意力” ③（角色互动）熊跑去吃面包 但吃完又折回来 ④我紧急拿到辣椒喷雾尝试击退它 ⑤惊险时刻 unfortunately as expected，熊更愤怒了 直接扑过来
P2: At that very moment, the helicopterarrived.
⑥心理加动作线 我们开心，得救(心理+语言) ⑦登直升机脱险(动作+心理) ⑧俯瞰营地，发现惊人一幕 ⑨熊吃食物 ⑩我拍照，心想熊得偿所愿了
运用原文词汇：加修饰 改写 推进
Who 关键词 动词 形容词
I&Elli goal: to photograph; tried all actions; radioed for help; I took some pictures; single goal; safe distance; Terrified; feared
Polar bear pushed the fence; pulled and bit the wire; tear down the fence; ran to; headed back; young male; hungry; angry roar; fierce; wild animals; uninvited guest; kept trying
物体（做工具） dinner; garlic bread; fence; camera; loud noises; pepper spray; helicopter; food
P1: A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp. ①意识到喷雾无用，熊更凶狠 ②我害怕，不知道咋办 ③Elli 行动，扔面包 ④行动有用 熊跑去吃面包 ⑤不幸运的是 熊吃完又折回 ●Then we realized that the spray had only angered him even more, for he seemed much fiercer this time and violently pushed the fence like mad. ●My heart raced wildly, not knowing what to do. ●At this critical moment, Elli grabbed several pieces of garlic bread and threw them over the fence. Itworked! ●The bear stopped the attack and ran to the bread. ●But it wasn't long before he ate up all the bread and came back again.
●Then we realized that the spray had only angered him even more, for he seemed much fiercer this time and violently pushed the fence like mad. 原文adj/v.加修饰： 原文形容词>比较级 更加 原文动词>前加副词 加强程度
续写情节拓展5个技巧
1、重现改写原文关键(尤其续写第1句)
(句式: even more..; do sth again..)
2.评价(评价前动作/前情节)
(句式: ..which worked/which made sb.../which turned out)
3、后悔感叹(当初就../要是..就好了)
(句式:虚拟语气, should/shouldn't have done; if only)
4.动作链(单动作，拆成多动作)
(句式:动词排比/ Doing sth, sb do sth. / Having done sth, sb do sth.)
5.角色分工(同时空下，不同角色的行动)
(句式: While/When/A.... sb do sth. / Meanwhile, sb do sth.)
解析
1.重现、改写原文关键(尤其续写第1句)
原文尾段关键句+P1首句:组合改写,顺接着描述
常用词汇:
Sb/sth is even more+形容词/副词; (某人/某物 更加..）
Sb/sth do sth again/once more/repeatedly.. (某人再次做.)
◆真题运用1: [2020.07浙江卷]
尾段: ..The spray burns the bears' eyes, but doesn't hurt them. So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and, through the fence, sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar (吼叫), the bear ran to the lake to wash his eyes.
*尾段关键词: The spray burns the bears' eyes; an angry roar; fierce; push fence
(喷雾灼伤了熊的眼睛;愤怒的咆哮;凶猛; 推栅栏)
*Paragraph 1给定句: A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp.
(几分钟后，熊回到了我们的营地)
续写范文: Then we realized that the spray had only angered him even more, for he seemed much fiercer this time and violently pushed the fence like mad.
(红字:原文词/改写;绿字:改写润色)然后我们意识到,喷雾只会让他更加愤怒，
因为这次他似乎更猛烈了,像疯了一样猛烈地推着栅栏。
真题运用2: [2021年全国1卷]
尾段: .Jena told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeffs hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain...
*尾段关键词: to clean the kitchen up so they could continue to cook...-
(清理厨房,这样他们就可以继续做饭了..
*P1给定: As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.
(当双胞胎失望地环顾四周时，他们的父亲出现了)
续写范文: He told them, to clean up the kitchen while he helped them make breakfast for Mother.
(红字:原文词/改写;绿字:改写润色)他告诉她们清理厨房,同时他帮他们为母亲做早餐。
2.评价:前动作/前情节
万用句式: Sb did sth, which turned out to be... (某人做某事, 这是..的)
常用词汇:
... which worked; (这发挥作用 了)
... which made sb... (这使得某人...)
... which turned out to be quite helpful/fruitful/productive.
(事实证明，这是非常有帮助/富有成效/富有成效的)
◆真题运用1: [2020.07浙江卷]
P1段续写情节: Elli扔面包引诱熊去吃。熊跑去吃面包。
扩写加评价: Elli扔面包引诱熊去吃，这个行动有用。熊跑去吃面包。
Elli grabbed several pieces of garlic bread and threw them over the fence, which worked. The bear stopped the attack and ran to the bread. .
◆真题运用2: [2020.07浙江卷]
P1段续写情节: (对着熊喷喷雾，熊返回来)熊更凶狠了。
扩写加评价: (对着熊喷喷雾,熊返回来)喷雾对熊无用，只会让他更凶狠。
基础: The bear looked angrier.
改成: Then we realized that the spray had only angered him even more...
◆真题运用3: [2020.07浙江卷]
P1段续写情节: (熊跑去吃面包)熊吃完又折回。
扩写加评价: (熊跑去吃面包)不幸运的是/让他们失望的是，熊吃完又折回。
Unfortunately / To their great disappointment, the bear ate up all the bread and came back again.
◆真题运用4: [2021年全国1卷]
P1段续写情节: (爸爸出现了)双胞胎按照爸爸说的做。
扩写加评价: (爸爸出现了)双胞胎按照爸爸说的做,爸爸总是她们的大救星。
基础: The twins did what was instructed by father.
改成: The twins did what was instructed by father, who was the most trustworthy person always coming to their rescue.
3.后悔感叹
(当初就.. /要是..就好了)
(句式:虚拟语气，should/shouldn't have done; if only)
●常用句式1: “should have done当初就..”
当初就应该做某事:Sbshouldhavedonesth.(实际没做)
当初就不应该做某事:Sbshouldn'thavedonesth,E(实际做了)
●常用句式2: “If only要是... ,就好了”
要是某人有做过某事就好了: If only sb had done sth. (对过去的假设)
要是某人会去做某事就好了:Ifonlysbwoulddosth.(对将来的期望)
◆真题运用1: [2021年全国1卷]
* P1段续写情节:爸爸做好了早餐。
*扩写构思:看着爸爸煮好的完美早餐,她们懊悔地想，早前应该先跟爸爸请教
怎么做早餐的!
Looking at the perfect breakfast cooked by their father, they remorsefully thought, they should have asked him how to make breakfast previously!
或: Looking at the perfect breakfast cooked by their father, they remorsefully thought, if only they had asked him how to make breakfast previously!
◆真题运用2: [2021年全国1卷]
* P1段续写情节:妈妈享用了早餐。
*扩写构思:妈妈开心地说，要是每天都可以吃到这么美味的早餐就好了!
Mom said delightedly, if only she could have such a delicious breakfast every day!
◆真题运用3: [2020.07浙江卷]
* P1段续写情节:熊去湖里洗眼晴,返回来。
*扩写构思:我懊悔地想，不应该惹怒它的,真是个糟糕的尝试。(+评价)
Remorsefully I thought to myself, we shouldn't have angered it. What a terrible try!
◆真题运用4: [2020.07浙江卷]
* P1段续写情节:扔面包分散熊的注意力，行动有用。
*扩写构思:应该多准备一些面包的。
We should have prepared more bread. / If only we had prepared more bread.
小总结
后悔感叹(虚拟语气)
●常用句式1:“should have done当初就..”
当初就应该做某事: Sb should have done sth. (实 际没做)
当初就不应该做某事:Sbshouldn'thavedonesth,5(实际做了)
●常用句式2: “If only要是... ,就好了”
要是某人有做过某事就好了: If only sb had done sth. (对过去的假设)
要是某人会去做某事就好了:Ifonlysbwoulddosth.(对将来的期望)
4、动作链
(单动作，拆成多动作)
(句式:动词排比/Doingsth,sbdosth. / Having done sth, sb do sth.)
动作链(拆分动作,一分为二/一分为三)
●常用 句式: sb do sth1, do sth2 and do sth3.
(非谓语) Doing sth, sb do sth. / Having done sth, sb do sth.
◆真题运用1: [2020.07浙江卷]
* P2段续写情节:我们登上直升机，往下看发现熊吃了我们的食物。
*扩写构思:熊终于冲破栅栏,吃到食物。
(原文前面，有栅栏阻碍,所以它要先冲破栅栏，再冲向食物,吃到食物)
The bear had finally torn down the fence and ran towards the food we left behind.
或: Finally, having torn down the fence, the bear ran towards the food we left behind.
(最后，在拆毁了栅栏后，熊跑向我们留下的食物)
◆真题运用2: [2020.07浙 江卷]
* P2段续写情节: Elli扔面包。
*扩写构思: EIli 抓起几块面包，瞄准远方，尽可能远地将它扔出栅栏。
EIli grabbed several pieces of garlic bread, aimed far away and threw them over the fence as far as possible.
◆真题运用3: [2020.07浙江卷]
* P2段续写情节:熊跑去吃面包。
*扩写构思:熊停止了攻击,转头，向面包跑过去。
The bear stopped the attack, turned quickly and ran to the bread.
5.角色分工
(同时空下，不同角色的行动)
(句式: While/When/A.... sb do sth. / Meanwhile...)
角色分工(同时空下，不同角色的行动)
常用句式: While/When/As sb1 do sth, sb2 dosth. (当..时,某人做某事)
Meanwhile, / In the meantime, sb do sth. (同时,某人做某事)
At that critical moment, sb do sth. (在 那关键时刻,某人做某事)
◆真题运用1: [2020.07浙江卷]5
* P2段续写情节:熊洗完眼睛回来,我们害怕。
*扩写构思:我感到我的心跳加速,不知道该怎么办。在这个关键时刻,
艾丽抓起几块大蒜面包，把它们扔到了栅栏上。
I felt my heart racing wildly, not knowing what to do. At this critical moment, Elli grabbed several pieces of garlic bread and threw them over the fence.
◆真题运用2: [2021年全国1卷]
* P2段续写情节:爸爸帮忙做早餐。
*扩写构思:他告诉他们清理厨房,同时他帮她们为母亲做早餐。
双胞胎振作起来，照吩咐做了。
He told them to clean up the kitchen while he helped them make breakfast for Mother. The twins cheered up and did as told.
◆真题运用3: [2021年全 国1卷]
* P2段续写情节:爸爸做好早餐，双胞胎准备早餐盘。
*扩写构思:然后他偷偷溜回床上。与此同时，双胞胎准备了早餐托盘,
加了一张他们制作的卡片， 走出了厨房。
Then he sneaked back to bed. Meanwhile, the twins prepared the
breakfast tray, added a card they had made and walked out of the kitchen.
总结
1、重现改写原文关键(尤其续写第1句)
(句式: even more...; do sth again..)
2.评价(评价前动作/前情节)
(句式: .w.hich worked/which made sb.../which turned out)
3、后悔感叹(当初就./要是..就好了)F I 5门乐三
(句式:虚拟语气，should/shouldn't have done; if only)
4、动作链(单动作，拆成多动作)
(句式:动词排比/ Doing sth, sb do sth. / Having done sth, sb do sth.)
5、角色分工(同时空下，不同角色的行动)
(句式: While/When/A.... sb do sth. / Meanwhile, sb do sth.)10大高级语法句式
最强攻略.丰富模板.范文偏爱写法
无灵主语:心理、情绪;行为意义名词;无生命事物作主语
虛拟语气:情态动词+have done“当初应该”; If only“要..就好了”
独立主格: Tears welling up in his eyes, he thanked the police...
4、拟人比喻: like a xxx; as happy as a king; a sea of sorrow
5、介词短语: with结构/情绪; without结构
6、非谓语: V-ing/V-ed/To do/Having done sth,主句
7、强调句: It was sb/sth that do sth.
倒装句:地点状语/否定词/Only状语/o...that/Not only..but also
让步状从句: Difficult as it was.,...“尽管...."(转折)
长短句相间:感叹句/亮点小短句+长句
1:无灵主语(用无生命的事物来做主语)
(1)心理、情绪:“a waveof +情绪名词+固定动词+ sb'
◆普通: I felt regretful when I heard the bad news.
听到那坏消息,我感到后悔。(“人做主语”)
◆改成无灵主语句子:
Uncontrollably, a wave of remorse washed over me as I heard the bad news.
当我听到这个坏消息时，一股悔恨的浪潮不受控制地席卷了我。
A strong/intense sense of delight took hold of me the moment I heard the news.
在我听到这个消息的那刻,一种强烈烈的喜悦抓住了我。
Uncontrollably, a wave of remorse washed over me as I heard the bad news.
A strong/intense sense of delight took hold of me the moment I heard the news.
happiness/joy/delight开心 anger/rage/fury狂怒 sadness/sorrow悲伤 gratitude/ appreciation感激 admiration钦佩/赞赏 guilt/remorse愧疚悔恨 fear/terror/ fright/panic害怕 astonishment/ shock/surprise震惊 seize (抓住/控制) catch (caught过去式) strike (struck 过去式) surround (围绕) take hold of (控 制) wash over (冲 刷) come over (突然感到) envelop (笼罩) +sb
◆改写“我开心”:I felt happy.
改成无灵主语句: Delight seized me. -> A wave of delight seized me.
扩写:听到那坏消息时，我懊悔。(用无灵主语句)
Almost uncontrollably, a wave of remorse washed over me as I heard the bad news.
几乎无法控制地，当我听到这个坏消息时，一股悔恨的浪潮席卷了我。
扩写:听到好消息时，我开心。(用无灵主语句)
A strong sense of delight took hold of me the moment I heard the good news.
当我听到这个好消息的那-一刻，一种强烈的喜悦感抓住了我。
◆拓展:亮点短语①: deprive of 使丧失..(能力)
句式: sth deprived sb of sth.-某事使某人丧失..能力
例句: A stonishment deprived me of my power of speech.
惊讶使我说不出话来。(丧失说话的能力)
◆拓展:亮点短语②: prevent from阻止/使..无法做某事
句式: sth prevented sb from doing sth.某事使某人无法做某事
例句: A strong wave of fear prevented him from moving.
强烈的恐惧让他无法动弹。
(取代掉: He was too fearful to move.)
(2)有行为意义的名词:“sight/thought/walk/steps", “一见到/一想到”
The sight/thought of sth made sb+情绪形容词.一见/想到sth, 某人就感到..
At the sight/thought of sth, sb felt+情绪词(adj./n.).一见/想到sth,某人就感到..
◆真题运用[浙江卷]:“一-见到那头熊，他就紧张。
●基础写法: When he saw the bear, he felt very nervous.
●无灵主语式改写:
-> The very sight of the bear made him extremely nervous.
-> At the sight of the bear, he felt a strong wave of nervousness.
(一看到熊，他就感到一阵强烈的紧张。)
◆真题运用(以下为范文句子)
●Poppy jumped with joy at the sight of the lttle dog.
Poppy(主角小狗的名字)一看到小狗就高兴得跳了起来。[2020.01浙江卷]
(后半句移到前面就是无灵主语)
Her eyes widened at the sight of the breakfast tray.
看到早餐托盘,她瞪大了眼睛。[2021全国1卷]
(后半句移到前面就是无灵主语)
◆真题运用
●At the thought of the homework, I frowned.
一想到作业，我就皱起了眉头。[2022广州一模]
●The one-hour dish-washing had totally worn me out.
一小时的洗碗让我筋疲力尽。[2022广州一模]
A few steps through the forest brought us to the human territory.
穿过森林几步，我们来到了人类的领地。
The sight/thought of sth made sb+情绪形容词.一见/想 到sth,某人xxxx
At the sight/thought of sth, sb did sth. 一见/想到sth,某人xxxx .
The very sight of the bear made him nervous.一见到那头熊，他就紧张
The thought of the moments shared with grandpa filled me with great joy.
一想到和爷爷度过的时光，我就感到十分快乐
Poppy jumped with joy at the sight of the little dog. [2020.01浙江卷 ]
Her eyes widened at the sight of the breakfast tray. [2021全 国卷1]
At the thought of the homework, I frowned.一 想到作业，我就皱起了眉头。
The one-hour dish-washing had totally worn me out.一- 小时的洗碗让我筋疲力尽
A few steps through the forest brought us to the human territory.人类领地)
(3)其他无生命事物作主语:适合写结尾句(以下建议 背2-3句)
Interestingly, the man's words still lingered in Sam's mind even now.
有趣的是，那个男人的言语直到现在仍然在Sam的脑海中挥之不去。
The funny story taught us that never should we judge a book by its cover.
这个有趣的故事告诉我们，永远不应该通过封面来判断一:本书(以貌取人)
The narrow escape made Mac realize how treasurable life was.
这次惊险的逃生让Mac意识到生命是多么珍贵。
The unique experience enlightened him with the fact that...
这段独特的经历启发了他/让他顿悟...
[词汇积累] : linger in sb's mind在某人脑海萦绕; teach sb sth教会某人某事;
make sb realize sth/that..使某人意识到... enlighten sb with the face that...使人顿悟..
(其他好句)
An idea suddenly struck the twins that they could ask dad for help.
双胞胎突然想到一一个想法，他们可以向爸爸寻求帮助。
It gradually dawned upon me that...我渐渐恍然大悟/渐渐明...
It occurred to Elli that the bear might be distracted by the delicious bread.
艾丽突然想到，熊可能会被美味的面包分散注意力。
The mess in the kitchen reminded the twins of the importance of practice.
厨房里的混乱提醒双胞胎练习的重要性。
The paperwork slipped my mind/memory.我忘记了 论文作业。
适合写结尾句
Interestingly, the man's words still lingered in Sam's mind even now. (脑中徘徊)
The funny story taught us that never should we judge a book by its cover.
The narrow escape made Mac rea lize how treasurable life was.
The experience enlightened him with the fact that.. 这段经历让他明白 ..
An idea suddenly struck the twins that they could ask dad for help. (突然想到)
It gradually dawned upon me that... ( 逐渐意识到)
It occurred to Elli that the bear might be distracted by the delicious bread.
The mess in the kitchen reminded the twins of the importance of practice. The paperwork slipped my mind/memory. (忘记论文作业)
读后续写句式1:无灵主语(用无生命的事物做主语)总结
(1)心理、情绪:‘a wave of+情绪名词+固定动词+sb"
A wave of delight seized me.
喜悦抓住了我/我开心
A strong wave of fear prevented him from moving.
强烈的恐惧使他动弹不得
(2)有行为意义的名词:“sight/thought/walk/steps”
The sight/thought of sth made sb+情绪形容词. 一见/想到sth,某人xx
At the sight/thought of sth, sb did sth.一见/ 想到sth,某人xxx .
无生命事物作主语,结尾句:“The words / The story..”
The words still lingered in one's mind. 那些话还萦绕在心头
The story taught us that never should we judge a book by its cover.
The experience enlightened him that..这段经历让他明白..
读后续写句式2:比喻(多用于情绪/动作描写,强调)
●情绪句式一:“like a xxx”
“Filled with+情绪，sb do sth like a xx”
Filled with rage, he charged towards me like a furious bull.
他满腔怒火,如公牛向我冲来
Falling into sadness, Rose buried her face in arms like a deflated balloon.
罗斯陷入悲伤，像一个泄气的气球一样把脸埋在怀里。
Drowned in laughter, Jimmy dashed out of the school gate like a free bird.
吉米沉浸在笑声中，像一只自由的小鸟一样冲出了校门。
Happiness washed over him like warm sunshine.
幸福像暖阳冲刷着他
( like a beam of warm and dazzling sunlight; like a sunbeam)
Anger took hold of him like a wild beast.
愤怒像野兽一样抓住了他
●情绪句式二:“ as+情绪形容 词+as+意象
开心:
(be) as happy as a king
(be) as happy as a pig in mud
(be) as happy as a clam at high tide (in high water) (地道俚语; clam蚌)
On the last day of school, Jimmy dashed out of the school gate feeling as free as a bird.
紧张;不安;焦虑: (anxious/upset)
as nervous as an ant (on a hot pan)热锅上的蚂蚁
= as nervous as a cat on hot bricks (地道 俚语)
害怕:
At the sight of the snake, she turned as pale as a sheet.
一看到那条蛇,她(脸色)苍白得像一张床单。
表示喜怒哀乐的形容词 表格一
喜(形容词可替代: pleased; delighted; cheerful; overjoyed;joyful; blissful) as happy as a king as happy as a pig in mud as happy as a clam at high tide
怒 (形容词可替代: mad; furious) as angry as a bull as angry as a raging storm
哀 as sad as a homeless dog
累 (形容词可替代: exhausted) as tired as the wings of a bird as tired as a worn-out shoe as tired as an ox
紧张不安 as nervous as an ant on a hot pan as nervous as a cat on hot brick
害怕 sb's face turned as pale as a sheet
表格二
as strong as an ox健壮如牛/强/厉害 as tough as an old boot坚强 as silent as a stone沉默 as hungry as а hunter饿 as easy as a piece of cake 轻而易举 as bitter as a sour lime 苦闷 as cold as ice冰冷 as big as a bus体积大 as bright as daylight心情/脸亮起来 as radiant as roses容光焕发 as shining as diamonds 像钻石般闪耀 as gentle as a breeze像微风一样温柔
As sly as a fox 像狐狸一样狡猾
as busy as a bee忙得团团转
as heavy as an elephant像头大象一样重
as sick as а dog身体不舒服 病得严重
as proud as a pea cock 像孔雀一样骄傲
as funny as a monkey像猴子一样有趣
as silly as а sheep傻
as brave as a lion像狮子一样勇敢
as playful as a kitten顽皮调皮
He's as good as gold善良友好
总结
读后续写句式2:比喻(多用于情绪/动作描写,强调)
情绪句式一:“like a xxx”( "Filled with+情绪, sb do sth like a xx”)
Filled with rage, he charged towards me like a furious bull.他满腔怒火,如公牛向我冲来
Anger took hold of him like a wild beast.愤怒像野兽一样抓住了他.
Happiness washed over him like a beam of sunlight.幸福像暖阳洒在他身上
情绪句式二:“as happy as a king”
(as+情绪形容词+as+意象)
He was as angry asa bull.他像一头公牛- -样愤怒
Her smile was as bright as daylight. 她的笑容像白昼- -样灿烂
情绪句式三:“a sea of sorrow” (an ocean of / a whirlwind of)
She felt a whirlwind of happiness passing through her. 一股幸福的旋风掠过她
She drowned herself in a sea of sorrow.她将自己淹没在悲伤的海洋中读后续写句式3:倒装句(全部倒装)
①句首:地点状语(副词/介词短语) -全部倒装(谓语整个放在主语前面)
On the tray were a piece of sandwich and oat porridge.托盘上放着一块三明治和燕麦粥
(原本语序: A piece of sandwich and oat porridge were on the tray.)
Inside the box lay a stunning necklace.盒子里放着一条令人惊叹的项链。
At the foot of the hills stood a wolf.山脚下站着一只狼。
In his hands was a bunch of flowers.他手里拿着一束花。
On the shoulder of monkey stood a red fox.猴子的肩膀 上站着一只红狐狸。
读后续写句式3:倒装句(部分倒装)
②句首:否定词(Seldom;Rarely;Never;常搭配比较级调副词)
(这些否定词放在句首，后面句子变一般疑问句语序)
Seldom has he seen such a fierce creature before.
他以前很少见过如此凶猛的生物。
(原本陈述语序: He has seldom seen such a fierce creature before. )
Never had she been more helpless.她从未如此无助。
(原本陈述语序: She had never been more helpless.)
②句首:否定词Little (几乎不;搭配“感受”词如understand, know, realize)
Little had I realized the urgency of the task.我还没意识到这项任务的紧迫性。
Little was she aware that he was gone.
她没意识到他走了。
Little did she understand what the man was talking about.
她不知他在说啥。
②句首:否定词On no account | Under no circumstances (绝不)
On no account should you judge a person by the appearance.
无论如何，你都不应该通过外表来判断一一个人。
Under no circumstances should we start a project without any preparation.
在任何情况下，我们都不应该在没有任何准备的情况下开始一个项目。
②句首:否定词No sooner..than... / Hardly..when... (一... 就）
原句: I had finished the ice cream when mom came back with a bowl of broccoli.
No sooner had I finished the ice cream than mom came back with a bowl of broccoli.
(倒装改写)我一吃完冰淇淋，妈妈就拿了一碗西兰花回来。
③句首: only+状语(only then; only when; only at that moment)
Only then did she realize the dangerous situation.
直到那时，她才意识到危险的情况。
Only when things turn urgent will I take actions to get them settled.
只有当事情变得紧急时，我才会采取行动解决问题。
Only with father's help could the twins finish cooking the breakfast.
只有在父亲的帮助下，双胞胎才能完成早餐的烹饪。
Only in this way could he approach the trapped car in the river.
只有这样，他才能接近被困在河里的汽车。
④句首: So...that; such....that
So+形容词+倒装+that...“如此...以至...”
原句：Mac was so scared that he stood still, not knowing what to do totally.
倒装: So scared was Mac that he stood still, not knowing what to do totally.
Mac非常害怕，他站着不动，不知道该怎么办。.
原句 : The flowing water was so swift that he failed to get close to the trapped car.
倒装: So swift was the flowing water that he failed to get close to the trapped car.
水流是如此之快，以至于他无法靠近被困的汽车。
●Such+名词+倒装+that... “如此..以至...”
原句: The awkward experience reminded me of the value of honesty.
倒装: Such an awkward experience was it that it reminded me of the value of honesty.
如此尴尬的经历，让我想起了诚实的价值。
原句: The funny story still lingered in his mind as years went by.
倒装: Such a funny story was it that it still lingered in his mind as years went by.
这样一个有趣的故事，随着岁月的流逝，它仍然萦绕在他的脑海中。
⑤句首: Not only+倒装, but also+陈述语序(两句调成并列结构,合成1句)
原句1: Jane was exhausted and hungry.
原句2: Jane felt/was extremely regretful for what she had done.
改成: Not only was Jane exhausted and hungry, but she was also
extremely regretful for what she had done.
简不仅筋疲力尽，又饿，而且对自己的所作所为也极为后悔。
Not only did the bear yell at us angrily, but it also pushed our fence violently.
熊不仅愤怒地对我们大喊大叫，而且还猛烈地推着我们的篱笆。
读后续写句式3:倒装句总结
1.地点状语(副词/介词短语) (全部倒装)
At the corner of the street stood a young lady.
2.句首 : 否定词(Seldom; Rarely; Never; Little)(部分倒装)
Never had she been more helpless. / Little was she aware that he was gone.
No sooner had I finished the ice cream than mom came in.
3.句首: only+状语(部分倒装)
Only with father's help could the twins finish cooking the breakfast.
4. 句首: So...that... Such..that.. （部分倒装）
So scared was Mac that he failed to move, standing still like a stone.
Such a funny story was it that it still lingered in his mind.
5.句首: Not only+倒装, but also+正常吾序(部分倒装)
Not only was Jane exhausted and hungry, but she was also extremely regretful.
读后续写:倒装句(练习)
1. I haven't ever felt so lonely. - never
2. I couldn't work because of the loud noise. - so
3. She didn't play a lot of basketball. - little
Peter didn't understand the situation. If he had, he would have quit. - had
5. The story hasn't been told correctly. - rarely
6. She bought the car after he had explained its benefits. - only after
7. I don't eat pork very often. - seldom
I would have bought a new house if I had had enough money. - had
9. I will sign the check when you finish the work. - only when
10.It was a day that we will all remember forever. - such
读后续写句式4:虛拟语气
①情态动词+have done (“ 当初就(不)应该..."）
Looking at the perfect breakfast cooked by their father, they thought remorsefully that they should have asked him how to make breakfast previously!
看着爸爸煮好的完美早餐，她们懊悔地想，应该先跟爸爸请教怎么做早餐的!
Remorsefully I thought to myself, I shouldn't have angered it. What a terrible try!
我懊悔地想，不应该惹怒它的，真是个糟糕的尝试。
适合续写的两组“情态动词+have done”（虚拟语气）
should have done 本来该做(但没做) shouldn't have done 本不该做(但做了)
would have done 本来将做(但没做) would have done 本不会去做(但做了)
previously adv.先前(=before) anger n.怒气; v.使生气
②if only (“要是....就好了”)
We should have prepared more bread. = If only we had prepared more bread.
应该多准备一些面包的/要是当时有准备更多面包就好了。
Mom said delightedly, if only she could have such a delicious breakfast every day!
妈妈开心地说，要是(以后)每天都可以吃到这么美味的早餐就好了!
If only 用法
If only+had done 要是当时有做某事就好了（对过去行为的虚拟）
If only+动词过去式 要是现在或将来能做某事就好了（对现在或将来的虚拟）
提示：if only 对将来的虚拟还可加should do/were to do
读后续写句式5:非谓语
● ①V-ing,主句.|②主句，V-ing. (两动作同时发生)
Considering the threat of the bear, we stayed far away from it.
考虑到熊的威胁，我们远离它。
Feeling ecstatic, she dashed out of the room like a wind.
她(感到)欣喜若狂，像风一样冲出了房间。
She waved at the helicopter, smiling with relief.
她向直升机挥手,如释重负地微笑。
●③Having done sth,主句. (两动作先后发生)
Having got onboard the helicopter, she thanked everyone million times.
登上直升机后，她向所有人道谢了无数次。
④V-ed,主句，V-ing. (情绪形容 词+2个动作)
Relieved and overjoyed, we yelled at the helicopter, trying to catch its attention.
我们松了一口气，欣喜若狂,对直升机大喊大叫，试图引起它的注意。
Regretful and embarrassed, I admitted the lack of consideration in my previous behavior, longing for another chance to make it up.
遗憾和尴尬，我承认在以前的行为中缺乏考虑,渴望再有一次机会来弥补。
⑤To dosth,主句. (不定式表 目的)
To distract the bear, we threw a piece of bread far away.
为了分散熊的注意力，我们把一块面包扔得很远。
读后续写句式6:介词短语with
● With+n.+非谓语doing/done/to do, sb do sth. (特殊独立主格/伴随状语)
With tears welling up in his eyes, he thanked the police in a trembling voice.
(随着)泪水涌上眼睛，他用颤抖的声音向警察道谢。
With loads of homework to do, I had no option but to deal with it.
由于有大量的作业要做，我别无选择，只能处理它。
With everything well prepared, they carried the breakfast upstairs.
一切都准备得很好，她们把早餐端上楼。
读后续写句式6:介词短语without
● Without+n., sb would (not) have done sth. 没有..就(不)... (虚拟)
Without father's help, they would have failed. ( = wouldn't have succeeded.)
没有父亲的帮助，他们就失败了。
Without his help, they would not have prepared the breakfast in time.
没有他的帮助，她们就无法及时准备好早餐。
补充例句:
Without the household chores, I would have finished the paper earlier.
如果没有家务，我会早点完成论文。
读后续写句式7:独立主格.
逻辑主语+非谓语(ing/ed/todo)，主句.
With tears welling up in his eyes, he thanked the police in a trembling voice.
With loads of homework to do, I had no option but to deal with it.
With everything well prepared, they carried the breakfast upstairs.
Tears welling up in his eyes, he thanked the police in a trembling voice.
Loads of homework to do, I had no option but to deal with it.
Everything well prepared, they carried the breakfast upstairs.
[推荐背记]独立主格-常用肢体语言:
Eyes filled with tears, sb did sth. (眼 里被泪水填满，某人做某事)
Face blushing scarlet, he apologized for what he had done. (羞愧脸红,道歉)
Her heart burning with frustration, she did sth. (内 心因沮丧而燃烧煎熬,她..
读后续写句式8:强调句
强调名词:①It was sb/sth that do sth.
强调介短:②It was+介词短语+that+句子.
◆真题运用:
It was the man's generous help that rid her of loads of troubles.
正是这个男人的慷慨帮助，让她摆脱了大量的麻烦。
It was not until then that she realized the importance of practice.
(万用句式)直到那时，她才意识到实践的重要性。
读后续写句式9:让步状从句
●让步状语从句:“Adj.+as/though+主谓”(转折)
Reluctant as I was, I had no choice but to wash the dishes as told.
虽然我很不情愿，但我别无选择,只能按照吩咐洗碗。
Exhausted and hungry as he was, he carried on climbing the mountain.
他筋疲力尽，又饿又饿，继续爬山。
Ugly though the man was, he bore a kind heart as pure as a diamond.
虽然这个人很丑，但他有一颗像钻石一样纯洁善良的心。
Though I was reluctant, I had to... (尽管不情愿，我们.. -> Reluctant though (as) I was, I had to... (改写成倒装)
读后续写句式10:长短句相间
●长短句:小短句+长句(感叹句;万用小短句)
It proved a big success. A perfect breakfast was produced by father like magic. .
事实证明，它取得了巨大的成功。完美的早餐是父亲像魔术一样制作的。
Finally, they made it. A perfect set of breakfast was ready and it's time to surprise mom.
最后他们成功了。完美的早餐套餐已经准备好了,是时候给妈妈-一个惊喜了。
What a fantastic breakfast! The twins could not wait to show it to their mother.
多么美妙的早餐!双胞胎迫不及待地想给母亲看。
读后续写句式10:长短句相间
万用小短句(以下动词为过去式)
Sb's efforts / persistence paid off.某人的努力/坚持取得了成功。
Sth proved successful / a huge success.某事证明很成功。
Sth turned out extremely successful.某事结果很成功。
Sth is considered as successful.某事(被认为)很成功。
Sth benefited sb hugely/ greatly/tremendously.某事使某人受益匪浅。
Sth witnessed sth.某事见证了某事。
Sb did sth invain.某人白费力气做某事。
Unfortunately, he failed.不幸的是，他失败了。
A few seconds slipped away.时间悄悄溜走。
大总结
10大高级语法句式
无灵主语:心理、情绪;行为意义名词;无生命事物作主语
虛拟语气:情态动词+have done“当初应该”; If only“要..就好了”
独立主格: Tears welling up in his eyes, he thanked the police...
4、拟人比喻: like a xxx; as happy as a king; a sea of sorrow
5、介词短语: with结构/情绪; without结构
6、非谓语: V-ing/V-ed/To do/Having done sth,主句
7、强调句: It was sb/sth that do sth.
倒装句:地点状语/否定词/Only状语/o...that/Not only..but also
让步状从句: Difficult as it was.,...“尽管...."(转折)
长短句相间:感叹句/亮点小短句+长句读后续写:俚语/万能短语（可灵活加入句子中)
1、rain or shine不管 发生什么;无论如何;风雨无阻 (替换掉: no matter what happens; whatever happens; do sth for sure)
例句: The match will be on Tuesday, rain or shine.
I'll always stand by your side, come rain or (come) shine.永远站你身边/支持你
真题运用（2022年广州一模续写）
I learned to get urgent issues settled first (fore most), rain or shine.
Everyone washes dishes on a regular basis, which is one of our family rules, rain or shine.
(每个人都会定期洗碗，这是我们的家规之一, 无论如何。)
I learned to prioritize tasks and would definitely get urgent issues settled foremost, rain or shine.
(肯定会首先解决紧急问题)
2, First things first 首先 当务之急 (替换掉: first; first of all)
例句: Let's find something to set the mood. First things first; some music,
找点东西来营造气氛。首先/当务之急:来点音乐吧。
真题运用: (2022广州一模续写)
I should set priorities and put first things first, rain or shine. 设置优先等级
I know you are eager to start doing something else, but first things first - you need to find out
what is the most urgent issue facing you. "
(find out = figure out;facing = confronting)
3. under the sun 在世界上/全天下，到处;究竟
(替换掉: in the world; on earth)
例句: They say there's nothing new under the sun.(太阳底下无新鲜事。)
She had tried every way under the sun, but nothing works. (尝试了各种方法都无效)
真题运用: (2021全国卷I) (2022广州一模) (2016浙江卷9月)
The twins could not help letting out a sincere acclaim, Dad is the best person under the sun !
(忍不住发出由衷的赞叹:“爸爸是全天下最好的人!”)
Isn't there anyone under the sun who can help me with this dishes
Tom explained that he had looked everywhere under the sun for Jane, but still didn't have a clue where she had been.
not have a clue (about)不知道/不清楚;不会/不懂
(didn't have a clue; have not a clue替换掉: don't know; know nothing about)
例句: Nobody has a clue where he has gone. (没人知道他去了哪里。 )
真题运用: (2021全国卷1) (2022广州一模)
Reluctant as they were, the twins had to admit that neither of them had a clue about cooking.
(尽管很不情愿，双胞胎不得不承认她们都对烹饪一无所知)
I didn't have a clue what I was supposed to be doing first.
Time slipping away, I didn't have a clue where to start writing the paper.
Desperate and anxious, he had not a clue how to approach the trapped car.
5、once in a blue moon极其难得;活久见;几乎不;千载难逢
(替换掉: sth happens rarely; seldom do sth; impossibly)
例句: sb. do sth. (only) once in a blue moon.(某人几乎不做某事)
Such a chance comes/happens/ occurs once in a blue moon. (这种机会极其难得)
真题运用: (2022广州一模)
I should firmly say no to (reject) any temptation, even if the chance comes once in a blue moon.
(坚决抵制诱惑)
Great people-like Mr. Yuan Longping only appear once in a blue moon.
(袁隆平先生这样的伟人，千载难逢)
Seeing the partial eclipse is once in a blue moon.(看到偏食是千载难逢的)
Once in a blue moon one gets some problems. (人偶尔总会碰到一 些麻烦)
6、walking on air开心;快乐;幸福
(替换掉: feeling very happy; on top of the world; brightened up; feeling up)
a castle in the air/sky 不切实际的梦 白日梦 妄想
( 替换掉: sth impossible; a hope/wish/ daydream; sth unlikely to come true)
例句 : Make a plan for your new business - it can't be all castles in the sky.
World traveling used to be a castle in the sky for most people a few decades ago.
真题运用: (2021全国卷1) (2022广州一模) (2020浙江卷)
The twins finally came to realize that being a perfect cook without any practice is completely a castle in the air.
Well aware that having 25 hours in a day is just a castle in the air, I had learned to set priorities and be more self-disciplined ever since.
The thought that the bear might go away without any harvest was merely (simply) a castle in the air.
8、out of the woods脱离险境;脱离困境
(前常搭配be/get/walk;替换掉: saved; rescued; out of trouble or danger)
例句: As soon as her temperature is down, she'll be out of the woods.
If our sales stay strong, we should be out of the woods by the next quarter.
真题运用: (2021全国卷1) (2022广州一模) (2020浙江卷) (2022深圳一模)
Thanks to dad, the twins were finally out of the woods.
To walk out of the woods, I started setting priorities for critical issues andchores.
(为了走出困境，我开始为关键事和琐事划分优先级。)
Seeing us get out of the woods, everyone on the helicopter was relieved.
Margarito conveyed his gratitude to them for getting him out of the woods.
9. (be) caught in the middle 左右为难
(替换掉: saved; rescued; out of trouble or danger; save someone's skin)
例句 : she is caught in the middle regarding whether to buy her daughter a smart phone.
(对于要不要给女儿买智能手机这个问题，她左右为难)
真题运用: (2021全国I卷) (2022广州一模)
· The twins had not a clue how to overcome feeling caught in the middle.
· I was completely caught in the middle, not knowing what to do first.
John was totally caught in the middle, feeling his soul splitting into two
halves, one with a keen desire to follow the young lady and the other longing for the women whose spirit truly upheld his own.
a blessing in disguise 因祸得福 有益的痛苦经验
(disguise伪装;后搭配: without which sb would not have done sth)
例句 : The accident was a blessing in disguise, as she realized the value of trust.
Sth is a blessing in disguise. Otherwise, sb would/wouldn't have done sth...
真题运用: (2021全国I卷) (2022广州一模)
Their failure in cooking was actually a blessing in disguise, thanks to which they have realized how much mother had contributed to the family.
The lesson was fairly a blessing in disguise, without which I wouldn't have realized the importance of setting priorities and overcoming procrastination.
总结
读后续写:俚语语10个
1、rain or shine不管发生什么;无论如何;风雨无阻
2、First things first首先;当各之急
3、under the sun在世界上/全天下，到处;究竟
4、not have a clue (about)不知道/不清楚;不会/不懂
once in a bluemoon极其难得 活久见 几乎不 千载难逢
6、walking on air升心;快乐;幸福
7、a castle in the air/sky不切实际的梦;白日梦;妄想
out of the woods脱离险境;脱离困境
9. (be) caught in the middle左右为难
a blessing in disguise因禍得福;有益的痛经验
读后续写写作:谚语proverb
1. A journey of a thousand miles begins with a single step. (解释:千里之行始于足下，you must begin sth if you want to finish it)
例句: If you want to lose weight, you need to start exercising and stop eating junk food. Today, not tomorrow. A journey of a thousand miles begins with a single step.
(如果你想减肥，你需要开始锻炼，停止吃垃圾食品。今天， 不是明天。千里之行， 始于足下。)
模仿: If you want to learn how to process continuation writing, you need to start practicing and stop hesitating. Now, not some time later. A journey of a thousand miles begins with a single step. (如果您想学习如何处理续写，您需要开始练习并停止犹豫。现在，不是一段时间后..)
2. Don't put off until tomorrow what you can do today. (解释:不要拖延，do not procrastinate)
例句: It enlightened me that I was supposed to be effective in time management. On no account should I put off until tomorrow what I can do today.
(它启发了我:我应该有效地进行时间管理;无论如何，我不应该把我今天能做的事情推迟到明天。)
3. Better late than never.
(解释:迟到总比不到好; It's better to do sth late than to never do it at all)
例句: I would like to enroll a programming course. I believe that better late than never. (我想注册一 下J编程课程。我相信迟到总比没有好)
4. Don't bite the hand that feeds you.
(解释:不要忘恩负义; Don't hurt sb who is helping you or paying for you)
例句: Sam talked to the lady that she was actually biting the hand that, feeds her. (山姆对那位女士说, 她实际上是在恩将仇报)
5. Don't judge a book by its cover.
(解释:不可以貌取人，do not judge sb or sth by appearance)
例句: CEOs of international corporations often wear just baggy t-shirts and shorts. So, I guess we can't judge a book by its cover.(跨国公司的CEO通常只穿宽松的下恤和短裤。所以，我想我们不能通过封面来判断一本书。)
6. Honesty is the best policy.
(解释:诚实是金，it is always better to tell the truth)
例句: Honesty is the best policy. If you want people to trust you, you need to be honest with them.
7. Hope for the best, prepare for the worst.
(解释:抱最好的希望,做最坏的准备)
例句: I hope for the best, but I am always preparedfor the worst when it comes to taking exams. (在参加考试时， 我总是为最坏的情况做好准备)
8. No man is an island.
(解释:没有人是一座孤岛)
例句: We tried doing it all by ourselves but broke down in six months because no man is an island. (我们试着自己做这一 -切， 但在六个月内就崩溃了)
9. Knowledge is power.
(解释:知识就是力量, the more you know, the more powerful you can be)
例句: They say, knowledge is power. And I totally agree with this, we should learn new things during our life.
10. Practice makes perfect.
(解释:熟能生巧，the more you do something, the better you will become at it)
例句: You may fall off a few times but practice makes perfect.
If you want to learn а language, speak it as much as you can. Practice ' makes perfect! (如果你想学一门语言, 那就尽可能多地说它。熟能生巧。)
11. The devil's not so black as he's painted.
(解释:魔鬼没有传说中的坏，sthisnotsobadasitisbelievedtobe)
例句: I thought it was impossible, however, step by step, I learned how to program. The devil's not so black as he's painted. (编程没想象中难)
12.The grass is always greener on the other side. (解释:隔岸风景好;邻家芳草绿people always want what they don't have)
例句: The grass is always greener on someone else's Facebook page. But usually it is not like that in real life. One has his or her share of troubles.(别人的Facebook页面看着总是比较好。但通常在现实生活中并非如此。人各有烦恼)
13. There is no such thing as a free lunch.
(解释:天下没有免费午餐, even the things that are free have a hidden cost)
例句: It seems that the Facebook is free, but they take our data and sell it to other companies. There is no such thing as a firee lunch,o(Facebook似乎是免费的，但他们会获取我们的数据并将其出售给其他公司。没有免费的午餐。)
14. There is no time like the present.
(解释:现在就是最好的时机;rightnowisthebesttime,doitnow)
例句: It is true that there is no time like the present to do what your heart always desired. (诚然， 没有比现在更适合做你心中- -直渴望的事情的时候了。 )
15. Many hands make light work.
(解释:众擎易举;人多好干活)
例句: If we all work together to organize the activity, we'll have it done in a day.Many hands light work. CE
16. Two heads are better than one.
(解释:三个臭皮匠顶个诸葛亮)
例句: t's always more effective to collaborate with someone for
sophisticated projects as two heads are better than one.
(与人合作完成复杂的项目总是更有效，因为两个负责人比-一个负责人更好。)
17. What does not kill me makes me stronger.
(解释:杀不死我的会让我更强大; difficulties boost our skills and experience)
例句: It was really hard work. But, what doesn't kill us makes us stronger.
18. When the cat's away, the mice will play.
(解释:猫儿不在，老鼠成精;大王外出，小鬼跳粱)
例句: The children usually do their homework better when we're at home, you know, when the cat's away, the mice will play.
19. A friend in need is a friend indeed.
(解释:患难见真情)
例句: After I lost the race, Mary continued to support me even though everyone else called me names. Afriend in need is a friend indeed.- (在我输掉比赛后，玛丽继续支持我，尽管其他人都骂我。在需要时提供帮助的朋友才是真朋友。 )
20. AlI good things must come to anend
(解释:天下没有不散的宴席)
例句: I had the time of my life at the birthday party. But all good things must come to an end, and it was time for us to go home.
(我在生日聚会上度过了我一生中最难忘的时光。但所有美好的事情都必须结束，我们该回家了。)
21. Time is money.
(解释:时间就是金钱，do not waste your time or other people's time)
例句: Time is money, and I try to manage it effectively. (高效地管理)
22. Strike while the iron is hot.
(解释:趁热打铁; Take advantage of an opportunity as soon as it comes along.)
例句: I thought over the job offer I got way too long. Now it has been offered to someone else. I should have struck while the iron was hot.(对于我得到的工作机会，我考虑太久了。现在它已拱手让人。我应该趁热打铁)
23. Rome wasn't built in a day.
(解释:罗马不是一天建成的; Important work takes time to complete.)
例句: You can't expect her to finish such a complex project in a week. Rome wasn't built in a day. (不能指望她在 一周内完成如此复杂的项目)
24. Still waters run
(解释:静水流深;表面不声不响却蕴藏着大的智慧;大智若愚;为人处世不张扬)
例句: She is one of the smartest persons in the organization. She may not talk much, but still waters run deep.
25. God helps those who help themselves.
(解释:天助自助者)
例句: You've to take the bull by horns and try getting a hew job. God helps those who help themselves. (必须不顾一切， 尝试找到一份新工作)
The early bird catches the wrom
(解释:早起的鸟儿有虫吃)
例句: I arrive early for the season-ending sale so that I can choose from a wider selection and get a better piece. Early bird catches the worm, after all.(我提前到达季末特卖场，这样我就可以从更广泛的选择中进行选择并获得更好的作品)
27. Look before you leap.
(解释:三思而后行; Consider all consequences before taking an action)
例句: Pursuing an MBA is an expensive plan. Moreover, you'll be out of work for twoyears. I would say look before you leap.
28. The best things in life are free.
(解释:世界上最好的东西是金钱买不到的)
例句: I realised that the best things in life are free. Even though we cannot afford to have a fancy lifestyle, my family is still happy because we have oneanother.(即使我们负担不起奢华的生活方式，我的家人仍然很幸福，因为我们有彼此。)
29. The harder you work, the luckier you get.
(解释:越努力,越幸运)
例句: Many think he got lucky in getting that fat contract, but few know he had been pursuing dozens of such contracts for several weeks一the harder you twork, the luckier you get. JLhC
(许多人认为他很幸运能得到这份丰厚的合同，但很少人知道他已经连续数周追求了数十份这样的合同)
30. When the going gets tough, the tough get going.
(解释:艰难困苦出能人;艰难之路,唯勇者行; the tough指“坚强的人/勇者”)
例句: I know you're not used to climbing at such heights, but come on, when the going gets tough, the tough get going. (我知道你不习惯在这样的高度攀登)
总结
写作:谚语30句
A journey of a thousand miles begins with a single step. (千里之行始于足下)
2. Don't put off until tomorrow what you can do today. (今 日事今日毕)
3. Better late than never. (迟 到总比不到好)
4. Don't bite the hand that feedsyou. (不要忘恩 负义
5. Don't judge a book by its cover. r (不可以貌取人)
6、Honesty is the best policy. (诚实 是金)
7、Hope for the best, prepare for the worst. (抱最好的希望， 做最坏的准备)
8、No man is an island. (没有人是一座孤岛)
9. Knowledge is power. (知识就 是力量)
10、Practice makes perfect. (熟 能生巧)
11. The devil is not so black as he's painted. (魔鬼没有 传说中的坏)
12、The grass is always greener on the other side. (隔岸 风景好;邻家芳草绿)
13. There is no such thing as a free lunch. (天下没有免 费午餐)
14. There is no time like the present.(现在就是最好的时机)
Many hands make light work.(众擎易举;人多好干活)
16、Two heads are better than one. (三 个臭皮匠顶个诸葛亮)
17、What does not kill me makes me stronger. (杀不死我的会让我更 强大)
18、When the cat is away, the mice will play. (猫儿不在 ,老鼠成精)
19. A friend in need is a friend indeed. (患 难见真情)
All good things must come to anend.n. (天下没有不散的宴席)
21. Time is money. (时 间就是金钱)
22. Strike while the iron is hot. (趁 热打铁)
Rome wasn't built in aday. (罗马不是一天建成的)
24. Still waters run deep. (静水流深; 为人处世不张扬)
25. God helps those who help themselves. (天助 自助者)
26. The early bird catches the worm. (早起的 鸟儿有虫吃)
27. Look before you leap. (三思而 后行)
Thebestthingsinlifearefree.(世界上最好的东西是金钱买不到的)
29、The harder you work, the luckier you get. (越努力, 越幸运)
30、When the going gets tough, the tough get going. (艰难之路, 唯勇者行)读后续写 开头句
六大句式
「首句超级重要! 衔接满分秘诀」
六大句式
①时间状从+动作: While/When/As/the moment... sb do sth
②让步状从+动作:“Adj.+as/though+sb was, sb do sth”(含转折意味)
③情绪形容词+动作:“情绪形容词1+情绪形容词2, sb dosth,独立主格.
④无灵主语句+定从:无灵主语句式，which... (进一步描写宾语)
⑤对话/独白:“..小短句)”, sb yelled/thought/said to oneself.
⑥What引导的主语从句+定从:“What..was (that..., which..”
解析
①时间状从+动作:
While/When/As/the moment ... sb do sth.
(...时，某人做某事)
->思路:原sb do sth->改When.... sb do sth (效果:场景转换，画面分离)
[真题例句: 2020年7月浙江卷] :
基础版本:“登直升机”: We got onto the helicopter.
改为进阶版本:“当直升机降落时，我们马上登直升机，(兴奋又松了一口气...”）
-> Once the helicopter landed, we got onto it in no time, excited and relieved.
②让步状从+动作:
Adj.+as/though+sb was, sb do sth
(尽管某人很...某人仍做某事)
->思路:情绪形容词至于句首，含转折意味;语法句式为“让步倒装”
[真题例句] :
Exhausted and hungry as he was, he carried on climbing the mountain.
虽然他筋疲力尽、又饿，他仍继续爬山。
Ugly though the man was, he bore a kind heart as pure as a diamond.
虽然这个人外貌丑陋，但他有一颗像钻石一 样纯洁善良的心。
③情绪形容词+动作:
情绪形容词1+情绪形容词2, sb do sth, +独立主格.
(感到..某人做某事，五官如何)
->思路拓展:最后加独立主格，描写五官神态，扩写成长句。
[真题例句: 201610浙江]
Desperate and hopeless, Jane knelt down, tears streaming down her face.
感到绝望的，简跪了下来，泪水顺着她的脸流了下来。
Delighted and relieved, we ran to the helicopter, eyes glittering with hope.
感到欣喜若狂和松了一口气,我们跑向直升机，眼睛里闪耀着希望。
常用描写情绪的副词总结
总结一
happily / delightedly 开心地 firmly / determinedly坚定地proudly骄傲地 bravely勇 敢地 enthusiastically热心地，满腔热情地 gratefully感 激地 confidently信心十足地 generously慷慨地，大方地 eagerly热切地 politely礼貌地 gently轻轻地，温柔地 sincerely真挚地 secretly偷偷地 angrily生气地. rudely粗鲁地 anxiously焦虑地 enviously嫉妒地 unhappily不开心地 uneasily / nervously不安地 sorrowfully伤心地 tiredly疲倦地 fearfully害 怕地 disappointedly失望地 desperately/hopelessly绝望地 regretfully / remorsefully后悔地 heavily沉重地，缓慢而忧郁地
总结二
confusedly 困惑地 cautiously谨慎地 calmly冷静地 seriously严 肃地 doubtfully怀疑地 coldly / indifferently冷淡地 blankly茫然地 reluctantly/unwillingly不情愿地 casually随意地 aimlessly漫无 目的地 hesitantly犹豫不决地 impatiently不耐烦地 deliberately故意地 carefully仔细地 constantly持续不断地 temporarily暂时地;临时地 violently猛烈地 cruelly残忍地 clumsily 笨拙地 wildly/crazily疯狂地 hurriedly匆忙地 unexpectedly出乎意料地 hopefully满怀希 望地 gradually逐渐地 repeatedly反复地 immediately / swiftly立 即地，迅速地
④无灵主语句+定从:
情绪名词+固定动词+sb/sth, who/ which...
(xx情绪抓住了sb/sth,这..）
->思路:无灵主语句式+定从(进一步描写宾语)
[真题例句: 2020年7月浙江卷]
Fury seized the bear, who looked even fiercer.
愤怒抓住了熊(熊愤怒了)，它看起来更加凶猛。
⑤对话/独白:
“...(小短句)”sb yelled/shouted/thought to oneself/said to oneself.
( “...",某人大喊/大叫/心想/对着自己说)
->思路:对P1P2给定句的核心内容,进行独白式的评价
[真题例句]
题目给定句: Paragraph 2; At that very moment, the helicopter arrived.
->核心内容“helicopter"，对话/独白写法:
“Thank goodness we are saved!" Elli cried out. Once the helicopter landed, we got onto it in no time, excited and relieved.
”谢天谢地，我们得救了!”艾丽喊道。直升机降落后，我们很快就上了直升机，兴奋而松了一口气。
⑥What引导的主语从句+which定从:
What..was (that..... which...)
(令人..的是...这使得..)
->思路:突出给定句的核心内容，后面用定从作为评价，扩写成长句。
[真题例句: 2020浙江卷]
题目给定句: Paraqraph 1: A feu minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp.”->核心内容“thebear,ourcamp”,描述核心词的状态，对我们的影响:
What threw us into deeper terror was the bear's more violent punching the fence, making our situation worse than ever.
让我们陷入更深的恐惧的是熊更猛烈地击打围栏, 使我们的处境比以往任何时候都更加糟糕。
大总结
六大句式
①时间状从+动作: While/When/As/the moment... sb do sth
②让步状从+动作:“Adj.+as/though+sb was, sb do sth”(含转折意味)
③情绪形容词+动作:“情绪形容词1+情绪形容词2, sb dosth,独立主格.
④无灵主语句+定从:无灵主语句式，which... (进一步描写宾语)
⑤对话/独白:“..小短句)”, sb yelled/thought/said to oneself.
⑥What引导的主语从句+定从:“What..was (that..., which..”
读后续写结尾句
「回忆.悟道.写景」
1、 回忆体:
The+ adj.+experience still lingered in one's mind.仍萦绕在心中
When looking back on the story, sb stillfeel..当 回首..时，某人仍觉..
2.悟道理:
From then on, sb always do sth, hoping to...从那之后，某人总是...希望..
It was sth that mattered most, which was deeply engraved in one's mind.
某事是最重要的，这深深地刻在某人的脑海中
3.写景式:
Sb do sth, with wind/ air/sunlight+非谓语+人身体部位+副词
Feeling+ the adj.+wind/ air/sunlight+非谓语, sb do sth
解析
1、回忆体
句式1:①The+adj.+experience still lingered in one's mind.
(这个xx的经历仍然萦绕在某人的心中)(lingerin=beengravedin)
[真题例句]
Interestingly, the funny story was still deeply engraved in my mind.
有趣的是，这个有趣的故事仍然深深地刻在我的脑海中。
The interesting story taught us that never should we judge a book by its cover.
这个有趣的故事告诉我们，我们永远不应该通过封面来判断一本书(不可以貌取人)
The narrow escape made Mac real ize how treasurable life was.
这次惊险的逃生让麦克意识到生活是多么珍贵。
句式②: When looking back on the story, sb still feel... (回想起这个故事) 或: Looking back on the story, sb still feel... 或: Sb would still feel a strong sense of .. whenever looking back onthe..experience.
[真题例句]
When looking back on the story, Sam still feels it interesting, thinking of the saying again that never should anyone judge a book by its cover.
回想起这个故事，山姆仍然觉得它很有趣, 再次想到了那句话，任何人都不应该通过封面来判断一本书。
2、悟道理
句式①: From then on, sb always do sth, hoping to...或: From then on, sb always do sth. Only in that way could sb do sth. (思路: From then on, sb do sth, +非谓语表目的/后接单独的倒装句)
[真题例句: 2020年浙江卷]
Following then on, we always keep away from wild animals, hoping to maintain the harmony of the ecology.
(..Only in this way could we maintain the harmony of the ecology.)
此后，我们始终远离野生动物，希望保持生态的和谐
(只有这样，我们才能保持生态的和谐)。
句式②: It was sth that mattered most, which was deeply engraved in one's mind.
(正是xx是最重要的,这深深地刻在某人的脑海中)
或: It is sth that.... which sb felt deep in heart. (强调句+定从)
[真题例句]
It was love and care that made the world go around, which was deeply engraved in my mind.
是爱与关怀，让世界运转起来，这深深地刻在我的脑海里。
It was procrastination that made my paper a failure, which reminded me to set priorities.
正是拖延症使我的论文失败了，这提醒我确定优先事项。
结尾句: 3.写景式小结
思路:自然环境+人: (优先顺承写原文已有景物)
句式①sb do sth, with wind/air/sunlight+非谓语+人身体部位+副词
sb do sth, with the wind blowing sb's hair and whipping sb's face.
某人做某事，风吹着某人的头发，拍着某人的脸。
sb do sth, with the light air whispering in sb's ears.
某人做某事，轻盈的空气在某人的耳边低语。
sb do sth, with the sun/sunlight/wind greeting sb gently and warmly.
某人做某事，sb做sth,随着太阳/阳光/风轻柔而温暖地迎接某人。
句式②Feeling+the adj. + wind/air/sunlight+非谓语，sb do sth
Feeling the warm sunlight breaking through the window, the whole family hugged in happiness.
[真题例句]
Feeling the warm sunlight breaking through the window, the whole family hugged in happiness.
感受着透过窗户照射进来的温暖阳光，全家人幸福地拥抱在一起。
Feeling the wind patting his face and blowing his hair, he kept on running to the finish line.
感觉到风拍打着他的脸，吹着他的头发，他继续跑向终点线。读后续写 连接词八大类.
时空转换●衔接流畅
读后续写连接词合集
1.时间连接词: (时空转换/场景 转换)
同时: ..While/When/ As/the moment sb1 do sth, sb2 do sth.
接续: Shortly/Swiftly/Soon afterwards,... / Subsequently / not long before
当下: At that very/critical moment, sb... / For one agonizing moment...
最后: Eventually / At length / Ultimately
2、逻辑连接词: (衔接流畅)
强调: Actually/Indeed/Truly... /Obviouly.../ Particularly...
转折: Instead/Nevertheless/Unfortunately/ Alternatively,..
结果: Consequently/Accordingly/turn out/prove/end up doing
推测: It is very likely tha.../It is highly possible that... perhaps/probably
解析
连接词1:时间连接词(同时/接续/当 下/最后/过去)
同时: (同时空人/物,分工/互动;丰富画面/场景)
①While/When/As/the moment sb/sth... sb2 dosth. (当..时/那刻,某人做某事)
②Meanwhile,.. / In the meantime,... (同 ...)
◆连接思路1:主语宾语.画面分离(动作/地点)
句式:原sbdo sth->改When sth... sb do sth
[例子1] :
原句:“ 登直升机”: We got onto the helicopter quickly.
改写:“当直升机降落时，我们登直升机，既兴奋又松了一口气”
-> Once the helicopter landed, we got onto it in no time, excited and relieved.
【例子2】 :
原句:“登直升机->我发现..”: We got onto the helicopter quickly. I found that... .改写:“登直升机->当我们在空中安全乘坐直升机时,我发现熊...”
-> We got onto the helicopter quickly. When we were safe on the helicopter up in the air, I was amazed to spot that the bear had finally torn down the fence and ran towards the food we left behind.
场景转换:主语/宾语分镜头
我们登直升机’ ->当直升机..时，我们登直升机.
(登直升机)“我发现熊冲向食物” ->当我们在空中安全乘坐直升机时，我发现熊冲向食物
◆连接思路2:加五感，
句式:原sb do sth->改When sb saw/thought.... sb do sth
[例子1] :
原句:“我们登直升机”: We got onto the helicopter quickly.
改写:“当我们看到直升机降落时，我们马上冲过去登机”
-> As we saw the helicopter landing, we dashed to it and got onboard fast.
[例子2] :
原句:“登直升机->我发现熊..”. : We got onto the helicopter quickly. I found that...改写:“登直升机->当我俯瞰营地时，我发现..
-> We got onto the helicopter quickly. When ( I was ) looking down at the camp site, I was amazed to spot that the bear had finally torn down the fence and ran towards the food we left behind.
◆可用句式，创造性模仿: (片段练习,中间可加其他句子)
* While/When/ As sb was thinking, sb caught sight of sth... (在思考时, 突然看到)
* When sb saw sth, sb do sth... (看到.时, 某人做某事)
* Sb got down to doing sth when/as/while sth came into sb's eyes. (正要..时,sth映入眼帘)
◆连接思路3:加情绪
句式:原sbdosth->改情绪/无灵主语句子+ as/the moment sb do sth
[例子] :
原句:“我得知坏消息”: I heard the bad news...
改写:“得知坏消息，我很懊悔↓..”:
Remorse washed over me the moment/ as I heard the bad news.
小结
连接词1:时间连接词(同时/接续/当下/最后/过去) 时空转换
连接思路1:主宾.分离(动作/地点) : When sth.... sb do sth .
连接思路2:加五感: When sb saw/though...,. sb do sth
连接思路3:加情绪:情绪/无灵主语句子+ as/the moment sb do sth
◆可组合(常组“思路1+思路2”)
(2021某测试) P2: Mary opened the envelop and found a letter.
P1结尾句思路: Mary发现/看到/拿到信封(原句: Suddenly, Mary found an envelop) While Mary was thinking, she caught sight of an item on the table. She
walked towards it and found an envelope.
玛丽在思考时，突然看到桌子上有件物品。她走过去，找到一个信封。
She got down to tidying up the sofa when an envelop lying on it came into her eyes.她正准备收拾沙发时，沙发上的一个信封映入了她的眼帘。
连接词1:时间连接词(同时/接续/当 下/最后/过去)
同时: (同时空人/物,分工/互动;丰富画面/场景)
①While/When/As/the moment sb/t... sb2 dosth. (... 时/那刻，某人做某事)
②Meanwhile.../ In the meantime,... （同时...）
◆写法&句式(可创造性模仿):
●连接思路1:主语宾语.画面分离(动作/地点):When sth....sb do sth
●连接思路2:加五感:
When sb saw/thought/found/heard.... sb do sth
While/When/As sb was thinking, sb caught sight ofsth... (在思考时,突然看到)
Sb got down to doing sth when/ as/ while sth came into sb's eyes. (...时, sth映入眼帘)
●连接思路3:加情绪:情绪/无灵主语句子+ as/the moment sb do sth
连接词1:时间连接词(同时/接续/当下/最后/过去)
接续:(“很快/接着...”:引出下个动作/情节/画面;使得节奏紧凑/紧张)
Shortly/Swiftly/Soon afterwards, ...
Seconds/Minutes/Hours later,... (前可加 A few / several)
Following that,... ( “在那之后”)
Subsequently,... (“随后”)
Gradually... / Step by step,... (逐渐地)
After a short tim...ome time late.r.../On the following day,..
[句式] :
否定搭配: It was not long befor.... / It didn't take long for sb to do... (不久后.. ）
独立主格: A few minutes passing (going by; slipping away), sb... (过了一会,某人..）
独句/比喻: A couple of minutes passed swiftly like flowing water. (如流水般飞快地过去)
连接词1:时间连接词(同时/接续/当下/最后/过去）
当下: (在某一刻)
①At that very/critical moment, sb... (在 那关键时刻)
②For one agonizing moment,..(在令人忐忑不安的瞬间)
③presently / currently / for the moment (暂时/目前)
例句:
My heart raced wildly, not knowing what to do. At this critical moment,
Eli grabbed and threw the garlic bread over the fence.
小结
连接词1:时间连接词汇总 (同时/接续/当下/最后)
同时:
① ...While/When/As/the moment sb1 do sth, sb2 do sth.
② Meanwhile/In the meantime, ... At that very/ critical moment, sb....
接续:
1 Shortly/Swiftly/Soon afterwards, ...
2 Seconds/Minutes/Hours later, ...
3 Following that,... (在那之后)
4 Subsequently, ... (随后)
5 It was not long before... / It didn't take long for sb to do... (不久...）
当下：
1 At that very/critical moment, sb... (在那关键时刻)
2 For one agonizing moment,... (在令人忐忑不安的瞬间)
3 presently / currently / for the moment (暂时/目前)
最后：
Eventually / At length (最后) / Ultimately / At last / Lastly / Finally
其他时间连接词总结
One day某一天 Earlyinthemorning一大早 One Friday night某个星期五下午 theotherday=afewdaysago几天前 From then on/Since then,..从那以后 It was then that sb ....在那时... For one frozen moment,...有一瞬间 On arriving at school,..一回到学校 The next/following day第二天 Justthen正在那时 After that/Later on然后 Afterashortwhile一会儿以后 Roughly an hour later.,..大约1小时后 After several attempts,...经过几次尝试 After seemingly a long time,似乎很久后 After what seemed ages，过了似乎几年
连接词1:时间连接词(写法模仿)思维:画面/场景/时空转换
①2020年1月浙江卷
A few weeks later, the boy arrived home from the university. He had been missing his parents and the dog since it was the first time that he had been away from home for such a long time. When the boy caught sight of Poppy, he went rushing toward the dog and bent down to give her a big hug. Suddenly, the boy noticed the little dog.“Oh my god, who is this ”His parents laughed at the look of surprise on his face.“ It's Poppy s new companion.”said Mom. .
◆时间连接词、创造性模仿: (片段练习，中间可加其他句子)
A couple of weeks/ days/hours/ minutes later, sb... ( “接续”)
When/While/As/Onc.... sb... (“同时”)
Suddenly/All of a sudden, sb noticed/noted sth... (突然注意到/发现sth)
②2016年g月浙江卷: (造“当...时”，)她开始担心如何能...
When Jane caught sight of the dark sky and felt the rowling wind, she started to worry about how she could go through the night without food and shelter. It was daybreak when Jane woke up. She.. .and then..., hoping to...She walked and walked,.Suddenly, she spotted a huge flat rock. She managed to climb onto it and waited with patience. The moment the helicopter appeared again, the nearer it got, the more she waved the yellow blouse. To her great joy, the helicopter didn't miss Jane this time. As it landed near the big rock slowly,... 时间连接词、创造性模仿: (片段练习，中间可加其他句子)
1 It was at that very moment that sb realized sth... 2 sb did sth and then did sth, hoping to... 3 Suddenly, sb spotted/ noticed/ noted sth/that... 4 The moment/As sth.., sb did sth
①直到那一刻sb才 意识到;②sb做了某事和某事，希望... ③sb突然发现;④当某事物...时, sb...
连接词2:逻辑连接词(强调/转折/因 果/递进/条件/推测)
强调: (适合:含关键动作/情节、结尾升华的句子)
连接词2:逻辑连接词(强调)
强调: (适合:含关键动作/情节、结尾升华的句子)
After all,.. (毕竟)(注:解释和支持前一句话)
In fact / Actually / Indeed,... (实际上)
(While) The truth is that... / Truly,.. (然而)事实是/实际是/确实
Obviously / Apparently,.. (显然地/显而易见地/明显地)
Undoubtedly / Without doubts / With no doubts,... (毫无疑问地)
In particular / Particularly / (most) Notably / Especilly,.. (尤其是)
Above all,.. (最重要的是;尤其是)
Significantly,. (值得注意的是.../意味深长的是..)
After all, life is choked with chores, and that is why setting priorities matter.
[2022广州一模:毕竟,生活充满了杂务和令人分心的事,这就是为什么设定优先事项很重要]
In fact/Actually/Indeed, what I had been doing in the past week was less urgent and could be postponed.
[2022广州-模:实,过去一周我一直在做的事情并不紧急，可以推迟]
Obviously/Apparently/Undoubtedly, if I had arranged my schedule in a more reasonable manner, I would not have been trapped in such a dilemma.
[2022广州一模:显然，如果我更合理地安排日程，就不会陷入这种困境]
Particularly/Notably, the later I acted, the more anxious I felt.
[2022广州-模:特别的是/值得注意的是，我越迟开始行动，就会越焦虑]
转折:
Whereas/Instead/Nevertheless/Conversely/Alternatively,... (然而/取而代之)
(And) still /yet (然而)
despite / in spiteof (尽管)
(But) even so,... (即便如此,...）
Unfortunately,.. (然而)不幸的是...
by contrast /in contrast (to)/ on the contrary (相反)
Alternatively... Instead,... (取而代之)
Differing from... (与....不同)
结果:
句首: Consequently / Accordingly / As a result (of sth)... (因此/作为某事的结果, ..）
Under these circumstances / Under these conditions,... (在这些情况下，...)
句中: turn out (to be)+形容词/turn out that:“(结果)是怎样的”(可取代be动词) prove (to be) +形容词/名词:“证明是”(有时可取代be动词)
end up doing:“最终..”
It turned out that I gained the lowest score I had ever received.
The breakfast proved (to be) a sweet surprise, judging from mother' s response.
从母亲的反应来看，这早餐被证明是-个甜蜜的惊喜
Distracted by the entertainments, I ended up completing the project in a rush.
被那些娱乐分散了注意力，我最终匆忙完成了这个项目
并列/递进: Equally important,.. / Of equal importance,.. (同样重要的是..)
In addition/ Additionally/Moreover/ Furthermore,.. (此外/还有)
因果: because / because of+n. / due to / owingto/ (由于)
Therefore.../ Hence../Consequently... (因此)
条件: Considering..(that) / Providing (that)... (考虑到) (鉴于)
推测: It is very likely that... / It is most likely that... (很有可能)
There is every possibility that / It is highly possible that... (很有可能)
perhaps / probably =maybe;
总结
读后续写连接词
1.时间连接词: (时空转换/场景 转换)
同时: ..While/When/ As/the moment sb1 do sth, sb2 do sth.
接续: Shortly/Swifty/Soon afterwards,.. / Subsequently / not long before
当下: At that very/critical moment, sb... / For one agonizing moment...
最后: Eventually / At length / Ultimately
2、逻辑连接词: (衔接流畅)
强调: Actually/Indeed/Truly... /Obviouly.../ Particularly...
转折: Instead/Nevertheless/Unfortunately/ Alternatively,..
结果: Consequently/Accordingly/turn out/prove/end up doing
推测: It is very likely that../ It is highly possible tha... perhaps/ probably读后续写:动作描写
1.动作描写3种句式
①动作+五官:独立主格句式
②动作+分解:非谓语句式
③动作+场景转换:时间状语从句
2、动词语料库
①万能动词短语(如何扩写sb do sth)
②常用动词(高分替换词)
③各部位动作(动作描写, 超全汇总,看这里够了)
动作描写: 3种写法
1.动作+五官:独立主格句式
①独立主格:身体部位+非谓语动词,sbdosth.(with+情绪名词/声线)
Tears welling up in his eyes, he thanked the police in a trembling voice.
2、动作+分解:非谓语句式
①V-ing,主句 ②主句，V-ing ③ Having donesth,主句
④V-ed (情绪形容词),主句, V-ing ⑤ To dosth,主句(前加目的)
3、动作+场景转换:时间状语从句
主宾.分离(加动作/加地点) : Sb dosth->改成: When sth.... sb do sth
解析
1、动作+五官之独立主格句式
独立主格:身体部位+非谓语v, sb do sth. (with+情绪名词/声线)
◆眼泪
Tears welling up in his eyes, he thanked the police with/in a trembling voice.
泪水在他的眼睛里涌出，他用颤抖的声音向警察表示感谢。
My spirits sank, tears streaming down my cheeks.
我的情绪低落，泪水顺着我的脸颊流下来。
Eyes filled with regretful tears, sb do sth. (眼里充满遗憾的泪水,某人做某事)
Eyes glittering with relief/joy, sb do sth. (眼里 闪着欣慰和喜悦，某人做某事)
Eyes widening in joy/surprise/fear(情绪名词), sb dosth (眼睛..地睁大)
◆脸/心/肢体
Face blushing scarlet, he apologized for what he had done.
脸红着，他为自己的所作所为道歉。
Heart burning/filled with frustration, she lowered her head.
心在燃烧/充满挫败感,她低下了头。
Heart pounding/beating with happiness, she leapt into the air.
心因快乐而跳动着,她跳了起来。
Arms/legs/muscles aching and knees shaking/ trembling, I sat down.
胳膊/腿/肌肉疼痛,膝盖颤抖/颤抖,我坐了下来。
2、动作+分解:非谓语句式
◆动作几乎同时发生:①V-ing,主句 ②主句, V-ing
Considering the threat of the bear, we stayed far away from it.
考虑到熊的威胁，我们远离它。
Feeling ecstatic, she dashed out of the room like a wind.
她欣喜若狂，像风一样冲出了房间。
◆动作前后发生:③Having done sth,主句
Having known what had happened, she set about dealing with the issue.
在知道发生了什么之后，她开始着手处理这个问题。
◆动作前加情绪:④V-ed (情绪形容词),主句, V-ing.
Relieved and overjoyed, we yelled at the helicopter, trying to catch its attention.
我们松了一口气，欣喜若狂,对直升机大喊大叫，试图引起它的注意。
◆动作前加目的:⑤Todosth,主句
To distract the bear, we threw a piece of bread far away.
为了分散熊的注意力，我们把一块面 包扔得很远。
◆动作分解:⑥V1, V2, and V3 ( 可改成: V-ing, sb do sth, V-ing )
We rose from the seat, walked out of the hall, and left the cinema.
我们从座位上站起来，走出大厅，离开了电影院。
Seeing the helicopter, we cried out“Help!", waving our hands like mad.
看到直升机，我们大声喊着“救命!”,并疯狂地挥舞着双手。
总结
①V-ing, 主句 ②主句, V-ing ③Having done sth, 主句
Considering the threat of the bear, we stayed far away from it.
Having known what had happened, she set about dealing with the issue.
④V-ed (情绪形容词),主句, V-ing (前加情绪)
Relieved and overjoyed, we yelled at the helicopter, trying to catch its attention.
⑤To do sth,主句. (前加目的)
To distract the bear, we threw a piece of bread far away.
⑥V1, V2, and V3. (分解动作) ( 可换成: V-ding, sb do sth, V-ing )
We rose from the seat, walked out of the hall, and left the cinema. (离开电影院)
Seeing the helicopter, we cried out Help!", waving our hands like mad.
3、动作+场景转换:时间状语从句
动作+场景转换:时间状从(while/when/as/the moment..)
句式: Sb do sth->改成: When sb/sth..,. sb do sth. (可加地点,分离主宾画面)
◆句式扩写:When sb was+五感动词，sb do sth+造个地点.
[例句]构思: Mary发现一一个信封。.
普通版本: Suddenly, Mary found an envelop.
进阶版本: While Mary was thinking, she caught sight of an item on the table.
She walked towards it and found an envelope.
玛丽在思考时，突然看到桌子上有件物品。
她走过去，找到一个信封。
[练习]
She got down to tidying up the sofa when an envelop lying on it came into her eyes.
她正准备收拾沙发时，沙发上的一个信封映入了她的眼帘。
万用动词短语
◆某人做某事sb do sth”扩写:manage to do想方设法做某事
achieve/accomplish sth实现/完成某事
原句: Steve saved Magaritto.
扩写:
Steve manged to save Magait.
Steve succeeded in saving Magaritto.
Steve achieved the rescue of Margaritto.
◆ “某人做某事sb do sth”扩写:
Manage to do想方设法做某事
succeed in doing sth成功地做了某事
achieve t accomplish sth实现/完成某事
struggle to do sth努力做某事
Make efforts to do sth/努力做某事(make an effort to do sth)
make every effort to do sth竭尽全力做某事>」
endeavor to do努力做某事
strive to do sth / strive for sth (过去式strove)努力/奋力做某事
can't help doing sth / feel like doing sth忍不住做某事/想做某事
take actions to do采取行动去做
get down to doing sth开始做/着手做(尤指需花费精力之事)
keep doingsth保持做某事
go on doingsth继续做某事
carry on doing sth继续做某事
force sb to do sth迫便某人做某事(sb was forced to dosth)
persuade sb into doingsth 说服某人做某事
talk sb into doing sth说服某人做某事
allow/enable sb to do sth使某人能够做某事
Can not help doingsth禁不住做某事
imagine doing sth想象做某事
万用动词/形容词短语：固定搭配
cast light on阐明某事 catch sightof看见 catch a glimpseof瞥见; 窥见 lay emphasison 强调 makethemostof充分利用 take advantage of利用 suffer fromsth遭受... be involved in sth参与/专心投入 be exposed tosth暴露/面临/接触 be devoted tosth投身于/致力于 be curious about...对..好奇 be busy with忙于... be covered with被..覆盖 be, ready/prepared for 为....作好准备 be surprised/amazed (at)对...感到惊讶 be excited about 激动于... be angry with愤怒于... be madat 疯狂于... be satisfied with对....满意 be regarded/treated as被视为...
高分替换词
◆替换“cannot do sth无法做某事”:
fail to do sth
sb's doing sth was a failure
be unable lto do sth
prevent sb from doing sth
原句: At the sight of the snake, he was so scared that he couldn't move.按需替换:
Extremely scared, he failed to move at the sight of the snake.
Enormous scare prevented him from moving at the sight of the snake.
His attempt to move was a failure at the sight of the snake.
◆替换“decide to do sth决定做某事”:
be determined to do sth下定决心做某事
make up one's mind to do sth下定决心做某事
◆替换“want to do想做某事”
intend to do sth/ aim to do sth;
feel like doing sth想要做某事;
plan/prepare to do sth预备/准备做某事
◆替换“make sb want to do sth使某人想..”:
remind sb to do sth提醒某人做某事
encourage sb to do sth鼓励/使某人做某事
motivate/drive sb to do sth激励/推动某人做某事
urge sb to do sth促使某人做某事
高级动作描写
各部位描写
he buried his face in his hands he rubbed his hands together he folded his arms/hands over his chest She raised/lifted her head/chin/ hands She held her breath/ held sth in hands moved forward/backwards/ towards/closer to he shivered / trembled/ shook she stepped away/forward dash to/rush to/ sprint to grab / grasp /seize 他把脸埋在手里 他使劲揉/搓着双手 他把双臂/双手交叉在胸前 抬头/抬起下巴/举手 她屏住呼吸/手里拿着东西. 前进/后退/朝向/靠近 他颤抖 她走开/向前 冲向/冲向/冲刺 抓住
动作描写：肢体1
he shivered / trembled his body shook she flinched she straightened / she stretched she rose from her seat he pulled away/he pushed away he turned away he turned around she stepped away she drew nearer 他颤抖着 他的身体颤抖着 她退缩了 她挺直了/她伸展 她从座位上站起来.. 他拉开/他推开 他转身离开 他转身 她走开了 她走近了
动作描写：肢体2
he leaned closer he paced she dragged her feeta she pumped a fist she punched the air she rested her chin on her palm he yawned She scratched her nose/head he leaned against the wall she bounced on her toes 他靠得更近了 他踱步 她拖着脚. 她挥了挥拳头: 她打了空气 她把下巴放在手掌上 他打了个哈欠 她挠了挠鼻子/挠头 他靠在墙上 她踮起脚尖
动作描写：肢体3
he shook / nodded his head she was breathing hard she took in a deep breath she took in a sharp breath she held her breath he let out a harsh breath he sighed she rubbed her shoulder she played with her hair she tossed her hair 他摇了摇头/点头 她呼吸困难 她深吸了一口气 她倒吸一口凉气 她屏住呼吸 他重重地吐了一口气 他叹了口气 她揉了揉肩膀 她玩弄她的头发 她甩了甩头发
动作描写：看
glance at stare at gaze at catch sight of/catch a glimpse of he observed she peered she gaped he glared he gawked he leered 朝...看了一眼 盯着...看 盯着/注视/凝视 瞥见 他观察 她凝视着 她目瞪口呆 他瞪着 他目瞪口呆 他斜视
动作描写：眼睛
his eyes widened his eyes lit up . his eyes narrowed she winked/blinked her eyes sparkled her eyes twinkled his eyes gleamed his eyes burned with... her eyes blazed with... her eyes sparked with... 他的眼睛睁大了 他的眼睛亮了 他的眼睛眯了起来 她眨了眨眼 她的眼睛闪闪发光 她的眼睛闪烁 他的眼睛闪闪发光 他的眼睛燃烧着..... 她的眼睛闪耀着..... 她的眼睛闪烁着.....
动作描写：眼睛眉毛
____glowed in his eyes tears filled/ flooded her eyes tears shone/ shimmered in her eyes he was fighting back tears tears ran down her cheeks his eyes closed / he shut his eyes she squeezed her eyes shut his brows knitted / he frowned his eyebrows rose she raised / lifted a brow ____在他的眼中闪闪发光泪水充满了 她的眼睛 泪水在她眼中闪烁 他强忍泪水 泪水顺着她的脸颊流下 他闭上眼睛 她紧闭双眼 他皱着眉头 他的眉毛扬起 她挑了挑眉
动作描写：脸部1
her nose crinkled / wrinkled she grinned she beamed her mouth curved into a smile he faked a smile their smile faded / slipped he pursed his lips she bit her lip her mouth fell open he gritted his teeth 她的鼻子皱了起来 她咧嘴一笑 她喜笑颜开 她的嘴弯成微笑 他假装微笑 他们的笑容消失了 他噘起嘴唇 她咬着嘴唇 她的嘴张开了 他咬牙切齿
动作描写：脸部2
her lower lip trembled she paled / blanched his face flushed / reddened a flush crept up her face her cheeks turned pink she gave him a regretful look her whole face lit up his face twisted she went poker-faced terror overtook his face 她的下唇颤抖着 她脸色苍白 他的脸红了 她的脸上泛起了红晕 她的脸颊变成了粉红色 她给了他一个后悔的眼神 她整张脸都亮了 他的脸扭曲了 她面无表情 恐惧占据了他的脸
动作描写：头/手
he lowered/hung/bowed his head he covered his eyes with a hand she raised/lifted her chin her hands squeezed into/tightened into fists she clenched/balled her fists he unclenched his fists he shrugged he lifted his hands he threw his hands in the air he rubbed his hands together 他低下头 他用手捂住眼睛 她抬起下巴 她的双手紧握成拳头 她握紧了拳头 他松开了拳头 他耸了耸肩 他举起双手 他把手举在空中 他搓着手
动作描写：手
he spread his hands he waved his hands (at sb) she clapped her hands she shoved/ put her hands in her pockets she folded her arms he crossed his arms over his chest she hugged herself he wrapped his arms around himself she spread her arms wide she held out / extended her hand 他摊开双手 他(朝某人)挥了挥手 她拍了拍手. 她把手插进口袋 她交叉双臂 他双臂交叉在胸前 她拥抱了自己 他用双臂环住自己 她张开双臂 她伸出手读后续写之原文仿写
“以终为始”:“知其目的,投其所好”
◆“原文仿写”
以续促学”:“协同效应”理论
“读.后.续写”:读语篇,模仿语言
◆“读不懂原文”怎么办
(阅读材料要)易于理解和模仿”
培养关注语篇、模仿语言的能力
◆“直接套模板”可以吗
要求:“必须..防止事先背诵后的套写”
结论:创造性模仿(语言可模仿,但内容要创造)
◆“高分句式怕用错,用吗”
建议多写高分句式，亮点词汇
减少错误:①仿原文句式;②备好万用句式
读后续写全过程
读原文:
(1)首尾段:所有人物+事件
(2)P1P2重点词(原文关键在哪) (疑惑之处,回原文找线索)
(3)中间段:重点词(明线:大意/暗线:段落作用是 /看中文注释)
2.设计固定的5句
P1: XXXX ①第四步:接首句(据给定句，接心理/动作) ②围绕主要情节，以句式倒推内容 ③同② ④同②. ⑤第-步:结尾句(P2给定句上1个动作) P2: XXXx ⑥第五步:接首句(据给定句，接心理/动作) ⑦同② ⑧同② ⑨第二步:结尾句(角色1反应) ⑩第三步:结尾句(角色2反应)/升华句
3.另外五句:仿原文句式，逆推内容设计
(1)仿原文句式(续写原文:常见句式10大类-熟悉/能辨析)
自备句式(续写第4-7章:10大语法句式-熟记/能运用)
1、读原文,步骤:
(1)首尾段:所有人物+事件
(2)P1P2重点词(原文关键在哪) (疑惑之处，回原文找线索)
中间段:重点词(明线:大意/暗线:段落作用是 /看中文注释)
who/关键词 明线:动词/名词 暗线：形容词
人物1 用来续写: 延续关键动作/情节 个性特点： 预判人物行为/心里/结局
人物2
环境事物 地点/环境/事物(作为续写的素材/工具)
what关键句 需求/冲突/待做的事(暗线，决定人物行为/心理/结局)
P1P2关键词 the+名词”;转机(定结尾) ;需求
3w1H(各段落) ①各类描写占比;②关键语法句式(挑选仿写)
真题举例
I was walking along the road to school one day and I met my friend Raine. He suggested that we skip school and go to the movies. I refused as my dad was very fierce and strict. Aíter much persuasion, I gave in. There was a Will Smith movie on and I was a fan.
So we set off to the movies together, bought our tickets, popcorn and drinks and settled down comfortably. As we were early, the lights were still on. We watched people come in groups, families and there were couples too. Some of them looked like school students playing truant (il#) like us. As I turned around, I caught a glimpse of my uncle Andy and Aunt Jane walking in. They were kind and cared about me very much. I sank into my seat quickly to avoid being spotted. I signaled to Raine that there was someone I didn't want to see and Raine made it more obvious by tuning around and asking Who And where " loudly. It made me sit even lower in my seat.
To make things worse, they came and sat in the row behind us and were saying to each other how I would have loved to come to this movie as I adored Will Smith. They were even commenting about the students playing truant. Soon the movie began and I was glad when the lights were turned off but I didn't enjoy the movie at all for fear of being spotted. So, I sat there like an astronaut, peering over the front seat.
Every now and then I would secretly take a quick look at my aunt and uncle. I was sure they were also looking at me. Feeling nervous and anxious, I kept wondering how I could leave the cinema without being noticed.[2022韶关一模]
Paragraph 1: When the movie ended and the lights came on, I remained seated.
Paragraph 2: In front of us were my aunt and uncle,waiting at the gate.
1、读原文,步骤:
(1)首尾段:所有人物+事件（每1句几乎皆可做结局呼应）
首段:逃学看电影
首段: I was walking along the road to school one day and I met my friend Raine. He suggested that we skip school and go to the movies. I refused as my dad was very fierce and strict. After much persuasion, I gave in. There was a Will Smith movie on and I was a fan.
尾段：我躲藏
尾段: Every now and then I would secretly take a quick look at my aunt and uncle. I was sure they were also looking at me. Feeling nervous and anxious, I kept wondering how I could leave the cinema without beingnoticed.
P1：未拆穿
Paragraph 1: When the movie ended and the lights came on, I remained seated.
Paragraph 2: In front of us were my aunt and uncle,waiting at the gate.
(1)首尾段:所有人物+事件（每1句几乎皆可做结局呼应）
(2)P1P2重点词(推原文关键) (疑惑之处，回原文找线索)
(3)中间段:重点词(明线:大意/暗线:段落作用是 /看中文注释)
So we set off to the movies together, bought our tickets, popcorn and drinks and settled down comfortably. As we were early, the lights were still on. We watched people come in groups, families and there were couples too. Some of them looked like school students playing truant (逃学) like us. As I turned around, I caught a glimpse of my uncle Andy and Aunt Jane walking in. They were kind and cared about me very much. I sank into my seat quickly to avoid being spotted. I signaled to Raine that there was someone I didn't want to see and Raine made it more obvious by tuning around and asking“Who And where " loudly. It made me sit even lower in my seat.
◆明线v/n:学生逃学I看见叔姨I我躲|猪队友大声暴露
◆暗线adj.:叔姨对我好I我不该|怕被发现|被发现而不知
(3)中间段:重点词(明线:大意/暗线:段落作用是 /看中文注释)
To make things worse, they came and sat in the row behind us and were saying to each other how I would have loved to come to this movie as I adored Will Smith. They were even commenting about the students playing truant. Soon the movie began and I was glad when the lights were turned off but I didn't enjoy the movie at all for fear of being spotted. So, I sat there like an astronaut, peering over the front seat.
◆明线v/n:叔姨坐我们后面I叔姨说逃学的学生|我偷窥
◆暗线adj.:叔姨没戳破|被发现而不知
读原文，找素材
who/关键词 [明线] :动词/名词 [暗线] :形容词
Raine and I I: loved to come; peer; R: persuade; asked loudly a fan; fear of being spotted; nervous and anxious
Uncle and Aunt commenting about the students playing truant kind and cared about me
Dad fierce and strict
环境事物 cinema; seat; lights;
what关键句 leave the cinema without being noticed/spotted
P1P2关键词 P1: lights on, I seated; P2: Aunt and uncle waiting at the gate
3w1H playing truant; watched movie
2.设计固定的5句:
第一步: P1结尾句:据Paragraph2给定句出现的人物/动作,写前一个动作/事件
第二/三步: P2结尾句(1-2句) +升华:
(1)根据事件,定合价值观的结局(逃学)
(2)各个角色，对应的做法
第四/五步: P1/P2续写首句(承接给定句,写心理/动作链)
P1: When the movie ended and the lights came on, I remained seated. ①第四步心理:担心害怕/动作:躲 ②人们&叔姨最终离开,没看见我们 ③我们松口气 ④我们离开 ⑤第一步:我们抵达大门感觉前方有人 P2: In front of us were my aunt and uncle, waiting at the gate. ⑥第五步心理:震惊忐忑/动作:不自在 ⑦我&R解释 ⑧叔姨拆穿:早就发现 ⑨第二步我/Raine:意识到&承认错误 ⑩第三步叔姨: 教育/呼应首段/或升华
3.另外五句:仿原文句式，逆推内容设计
如何遣词造句
“读语篇，模仿语言”
->留意原文高频句式，可适当仿写
好处:减少错误
原文找句式: (续写原文: 10大常见句式,依次)
●When/As... 时间状语从句
●非谓语(V-ing/V-ed/To do)
●从句(定从/名从)
●副词/介词短语!
●对话独白
●倒装句
●虚拟语气
●无灵主语(无生命事物作主语,尤其情绪)
●比喻
●特殊小词(as...;. so...tht..
I was walking along the road to school one day and I met my friend Raine. He suggeested:that we skip school and go to the movies. I refused as my dad was very fierce and strict. After much persuasion, I gave in. There was a Will Smith movie on and I was a fan.
So we set off to the movies together, bought our tickets, popcorn and drinks and settled down comfortably. As we were early, the lights were still on. We watched people come in groups, families and there were couples too. Some of them looked like school students playing truant (t逃学) like us. As I turned around, I caught a glimpse of my uncle Andy and Aunt Jane walking in. They were kind and cared about me very much. I sank into my seat quickly to avoid being spotted. I signaled to Raine that there was someone I didn't want to see and Raine made it more obvious by tuning around and asking Who And where " loudly. It made me sit even lower in my seat.
To make things worse, they came and sat in the row behind us and were saying to each other how I would have loved to come to this movie as I adored Will Smith. They were even commenting about the students playing truant. Soon the movie began and I was glad when the lights were turned off but I didn't enjoy the movie at all for fear of being spotted. So, I sat there like an astronaut, peering over the front seat.
Every now and then I would secretly take a quick look at my aunt and uncle. I was sure they were also looking at me. Feeling nervous and anxious, I kept wondering how I could leave the cinema without being noticed.
阅读时，留意原文高频句式
◆原文关键句式: (部分列举)
●So we set off to the movies together, bought our tickets, popcorn and drinks and settled down comfortably.
●Feeling nervous and anxious, I kept wondering how I could leave the cinema without being noticed.
●As I turned around, I caught a glimpse of my uncle .... walking in.2
●To make things worse, they came and sat in the row behind us and..
●So, I sat there like an astronaut, peering over the front seat.
得出本文高频句式:
①动词排比:V1,V2,andV3;
②非谓语:Feeling+情绪形容词,sbdidsth.
③时间状从+非谓: As sb did sth, sb caught a glimpse of sb doing sth; (heard/saw)
④非谓语不定式: To do sth, sb did sth;
⑤对话;
⑥其他:比喻; as...as; so...that....
◆原文句式仿写示例:
尾段: Every now and then I would secretly take a quick look at my aunt and uncle. I was sure they were also looking at me. Feeling nervous and anxious, I kept wondering how I could leave the cinema without being noticed.
句式提炼: Feeling+情绪形容词, I wondered how I coul...without...
句式仿写: Feeling Embarrassed, I wondered how I could explain everything without being blamed.
感到尴尬，我想知道如何解释一切而不会受到指责。
以此类推，设计另外五句
总结
全篇展示
写作全国过程 细致解析
P1: When the movie ended and the lights came on, I remained seated. As the other audience started moving towards the door, I paid closer attention to my uncle and aunt who, however, still sat there talking. 原文仿写: As时间状从
原文仿写: see sb doing
Shortly afterwards, to my great relief, I saw them standing up and walking to the door. The moment the coast was clear, we left our seats, made a dash out of the hall, and fled down the stairs without any delay.
原文仿写: V1, V2 and V3
原文仿写: When时间状从
We ran towards the gate of the cinema like crazy when I spotted two familiar figures.
P2: In, front ofus were my aunt and uncle, waiting at the gate.
My uncle shot me a significant look while aunt stood there smiling.
Stunned and embarrassed, I felt my tongue knotted and wondered how I could explain the whole story without being blamed.
原文尾句仿写:情绪形容词, I wondered how I could..
"We saw you while leaving. We agreed you should come and enjoy the movie, but obviously not now. Think about how disappointed your father would be."
On hearing this, an enormous shame enveloped me and I swiftly confessed everything. Both Raine and I reflected on what we have done wrong, made sincere apologies and
headed back to school at last.
可适当仿写原文高频句式，非必须
P1: When the movie ended and the lights came on, I remained seated.
As the other audience started moving towards the door, I paid closer attention to my uncle and aunt, who, however, still sat there talking.
原文仿写:As时间状从 补: who定从
当其他观众开始向门口移动时,我更仔细地注意我的叔叔和阿姨，然而，他们仍然坐在那里说话。
原文仿写: see sb doing
Shortly afterwards, to my great relief, I saw them standing up and walking to the door.
不久之后，令我松了一口气的是，我看到他们站起来走到门口。
The moment the coast was clear, we left our seats, made a dash out of the hall, and fled down the stairs without any delay.
[原文仿写: V1, V2 and V3 (动词排比)
危机解除的那一刻，我们离开座位，冲出大厅，毫不拖延地逃下楼梯。
We ran towards the gate of the cinema like crazy when I spotted two familiar figures.
(= when two familiar figures came into my sight.)
原文仿写：when 时间状语从句
我们疯狂地向电影院门口跑去，这时我发现了两个熟悉的身影。
P2: In front of us were my aunt and uncle, waiting at the gate.
My uncle shot me a significant look while aunt stood there smiling.
舅舅意味深长地看我一眼，阿姨站在那里微笑着。
Stunned and embarrassed, I felt my tongue knotted and wondered how I could explain the whole story without being blamed.
原文尾句仿写：情绪形容词 I wonder how I could...
我感到震惊和尴尬，舌头打结,想知道我该如何解释整个故事而不受到指责。
"We saw you while leaving. We agreed you should come and enjoy the movie, but obviously not now. Think about how disappointed your father would be."
“我们在离开时看到你了。我们赞同你应该来欣赏这部电影，
但显然不是现在。想想你父亲会有多失望。”
On hearing this, an enormous shame enveloped me and I swiftly confessed everything.
听到这句话，我感到无比羞耻，我迅速承认了一-切。
Both Raine and I reflected on what we have done wrong, made sincere apologies and headed back to school at last.
雷恩和我都反思了我们做错了什么，并真诚地道歉,最后回到了学校。
P1: When the movie ended and the lights came on, I remained seaied.
As the other audience started moving towards the door, I paid closer attention to my uncle and aunt who, however, still sat there talking.
Shortly afterwards, to my great relief, I saw them standing up and walking to the door. The moment the coast was clear, we left our seats, made a dash out of the hall, and fled down the stairs without any delay.
We ran towards the gate of the cinema like crazy when I spotted two familiar figures.
P2: Infront ofus were my aunt and uncle, waiting at the gate.
My uncle shot me a significant look while aunt stood there smiling.
Stunned and embarrassed, I felt my tongue knotted and wondered how I could explain the whole story without being blamed.
"We saw you while leaving. We agreed you should come and enjoy the movie, but obviously not now. Think about how disappointed your father would be.'
On hearing this, an enormous shame enveloped me and I swiftly confessed everything. Both Raine and I reflected on what we have done wrong, made sincere apologies and headed back to school at last.读后续写之高分替换
小词小句替换&形容词副词
◆替换三要点:
1、换词性:
e.g.动词=其名词形式的动宾短语
2、高分替换词:
高中短语/小词/句式
3、叠词(加形容词副词):
加形容词:在名词前，生动形象/细节加副词:在动词/形容词前后，加强程度 复合叠词: 叠两/三词，叠动宾
替换三要点:
1、换词性
可变形词的不同词性用法:
delight (n.快乐开心; v.使快乐); delighted (adj. 快乐的)2，
A sense of delight enveloped the mother as she received the surprise. (名词)
当母亲收到了惊喜时,一种喜悦感笼罩着她。.
Delighted and touched, the mother held the twins in her arms tightly. (动词分词)
感到欣喜若狂和感动的，母亲紧紧地抱着双胞胎。
The thought of warmth brought by the twins greatly delighted her. (动词)
一想到双胞胎带来的温暖，她就非常高兴。
2、高分替换词
①常用结尾升华词:
the+adj.+story 那个..的故事 the adventure 那次冒险经历 the incident 那事故 the occurrence 发生的事情 the practice那次实践 the+ adj. +experience 那次..的经历 what had happened 已发生的事 what had occurred 发生的事 the happenings 已发生的事 the whole process整个过程
②常用环境词汇:
the+adj. +creature那.. 的生物 the...animal那..的动物 that..beast那..的野兽 the atmosphere氛围 the vehicle车辆/交通工具 形容词可用: nameless/unknown/scary fierce凶猛的/strong强壮的/ violent暴力的 (同.上) the surroundings周围 the transportation交通工具.
③常用词汇替换:
Way About Many Important enough method方法/ approach方法/ strategy策略/ measure措施 regarding / concerning / associated with/ as to关于 numerous无数的/ countless无数的/ loads of大量/许多 significant重大的; vital/crucial 至关重要的; essential 基本的 sufficient充足的; adequate足够的; abundant丰富
very xtremely非常地; considerably 相当(大/多)地; quite 相当地 amazingly/surprisingly惊人地; unbelievably 难以置信地 overwhelmingly压倒性地; tremendously 非常/异常地
good remarkable了不起的; outstanding 杰出的; splendid 出色的 incredible惊人的; extraordinary 非凡; exceptional 特别/优等admirable令人钦佩的;respectable可敬的
3、叠词(加形容词副词) (勿过度使用)
(1)加形容词:名词前(生动形象 /细节)
●the hungry/ angry wolf 饥饿/愤怒的狼
●the fierce/violent bear :入 凶猛/暴力的熊
●Face gleamed with surprised delight, Peter failed to utter a word.
脸上闪耀着惊讶的喜悦，彼得一句话也说不出来。
(2)加副词:动词/形容词前(加强程度)
●The night wind howled ruthlessly, nameless creatures murmured frequently in the dark, and the moonlight shone weakly on the ground.
夜风无情地呼啸着，无名生物在黑暗中频频地喃喃自语，月光微弱地照在地上。
(3)叠词(名词/动宾) (叠两/三词)
●The immediate approach proved practical and effective.
眼前的办法证明是切实可行的。
●Meanwhile, the twins prepared the breakfast tray, added a card they had made and walked out of the kitchen.
与此同时，双胞胎准备了早餐托盘,加了张他们制作的卡片，走出厨房。
●So we set off to the movies together, bought our tickets, popcorn and drinks and settled down comfortably.
于是我们一起去看电影，买了票、爆米花和饮料,安顿下来。
叠词语料库
①高分形容词：好的 （正向/事情）
方法 做法 effective有效的; practical 实用的; fruitful 富有成效的;constructive建设性的/有助益的;， beneficial有利的；advantageous有利的;有好处的; .favourable有利的
经历 故事 meaningful有意义的; significant 重大/影响深远的; worthwhile值得的; be worth doing值得做.... valuable有价值的;. precious宝贵的; priceless 无价的
人 真善美 admirable令人钦佩的;值得赞赏的respectable 值得尊敬的
①高分形容词：事物
动物 环境 （极端类） 动物:fierce凶猛的/狂热的烈的;violent暴力的 天气/环境: raging 猛烈的/狂暴的(a raging storm/thunder) 环境: wild 暴风雨的(wild weather)
动物 环境 （柔和） gentle温柔的; mild温和的; calm平静的; delicate细膩/柔和的; peaceful 平和的; warm温暖的;moderate/balmy温和的
①高分副词：
好好地做... appropriately / properly适当地; reasonably合理地; 好好地做.. completely / thoroughly彻底地/全面地; inapropermanner以恰当的方式
经常地 （频率） regularly经常地/规律地; frequently 经常地; constantly不断地; in a regular manner有规律地
很少/偶尔 （频率） rarely do sth很少做某事; occasionally偶尔地 dosthonceinawhile偶尔做某事;
动物 天气 心情 fiercely猛烈地; violently 猛烈地; wildly 疯狂地 intensely强烈地/剧烈地;r heatedly 激烈地(说)overwhelmingly压倒地/无法抵抗地; uncontrollably不可控
加强 程度 actually实际上; indeed确实; obviously/ apparently明显地; undoubtedly 毫无疑问地particularly/notably/significantly/especially 特别是/显著地
总结
替换三要点:
1、换词性:
e.g.动词=其名词形式的动宾短语
2、高分替换词:
高中短语/小词/句式
3、叠词(加形容词副词):
加形容词:在名词前，生动形象/细节加副词:在动词/形容词前后，加强程度 复合叠词: 叠两/三词，叠动宾读后续写之修改润色
修改润色“三三原则”
改错:
时态语态
主谓一致
人称和拼写
润色:
不重复
高中词汇
加形容词副词
(叠词叠动宾)
自检清单
内容 理解原文 衔接原文 把握主题 逻辑性 完整性 丰富性 抓住“首尾段+P1P2给定句+中间段首尾句”了吗 P1P2给定句续写衔接好了吗 P1尾句狠狠接住P2给定句没 狠抓“首尾段+中文注释”，结尾呼应第1-2段,升华结合主旨没 每一个情节的设计，都在原文找到依据没 符合角色特点没 结合P1P2给定句, 是否有该写的内容没写到 如有疑惑解开没 各个角色该有的戏份都给到没 各类描写用没 (按照原文占比)
语言 准确性 恰当性 多样性 复杂度 描写式语言 自助改错三重点:动词时态语态，主谓一致，人称和拼写 重点实词的用法对不对 符合情感基调 (可模仿原文关键词句) 词汇:润色三要点做到没 II语法: 10大语法句式用几个了 有没有用复杂句式 10大句式的杂糅 动作和心理描写结合没 (无灵/独主/非谓/with);有特定小词
连贯 // 连接词用没 (时间/程度副词，逻辑词);前后句子名词相关没
呈现 // 书写美观吗 词数符合要求不
一些须知: (我应该写什么 怎么写 )
1、读后续写评分要点:
(1)与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度
(2)内容、语法结构、词汇的丰富性和准确性
(3)上下文的连贯性
考查:阅读(读懂原文)、逻辑思维(情节设计)、写作能力(词汇句式)
2、读后续写目的:
一是清楚原文关键词和语言结构的使用情况,并通过续写短文表现出来。.
二是语言运用的准确性和丰富性。能根据需要使用较多、较复杂的词汇和语言结构。
三是对语篇结构的把控能力。对上下文逻辑关系的掌握，续写的短文语句连贯、有序。
四是创造性思维能力...要求学生详细和生动地描述情景、态度和感情
提示：适当仿写原文关键句式的理论支撑
真题再现
One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom.
I'm going to find a better spot for us to camp" and walked away. With no path to follow,Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place. she turned around, hoping to see the lake. Tо her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.
Tom! "she cried. "Help!" No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.
Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now. Jane began to wallk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake. As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.
[2016年浙江高考(首考)]
P1:But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.l
P2: It was daybreak when Jane woke up.
“故事: Jane和Tom去森林宿营，由于争吵, Jane独自行走于森林后迷路,在森林中，她后悔离开了Tom,度过一晚后，她发现了一条小溪，并吃了一些浆果充饥，在顺流而上的途中，她听到了直升机的声音,并决定使用自己的黄色衬衫来引起直升机的注意。”
第一段给出的首句:没有更多的直升机到来，天色也黑了下来。
第二段给出的首句: Jane睡了一晚后醒来了。
“第一段续写中，考生应该描述Jane晚上所做的事情;
第二段.写她醒来后发生的事情，按常理, Jane...应该获救。
“文章中划出的关键词包括:
人物: Jane, Tom;背景: lake, stream, at a distance;
事物: helicopter, yellow blouse;动作: walked, climbed; 情感: to her great joy。
One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom.
I'm going to find a better spot for us to camp" and walked away. With no path to follow,Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place. she turned around, hoping to see the lake. Tо her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.
Tom! "she cried. "Help!" No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.
Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now. Jane began to wallk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake. As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.
[2016年浙江高考(首考)] ① 分词 v-ing,v-ed ②时间状语
P1:But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.l
P2: It was daybreak when Jane woke up.
But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Because another helicopter flew overhead. They was very tired.They boring dark again to there.And they came bank very quickly. They wallked away. , they saw a lake. But Jane and herbaid,Tom doesn't think it was ture. Then she had climbed to a high place and she suddenly realized that she was lost. So they's think was ture. Some helicopters came bank. 评分员A: They was错误，接着两句都不通，They saw the lake中的they指的是谁，弄不清，They语法混乱; it was hope前面好像是抄的,莫名其妙，整篇文章唯一的亮点是 it was hope ，放在这儿很恰当，属于比较差的 二档低分 6分
It was daybreak when Jane woke up. She suddenly realized that she was lost. Then she cried "help!"Tom!" But they didn't saw the Jane. She could hear water trickling somewhere at a distance. It was hope. To her great joy, she boring a helicopter to a way. A few minutes,she quickly came bank with Tom. Jane took off her yellow blouse, so they came back again. 评分员B:第一段就出问题了。开头句子no more helicopters came表明没有直升机来,所以按照常理，没有直升机再来。而这篇作 文中却说Because another helicopter flewoverhead."，与所给可子内容矛盾。另外,这篇作文中错误太多，但不管怎样,把故事续写完了，6分。 评分员C:语法错误非常多，先不看内容,很多词拼错了都不知道。另外，"She suddenly realized hat she was lost."这句 话抄袭原文，第二档, 7分。
好:①有一亮点;②续写完了问题:语法错误非常多
But no more helicopters caTe and it was getting dark again. Jane was so sad. Night was beginning to fall, Jane walked and wanted to find an open area to rest. To her great joy, she found an open area,and had some fruits. Sitted in the stone, she was very worried and wanted very much to be with Tom. Why was I quarrel with Tom, Jane thought. Jane was tired but she slept a little time. 评分员A:第一-段还不错，第二段后面有 些画蛇添足。"An man went the Jane's eyes."讲不通; "It S Tom and Jane was very happy."中间应该有个逗号。虽然有一些语言错误，但意思基本说明白了。比上一篇好一点儿,第一篇刚才打二档，所以这篇打之档偏上，12分。 评分员B:这篇作文中的词汇比前几篇的稍微好一点儿，情节也更完整，主要问题是时态混乱，主谓不一致等，12分。 评分员C:这篇作文中有不少语法错误、 拼写错误、时态错误，如sitted in thestone,给11分。 好:①意思基本说明白; ②情节基本完整 问题:语法错误不少
It was daybreak when Jane woke up. Jane wanted to follow the sound to a stream and found the lake. With the time went by, Jane walked a long time. Never in her life had she wanted Tom more. Jane cried, she want to leave the forest. Suddenly she heard a helicopter too. She took off her yellow blouse. Luckily, the helicopter find her. An man went the Jane's eyes. It's Tom and Jane was very happy. She run to the Tom.
But пo more helicopters сате and it was getting dark again. With great confidence, she began to find some methods to satisfy her stomach. Suddenly, an idea stroke her head, She walked along the stream, hoping to findsome fish to eat. She knew that unless she had enough energy, she could get survived. Night fell, Jane fell into sleep, dreaming she would be rescued by a helicopter and be back to Tom. 评分员A: No sooner用错了。虽然感觉。出好像和上一篇差不多，但是文章中的一些 小词比第一篇用得好， 如no sooner这种 倒装，wild with joy,上一篇就没有， 所以是差一点的第四档，17分。 评分员B:这篇作文的词汇、语言丰富性都比前几篇要好一点，且有意识地尝试较高级 的句型。虽然"No sooner she saw Tom did she burst into tears."句型用得不对, 但不妨碍理解。另外, be wild with joy在续写中用来描述，人的一种情绪，用得蛮好的,还用了-ing形式表示伴随，16分。 评分员C:虽然这篇作文有几处拼写错误、时态错误、语法错误，如rubbish belonged to her等，但是用了比较复杂的句型来表达意思。同时与前文的衔接比较好,描写比较有新意，切合当时的场景，第四档中间偏下，16分。 好：1词汇丰富 2 句式复杂 3 衔接好 问题：语法有几处错去 但不影响理解
It was daybreak when Jane woke uр. Fortunately. it was sunny which brighter Jane's heart. With hope, Jane struggled to escape from the forest for several hours but in vain. Unconsciously, Jane found some rubbish belonged to her. Suddenly, she realized that her camp was not far away. No sooner she saw Tom did she burst into tears. Tom was also wild with joy. With tears on face, Jane apologized to Tom and said that she will never leave Tom.
◆“句式怕用错，要不要用”
[第三档]好:①意思基本说明白;②情节基本完整
问题:语法错误不少
[第四档]好:①词汇丰富;②复杂句式;③衔接好
问题:语法错误几处(但不妨碍理解)
A:“好像和上一篇差不多，但小词/用得好”;
B:词汇、语言丰富性都好,有意识地尝试较高级的句型;
C:用了比较复杂的句式;衔接较好”
But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Given that there might not be anything else to eat, Jane quickly picked some berries and wrapped them in her yellow blouse. Then she climbed back the tree in case of any wild beasts. Spending over a day alone in theforest, Jane felt more than depressed and exhausted. Everything seemed_ as hopeless as the long night. "I shouldn't have walked away." Sobbing in her arms, Jane fall asleep with trees whispering in the night wind. 评分员A:蛮好的，这篇文章“骨"“肉’“血”山“气”备至，我给最高评价-第五档。 “肉”“血”“骨”指的是内容、衔接和连贯。“气”就是精气神，让人眼前一亮的东西，如这篇作文里的分词前置、拟人的运用、小词的使用等。这是我见到的最好的，24分。 评分员B:简的心理活动描写得特别好。她对 自己做过的事表示后悔的话如“I shouldn't have walked away”,虽然很多学生在用，但是都没有用对，而这篇用对了，基本上没有错误，2o分。 评分员C:这篇作文语法错误基本，上没有， 还会用一些介词短语，如given that, in caseof;句型，如s..a...分词短语,如 Sobbing in her arm....等等,用得不错，包法结构和词汇也都不错，且内容丰富. 给第四档高分或者第五档低分，21分。 好：1 准确 2 句式丰富（与原文相似：分词/时间状语） 问题：不错：但还不够 （词汇语言）
It was daybreak when Jane woke up. All her clothes had become wet because of the heavy mist. As she was stretching her aching arms and legs,she heard something familiar."Jane, where are you Jane." Jane couldn't believe her ears. It was indeed Tom! She screamed with all her strength left. Seeing each other at a distance, they both burst into tears of great joy. It was truly a thrilling camping! "I'll never, never do that again" Jane decided when looking back at her "narrow escape"!
上五档高分:
第五档(21-25分)
1.与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段开头语衔接合理;内容丰富。
2.所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达;
有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。
第四档(16-20分)
1.与所给短文融洽度较高,与所提供各段落开头语衔接较为合理;二内容较丰富。
2.所使用语法结构和词汇较为丰富、准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达;
比较有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使所续写短文结构紧凑。
◆评分总结:准确(语法)、丰富(词汇句式/内容)、连贯融洽(连接词/开头衔接)
步骤:
1.先确定档次:抓显性的语言错误(时态、主谓一致、标点和拼写)
再看三关键: (语言)准确，(内容/词汇/句式)丰富,(上下文)连贯/与原文融洽
修改润色“三三原则”
改错:
时态语态
主谓一致
人称和拼写
润色:
不重复
高中词汇
加形容词副词
(叠词叠动宾)
◆改错三要点:
1、时态语态:
●动词时态(过去式 )
●动词语态(主动/被动用法，是否有特殊用法，平时查字典例句看用法)
2、主谓一致:
●名词单复数(可数名词单数，是否要带冠词)
●单复数名词对应动词形态(一般现在时，动词三单;复数名词，be动词变化)
3、人称和拼写:
●续写角色多，人称要用对
●单词拼写要仔细
互改
●连贯性(找出你“脑补”了的、以为写了、实际并没写到的内容)
●完整度(众人拾柴, 找出你自已没注意到的漏写的内容)
●逻辑性(每个人思考角度不同,找出逻辑思维漏洞)
润色三要点:
1.不重复:
同义替换
换词性/换用法/加词打破原有结构
2、高中词汇:
高分替换词(way->method/ approach)
高中短语/小词/句式
3、加形容词副词(叠词叠动宾):
名词前加形容词，生动形象/细节
叠两词/三词，叠动宾
自检清单
内容 理解原文 衔接原文 把握主题 逻辑性 完整性 丰富性 抓住“首尾段+P1P2给定句+中间段首尾句”了吗 P1P2给定句续写衔接好了吗 P1尾句狠狠接住P2给定句没 狠抓“首尾段+中文注释”，结尾呼应第1-2段,升华结合主旨没 每一个情节的设计，都在原文找到依据没 符合角色特点没 结合P1P2给定句, 是否有该写的内容没写到 如有疑惑解开没 各个角色该有的戏份都给到没 各类描写用没 (按照原文占比)
语言 准确性 恰当性 多样性 复杂度 描写式语言 自助改错三重点:动词时态语态，主谓一致，人称和拼写 重点实词的用法对不对 符合情感基调 (可模仿原文关键词句) 词汇:润色三要点做到没 II语法: 10大语法句式用几个了 有没有用复杂句式 10大句式的杂糅 动作和心理描写结合没 (无灵/独主/非谓/with);有特定小词
连贯 // 连接词用没 (时间/程度副词，逻辑词);前后句子名词相关没
呈现 // 书写美观吗 词数符合要求不
总结
修改&润色:三三原则
时态语态:动词时态;动词语态,主动/被动用法,是否有特殊用法
2.主谓一致:名词单复数;单复数名词对应动词形式
3、人称和拼写:续写角色多，人称要用对
润色三要点:
1、不重复:同义替换/换词性/换用法/加词打破原有结构
2、高中词汇:高分替换词;高中短语/小词/句式
3、加形容词副词(叠词叠动宾):名词前加形容词;形容词动词前加副词;叠加.
Checklists检查清单:内容、语言、连贯读后续写之环境描写
排比
“意象+动词”
1、排比:意象1+动词1,意象2+动词2, and意象3+动词3
扩写公式:形容词+意象+谓语动词+副词/方位介短
句子练习(5个) [用: 2022年全国1卷续写]
全篇练习(1篇)
排比（2-3项）
举例：
His sense of service,
intellectual curiosity
and capacity to squeeze fun out of any situation were all irrepressible.
他的服务意识、求知欲和随时随地挖掘乐趣的能力都是十足充沛的。
That mischievous, enquiring twinkle was as bright at the end as，
when I first set eyes on him.
他眼中那调皮、探询的光芒，临别时依然闪亮，一如初见。
举例：
I've talked about teachers' responsibility for inspiring students and pushing you to learn.
我谈到过教师激励学生并督促他们学习的责任。
I've talked about your parents' responsibility for making sure you stay on track, and you get your homework done, and don't spend every waking hour in front of the TV or with the xbox.
我谈到过家长的责任，要确保你们走正路,
完成家庭作业，不要整天坐在电视前或玩xbox游戏。
I've talked a lot about your government's responsibility for setting high standards, and supporting teachers and principals, and turning around schools that aren't
working, where students aren't getting the opportunities that they deserve.
我多次谈到过政府的责任，要制定高标准，支持教师和校长的工作，
彻底改善不能为学生提供应有机会的、教育质量差的学校。[whydowegotoschool我们为什么学习|Obama奥巴马]
Maybe you could be a great writer -- maybe even good enough to write a book or articles in a newspaper -- but you might not know it until you write that English paper -- that English class paper that's assigned to you.
Maybe you could be an innovator or an inventor -- maybe even good enough to come up with the next iPhone or the new medicine or vaccine -- but you might not know it until you do your project for your science class.
Maybe you could be a mayor or a senator or a Supreme Court justice -- but you might not know that until you join student government or the debate team.
你或许能成为一名出色的作家- --甚至可能写书或在报纸上发表文章- -但你可能要在完成那篇英文课的作文后才会发现自己的才华。
你或许能成为一名创新者或发明家--甚至可能设计出新一代iPhone或研制出新型药物或疫苗--但你可能要在完成科学课的实验后才会发现自己的才华。
你或许能成为一名市长或参议员或最高法院的大法官--但你可能要在参加学生会的工作或辩论队后才会发现自己的才华。
[whydowegotoschool我们为什么学习|Obama奥巴马]
举例
The GPNP is designed to reflect the guiding principle of." protecting the authenticity and integrity (完整性) of natural ecosystems, preserving biological diversity, protecting ecological buffer zones,_ 61 and_ leaving behind precious natural assets (资产) for future generations".
[2022年全国乙卷]语法填空 丰富 有条理 有画面
The "First International Tea Day Tea Road Cooperative Initiative" issued at the ceremony calls for people working in the tea industry to come together to promote international cooperation_ _67 and_ cultural exchanges.
排比 在诗词中运用
I love three things in the world:
the sun
the moon .
and you.
The sun for the day
the mооп for the night
and you for ever. "
素材：意象+动词/形容词/介词短语/副词
our voice is water open beneath stars, collected from abundant rain, gone to low places. The night is moist, the ground wet, air still, trees silent, and tonight I love you. 你的声音如繁星之下开阔的水 自丰富的雨水积聚而成，流向低地。 夜晚微润，地面潮湿， 空气寂静，树林沉默， 今夜我爱你。
“意象+动词”
sun/ moon + shines (发光)
stars + twinkle (闪烁)
wind + blows (吹)
rain + falls (落下)
air + flows (流动)
cloud/fog + spreads (扩散)
tree + waves (摇曳)
1、排比:意象1+动词1,意象2+动词2,and意象3+动词3.
(注意:优先用原文的意象，再按需补充)
The sun shines, the wind blows and the tree waved.
阳光灿烂，风吹着,树摇曳着。
Too simple and silly
[2022全国1卷]: It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route (路线) through thick evergreen forest.
扩写公式:形容词+意象+动词+副词/方位介短
“冷冷的冰雨在我脸上胡乱地拍
形容词 意象 介短.方位 副词 动词
●“The sun shone”扩写: (你任务:“the wind blows" ;“the tree waved")
The morning sun shone on the ground warmly and gently.
The warm morning sunlight fell on the ground mildly.
形容词+意象+固定动词+副词 （9种）
blazing炽热的 glaring耀眼的 shimmering闪烁的 lingering逗 留不去的 weak微弱的 sun， sunlight sunshine shine发光/照耀 burn燃烧 (bright) brightly like an oven (烈日)像烤箱. dazzlingly灿烂/耀眼地 lively_充满活力地
gentle/mild温柔/和的 soft柔和的 weak微弱的 white/silvery白/银白的 moon moonlight shine发光 glow发光 weakly微弱地 lightly轻轻地 gently轻柔地 softly轻柔地
glittering闪闪发光的 stars twinkle闪烁 sparkle闪耀/烁 glimmer发微光 vividly生动地/活泼地 quietly安静地 peacefully 平静地
strong/strong劲(风) high / light大/小(风) chill/cold冷/寒冷biting剌骨的 wind风 a (light) breeze微风 blow吹 howl呼啸 roar怒号 drop减弱 fiercely猛烈地ruthlessly无情地gradually渐渐地
crisp清新/凉爽的fresh新鲜的 refreshing清爽的delicate柔和/清香的chill/cold冷的 air flow流动 envelop+sth笼罩surround+sth/sb围绕 totally完全/彻底地completely完全地
light轻/少的 heavy重/大量的 rain drizzle毛毛雨 fall落下 pourdown倾泻而下 beat down打下来 heavily drummed the window敲击窗户
thick浓厚的 heavy重的 black乌(云) grey灰 thin薄(云) Cloud spread / move扩散/移动 gathered in the sky聚集 covered the sky遮盖 enveloped the forest笼罩 rapidly快速地 in the distance like a web
thick浓(雾) dense密集的 faint微弱的 slight薄的 white Mist spread扩散 enveloped the forest笼罩 swallowed the land吞没 melted in the sun消散 hungintheair弥漫在空中 rapidly Completely totally
green tall / young Tree waved摆动/摇曳 shook (原形shake)摇摆 shivered / trembled颤动 flapped / swayed摇摆 around uncontrollably
1、排比:意象1+动词1,意象2+动词2, and意象3+动词3.
(注意:优先用原文的意象，再按需补充)
步骤1:定续写位置，找原文意象+动词(可考虑结尾/升华句)
步骤2:补充意象+动词(形容词+意象， 动词+副词/方位介短)
The night wind howled ruthlessly.夜风无情地呼啸着
Some unknown creatures murmured in the dark.在黑暗中喃喃自语 The moonlight shone weakly on the ground.月光微弱地照在地 上
步骤3:扩写，合成句子(形容词/副词/介短;最后的分句前加“and")
The night wind howled ruthlessly, nameless creatures murmured in the dark and the moonlight shone weakly on the ground.
(例句原文出现了: animals动物，下过雨，来到了晚上)
练习: 2022全国1卷
步骤1,定续写位置，找原文意象: forest (人David and classmates,情绪 )
步骤2，补充意象: forest+sun +air, David and classmates, laughter
构思: sun shone; air surrounded D&C; laughter filled the forest
步骤3，扩写，组成句: (形容词+意象+谓语动词+副词/方位介短)
The sun shone warmly on the tree leaves, the heated air surrounded David and his classmates, and the forest was filled with laughter of excitement.
阳光温暖地照在树叶上，炙热的空气环绕着大卫和同学们，森林里充满了兴奋的笑声。
读后续写之环境描写
非谓语
2、非谓语:意象+谓语动词(主句)，非谓语动词(分句)
①动作链: The stars twinkled vividly in the sky, looking as bright as diamonds.
②拟人式: Sunlight shone gently on David, celebrating his bravery.
扩写:意象+谓语动词,非谓语动词+比喻/拟人like
The stars sparkled vividly, glazing at us like a curious child.
2.非谓语句式:意象+谓语动词1,非谓语动词2.
①动作链:意象+分解动作1,非谓语分解动作2.
②拟人动作:意象+动作1,非谓语拟人动作2.(所有意象通用)
通用扩写:意象+谓语动词,非谓语动词+比喻/拟人like
2、非谓语:①动作链:意象+分解动作1,非谓语分解动作2
例:“冷冷的冰雨在我脸上胡乱地拍”
The chilly rain slapped randomly on my face.
写法1 (上一个动作+地点):“(从天上)掉下来”
Pouring down from the sky, the chilly rain slapped randomly on my face.
●写法2 (下一个动作+地点):“溅得满地都是”
The chilly rain slapped randomly on my face, splashing over the whole area.
非谓语:①动作链:意象+分解动作1，非谓语分解动作2
hick浓厚的 heavy重的 black乌(云) grey灰thin薄(云) Cloud spread/ move扩散/移动(动作) gathered in the sky聚集(动作) covered the sky遮盖(结 果) rapidly in the distance like a web
自由组合：（搭配形容词、介短和比喻；句子拉长，效果拉满）
The clouds moved rapidly in the distance, enveloping the whole forest.
(云在远处快速移动,笼罩着整个森林)
The clouds moved rapidly in the distance, gathering in the sky like a web.
(云在远处快速移动,聚集在空中，如同一张网)
6种常见意象,动作拆分: .
The rain poured down heavily, beating against the windows. (倾 盆而下，敲打窗户)
The wind was roaring, uprooting a bunch of trees. (狂风呼啸, 把树连根拔起)
The clouds moved rapidly in the distance, enveloping the whole forest.
(云在远处快速移动,笼罩着整个森林)
The sunlight broke through the forest, shining gently on the ground.
阳光穿过森林，轻轻地照在地面上。
The moonlight shone weakly on the ground, covering everything in silver.
月光微弱地照在地上，将一切都笼罩在银色之中。
Dotting the sky, the naughty stars vividly lit up the night.
散布于天空中,调皮的星星们把夜色映得栩栩如生。
2、非谓语:②拟人动作:意象+原生动作1,非谓语拟人动作2
动作1:意象的原生动作
(sun/moon shines; stars twinkle)
动作2:拟人式动词(好消息: 基本可共用! )
see/witness见证; watch注视; observe 观察; bring (带来)
share (分享); remind sb of (使人想到); celebrate (庆贺/赞美)
真题例句[2022年全国1卷]:
Sunlight shone gently on David, celebrating his bravery and determination.
阳光温柔地洒在大卫身上，赞美他的勇敢和决心。
The whole forest was filled with laughter and applause, witnessing David's success in overcoming the monster of fear in him.
..充满了欢声笑语和掌声,见证了大卫成功战胜了他心中的怪物恐惧。
练习:
整座森林沐浴在阳光中,分享着David的喜悦。(按需改写/扩写)
The whole forest is bathed in sunlight, sharing David's delight.
Bathed in the gentle sunlight, the whole forest watched David pass the line and shared his delight.( 分词前置)
Bathed in the warm sunlight, the trees waved in the breeze, sharing the joy and glee with David for his courage. (Done..， 主句，doing sth. )
整个森林的树都在欢快地摇摆,祝贺David成功克服困难和内心的恐惧。
The trees all over the forest swayed cheerfully, congratulating David on his success in conquering the challenge and his inner fears.
非谓语扩写:意象+谓语动词1,非谓语动词2+比喻/拟人
The stars sparkled vividly, glazing at us like a curious child.
星光熠熠生辉,像好奇的孩子一样盯着我们。
温和喻体:
●a curious child (looking at us with anticipation) 一个好奇的孩子(期待地看着我们)
●naughty children (looking at us with curiosity)S顽皮 的孩子(好奇地看着我们)
●a quiet/keen observer ofsth 安静的/热切的观察者
●an old friend witnessing our delight 一位见证我们快乐的老朋友(换“喜怒哀乐”)
激烈喻体: a wild beast猛兽; a fierce monster凶猛的怪物
动词: serve as / act as充当..角色; look like看起来像..
●The trees waved delightedly, serving as a keen observer of David's success.
树木高兴地挥手,作为大卫成功的热切观察者。
●The afternoon sun shone on the falling leaves, making everything look like a temple of gold.
午后的阳光洒在落叶上，使一-切看起来像一座金殿。
总结
读后续写环境描写.非谓语总结
2.非谓语句式:意象+谓语动词1,非谓语动词2.
①动作链:意象+分解动作1,非谓语分解动作2
The rain poured down heavily, beating against the windows.
②拟人式:意象+原生动作1,非谓语拟人动作2
Sunlight shone gently on David, celebrating his bravery and determination.
通用扩写:意象+谓语动词1,非谓语动词2 +比喻/拟人 like
The stars sparkled vividly, glazing at us like a curious child.
环境描写(注意: 较适合原文有写景的;优先用原文的意象，再补充)
1、排比:意象1+动词1,意象2+动词2, and意象3+动词3.
The air was dedicatedly still, tree considerately silent and the night remarkably peaceful.
扩写:形容词+意象+谓语动词+副词/介短
The morning sun shone on the ground warmly and gently.
2、非谓语:意象+谓语动词(主句),非谓语动词(分句)
①动作链: The stars twinkled vividly in the sky, looking as bright as diamonds.
②拟人式: Sunlight shone gently on David, celebrating his bravery.
扩写:意象+谓语动词，非谓语动词+比喻/拟人like
The stars sparkled vividly, glazing at us like a curious child.读后续写之情绪描写
情绪词汇20个总结
情绪形容词 情绪名词
joyful Delighted grateful appreciative thankful Annoyed Furious Sorrowful fearful frightened 快乐的 高兴的 感激的 欣赏的;感激的 感谢的，感激的 恼怒的，气恼的 狂怒的 悲哀的 恐惧的 害怕的,惊吓的 joy delight Gratitude/gratefulness appreciation thankfulness annoyance fury sorrow fear fright 喜悦 喜 感激 欣赏 感恩 烦恼 愤怒 悲哀 恐惧 惊吓
panicked Regretful Remorseful guilty Astonished Nervous Anxious Frustrated Courageous brave 恐慌的 后悔的 悔恨的 有罪的 惊讶的 不安的 焦虑/担心的;紧张的 沮丧的;挫败的 勇敢的;无畏的 勇敢的 panic regret remorse guilt Astonishment Nervousness anxiety Frustration Courage bravery 恐慌 后悔 悔恨 内疚;悔恨 惊讶 紧张 焦虑 挫败;灰心 勇气 勇气
读后续写.情绪描写]句式总结
①无灵主语+时间状语从句:情绪名词+动词+sb+ as/when sb do sth. （长句）
Uncontrollably, nervousness overwhelmed Peter as he stepped onto the stage.
②非谓语:情绪形容词1+情绪形容词2,sb do sth,doing sth.（加在你的"sbdosth"前）
Nervous and slightly scared, Peter managed to step onto the stage, starting to deliver his speech.
③让步状语从句:情绪形容词+as sb+be动词，sb do sth. （加在你的“sb do sth”前）
Nervous as he was, David plucked up courage and made his way to the stage.
④独立主格:身体部位+非谓语动词，sb do sth. （长句）
Hands trembling slightly, peter still managed to step onto the stage.
每一篇续写都能用!
1、无灵主语.解析
我开心:“I am happy.
★(换主语) :“开心(的情绪)抓住了我”
Delight seized me.
★(加介短) :“一股开心(的情绪)抓住了我”
A wave of delight seized me.
★(加并列) :“开心与振奋(的情绪)抓住了我”
Delight and excitement seized me.
★(加副词):“即刻地，一股开心(的情绪)抓住了我”
Instantly, a strong sense of delight seized me.
★(加时间状从):“听到那好消息，一股开心(的情绪)即刻抓住了我”
Instantly, a strong sense of delight seized me as I heard the good news.
1.无灵主语:“情绪名词+固定动词+sb"+as/when sb do sth
当某人做某事时，一股xx情绪涌上心头。
例句: Uncontrollably, a wave of regret washed over me as I heard the bad news.
听到这个坏消息时，一股悔恨的情绪无法控制地涌上我心头。
(情绪名词) : happiness/joy/delight开心 gratitude/ appreciation感激 admiration钦佩/赞赏 anger/rage/fury狂怒 sadness/sorrow悲伤 fear/terror/ fright/panic害怕 guilt/regret/remorse愧疚悔恨 astonishment/ shock/surprise震惊 nervousness/anxiety/stress不安/焦虑/压力 (固定动词) : seize抓住 catch (过去式caught) strike (过去式struck) surround围绕着 take holdof控制 wash over让人感到 come over包围/支配 envelop笼罩 overwhelm使难以承受 +sb
练习[2022全国1卷]
1.当意识到如果没有恰当和及时的说服和鼓励，大卫的情况可能会变得更糟,我感到担忧和焦虑。
Worry and anxiety seized me as I realized David's situation might get worse without proper and prompt pursuasion and encouragement.
2.当大卫终于下定决心继续赛跑时，我感到欣慰和开心。
Relief and delight came over me when David finally became determined to continue the race.
2.非谓语:情绪形容词1+情绪形容词2, sb do sth, doing sth.
(感到xx和xx,某人做某事1,并做某事2)
例句: Nervous and scared, Peter managed to step onto the stage, starting to deliver
his speech.
(感到)紧张和害怕，彼得勉力走上舞台,开始发表演讲。
练习1:[2022全国1卷]感到坚定和受到鼓舞，David抬起头，感激地看着我。
Determined and inspired (encouraged), David raised his head, looking at me with gratitude.
练习2: (感到)放松的和快乐的，大卫在越过终点线后立刻向我挥手，表达他的快乐和感激。
Relieved and delighted, David waved at me immediately after crossing the finish line, conveying his happiness and gratitude.
3.让步状语从句:情绪形容词+as sb+be动词，sb (still) do sth.
尽管某人(感到)xx,某人仍做某事
●例句: Nervous as he was, Peter plucked up courage and made his way to the stage.
尽管很紧张，彼得仍鼓起勇气走上舞台。
练习1: [2022全国1卷]尽管还有一丝紧张，David决心完成赛跑。
Slightly nervous as he was, David became determined to finish the race.
练习2: [2022广州一模]尽管很着急和不情愿，我还是按照爸爸的要求去洗碗。
Anxious and reluctant as I was, I still did the dishes at Dad's request.
4.独立主格:身体部位+动词非谓语，sb do sth.
Tears welling up in his eyes, he thanked the police with/in a trembling voice.
Tears streaming down his cheeks, David thanked me for the timely encouragement.
Eyes filled with regretful tears, sb do sth... (眼里满含着..)
Eyes glittering with relief/joy, sb do sth... (眼里 闪着..)
Face gleaming with delight, Peter failed to utter a word. (脸上洋溢着喜悦)
Heart beating with happiness, sb.. (某人的心..而怦怦直跳)
其他部位: Arms/legs/ muscles aching and knees shaking/trembling, I did sth...
(胳膊/腿/肌肉酸痛,膝盖发抖/颤抖,我..
(划横线的情绪词，可按需换掉)
练习1: [2022全国1卷]大卫自信而坚定，继续奔跑，汗水顺着他的脸流下来。
Confident and determined, David kept on running, sweat streaming down his face.
练习2:让我们欣喜若狂的是，大卫顺利越过终点线，脸上洋溢着满足的喜悦。
To our ecstasy, David crossed the finish line smoothly, his face shining with satisfied delight.
真题运用
练习[2022全国1卷]:
It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route through thick evergreen forest.
I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasn't with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run.
What was wrong He had worked so hard for this event!
I quickly searched the crowd for the school's coach and asked him what had happened. "I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him," he explained uncomfortably. "I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide."
I bit back my frustration . I knew the coach meant well-he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.
David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the
cross-country team. It just took him longer -that's all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the David faced and was school, I was familiar with the challenges the challenges proud of his strong determination.
Paragraph 1: We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me.
Paragraph 2: I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
练习[2022全国1卷]:
第一段概述:我引起David注意;鼓励、说服David参加比赛; David思考后决定完成比赛
思考:这些情节中，哪些位置适合加情绪描写，4种句式用哪种
参考情绪写法: (加在最后“David改变主意/决定参赛”之处)
1.泪流满面，大卫用颤抖的声音感谢我的鼓励，“我永远不应该放弃。我相信我会成功的!” Tears spilling out of his eyes, David thanked me for the encouragement in a trembling voice,“Never should I give up. I believe I'll make it!" .
2.眼里闪烁着越来越多的自信，大卫坚定地看了我一眼，并承诺会完成越野跑。
Eyes sparkling with increasing confidence, David shot me a determined look and promised that he would complete the cross-country run.
3.受到鼓舞并松了- -口气，大卫想到已完成的充分准备，终于获得了极大的信心。
Inspired and relieved, David eventually gained enormous confidence at the thought of the full preparation he had accomplished.读后续写之万能句型
万能片段①:复杂心情(负向)
万能片段②:不知所措(负向)
万能片段③: 感激(转变)
万能片段④:激动(转变)
万能片段⑤:紧张+成功(正向)
万能片段⑥:成功+结尾(正向)
解析
万能片段1:复杂心情(震惊/害怕/迷茫)
For a moment, within my heart was a complex feeling, which made me rooted to the spot.
I should not have behaved in that way.
有一瞬间，我心中有一种复杂的感觉，令我钉在原地(全部倒装+定从)
我不应该那样做(虚拟语气)
(红字通用，蓝字根据题目替换）
真题例子
[2016浙江卷]:
在她内心有一种复杂的感觉，简维持一动也不动，疲惫和无法动弹。
Within her heart was a complex feeling. Jane remained rooted to the spot, exhausted and unable to move.
[2021八省联考续写:在我内心有巨大的惊讶和感激，我站着一-动也丕动，盯着那个即将从盒子里拿出午餐的女孩。
Within my heart were enormous surprise and gratitude. I stood rooted to the spot, staring at the girl who was about to take out their lunch from a box.
[2021全国1卷]:爸爸难以置信地钉在原地，当他看着可怕的厨房，想象双胞胎做了啥
Within his heart was a complex feeling. Dad remained rooted to the spot in disbelief, watching the terrible kitchen and imagining what they had done.
复杂心情词汇
Complex complicated emotion (s) startled freeze (froze) adj.复杂的 adj.复杂的 n.情绪 adj.吃惊的 v.冻住，冻结 be rooted to the spot abruptly stand (stood) still imagined what sb had done the sudden situation (因为惧怕或吃惊而)钉在原地 突然地 站住不动那 想象下某人做啥 突如其来的情况
万能片段2:不知所措(茫然/紧张/害怕)
基础版:心在狂跳，她不知道该怎么办。随着数秒后，她的脑海里出现了一个想法。
Heart beating wildly, she had no idea what to do.
As a few seconds passed, an idea came into her mind.
升级版:(高分替换词+比喻+名从+时间独立主格句式)
Heart beating wildly like a beast, she was at a loss what to do next. A couple of seconds slipping away, an idea struck her like lightning.
（独立主格句式:独立主语1+非谓语动词，句子主语2+谓语动词。）
真题举例
练习1:她的脸颊因尴尬而灼热，她不知道该怎么办。(前半句 “五官”用:独立主格)
Cheeks burning with embarrassment, she wondered what to do.
练习2:顿时，她的大脑一片空白，不知道该怎么办。 (前半句“大脑”用:独立主格)
All of a sudden, her mind going blank, she had no idea what to do.
练习3:被所发生的一切吓坏了，他站原地不动，不知道接下来怎么办(非谓语)。
Terrified by what had happened, he was rooted to the spot, not knowing what to do next.
不知所措词汇
wildly like a beast like lightning slip away (be)at a loss adv.狂乱地 像猛兽般地 像闪电般地 (时间)溜走 不知所措的 Mind going blank,.. Heart beating (racing).... Cheeks burning, ... wonder what to do a couple of 大脑一片空白,... 心狂跳... 脸颊在燃烧般.. . (不知道)想着怎么办 一些(人或物)
万能片段3:感激(感激+感悟)
①Choked with overwhelming gratitude, Mac bowed low to them repeatedly, without whose help he couldn't have gone through it.
②It was this unique experience that reminded Mac of the value of strangers' help, inspiring him to spread this kindness to others.
①Mac被巨大的感激之情所哽咽，- -再向他们深深鞠躬，没有他们的帮助，他就无法度过难关。
②正是这个独特的经历让Mac想到了陌生人帮助的价值，激励他将这种善意传播给他人。
(红字模板通用，蓝字根据题目替换)
提炼:
①Choked with overwhelming ... sb1...sb2, without whose help sb1 couldn't have done sth.
②It was this unique experience that reminded sb1 of the value of sth, inspiring him to do sth.
练习: [2022全国1卷the forest run]
构思结尾: David完成跑步，明白勇气的重要t(用以上模板)
①David因巨大的兴奋而哽咽，他紧紧地抱着我和他的教练，没有(我们的)指导，他就无法完成跑步，他坚持这样说。
②正是这次独特的经历让大卫想到了勇气和信心的价值，激励他从此勇敢地应对挑战。
参考范文: (红字模板通用，黑字根据题目替换)
Choked with overwhelming excitement, David hugged me and his coach tightly, without whose guidance he couldn't have finished the run, as he insisted. It was this unique experience that had reminded David of the value of courage and faith, inspiring him to address challenges bravely ever since.
感激词汇
overwhelming Gratitude repeatedl go through sth value adj.巨大的 n.感激 adv.一再地 度过(难关) n.价值，重要性 be chocked with (+情绪n.) bowed (low) to sb couldn't have done sth remind sb of sth inspire sb to do sth 因..而哽咽 向某人(深深)鞠躬 本不能做到(但实际做了) 提醒某人做某事(使某人想到某事) 激励某人做某事.
万能片段4:激动(开心/紧张/害怕)
情绪+肢体+语言
Overwhelmed by wild joy, I rose to my feet and punched my fist in the air, shouting out loud,“I made it!".
被狂野的喜悦所淹没，我站起来，在空中挥拳，大喊道:“我做到了! ”
练习1:惊慌失措，我跳了起来，尽可能大声地尖叫:“救命!”。
Overcome by a sense of panic, I rose to my feet, screaming as loud as I could,“Help!”.
练习2:被一阵紧张所支配，我跳了起来，问自己说:“我该怎么办 ”。
Dominated by a flush of nervousness, I jumped to my feet, asking myself,“What should I do ”
练习:
[2021全国1卷Mother's Day Surprise] (红字通用，黑字根据题目替换) “成功了!我们做到了! Jeff 大喊大叫，她在空中挥舞着拳头。
一种温暖的感觉充满了她们的心，因为这对她们来说真的是- - 次难忘的经历。不管怎样，她们胜利完成了一个愉悦的惊喜
“It was a success! We made it!”
Jeff shouted as she punched her fist in the air.
A sense of warmth filled their hearts in that it was truly a memorable experience for them. (in that由于=because)
Believe it or not, they pulled off a delightful surprise.
激动词汇
made it in that a sense of Truly delightful 成功了;做到了 由于(=because) 一种..感觉(后加情绪名词)真正地. (=really / exactly) 令人快乐/愉悦的 punched sb's fist warmth filled sb's heart a memorable experience pulled off (doing) sth Believe it or not, ... 挥舞拳头 温暖充盈内心 一次难忘的经历 胜利完成 (= succeed in doing)不管怎样; 不管你信不信
万能片段5:紧张+成功
Heart racing and palms sweating, he dragged his trembling legs forward.
Taking a deep breath, he murmured to himself firmly, “Everything will be great. I’ll make it!"
(成功后) Hearing the inspiring news, he leaped into the air with joy.
[2022深圳二模Go Green] (以上红字通用，黑字根据题目替换)
心跳加速，手心出汗，他拖着颤抖的双腿向前走。
深吸一口气，他坚定地喃喃自语道，“- -切都会很好的。我能做到!”听到这个鼓舞人心的消息，他高兴地跳到了空中。
相关词汇
heart racing palms sweating hands shaking throat tightening legs trembling 心跳加速着... 手心出汗着... 手抖着... 喉咙紧绷着.. 腿在颤抖着... dragged sb's legs /feet rose to sb's feet leaped into the air murmured to oneself took a deep breath 拖曳着步伐 站/跳起来 跳起来/跃入空中 喃喃自语 深吸了一口气
心跳加速，手心出汗，他拖着颤抖的双腿向前走。
深吸一口气，他坚定地喃喃自语道，“- -切都会很好的。我能做到!”听到这个鼓舞人心的消息，他高兴地跳到了空中。
Heart racing and palms sweating, David dragged his trembling legs back to the course.
He could feel nothing but his hands shaking, heart pounding and throat tightning.
Taking a deep breath, he murmured to himself firmly,“Everything will be great. I'll make it!" ....
Having finished the run, David leaped into the air with joy.
紧张+成功词汇 （左边动词为非谓语，右边动词为谓语过去式）
heart racing (heart pounding) palms sweating Hands shaking Throat tightening legs trembling 心跳加速着... 手心出汗着.. 手抖着... 喉咙紧绷着... 腿在颤抖着... . dragged sb's legs /feet rose to sb's feet leaped into the air murmured to oneself took a deep breath 拖曳着步伐 站/跳起来 跳起来/跃入空中 喃喃自语 深吸了一口气
万能片段6:成功+结尾
A buzz of excitement filled the air as he finally made it.
Peter was so thrilled in that he succeeded in delivering the speech and convincing the judges.
He thought to himself that he would do whatever he could whenever needed. Shedding tears of joy, he was in high spirits the whole day!
[2022深圳二模Go Green]
空气中弥漫着一阵热烈的兴奋，他最终做到了。
Peter非常激动，因为他成功地发表了演讲并说服了评委们。他内心想到，只要有需要，他会尽其所能。
他流下了喜悦的泪水,整天都兴高采烈!
练习:
[2016年浙江高考] (红字通用，黑字根据题目替换)
空气中弥漫着一阵热烈的兴奋，Jane最终获救了。
她非常激动，因为她成功地和丈夫团聚。
她内心想到，她再也不会犯同样的错误了。
流下了喜悦的泪水，夫妇两人都兴高采烈! (句首非谓语shedding tears)
A buzz of excitement filled the air as Jane was eventually rescued.
She was so thrilled in that she succeeded in reuniting with her husband.
She thought to herself that never would she make the same mistake
Shedding tears of joy, the couple were in high spirits!
成功+结尾词汇
Thrilled convince judge shed tears tears of joy dj.兴奋的，激动的(=delighted) v.说服，使信服 n.评委/法官v.判断 流泪 喜悦的眼泪 A buzz of excitement succeed in (doing) sth deliver a speech think to oneself in high spirits 一阵兴奋 成功做某事 发表演讲 内心想着 兴高采烈;心情欢畅
总结
万能片段①:复杂心情(负向)
Within my heart was a complex feeling, which made me rooted to the spot.
万能片段②:不知所措(负向)
Heart beating wildly like a beast, she was at a loss what to do next.
万能片段③:感激(转变)
Choked with overwhelming gratitude, Mac bowed low to them repeatedly, without whose help he couldn't have gone through it.
万能片段④:激动(转变)
Overwhelmed by wild joy, I rose to my feet and punched my fist in the air, shouting out loud, “I made it!".
万能片段⑤:紧张+成功(正向)
Heart racing and palms sweating, he dragged his trembling legs forward. Taking a deep breath, he murmured to himself firmly, ...
万能片段⑥:成功+结尾(正向)
He thought to himself that .... Shedding tears of joy, he was in high spirits the whole day!

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