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高考英语读后续写微技能
---动作链描写
Action Chains
in Continuation Writing
Start!
1. 预测前置
Please review and familiarize yourselves with action chain descriptions! Learn to appreciate them!
Refer to your learning material!
Analysis of Test Papar
年份 试卷版本 情节 侧重点
2024.06 新高考I 参加会与路遇暖心出租车司机 侧重心理描写和动作描写
2023.06 新高考I&II 在老师鼓励下参加作文比赛 侧重心理描写和动作描写
2023.01 浙江高考 我意外救下蜂鸟 侧重动作描写
2022.06 新高考I&II David 克服自身局限参加比赛 侧重心理描写和动作描写
2021.06 新高考I&II 兄妹俩为妈妈正准备早饭 侧重心理和动作描写
真题再现 （2024高考英语新课标I读续)
I met Gunter on a cold, wet and unforgettable evening in September. I had planned to fly to Vienna and take a bus to Prague for a conference. Due to a big storm, my flight had been delayed by an hour and a half. I touched down in Vienna just 30 minutes before the departure of the last bus to Prague. The moment I got off the plane, I ran like crazy through the airport building and jumped into the first taxi on the rank without a second thought. That was when I met Gunter. I told him where I was going, but he said he hadn’t heard of the bus station. I thought my pronunciation was the problem, so I explained again more slowly, but he still looked confused. When I was about to give up, Gunter fished out his little phone and rang up a friend. After a heated discussion that lasted for what seemed like a century, Gunter put his phone down and started the car. Finally, with just two minutes to spare we rolled into the bus station. Thankfully, there was a long queue (队列) still waiting to board the bus. Gunter parked the taxi behind the bus, turned around, and looked at me with a big smile on his face. “We made it,” he said. Just then I realised that I had zero cash in my wallet. I flashed him an apologetic smile as I pulled out my Portuguese bankcard. He tried it several times, but the card machine just did not play along. A feeling of helplessness washed over me as I saw the bus queue thinning out. At this moment, Gunter pointed towards the waiting hall of the bus station. There, at the entrance, was a cash machine. I jumped out of the car, made a mad run for the machine, and popped my card in, only to read the message: “Out of order. Sorry.”
Paragraph 1 I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news.
Paragraph 2 Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised.
action chain 1
action chain 2
Learning objectives
1. 21’-25’: able to create a vivid picture to visualize the situation by using action chains and action scenes properly;
第一梯队：21分-25分：能够合理运用动作链和动作面，创造出生动的画面，将情境形象化；
2. 16’-20’: able to thoroughly comprehend SCM principle and try to structure action chains correctly;
第二梯队：16 分 -20 分：能够透彻理解SCM原理，并尝试正确构建动作链；
3. 11’-15’: able to recognize the significance of “To show, not to tell” method, and cultivate the awareness of using action chains.
第三梯队：11分-15分：能够认识到“to show, not to tell”方法的意义，并培养使用动作链的意识。
Invite!
2. 主题兴发
Please watch the short video clip and descirbe what Bear Grylls did to save himself (Actions)
One day, Bear Grylls was run after by a lion, what actions did he take to escape from the danger…
What did Bear Grylls do to save himself
贝爷毫不犹豫丢掉背包，爬进卡车底部，挤进车内。已经想到一个好点子，他迅速下车，小心翼翼将狮子锁在后面。门锁着，狮子也就被困住了。
What did Bear Grylls do to save himself
Bear Grylls, without hesitation,
his backpack, under the truck himself
into the car. a good idea, he
the car quickly and carefully the lion in
the back. , the lion
threw away
crawled
and squeezed
Having come up with
got off
locked
With the door locked
was trapped.
Explore!
3. 独研质疑
Ponder: Without showing the video, how can we create a vivid picture that visualizes the situation in words
如何用文字创造生动画面？让读者能够身临其境？
How to make your continuation writing vivid
描绘画面
平铺直述
To Show, Not to tell
Show the readers everything, tell them nothing.
向读者展示一切，什么都不告诉他们。
-- Ernest Hemingway
She was very sad.
He was very angry.
I was very nervous.
He rushed out of the room, slamming(狠摔) the door.
She stood silently, tears rolling down her cheeks.
Lowering my head, I took a long deep breath.
Which one is more vivid
（生动）
tell=general description
show=detailed description
Method: Use more to create the picture.
verbs
Explore!
4. 悟道践行 （1）
Ponder: How do we effectively use verbs to create a picture Any valid principles to refer to
怎样有效运用动词创造画面？有什么可以参考的行之有效的原则吗？（SCM Principle）
Display of students’ works
分解动作
To split
01
学生出教室。
拆解
站起来
抓起书包
冲出教室
That is
The bell signaled that school was over, and all the students rose to their feet, seized their schoolbags and rushed out of the classroom like arrows.
eg.1
简易版：
eg.2
歌手开始演唱
拆解：
瞥一眼观众
深吸一口气
开始演唱
The singer glanced at the audience, took a deep breath and began to sing.
Students walked out of the classroom.
split the action
老师寄语：细心观察，捕捉最能体现人物特征的慢镜头。
My dad and I headed towards the mountains.
My dad and I our new cowboy hats, our horses, and slowly towards the mountains.
情境1：爸爸和我向群山走去。(浙江卷)
Skill 1: Follow time order
关键：根据情境及中心动作前后有什么动作来拆分动作， 将结果性的动作，分解成更细致的连贯性的微动作，使动作结果过程化~
put on
got on
headed
情境3：男孩们跳入湖中玩耍。
Boys to the lake excitedly, their clothes into the water.
rushed
took off
and jumped
实践运用 一
解题思路：Before jumping into the water, what did boys do （跑去湖边？脱掉衣服？热身运动？......）
She hugged him.
情境4：她跑去拥抱他。
Key points：use as many concrete verbs instead of general verbs.
Skill 2: Use concrete verbs
hug him tightly
笑
跑
抱
She hugged him.
情境5：她跑去拥抱他。
She smiled from ear to ear, dashed to Harry, and hugged him tightly.
Skill 2: Use concrete verbs
她笑得合不拢嘴，冲到哈利跟前，紧紧地抱住他。
情境6：Hazel 看着Fein 的画，笑着说这是第三件坏事 (六校联考续写）。
Hazel _______ Fein’s painting,__________ and __________it to be the third bad thing.
stared at
announced
smirked
实践运用二
解题思路：怎么看？如何笑？咋说？
She _____________________, _______________________ , and expressed her sincere gratitude.
关键：利用一连串肢体动作使情绪表现更饱满，更具画面感。
shook his hands firmly
twisted her head slightly
Skill 3: Ask your body parts for help
She turned to and thanked Willis .
情境7：她转过来握手言谢 （山东卷续写）。
She _______________, _____________________ in front of her, and _______________________in shame.
关键：利用头部、手部、脚步动作体现羞愧情绪。
clasped her hands
bowed her head
实践运用 三
She was in shame.
情境9：她很羞愧。
dragged her feet forward
低着头，双手紧握在身前，拖着脚步走向前。
2024年真题例解
Para 1 I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news.
1. Gunter 反应
难以置信，问怎么办？
Step 1 拆解 （Split）：
肢体动作表惊讶/无奈/怀疑 → 看着我 → 询问解决办法
shrug/spread his hands/ meet my eyes/ ask the solution/
raise his eyebrows/ stare/gaze at me/ inquire what to do/
eyes widen in surprise/... cast a look at me/ wait...
look sb straight in the eye...
合并动作
To Combine
02
Explore!
4. 悟道践行 （2）
Ponder: What structural forms can the action chain be presented in to achieve the effect of sentence diversification
动作链可以以哪些结构形式呈现，以达到句式多样化的效果
1. 她急忙出门前去开车。
2. 他套住了小牛。
抓起车钥匙→冲出房子→启动发动机
瞄准小牛的脖子→扔去绳索→套住小牛
He _________ at the calf’s neck, ________ the rope and _________ the calf
successfully.
She ________ her car keys, __________ out of the house, and __________
the engine.
grabbed
rushed
started
aimed
threw
tied
did A, did B and did C
动作三连结构感知
I put on my coat hurriedly, grabbed my schoolbag and rushed to school this morning.
微情景小练：Imagine you will soon be late for school in the morning.
Practice 即学即练
今天早上，我匆忙穿上外套，抓起书包，冲向学校。
The children eagerly unwrapped the colorful paper, opened their presents, and screamed with delight.
________________________ (unwrap) the colorful paper, the children opened their presents, and screamed with delight.
（主动，分词动作先于谓语动词动作）
Having done A, sb. did B (and did C)
非谓语Having done结构感知
Having eargerly unwrapped
Having queued for 3 hours, he was told that the tickets had been sold out.
微情景小练：He was told there were no tickets available after queuing for a total of 3 hours.
Practice 即学即练
排了三个小时的队后，他被告知票卖完了。
David 挣扎着站起来，继续跑，没有表现出任何放弃的迹象 （2022读续真题）。
David ___________________ and _______________, __________ no signs of giving up.
（主动，现在分词基本与谓语动词同时发生）
doing A, sb did B and did C...
struggled to his feet
continued running
showing
非谓语doing结构感知
Sitting on the subway, the old man stared at his phone, knitting his brows.
微情景小练：An old man is trying his best to see the phone screen clearly.
Practice 即学即练
老人坐在地铁上，盯着手机，皱着眉头。
在Jenny的鼓励下，Forrest看着前方，向前跑以躲避那些霸凌者。
________by Jenny, Forrest _____________ and ______________ to escape those bullies.
done A, sb did B and did C
Encouraged
looked ahead
dashed forward
非谓语done结构感知
（被动，过去分词表被动）
Encouraged by his teacher’s words, he raised his hand and whispered, “ I volunteer.”
微情景小练：A boy raised his hand after being encouraged.
Practice 即学即练
他被老师的话鼓舞，举起手，小声说：“我来。”
1. Action chains（动作链）summary:
(1) did A, did B and did C
(2) 变形(≥2个动词)
non-finite verbs, sb did A and did B
sb did A and did B, non-finite verbs
sb did A, did B and did C, non-finite verbs
non-finite verbs : 主动且完成: Having done sth
主动: doing sth
被动: done sth
2024年真题例解
Para 1 I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news.
1. Gunter 反应 难以置信，问怎么办？
Step 1 拆解 （Split）：
肢体动作表惊讶/无奈/怀疑 → 看着我 → 询问解决办法
raise his eyebrows stare/gaze at me ask the solution
cast a look at
Combine (1): He raised his eyebrows, stared at me and asked what to do.
Combine (2): Raising his eyebrows, he cast a look at me, asking what to do.
Combine (3): Having heard what I informed, Gunter raised his eyebrows and stared at me, asking what to do.
Combine (4): Surprised by my words, Gunter raised his eyebrows and stared at me, asking what to do.
改进动作
To Modify
03
我们需要在同一时间，安排多个相机在不同角度拍摄，然后把不同的镜头剪在一起，构成一个饱满的动作面。
---邵田田《中国科技经济新闻数据库》
动作链是一个人的动作的依次连贯。但是若是想要描述更具有画面感，可以通过构造“动作面”来让语言更丰富。比如我们可以从肢体、面部、语言和心理等多个维度来刻画场景。
Explore!
4. 悟道践行 （3）
Ponder: How can we modify and beautify actions from different aspects to create a more vivid picture
怎样从各方面改进和美化动作，以创造出更生动的画面？
面部
肢体
语言/心理
成句：Widening his eyes in extreme horror, he fled away, screaming, “Mom, help!”
他惊恐地瞪大了眼睛，转身就跑，一边尖叫着:“妈妈，救命!”（非谓语+心理短语, 精准谓语动词,语言描写）
Widening his eyes in extreme horror
fled away
screaming, “Mom, help!”
动作面 Action scene
盯着前方的Andy，
表情
肢体
表情
Staring at Andy ahead, Red advanced towards him with a suitcase, (with) a smile spreading across his face.
The Shawshank Redemption
with 复合/独立主格 ,主句与doing
动作的逻辑主语不一致时
Red 提着行李箱走向Andy，
脸上洋溢着笑容。
动作面 Action scene
动作面 Action scene
在海边拍照
肢体
面部
语言\心理
面带微笑, 低头看花
手捧鲜花，站在海边
想知道照片拍好了没有
With a bunch of flowers in her hands , she stood beside the sea and looked down at the flowers with a smile, wondering if the photo was done.
巧用with 复合主格
他们欣喜若狂，在黄昏又唱又跳。
心理
肢体
___________, they were singing and dancing freely at dusk .
肢体
Wild with joy
动作面 Action scene
巧用形容词做伴随状语
2024年真题例解
I sighed, looked back over my shoulder, and begged Gunter for a delayed payment, explaining why and waiting for Gunter’s response.
Step 3 改进（Modify）:
I sighed hopelessly, looked back over my shoulder, checking the line, and then begged Gunter for a delayed payment, explaining that I couldn’t afford to miss the conference. Anxious and expectant, I rubbed my hands, flashing him another apologetic smile and waiting for Gunter’s response.
动作三连→did A, did B and did C
非谓语结构
(主语一致)
① 同一对象同时发生不同动作，且表主动
——主+谓, doing sth./
doing sth. , 主＋谓
② 动作有先后关系时
—— Having done sth, 主+谓
③ 动作与主语逻辑关系为被动时
—— Done sth., 主+谓
动作
描写
动作链
动作面
肢体
面部
语言
心理
环境
巧用With复合/独立主格结构/adj./adv.
Split
Combine
Modify
Practice!
5. 项目合作
主题语境:人与社会----互相理解、乐于助人
文本大意：作者从维也纳前往布拉格时，善良的出租车司机甘特给予了帮助和理解。作者结束旅行后如约和甘特再次见面。
语篇价值：培养学生的文化意识，引导学生树立正确的价值取向，即乐于助人、诚实守信。
真题再现 （2024高考英语新课标I读续)
I met Gunter on a cold, wet and unforgettable evening in September. I had planned to fly to Vienna and take a bus to Prague for a conference. Due to a big storm, my flight had been delayed by an hour and a half. I touched down in Vienna just 30 minutes before the departure of the last bus to Prague. The moment I got off the plane, I ran like crazy through the airport building and jumped into the first taxi on the rank without a second thought. That was when I met Gunter. I told him where I was going, but he said he hadn’t heard of the bus station. I thought my pronunciation was the problem, so I explained again more slowly, but he still looked confused. When I was about to give up, Gunter fished out his little phone and rang up a friend. After a heated discussion that lasted for what seemed like a century, Gunter put his phone down and started the car. Finally, with just two minutes to spare we rolled into the bus station. Thankfully, there was a long queue (队列) still waiting to board the bus. Gunter parked the taxi behind the bus, turned around, and looked at me with a big smile on his face. “We made it,” he said. Just then I realised that I had zero cash in my wallet. I flashed him an apologetic smile as I pulled out my Portuguese bankcard. He tried it several times, but the card machine just did not play along. A feeling of helplessness washed over me as I saw the bus queue thinning out. At this moment, Gunter pointed towards the waiting hall of the bus station. There, at the entrance, was a cash machine. I jumped out of the car, made a mad run for the machine, and popped my card in, only to read the message: “Out of order. Sorry.”
Paragraph 1
I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news.
Paragraph 2
Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised.
action chain 1
action chain 2
Para1: I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news.
情节设计 (十句五定)
Gunter 反应
难以置信，问怎么办？
我请求延迟支付
解释末班车&参加会议
Para2: Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised.
我问其电话号码
承诺回电和付款
Gunter 思考
同意留电话号码
我感动
冲向巴士
Gunter 到巴士站接我
我感谢他,告知会议顺利
在去机场路上
到机场
我付两次费用,给小费被拒
结局：
我再次被其善意感动
升华：
传播善意的决心…
To combine
To modify
To split
Group C
Group D
Group A+B
Task assignment
N Checklist scores
1 3-4 verbs are used in one sentence (0-10)
2 General verbs are splited into concrete verbs (0-10)
3 All verbs are correctly combined (0-10)
4 Action chains are properly modified (0-10)
5 Around 150 words
Evaluation
Reflect!
6. 反思总结
Ponder: What have I learnt from this lesson
1. To show, not to tell;
2. SCM principle;
3. Practice makes perfect.
动作链下水文
I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news. Astonished, Gunter raised his eyebrows, stared at me, and asked what to do. I explained to him the urgency of catching the bus, emphasizing the significance of the conference to me. Then I hurriedly tore a slip of paper from my notebook, signaling him to write down his phone number with an anticipating look. Amazingly, without a second thought, Gunter accepted my slip of paper and swiftly wrote down his phone number, a smile dancing around the corners of his mouth. “Have a safe journey!”added Gunter. A feeling of gratitude washed over me as I heard his words. After expressing my thanks, I grabbed the briefcase, made a mad run for the bus, and jumped onto it just before its departure.
Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised. We made an appointment to meet at the bus station where he had dropped me off. The moment Gunter recognized me, he pulled over, quickly got out of the car, strode to me, and gave me a tight hug as if we were long lost intimate friends. With excitement, I told him the conference went smoothly thanks to his generous help. Upon arriving at the airport, I handed some cash to Gunter, explaining that I was paying for the ‘double car ride’, back and forth from the airport to the bus station, together with a generous tip that he turned down at once. Gunter’s refusal this time melted the softest place in my heart, just as his acceptance did last time. I couldn’t thank Gunter too much. His kindness had turned a potentially disastrous evening into a memorable story I would cherish for years to come.
动作链下水文
2024高考全国一卷二卷·读后续写: 官方范文
Para 1: I ran back to Gunter and told him the bad news. He looked at me in disbelief, asking me what to do. Flashing him another apologetic smile, I begged him for a delayed payment. “If I miss this last bus to Prague, I'll be late for the conference which is so important that I can't afford to miss it!” I explained. “May I have your phone number I will call you and return the money I owe you. I promise I will keep my word or you keep my watch!” I added, handing him my watch as well as my business card. Gunter accepted my business card but rejected my watch. He wrote down his phone number and gave it to me. “Just keep your promise, Sir." A feeling of gratitude washed over me as I heard his words. Giving him a firm handshake, I jumped out of the car, made a mad run for the bus, and jumped onto it just before its departure.
Para 2: Four days later, when I was back in Vienna, I called Gunter as promised. He picked me up at the bus station where he had dropped me off four days before. Beaming a warm smile at him, I gave him a big hug the moment I saw him. We chatted happily on the way to the airport. I told him that thanks to his generosity and timely help, everything had gone smoothly. When he stopped his taxi outside the airport, I paid him for the “double car ride", back and forth from the airport to the bus station, together with a generous tip that he turned down. I also gave him an attractive souvenir I had bought at Prague, which he accepted with delight. We became good friends and kept in touch with each other regularly. I felt blessed to have such a warm-hearted friend like Gunter.
1. 根据此节课所学知识，修改自己的2024年新课标I高考真题续写。
2. 动作链句式练习卷
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7. Homework
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